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  • Some varied stuff today, but mostly short chapters that don’t go anywhere. Another type segregation fic, too.

    I appreciate that you’re not capitalizing pokemon.

    [After setting out on a journey to help the […]

  • Refreshingly calm responses today.

    re: Your review to Aloha to me
    Dec 3TheFerengiKing
    A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12745768/

    Thanks for the tip, I’ll do that […]

  • Some mildly interesting stuff today: a journeyfic with a pokemon professor, and a fluffy romance fic with the pairing Ash/Arceus. Yes, I’m just as confused as you.

    You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or d […]

    • what the fuck is she doing in this school, a Weavile this hot should be a model

      Beauty doesn’t get you out of compulsory education, either. Also, an oversized hoodie would tend to cover all the curves in right places she may or may not have.

      Extremely clinical and technical descriptions are pretty much the opposite of sexy.

      And yet, when I tried to write deliberately unerotic pornography, I neglected any such clinical descriptions. I really, really should’ve thought of that! Goddamn, I am a terrible writer.

      Ash isn’t a psychic in this story but he will learn to use Aura.

      There really needs to be a “tell us what the story is about, not what you expect it will eventually be about” rule. Does anybody ever, for example, decide to read a fic involving their favourite ship if it has the word “eventual” in front of the ship tag?

      • Does anybody ever, for example, decide to read a fic involving their favourite ship if it has the word “eventual” in front of the ship tag?

        Yes. Do not underestimate the shippers. They consume all.
        For other things, I am less certain.

        • But the story doesn’t even include their ship!
           Goddamn it fanfiction people. Man, I should just find the most popular ships in AO3’s ASOIAF tag and put “eventual” in front of it and get all the views!

          • Oh yeah, if you want attention, latching onto the most popular ships is the way to go. Everyone knows that. Just be prepared for people to constantly nag you about when the ship is showing up — they’ll read it, but that doesn’t mean they’ll be happy!

            • The mindset of fandom people is entirely alien to me, and I hope it forever will be.

              • Eh, really? This seems pretty straightforward to me. Shipping is usually very emotionally motivated. People don’t have to care about the specifics to enjoy their faves interacting and being fluffy or whatever. The ones who are into, like, deep character studies might have more discerning tastes, but they’re not everyone. And the rarer your preferred pairing is, the more deseprate you’ll be for any content at all, or even the promise of content. You ever see that tumblr meme of “I reach the end of the fanfiction archive, sigh, and go through again with lower standards”?

              • People don’t have to care about the specifics to enjoy their faves interacting and being fluffy or whatever.

                Except they’re still not getting that. They’re reading something with the promise that, at some nebulous point in time, they will also get to do that. Why not just wait until the “eventual X/Y” tag becomes the “X/Y” tag? Who the fuck knows!

                And the rarer your preferred pairing is, the more deseprate you’ll be for any content at all, or even the promise of content.

                And yet, I’m sure I’ll get the exact same response if I do it with the most popular ship that has absolutely no problem with a lack of material.

                You ever see that tumblr meme of “I reach the end of the fanfiction archive, sigh, and go through again with lower standards”?

                Nope, and frankly, I can’t understand it. As interested you are in a pairing, is it really worth it to be so emotionally invested in fictional characters that you’ll read a fic where the characters don’t remotely act like they do in canon, in a completely different setting to canon, just because the characters in that fic have the same names as the ones you like?

              • As interested you are in a pairing, is it really worth it to be so emotionally invested in fictional characters that you’ll read a fic where the characters don’t remotely act like they do in canon, in a completely different setting to canon, just because the characters in that fic have the same names as the ones you like?

                If the fics we review here are anything to go by, yes!

                If I were to try to psychoanalyze this one, I’d postulate that these fans are so enmeshed in fanon that they prefer the fanonized skinsuit characters to the canon ones. Farla may have a better theory.

                Edit: Oh, also, I never said they’d read your “eventual” fic thoroughly. I see a lot of reviews that are just “hey can you include this pairing at some point” and nothing else. It’s likely they just see a pairing and skim for the bits they want.

              • Why not just wait until the “eventual X/Y” tag becomes the “X/Y” tag? Who the fuck knows!

                Actually, this is one way shippers are actually being far more rational than most. They understand that if they don’t review, the story is more likely to be dropped and never reach any “eventual”. They also know that, since reviews are important, if the “eventual” pairing doesn’t seem to get interest and enough people say they’re here in the hopes it’s eventual Y/Z, the pairing may change.

                Now, in addition, many shippers view number of fics featuring their pairing vs number featuring the opposing pairing/any pairing as a way of telling who’s winning. Since they’re again aware that reviews encourage writers, whichever fics get more reviews will get more copycat fics. Therefore, if they spam every single fic of the right pairing with reviews, their pairing will win. (What they’re winning depends on fandom – sometimes it’s continued generation of fic with their preferred pairing, sometimes it’s fic of their preferred pairing by the preferred writers, sometimes it’s about keeping the writers from hopping to an entirely new and more reviewy fandom, and sometimes people believe amount of fic in some way loops back to canon where if they prove there’s a big enough demand the pairing will happen in canon and then they win. (Also, some, while acknowledging the showrunners want nothing to do with fanfic, think that whatever pairing is most popular proves it’s the most natural and correct reading of canon and also they’re really invested in arguing their pairing is endgame.)

                As interested you are in a pairing, is it really worth it to be so emotionally invested in fictional characters that you’ll read a fic where the characters don’t remotely act like they do in canon, in a completely different setting to canon, just because the characters in that fic have the same names as the ones you like?

                So, yes. By supporting everything (including the crap) you make it so more total fic is produced, which in turn gives you a better chance at reading goodfic. Now, this can backfire because authors are a prickly and self-important bunch, so the good authors might get in a huff that their masterpieces get the same response as the drek, but assuming a mix of reviewers, the blindly supportive shippers give you the volume, the review everything that isn’t unreadable crap will give more range, and the more discerning readers give the best authors higher numbers. Shippers will also reward authors who do best at indicating the pairing each chapter with more reviews or even duplicate reviews (and also by telling others to read it), while abandoning those who aren’t progressing in tht direction.

                There’s also the fact that there’s rarely fics that bear absolutely no resemblence on any axis. It’s sort of like reading Dresden Files because of the cool thoughts you happen to have while encountering random elements, rather than because the story by itself is a complete work. Many people “fix” stories as they’re reading them and then claim the story itself was a good work.

