NaNoWriMo(n) again!

It’s that time of year again!

Farla's NaNoWriMon

As usual I am engaging in my own cheaty version of this. This year’s version is about how much I get posted/finished out of already started projects, so I’m off to a good start!

Come. Join usssssssssssssss.

 

7 Comments

  1. illhousen says:

    Yay! The adventures of a totally normal honestly human and completely not creepy child begin!




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  2. Mell says:

    Wow, I’ve never been good at writing dislikable protagonists so I really admire what you did with narration here.   I think it’s a testament to your skill that despite all the awful things Bonibell says and thinks, I still want to root for her somehow.  In some ways she’s even more awful than the other characters because she understands that pokémon are sentient, but it’s hard not to see her as simply the product of a screwed-up environment.

    I’ll save any specific comments on prose until after you’ve edited, but it does seem like there an excess of commas in some places and some placed were you needed a paragraph break after a line of dialogue.

    I do think the use of stoutland as a traditional food veered a little too much into “ewwwww, they eat dogs!” when you were going (I think) for “ewwwww they eat sentient beings!”   Perhaps, tauros, grumpig, or miktank (or slowpoke, since it’s a traditional food in game) would be better choices.   They’re also more thematically appropriate for not!Hawai’i.




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    1. Farla says:

        In some ways she’s even more awful than the other characters because she understands that pokémon are sentient

      Rotomdex will be appearing in this, so other people will have a chance to join in on that type of awfulness too.

      I do think the use of stoutland as a traditional food veered a little too much into “ewwwww, they eat dogs!” when you were going (I think) for “ewwwww they eat sentient beings!”   Perhaps, tauros, grumpig, or miktank (or slowpoke, since it’s a traditional food in game) would be better choices.   They’re also more thematically appropriate for not!Hawai’i.

      Tauros was my first impulse, but I wanted something that’d be more likely to register as disturbing to those who are fine with tauros burgers, then use to make them notice all the other pokemon that are going down Bonnibel’s throat. And there was a food dog breed kept in Hawaii that was considered a protector of children, so it seemed the most likely thing to feature in a festival about children going off to do battle with various pokemon. (Also, “eat this bull’s meat to be strong like the bull” is less creepy than “eat this dog’s meat to bind its soul to you for service”.)

      I’m planning to have tourists raise this very point because they have rules about which pokemon are friends and which are food, but their rules are as much arbitrary bullshit as our own rules that hogs are food and kittycats are friends. Similarly, the tourists want their food processed and no longer obviously a pokemon while the festival has a whole spitted creature, but preferring not to look at what you’re doing doesn’t make your behavior moral.




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      1. Mell says:

        I’m planning to have tourists raise this very point because they have rules about which pokemon are friends and which are food, but their rules are as much arbitrary bullshit as our own rules that hogs are food and kittycats are friends. Similarly, the tourists want their food processed and no longer obviously a pokemon while the festival has a whole spitted creature, but preferring not to look at what you’re doing doesn’t make your behavior moral.

         

        Oh, good, this was exactly point I hoped you would address and I look forward to your portrayal.   I didn’t know the bit about the Hawai’ian food dog though; that’s interesting.   Still, I feel like the stoutland is a bit jarring because it’s so European-coded.  I’m not sure what would make a better replacement, however.   Rockruff seems to be the best, but since it evolves it doesn’t really make sense in that context.




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        1. Farla says:

          The awkward thing about Alola is despite real Hawaii being a difficult dog habitat, there’s various dog pokemon avaliable. Rockruff was my first impulse because it’s the one unique to Alola but like…it’s a rock pokemon. If it’s edible at all, it’s probably only portions of it. And it’s way too small for a communal meal even if you can eat the whole thing. I was going back and forth on arcanine vs stoutland, but stoutland is the one with the lore about rescuing people and it means skipping the question of how well fire pokemon roast and how common fire stones are, plus it’s a ride pokemon so there’s a small industry devoted to raising them. Maybe this is what happens to failed ride pokemon.

          I’m thinking perhaps rockruff are a soup food, where you boil out the organic matter for flavoring like a soup bone and have the main calories come from the other ingredients.




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      2. Keleri says:

        Someone brought up eating pokemon in a chat recently and I had to object strenuously to Grumpig– if you think a lot of people get killed by cows, imagine if you were trying to farm and slaughter a psychic animal that can sense your intentions.

        Besides, we don’t know which Pokemon would even taste good. The animals we eat in North America have a lot more to do with ubiquity and cultural familiarity than, say, health benefits, desirability, tastiness, sentience, etc. Reportedly seal is incredibly good for you but you’re a mean mean person for participating in the arctic seal hunt that’s the only way for our oppressed native peoples to achieve food security.

        I suspect that pokemon that end up on the dinner table are a lot more likely to be forgettable, prolific normal-types than rarer ones with other potential uses, similar to horsemeat bans to preserve the animals for warfare. Also fish pokemon, those things are everywhere.

        Anyway tl;dr eating Stoutland is great, great reasoning A++




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        1. Farla says:

          Well, it depends on culture how widely you eat. Island cultures in particular tend to eat everything that’s halfway edible, and Chinese cuisine is also pretty good at eating around the occasional famine.

          You might need to use trained pokemon to kill some of the livestock, though – humans can emulate normal/fighting/steel/etc moves but dark or ghost, probably not. Or perhaps psychic pokemon are wild game because you can’t isolate them when killing them and they’re smart enough to work together to bust out. Or maybe steel buildings disorient them and slaughterhouses work. (The fact pokemon are all omnivores who can eat cupcakes, beans, soda, etc, makes it weird too – part of we don’t raise dogs in bulk for food is because it’s easier to raise herbivores.)

          …maybe tepig would be the better pig? I was thinking of the usual idea that starters are crazy rare, but what if they’re just completely domestic creatures not found running around the grass by themselves.

          (The infuritating issue with water pokemon is there is no rhyme or reason to which ones live where. Alola only has a handful of the water types. I can easily assume this is because you the player never get out to deep water, EXCEPT you can catch deep-water pokemon AND it’s hard to even work out what pokemon are found in open water vs the shallows vs primarily freshwater. So do Alolans eat octillery?)




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