                It’s also possible they never liked the canon setup and preferred the riffed version. This is where you get complaints about migratory fandom, where people are really just writing an agreed upon set of traits that get various different names. I’m not entirely sure how this works – I honestly don’t get why they migrate instead of just going original and labeling the pairings by trope – but I think  it’s connected to the issue of fixing a fic as you read combined with people who are way more visual than I am, so they want to be told that Fanon Product specifically looks like the physical form of Character You Think Looks Hot. Usually there’s a ton of fanart and loving talk about hot attractive the character is to go along with the AU-OOC fic.

  • Act wrote a new post, Discount Armageddon 1 week ago

    Discount Armageddon is the first book of Seanan McGuire’s InCryptid series, and it’s basically what Dresden Files would be if it weren’t terribly written by a terrible person. It’s cheesy pulp urban fantasy, but […]

    • Nice, that sounds pretty good! I find that McGuire is a little hit or miss for me but this one sounds more up my alley.

      • This is the only thing of hers I’ve read, but her other Urban Fantasy series looked kind of stupid so that doesn’t surprise me.

  • “yes but novels are different as if I was breaking TOS then I would have done that with all my other story chapters so logically its bullshit that I get hate when people are just greedy all I do is grant peoples […]

  • The author asked me to continue with the gardevoir story, so I did. Other stories were unremarkable.

    I don’t normally do this, but since you asked, I’ll keep reading.

    [“When,” I asked.]

    The dialogue sho […]

    • Reviewed it. Basically, I feel like it had too much tell-not-show to it; if you look at Unoriginality, Farla’s parodies adapt scenes that wouldn’t be out of place in the reference material, such as the pokemon picking one. I feel that’s a stronger indictment than just having characters discuss the problems with their narrative; your setup is more obviously mean-spirited, and therefore easier to dismiss or refute.
       
      It’s also not quite perfect at being a response to “Luster” specifically, though I’m not sure if you intended that; the story does actually address the entrapment issue, and establishes that the trainer does want to be in a relationship with the gardevoir. More generally, though, it does hit the right points.

    • One thing to remember with this is, no matter how blatant the flip is, readers won’t pick up on it, because of course a pokemon treating a person like this is wrong! There have been stories that had pokemon making humans beat each other up and the moral was that this was sick and wrong because it was a reversal of how things ought to work. People are more likely to read it as an indictment of the more niche genre of dom gardevoirs sexy-raping humans.

  • Last chapter, Harry wears a dumb outfit and the vampires get cartoonishly outraged.

    This chapter, Harry’s remembering he has to complain about fucking everything, so the fact the outfit he chose to outrage […]

    • This post is two similar versions of the same post back to back.

    • Unrelated to actual post content, but ah, hell, your NaNoWriMon was one of the ones that didn’t reach its final stage even though it was supposed to?

    • This is pretty in vein with the Old Testament

      It is pretty consistent with Left Behind theology: Michael gets to be virtous and humble as he righteously mingle with evil while doing nothing because God is going to personally smite the sinners.

      Orthodox Christianity

      Nah, it doesn’t have a particular emphasis on smiting, actually, it’s more about profits as far as I can tell (granted, I’m observing from the periphery. I get sick in churches, so I didn’t get much of an exposure even back when I was a kid and my grandmother tried to get me interested in it, and since then I don’t look into such matters beyond whatever’s on the news or people talk about).

      How do you even manage to actually stay focus on what’s happening?

      By imagining what could have happened in a better book. Mostly Harry dying.

      • it’s more about profits as far as I can tell
         
        Wikipedia tells me the patriarch of Moscow (who is somehow named after a DBZ character) made billions trading cigarettes. Good thing Jesus threw the merchants out of the temple.
        I get sick in churches
        You might want to get that checked out, I am told it’s one of the primary symptoms of demonic possesion. How far can you twist your neck?

        • Yep, the tobacco thing is something that happened. Sure good to be extempt from taxes, especially at a time when cigarette prices were artificially bloated.

          You might want to get that checked out, I am told it’s one of the primary symptoms of demonic possesion.

          Nah, the thing here is that a big feature of Orthodox churches is the lack of pews. You’re supposed to stand throughout the service, which is long. And churches tend to be crowded and hot as hell, and it burnsss usss, which is obviously not a good combination.

        • Also, a typical Orthodox church:

      • It is pretty consistent with Left Behind theology

        Now now, there’s no need to be mean here. Michael didn’t start laughing like a hyena while explaining that the vampire deserved the agony for being a slut, and so far the only people torturing animals for the lulz are the bad guys.

    • What god is really behind this? Perhaps…

      ALL HAIL THE BURNING HATE!

      I actually don’t know how I feel about Harry drinking Kool-Aid here. On the one hand, it’s a direct consequence of his arrogance and cockiness, and presumably would at least cause him mild inconvenience now, so it’s a case of a genuine flaw biting him in the ass finally.

      On the other hand, it’s moronic and, honestly, even Harry as written should be better than that.

      Did his feelings atrophy to the point that getting suicidally addicted to vampires became attractive because it means feeling something? I guess that would explain his earlier musings about how it wouldn’t be so bad.

      • Yeah, Harry accepting the food here was such an obvious dumbass move that it feels OOC even for Harry. Hundreds and hundreds of stories about not accepting food from supernatural entities exist, and it’s not like Harry’s ever gone “Unlike the movies, you should definitely eat the brownies that vampire baked.”
        Did his feelings atrophy to the point that getting suicidally addicted to vampires became attractive because it means feeling something?
        It’s possible that you could swing a Sherlock Holmes type of deal into it, where Harry is constantly doping up or getting high in his downtime because it’s the only way to force his body to feel emotions for hours at a time.
        Maybe by now Harry’s built up a huge tolerance for mundane drugs, but can’t kill himself with them due to wizard biology. That’d also go a long way toward explaining why he’s constantly poor: he’s a junkie. So now he finds a relatively benign (if he could control the addiction) substance that feels great and is supernatural, so it’s possible he’d never build up a tolerance for it.

        • To be honest, I think we need more junkie wizards in general:

          “If the doors of perception were cleansed every thing would appear to man as it is, Infinite. For man has closed himself up, till he sees all things thro’ narrow chinks of his cavern.”

          You know when you’re high you can see for miles. The longest journey begins with a single trip. If your mind is your altar then you better alter your mind.

          People have been chasing alchemy for most of the last millennium. Some think it’s a magickal art that turns lead into gold. Others think it’s just a precursor to chemistry. Still others think all the potions and bottles were a side effect to the transformation of self, rising above the base matter of
          one’s body into a more perfect and sublime form.

          You know all this.

          For much of the last century, a bunch of other people have been chasing psychobiology and psychopharmacology. They think just about every mental illness, disorder, or discomfort known to humanity comes from imbalances
          in brain chemicals. By tinkering with serotonin uptake, they can purify the emotions of a patient or – potentially – improve memory and cognition.

          This, too, you know.

          Finally, for all of human history there have been those that pursued the practice more than the theory. They harvested coca leaves or poppies or hemp and used it to get high, talk to spirits, or improve their mind in some fashion. Their modern counterparts can explain how much better the world works for you with a noseful of cocaine. And if you join them for a
          line, their explanation even makes sense.

          You’ve joined. It makes sense. It’s all old hat to you.

          Because you’re something different.

          You stand at the intersection of these three groups. You’ve given hoary alchemy a nitrous boost from the latest science and hooked it up with the rawboned know-how of street culture and drug ritual.

          Now you’re a street drug in human form: powerful, innovative, confusing, and dangerous.

          You learned to change yourself, to make your body a chemical crucible, altering its ebb and flow with dope and blow. But transforming yourself is only the first step to transforming others, refining them into a higher state or corroding them down into dross.

          The central paradox of Narco-Alchemy is that in becoming a superior spirit you’re becoming an inferior human. You’re a transcendence addict, and your jones for transformation is just as desperate and crippling as any other
          unstoppable need. You master the drugs that master you, mastering yourself by becoming a slave to powders, drams, and vials. It’s a vicious circle, a self-speeding psycho cycle, and you can only hope to become something higher before you’re six feet under.

          Maybe when you’re perfect, you’ll become free again.”

          • You master the drugs that master you, mastering yourself by becoming a slave to powders, drams, and vials. It’s a vicious circle, a self-speeding psycho cycle, and you can only hope to become something higher before you’re six feet under.

            Oh, what’s also cool about this is it introduces better time limits. Such a wizard needs a solid base of operations, they need to time their outings around the peaks and get back before they crash, they never have spare money stored up for a bad day because every cent of it gets spent on making spare drugs stored up against a bad day…

            And maybe this isn’t exactly new – maybe traditional wizards were limited to the wealthy aristocracy, who burned up their money getting as far down the path as they could and then burned up themselves. It’d fit with how stories talk about the nobles dabbling in black arts, then seeming unable to stop doing more and more involved rituals, needing more and more resources, getting more and more obvious about it until they die mysteriously or the locals storm the castle.

            But hey, now we know more and we know better and you can buy blood from the hospital without having to slice anybody’s throats, so the fact literally every person throughout history who tried this failed doesn’t mean you’ll fail too! Just a little farther…

            • Unknown Armies in general is great at creating those cycles where you do crazy things for power and then use power to deal with the consequences of crazy things you’ve done, which means you need more power, etc.

              And while it’s deeply postmodernist in its approach to magic, the basic ideas are actually applicable to fantasy in general, while the flavor can be changed. I mean, we’ve already seen an Enthropomancer in Umineko that was more dignified than usual for bodybags, with Western-inspired craft.

        • where Harry is constantly doping up or getting high in his downtime because it’s the only way to force his body to feel emotions for hours at a time.

          What if it’s not just his downtime? If emotions fuel spells, Harry’s stronger while he’s high. We might even be able to make sense of Harry’s behavior if we assume the narrative just doesn’t mention it when he swallows mundane pills and then washes it down with some mundane vodka. Maybe that’s why sometimes he energetically won’t stop pursuing something no matter how bad an idea it is and sometimes he just sits down and doesn’t even try and sometimes he bounces around between a whole bunch of things without accomplishing anything on any one of them.

          This could also explain why Shadowpants went right for magic drugdealing, drug use is a natural path for magic users to go down to buff their own abilities.

          • Honestly, I love that every other new headcanon/worldbuilding makes Victor von OneWizardIndustrialRevolution an even better wizard who truly deserves main character status.
            Being a junkie would also help explain/improve Harry’s interpersonal conflicts. You could replace the misogyny as the reason that Harry’s relationship to Murphy broke down. She could be the first person to call out the narration’s tendency (rather, Harry’s own tendency) to gloss over the drug use.
            It’d also explain the police force’s continued skepticism of Harry long past the time he’d proved his magic worked. Harry might have skills nobody else does, but he’s also tripping every red flag and setting off every instinct to put him in jail where he can’t be a danger to himself/others.  Though it keeps Charity in harpy housewife territory, keeping your husband/kids away from an obvious junkie is actually sound logic.
            Generally, Harry’s massive persecution complex would feel a bit better (not MUCH better, but a bit) if half the flak he took from others was a result of this choice he had to make that seems to have no simple analogue in society.
            Things like getting drunk and taking drugs have historically figured deeply into magical doings and the like. I’m actually surprised more folks aren’t picking it up.

          • Honestly, doing drugs just makes sense for reckless wizards even without our emergent worldbuilding. You do drugs to fuel your emotions that fuel your magic, allowing you to make more powerful drugs, etc., and so long as you can ride this wave, you’re on top of the world.

            Of course, sooner or later you crush and burn, but who has the time to think about long-term consequences?

            • That’s literally the Enchantment/Alchemy cycle in Skyrim. Make potions to boost your Enchantment, so you can enchant stronger Alchemy-improving gear, which you then use to make even better Enchantment potions. Then of course you expand the cycle to make all of your other skills and magics more powerful.
              Wizard biology could even be the end result of all the drug-taking and not actually an inborn mutation in humanity. Being a wizard could have less to do with how much power you’re born with and more how your body coped with all the juice you had to soak it in to obtain that power. Since that power leaves wizards in a precarious state, physically and mentally, of course they end up with a governing body that is only interested in policing wizards themselves and not letting the wider world know about them.

              • So, basically, White (Powder) Council is a drug cartel combined with rehab. Makes sense. Obviously, they dislike vampires because vampires are competition (and also seem to produce downers when magic works better with uppers).

              • Well, the White Powder Council doesn’t seem interested in wider distribution, so it’s harder to call them a cartel. Every supplier in the cartel really only sells to himself and seems to be jealously competing with the others in making stronger drugs.
                On the rehab side, they’re obviously not trying to get the wizards clean. Maybe asylum is more apt? It kind of recognizes the fact that wizards are never going to be clean and its sole purpose is to separate them from everyone else.
                Now the vampire competition angle, that seems like it could bear fruit. Maybe in the past creatures like vampires, fae, or demons found it laughably easy to corrupt/enslave wizards. Wizards who survived formed the White Powder Council as deterrent such that, even though they’re highly dysfunctional as a group, outsiders see a unified force of strung-out psychopaths slinging fireballs and stay away.

              • Current leader of the White Powder Council:

      • On the one hand, it’s a direct consequence of his arrogance and cockiness, and presumably would at least cause him mild inconvenience now, so it’s a case of a genuine flaw biting him in the ass finally.

        The problem with that is he spends the entire goddamn chapter telling us he’s terrified and on edge and completely outmatched and expecting the worst and keeping his eye out for any attack. If he’d merely flounced into the place secure in the knowledge nobody could harm him while he was a guest…well, it’s still moronic, but at least it’d be visibly a flaw instead of Harry just doing a thing for no reason.

        Did his feelings atrophy to the point that getting suicidally addicted to vampires became attractive because it means feeling something? I guess that would explain his earlier musings about how it wouldn’t be so bad.

        That’s a thought. He’s not just directly addicted to the spit’s pleasant properties, he’s enticed by the fact it does anything at all. Maybe he’s getting to the point where even getting ripped apart by vampires is tempting. It wouldn’t be so bad to die to them as opposed to burning his last three feelings futilely struggling against a superghost.

        • Maybe he’s getting to the point where even getting ripped apart by vampires is tempting. It wouldn’t be so bad to die to them as opposed to burning his last three feelings futilely struggling against a superghost.
          Heck, maybe all that is why Harry keeps baiting supernatural creatures/wizards/mob bosses in general. No matter how badly he burns himself out, his body still clings to a lingering self-preservation that he can always fall back on by putting himself in convincing mortal danger. No matter what state he’s in, it’ll always give a reliable burst of clean fear. Like a half-suicidal adrenaline junkie.
          His dumbass soulgaze with Marcone ended up giving him a deep-seated fear of fridges. Baiting Bianca into a fight the first time put him a hair’s breadth from death. Taunting Victor Sells. Taunting soulwolves/beltwolves/cursewolves/Tera. Existing within three-and-a-half feet of Morgan. It’s all different-sized doses of the same drug.

    • I think it only reinforces my supposition he’s not into guys, though, because he’s generally such a creep to people he wants to fuck.
      I dunno, the whole casual descriptions of Thomas’ muscles and perfect poise coupled with the over-the-top cartoon-villain sexism of the descriptions of women screams ‘overcompensation’ to me. He sounds like he really, really doesn’t want to be attracted to men  but he is so just goes WOMEN AM I RITE SO SEX BANGABLE while eyefucking the dudes.

      • Eh, he’s not getting Harry’s loving descriptions of his tiger soul or wind-ruffled hair. Thomas seems to be objectively hot but Harry’s just not lingering on that fact properly. Also, he’s not baiting the guy into threatening him, which seems to be his preferred form of flirting.

    • It is actually interesting to think about vampire class demographic.

      The issue with embracing aristocrats and other influential people is that they’re way too visible. Even if we’re talking about Gray Cardinal type of figures who rule from shadows already, a lot of people would notice them suddenly stopping going out during the day, shunning food and seemingly not aging at all.

      It is not to say that high and mightly are unatrractive for politically-minded vampires, but they probably require a delicate touch. I imagine vampire mystery cults with the inner circle of vampires and the outer circle of mortals bound at this point primary by political and business considerations rather than dogma. As they move up in ranks and are initiated into deeper mysteries, they learn about the supernatural (tested at each step to check if they would turn against their masters because such people can potentially be trouble), with the last mystery being the embrace itself, at which point the new vampire “tragically dies” as far as the outsiders are concerned.

      This is a very slow process, however, so if you want to boost your numbers in preparation for some conflict, you’re better off looking at marginalized elements of society, people nobody would miss to whom you can afford a better life compared to their lot. Criminals, oppressed groups, homeless people… I imagine they would be the bulk of vampire numbers simply because they’re easier to conceal in the shadows and easier to recruit in the first place in such a way that they won’t inevitably betray you.

      So, we may well have two distinct castes of vampires that you can roughly tell apart by height, especially if the attrition among the mystery cult vampires is low enough that they just stick around instead of sensibly dying off.

    • Eh, I think it varies greatly depending on the region. Maybe Russia is more about money and Ukraine is all about accusing children of demonic possession.

      A fair point. I don’t know much about the Ukraine church, and there are definitely differences within the overall doctrine. Even if the Russian church as an organization is more about profits than some specific religious agenda, individual priests is another matter.

      Yeah, but that’s exactly what keeps destracting me from the text.)

      The text provide new ways for Harry to die every other page, though. That is something that may keep you reading.

    • I’m sorry for this weird tangent, but imagine how much more interesting the undead would be if, instead of regurgitating the same nonesensical clichés, creators added a couple of elements from real-life parasites.

      Dropping in out-of-context from the new comments bar here, but the first thing that comes to my mind is Peeps by Scott Westerfeld, which is pretty much entirely about vampires as parasites. Or rather, vampirism as a parasite which gave rise to most of the popular vampire mythology. The biting and ~sexy vampire~ promiscuity are how the parasite spreads, and one of the other primary symptoms is that infected individuals develop an intense, instinctual aversion to anything that previously felt familiar or safe, as a way of getting them to move and spread the parasite further. Which in most cases includes sunlight, one’s own reflection, and, in predominantly Christian cultures, religious symbols like crosses.

      I read it years ago and can’t remember the actual plot or characters at all, so those evidently didn’t make an impression, but the vampire lore stuck with me.

    • Let me know what you think! It’s been ages since I read it, so I’d be curious to hear how it holds up.

    • How do you even manage to actually stay focus on what’s happening?

      That sweet unintentional worldbuilding! What sort of society would vampires actually have? What sort of way should a paladin behave? 

    • Nah, even the wealthy back in the day were tiny. That’s why you’ve got all those deaths in childbirth by noble ladies, their hips were too narrow. Even those who could afford to eat food were eating terrible food (sometimes they bought extra terrible food so they were actually smaller than the peasants, the idiots) and when they weren’t getting sick from that they were getting sick from close proximity with others, and then every now and then you had a famine that killed off the few people who managed to get big anyway, leaving their tinier relatives to repopulate. You’d have to move away from civilized areas to places with low population density to find big people, and once you’ve got civilized areas they tend to take over the good land and pretty soon the low population density areas are full of famine too.

      The only way for vampires to be tall is if there’s very low turnover among vampires and they like to make new vampires who are about the same size, but the fact Bianca is tiny contradicts that. In such a case, either vampires are constantly shrinking or vampires like Bianca are totally okay getting loomed over all day long, and the first one not only makes more sense but is way funnier.

      • There have been archaeological findings in the last decade which suggest ancient and medieval people were nearly as tall as modern man. There was a period when the average height dropped, but it was sometime from the Early Modern Period to sometime after the Industrial Revolution.

        By the way, do we know what is the average age of an elder vampire in the Dresdenverse?

        • You mean like this?

          That’s a thousand years ago, though, and most vampires seem to top out at a couple hundred years old. And a thousand years ago in Europe was good times – keep going back toward when the Roman empire was dying and people should shrink down again. Like, let’s say in accordance to one tradition, vampires start at Jesus, two thousand years ago. They’re soon surrounded by a collapsing empire and food riots. People are tiny. Then later people get bigger, but they’re tiny, so fuck those towering giants they’re gonna make people they can look down upon as servants. (And it’s not like they could head east to healthier established cultures for tall people, because long city living had already shrunk those guys down.)

          Flash forward to modern day and vampire are basically hobbits.

    • I think a better author could pull off a really arrogant and foolish character drinking something they (generally) know better than to drink and have it seem like a plausible mess-up rather than that the character is just too stupid to live. Granted, I don’t think I’ve seen that done outside of comedy, which makes it a really weird trope for Butcher to even be going for here.

      I was actually pondering the possibility of it being an accident. I could see someone going on autopilot for a moment because they’ve got a glass of wine in their hand and normally they drink from glasses they have in their hands. There’s been times I’m distracted while holding a cup and start to lift it before remembering I’m transporting fish food.

      The problem is he should really have remembered by the time it was in his mouth that this was a bad idea rather than someone else explaining that, and they’re surprised too, the vampire wine given to him by vampires who hate him is compromised.

    • and somehow not getting killed over this, despite…well, you get the idea.

      I don’t know about that. Harry consistently fails to prove the existence of magic to other people despite having, like, a dozen obvious ways to do so, and even people who already believe in magic and hire him (like that guy who wanted an exorcism) are disappointed and think he’s a fraud, so it may very well be that Harry is actually contributing to protecting the masquerade by calling himself a wizard openly.

  • “But what truly amuses me is that the people on the Capitalization-Thread do not realize that you are actually the troll, the one who is attempting to rile them up over a petty argument, and seem to be succeeding, […]

    • The long recap was a personal choice, and is also included in case anyone who doesn’t know much about the Gen V games will be able to understand. I understand that it does drag down the pace, but again, that was a personal choice.

      As someone whose direct knowledge of Pokemon doesn’t extend past generation three, I can actually kind of understand this logic. With this sort of recap, I might actually be inclined to read the fic.

      The reason relationship stories are so common in fanfic is because the basic personalities and dynamics are already well-established, so it’s easy to jump straight to standalone relationship scenes like these.

      I experienced an interesting thing related to this with the last story I uploaded to AO3. It uses this characteristic of fanfiction, but I used two characters who so far have zero direct characterization in the source material, and exist only in the backstory. And yet, it still worked, somehow.

      In hindsight maybe I should have waited till I replaced my computer or edited on a public computer before I posted my story but I guess I was too impatient (lazy).

      … If that was the case, they could’ve just written out the uncontracted form of the word.

      She even holds it on her person; Aaron doesn’t have it at all. 

      … Huh. I don’t think I’ve ever seen this idea used in one of these pokefucking fics. Have you, dude?

      Try showing us precisely why Aster is willing to sacrifice so much for this before you have her make such dramatic and dangerous declarations.

      I think that this is, for me, the hardest part of writing men in romantic pairings. Ever after I specifically give him traits that the woman would be attracted to, I never quite feel as if I’ve properly established why the woman is romantically interested in her romantic interest. It kinda sucks, ya know?

      • Ever after I specifically give him traits that the woman would be attracted to, I never quite feel as if I’ve properly established why the woman is romantically interested in her romantic interest. It kinda sucks, ya know?

        Oh, I actually figured this one out recently! Check out an episode from The Amazing World of Gumball titled “The Choices”. It’s in season 5, I believe. The character dynamics are a play off of standard sitcom tropes: the father is a lazy slob and the mother is an overworked busybody who’s constantly nagging him. For the longest time I kept asking “Why is she still with him? What does she see in him?”, but that episode answers it, and I believe the answer can be generalized to other romantic plots.

        Essentially, I think you have to see the romantic relationship as something that helps the partners grow as people. This is reflected in the common trope of “opposites attract” or the partnets “completing” each other: the other person becomes a part of their identity and influences them in a direction they wouldn’t have taken otherwise, hopefully for the better. Under this model, having a set of attractive traits isn’t enough, as you’ve noticed; it just turns the story into gushy wish fulfillment without depth. Think more in terms of narrative arcs than character traits.

        • Ah, I guess I should’ve been more specific. I was thinking more of the early stages of the relationship and what drew them together in the first place. That kind of thing. What made the girl go “I want to date this boy” in the first place, that kinda stuff.

          • Well, I don’t think I can give you advice on that without more specifics. Generally, someone having traits you find attractive should be sufficient reason to want to date them.

            Perhaps the best thing to do is to shake things up a little, make the woman the main character? It might be easier to make a romance a logical extension of a greater character arc.

            • Yeah, but how many, how big, how blah blah blah? I think at this point it’s become one of those “I’m far too self-critical things”, but I think the major problem is that I just have absolutely zero frame of reference for being attracted to men. So whenever I write it, I think it feels like I’m just writing the woman attracted to the man because if she wasn’t the romance wouldn’t progress, because I can know what would make the character attractive to the woman, but I don’t personally understand it. Even if I write “Well, she decided to date him because X, Y, and Z”, I feel like… “why would you date someone for X, Y, and Z”, and I know she actually decided to date him because I decided that had to happen to further the narrative.
              EDIT: If you’re curious about the actual stories that give me this problem, you can just hit up my AO3 and read the entries in my Deerfield series.

              • As someone with zero frame of reference for being attracted to anyone, I don’t really think this is a problem of not having a frame of reference. There’s no fundamental difference between what is attractive in men vs. women because gender essentialism is a myth etc. etc. It sounds like this is more a matter of general story construction that you need to work on. You can make the narrative feel satisfying if you work at it.

                Even if I write “Well, she decided to date him because X, Y, and Z”, I feel like… “why would you date someone for X, Y, and Z”

                This may be due to lack of frame of reference, perhaps — you may think it doesn’t make sense to be attracted to these traits, but perhaps there is someone who does? Even if it doesn’t make sense to you, if it resonates with your readers, you’ve accomplished something worthwhile. Feel it out, see where the story takes you. Taking risks is how you’ll grow as a writer.

                I know she actually decided to date him because I decided that had to happen to further the narrative.

                That’s perfectly valid, though! Authors do stuff just to further the narrative all the time. It’s fine to work backwards and justify stuff you know has to happen.

              • This may be due to lack of frame of reference, perhaps — you may think it doesn’t make sense to be attracted to these traits, but perhaps there is someone who does

                Oh, yeah, probably. But that fact doesn’t really help much. That’s what I meant by the difference between “knowing” and “understanding”. If I decide to have a female character initially agree to date a guy purely because she likes his strong jaw and huge arms, and nothing less superficial than that, I can intellectually conceive of that character being attracted to those traits, even though that’s pretty much the furthest thing possible from what I find attractive. But that only helps so much in selling the initial attraction to me.

    • Millions of people have read JKR’s works and thoroughly enjoyed them, for they looked past the capitalization flaws.

      And then, Act.

      … Act, right? Which one of y’all were doing a chapter by chapter review of Harry Potter?

      And, as unfair as it may sound, the saying ‘majority is authority’ is not without merit.

      I mean, English is a prescriptive language, but that doesn’t mean you’re not allowed to try to prevent the prescription from changing in a way you don’t like, especially when that new prescription is a less efficient means of communication than the current standard.

      You may continue your feeble attempts at correcting the entire world’s way of spelling or capitalization through this website, but we both know it’ll be in vain.

      Well, no arguments here, if this is how the typical person reacts to being corrected nowadays.

      But I am willing to make thise insignificant edits if you wish so.

      … Um. Okay. That’s unexpected. Maybe he realized you were right but didn’t want to publicly admit it?

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  • Today there’s an attempt at a humanxgardevoir romance that is so totally different from mindless porn you guys. It very much does not succeed.

    Non-story chapters are banned on this site. Put this in a forum […]

    • Again, I don’t know how you think this is romantic. If someone said this to me, I would be horrified and tell them to see a therapist. A relationship is a two-way street. If the girl has no personality or desires of her own beyond fulfilling the man’s wildest fantasies, you are not writing a romance story, you are just writing porn.

      This wholesome and healthy romance story somehow contains less wholesome healthy romance than the gratuitous bodice-ripping pornography I am currently writing.

      Also, posting multiple chapters in the same chapter is banned on this site. Use the chaptering feature. You don’t need a separate prologue section anyway; it works perfectly fine as part of your first chapter.

      This site bans the weirdest things sometimes, I swear.

      • No, that one’s totally reasonable. Having chapters not match up with what’s in the official chapter list is incredibly confusing. Most of FFN’s rules do actually make sense, they’re just badly enforced.

  • CrazyEd became a registered member 3 weeks ago

  • Continuing my adventures through Nnedi Okorafor’s catalogue, Zahrah the Windseeker is Okorafor’s other, earlier kids’ book, and I thought it was really great. It has a kind of Alice-in-Wonderland vibe to it, […]

  • oh hai

    Knights in the Nightmare is the third entry in the Dept. Heaven series, although in-universe it’s chronologically second and IRL it’s titled ‘IV’ because who the fuck knows (wiki does, don’t tell me […]

  • “OK then but you don’t need to give me a whole list of everything that you thought was terrible in my story. Not everyone can live p to this “perfect” expectations of yours. It’s just a story.”

    I’m blaming the […]

    • I think often with well-written hyper competent characters the focus is placed on their inner conflict. So the question in most situations becomes not whether they can solve the external crisis, but what the psychological cost of that will be to themselves, and whether in doing so they will cross a moral line. Think Galadriel, for example. “I would be a queen, beautiful and terrible!” Or to take Sam Vimes — the climaxes of the later books generally involve him battling his inner demon. And with strong, hyper competent characters, losing a battle with inner demons could have wide-reaching consequences for other people, which gives the conflict its stakes. New Who uses this format all the time for the Doctor (though often devolving into needless melodramatics, in my opinion.)

      • battling his inner demon

        Eh, personally I think that’s also pretty Sueish. It reads to me as just more edgy teen grimdarkness, “My OC has an AWESOME EVIL SIDE but they’re SO AWESOME they can even beat their AWESOME EVIL SIDE in addition to the external conflict!” you know? In general I really do not like characters who have to struggle with being good people, they just read to me as unstable nutjobs who are going to snap and kill everyone one day. Most of us do not have an inner demon telling us to kill everyone all the time, Vimes, and if you do maybe you should look into getting a therapist.

        But yes, the general principle of moving the conflict into different fields is sound. That’s what Buffy season 6 did, to expand on the example I gave — yes, Buffy can punch out gods, her ability to win the fight of the week is never in question, but can she punch out depression, poverty, misogyny, and relationship drama? Of course not, so there’s still tension to the narrative.

        But a simpler solution I’m surprised more people don’t pick up on is simply to raise the stakes. Mary Sueism is about relative power level, not absolute. If you want a powerful protagonist, you can pit them against a powerful opponent and still have tension. (Again, Buffy did this in season 5.) There’s still the possibility of falling into “My character is SO AWESOME that ONLY THEY have a chance against this AWESOME OPPONENT,” but you can get that in anything.

  • One grimdark noir-like thing about how guns are awesome, and a generic chosen one YA novel where everyone has pokemon names. Generally boring otherwise.

    I appreciate that you’re not capitalizing pokemon.

    If […]

    • As a general rule of thumb, you should be able to replace semicolons with periods and still have the resulting sentences make sense; for instance, what I’m doing here.

      I actually think this is wrong; the second clause is incomplete and doesn’t have s subject — ‘what’ doesn’t refer to anything.

      Also I realize I owe you a bit about comma splices/semicolons. My excuse is that I wrote up something for my last job about just that I thought would be perfect and couldn’t find it and then forgot. D:

      • No worries! I know you’re super busy.

        I actually think this is wrong; the second clause is incomplete and doesn’t have s subject — ‘what’ doesn’t refer to anything.

        Actually, doesn’t this construction create an implied subject or something like that? “For instance, what I’m doing here,” is something I can hear someone saying as an indpendent sentence, if perhaps informally.

        • I definitely think it’s something someone would say, but technically I think it’s dependent on the first clause because of the ‘what’. “I’m doing it here” could stand alone because the subjective complement is explicit, but I’m like 65% sure ‘what’ needs to either be a question or have an SC in the same sentence to be independent (eg, ‘what I’m doing here is right.’). I could be wrong, though.

  • “I suggest going to a library somewhere around you and finding the Warrior cats and Ranger’s Apprentice series to read. Those will help you with grasping many different forms of emotion and writing, and possibly […]

    • Haha. I read it, like, a decade ago, so I can’t give you much. I remember finding the first series enjoyable (though I disliked the tribal narrative), but the second was so awful I quit halfway through. I came for the fights and worldbuilding, stop shoving stupid teen romance in my face.

  • Mostly unremarkable OT fic, but there’s one fic with an actually realistic Japanese setting that looks like it may be decent.

    This belongs in the Anime world. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it […]

    • I am interested in that supposedly well done fic set in Japan, and will be commenting on it once I get the chance to finish it and form some thoughts on the subject. I really hope you’re right.

      Why are you doing this. The opening is obviously not diegetic.

      If you’re going to use the word “diegetic” in one of these reviews, you should probably explain what it means.

    • It is a region based on Australia. Pokemon are based off native Pokemon in Australia.

      With this as a main selling point, I think they are just trying to write a story which is parallel to the games. Trying to make 8 new gym leaders interesting isn’t much of a story.

      There’s also the whole fakemon being hard to imagine in text.

  • The manchild from a few months ago requested a review, apparently in some bizarre attempt at a gotcha. I chose to indulge him.

    So you only target newbies eh?
    Oct 11Mad Ass Dragon
    Why hello there dear Elmo, […]

    • Act replied 1 month ago

      3edgy5me

      That it took you that long to get exhausted by the prose is amazing. I looked at once sentence and was ready to die.

      • I only stuck with it because it was a review request. If I had just stumbled across it, I would have noped out much earlier.

    • His actions are that of a villian, not a hero, yet he fights for the good in this world and serves the light.

      I’ve read Unlimited Blade Works, so I know how this ends.

      He is evil. Absolute evil. Yet he fights to protect and defend… Why?

      No one gets mad when you beat up the bad guys, even if you’re not doing it because they’re bad guys. Yawn.

      How’s your parents basement working out for ya? Get used to it, because someone like you is never going to leave it.

      Psh, shows what he knows. There’s no way he lives in his mother’s basement.

      It’s his sister’s.

      Hateful reviews towards myself and my work are not only welcome, but are encouraged

      … Um, they are?

      it turned less and less like the anime, and more into a mixture of the games, anime and my own twisted ideas.

      I really wish people would just admit when their fic is based on the anime or the games. This goes for everything, really. Whenever I see something like “based on the show with some of the book canon thrown in”, what I usually find that means is “I’ve only ever seen the show but I’ve skimmed the wiki”. Just admit it’s a fic based on the show so it doesn’t appear in the category of the books.

      The fact that he does not appear to have a sex drive

      Could be that he’s asexual.

      So long as a writer doesn’t write anything offensive or illegal, who are they hurting?

      Whoa, is rape legal now? Why did no one tell me about this?

      Muloc is a sub, he wants someone to force him to have sex. What’s the harm in that? It’s roleplay, or in this case a story.

      I don’t have a submissive bone in my body, sexual or otherwise, but just yesterday I was taking specific care to explicitly indicate in a story that a character in a sexually submissive position was enjoying herself. Because in her case, it actually was roleplay, which she was intentionally putting on for her partner, and could stop at any moment.

      Sounds to me like someone’s got a shitty dom.

       Like me he needs someone to break through his emotional defenses and expose the source of his pain, only then can he hope to get better.

      Sounds like he should be writing fanfic for The Ancient Magus’s Bride instead of Pokemon.

      One bastard pushed to the edge and over, I lost all control over myself and beat him so badly his own mom couldn’t recognize him. If someone hadn’t of dragged me away, I’d have killed him.

      Kiiiiiiiiiiiiiinda worried by how casually he admits to a situation that totally definitely happened where he almost murdered a dude for pissing him off.

      It’s how Murloc would react and what he needs, in order to be with someone he cares about.

      Sounds like this Murloc guy might be a little asexual as well, if he can only enjoy sex when he’s coerced into having it against his will. I don’t think this dude understands the difference between a sexual fantasy and reality. Rape is probably the most common fetish but I’m pretty sure it’s a safe bet to say no one enjoys being actually raped.

      • Act replied 1 month ago

        It’s his sister’s.

        And my rats’!

        • You keep your rats where Farla keeps her brothers? Why? Don’t you have your own home for rat storage?

          • Act replied 1 month ago

            I’m allergic :(

            • … Then why do you have rats in the first place?

              • Act replied 1 month ago

                Well obviously I didn’t know when I got them. 

              • With all the garbage you wade through for post content, I would’ve thought you’d be well aquainted with rats long before making the decision to purchase them.

              • Oh hush you. Rats are adorable babies and I will not tolerate such slander.

                (Seriously, I genuinely cannot comprehend how people can hate rats. They may live in gross places, but they’re so cute!)

              • Because you’re thinking of adorable fancy rats and not monstrous NYC sewer rats.

              • Act replied 1 month ago

                They are the cutest and snuggliest and they help take care of our garbage. The perfect gentlemen!

      • Could be that he’s asexual.

        It sounds a lot like that to me, if the characters in his stories are supoosed to work as self-inserts for fantasy. “This is the only way for him to be with someone he loves” in particular brings that to mind.

        Whoa, is rape legal now? Why did no one tell me about this?

        Writing about a fictional character getting raped is not illegal, which I think is what he meant. I’m more questioning why he doesn’t think it’s offensive, though maybe he’s only referring to stereotyping or slurs when he says that.

        I don’t have a submissive bone in my body, sexual or otherwise, but just yesterday I was taking specific care to explicitly indicate in a story that a character in a sexually submissive position was enjoying herself. Because in her case, it actually was roleplay, which she was intentionally putting on for her partner, and could stop at any moment.

        In my experience, the fantasty of power imbalance and/or rape is more effective when there is no consent in the fantasy. You’re describing a depiction of someone acting out a fantasy more than a fantasy itself. That’s not as effective fantasy material for people arroused by lack of consent because there is consent. I’d hope that Murloc was writing a fantasy to insert himself into (a “roleplay”) and not a depiction of what he actually thinks roleplay is, but the rest of what Mad Dragon said makes me worried.

        I don’t like this mindset that you can’t write rape. My problem with the text that was quoted is not that it was portraying rape, it’s that it was doing so without acknowledging that it’s rape. If the author’d put a disclaimer at the top that there was going to be rape in that chapter and hadn’t tried to claim it as a loving relationship, I wouldn’t see the problem, but as is I completely agree with what St. Elmo said:

        You are constantly saying that this is supposed to be a healthy, model relationship that is good for Rui. But this is not a healthy depiction of sexuality or relationships in general. Because you’re depicting what is supposed to be a serious, romantic relationship, this is no longer just fantasy; you are implicitly saying this behavior is what a real couple looks like, and that is simply irresponsible.

    • To be fair, wouldn’t you notice if another person smelt if they had bathed in so much honey you could smell it from twenty feet away?

  • “Also, try telling the whole typo thing to every author in the world, see if they would recall all their books to fix ‘incredibly simple errors’ for you.”

    re: Your review to Genocide
    Oct 31foxydabest1
    A […]

    • I don’t have much to say on this one because I know basically nothing about Undertale and would like to keep it that way, but…

      I get it, you’ve been doing this for 10 years already but remember. I’ve been doing this for five months.

      I’ve been doing this for about half as long and that seemed pretty obvious to me. When I wrote my drabble collection, the drabbles were as self-explanatory as I could be in 100 words, and the summary was literally just an explanation of what change made the setting different. You need to be clear about what you’re doing whenever you’re writing, whether it’s fiction or non-fiction. That’s just obvious. I can’t tell you how many times I saw a fic marked F/M, but the only pairing was a M/M one, but then fifty tags down the tag list, was a tag indicating one of the characters was gender swapped. That shit’s confusing, yo.

      If you don’t know what something is it’s called looking it up. Otherwise why would you bother reading a story about characters you dont know?

      Let me guess: the Undertale fandom has the same skinsuit problem that plagues so many other fandoms, doesn’t it?

      Also, try telling the whole typo thing to every author in the world, see if they would recall all their books to fix ‘incredibly simple errors’ for you. Deal?

      I wonder what would happen if a typo was caught in the ebook version of a published work. Do you think they’d fix it?

      You’re not on a deadline. If you know you’re not capable of making a good product at the present time, wait until you can.

      I can kind of understand the pressure to get a new chapter out in a timely fashion because no one wants to read a story where they might have to wait years in between each chapter, but that’s why I don’t publish fics until they’re complete.

      While I´m not on a dead line, I am inclined to update when I can. 3 am is just the regular time. The plot is going to be all over the place as it says in my back story/information chapter. This story is unique in it´s randomness and lack of planning. Half of this is stuff I wrote at 2 am.

      … Then maybe 2 am isn’t the best time to write?

      Why is all this stuff so hard? I don’t get it.

      They are right, it is an awkward metaphor — I kind of came up with it on the spot. Anyone have any better ideas?

      Since grammar is the foundation of the story, use that. If you build your house on unsteady ground, don’t be surprised when it collapses. Grammar is the foundation of the story, but it’s also the frame of the house. Plot is, like… floorplan, or something.

      I’m sorry about the mistakes, its my first fabric on this site and I’m still getting the hang of it, also there is punctuation, even though you said all that, did you read it? 

      Well, I’m certain that there is punctuation, but if this sentence is anything to go by, that’s just making things worse.

       you’re just criticizing a 15 year olds prized labor, oh and BTW, I have over 105 chapters left, and I’m still writing it

      Ayme Sotuyo, author of the webcomic [un]Divine, said something really good about this topic:  “I have been working and writing on a lot of different stories since I was a kid and the upside to that is knowing UD isn’t my ‘one story I have to tell’ so it doesn’t have to be perfect, I don’t have to fit everything I like into it, and it’s relative short lifespan so far means I’m not as attached to certain ideas and cut a lot of things out if I change my mind. I shelved a story I was working on for *years* in favor of doing UD (which I thought at the time would be a short story HA) because I was stuck and unsure with it’s direction. Sometimes its better to have a fresh start and chuck out any parts that were giving you issues. Eventually they can be figured out.”

      • I know basically nothing about Undertale and would like to keep it that way

        Give innnnnn. It’s a great game and will dominate discussion for years to come, you might as well.

        I wonder what would happen if a typo was caught in the ebook version of a published work. Do you think they’d fix it?

        They do this for actual printed books, so yes.

        Let me guess: the Undertale fandom has the same skinsuit problem that plagues so many other fandoms, doesn’t it?

        No. It’s so, so much worse. At least in Pokemon there are not a dozen different versions of OC-Ash that all have their own followings and associated universes where everyone else is also a skinsuit OC. From what I can tell, a lot of it originated on Tumblr, where the AUs were just based around art, character designs, and standalone comics. But then people tried to write stories about the dozens of AUs that were just some artists shoehorning their favored aesthetic into Undertale and, well, that was a mistake.

        Since grammar is the foundation of the story, use that.

        Well, that was what I was going for — swamp is bad foundation. Maybe I can shift it to literally saying that if you don’t put down foundation, don’t be surprised when your house collapses.

        • It’s a great game and will dominate discussion for years to come, you might as well.

          I’ve managed to avoid the discussion for this long, so it doesn’t seem to be dominating much from my perspective.

          They do this for actual printed books, so yes.

          In subsequent printings, yes, but I don’t think that’s what this author meant. Besides, that was rhetorical.

          • Act replied 1 month ago

            In subsequent printings, yes

            Online versions are generally corrected immediately.

          • Nerem replied 1 month ago

            You should still play it. It’s short, fun, and well-done. It’s very much like Earthbound/Mother 2, which isn’t a surprise since it sprang out of a Mother 2/Earthbound romhack.

            • I guess this is a bad time to say I’ve never played Earthbound/Mother 2 either and have absolutely no frame of reference for what that might entail?

              • As someone who has played Earthbound, don’t worry about it. They’re not actually that similar. It just has a lot of Easter eggs and a clever sense of humor.

  • “I did not want to include the family line of Cosmog, Cosmoem, Lunala, Solgaleo, or Necrozma, as they are partly responsible for making the Ultra Wyrmholes in the first place”

    However, we also get a reasonable […]

    • However, we also get a reasonable excuse for writing in a non-native language, doing it for a course at an English-speaking university.

      That actually is a pretty reasonable excuse, but… writing Pokemon fanfic for a college assignment seems a bit… Are you sure you want to do that?

      If you want to review other peoples’ work, try learning more about their style of writing before you say it’s wrong.

      Now that I know more about this person’s writing style, and have seen their key… excuse me? I’m pretty sure, looking at that key, that I’d have an easier time if you just let me divine it from context instead of trying to keep all that nonsense straight.

      Anything more than Ryukishi07’s Red Text is just too much.

      FFN’s word processing is terrible and produces weird results for basically everything it tries to convert. A more reliable method is to write everything in HTML (so code directly for your italics and such) and paste it into the source code.

      I wonder if y’all would think it was weird if I said I wrote all my fics in nothing but Notepad, did most of my editing like that, then copypasted it into AO3’s rich text editor, gave it one last once-over and spellcheck, and then formatted it properly. And after all that, I switched it to the HTML editor, copied it all, and pasted it in HTML back into Notepad as a backup.

      The Unown are Psychic types and they are the servants of Arceus

      Aren’t the unown more commonly associated with the legendary beasts?

      It would just make the fic extremely tall-paged, something that I just cannot stand.

      As someone who also has problem following along large blocks of text on computer screens, I find that aligning the top of your current paragraph with the top of the screen helps, as does increasing the font size.

      The reason I wrote this is because my game design instructor told me to start writing stories, and my first job was to write a fanfiction because it’s easier to do than a whole new setup

      Oh, wow, he actually addressed my original question! That actually makes a lot of sense. Okay, sure. Game design teacher wants you to work on stories, you write a story for a video game, so sure. I’d question the sensibility of choosing Pokemon, considering the sparsity of actual worldbuilding kind of defeats the point of doing fanfiction to avoid having to do worldbuilding, but eh.

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