Exceedingly few responses this time. I presume Sevenways is just making people too burned out to want to talk at all.
Tag: Pokemon author responses
And now it’s reply time! Some authors are angry. Some authors are fine. Some third parties are not okay with some authors being fine and would rather insist they’re idiots who can never improve, and somehow that makes me the terrible one.
Lots of people upset about Sevenways today.
“Hey, heard you’re a Poké bully to others. Not nice,you might not care but stop and grow up. Mind you’re own business and support not shame. Byyyeeeee. P. not stop until you stop”
For bonus points, this was an anonymous reviewer.
Some weirdly belated revenge reviews, and otherwise polite responses.
In which the person whose story I harshly criticized engages reasonably and the person who shoved their story in the wrong category is enraged at my pointing this out.
“The irrelevancy of this review lies in both the hypocritical correction of the fanfiction chapter and the multitude of similar reviews found in other chapters and fanfiction works.
The review section is best served as a discussion of chapter content, not a check for grammar or other similar actions that should be discussed either in private messaging or beta reviews, none of which I’ve demanded.
Please refrain from wasting from you and my time in mere grammatical controversies that none only do this site not require but also inapplicable to professional writers due to their personal style, contribution to plot, and other noncommercial intentions.”
“I never said the story was going to be following Pokemon canon”
“The only point (once again) that you need to focus on is that I am writing in a way that makes me happy. That is all that matters. Goodbye.”
St Elmo’s Fire,
A new review has been posted to your story.
Story: Blood is Thicker than Water
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1
From: TheMasquedAvenger ( https://www.fanfiction.net/u/11189057/ )
Reply URL: https://www.fanfiction.net/pm2/post.php?rwid=265357138
On the one hand, I appreciate the attempt to try and flesh out Hau’s character to something more than just happy-go-lucky just for the sake of being jolly that the game gives him. In this way, there is at least purpose behind his actions, and hearing his thoughts and fears is nice.
But, this story is really…dull. It’s like, are you even writing for fun anymore? It’s a lot of “event A happens, then event B, and so on.” Aside from giving the character motivation, you leave the rest of the actors in this tale desperately lacking in any sense of characterization. You tried so hard to make Hau not a cardboard cutout, that that’s exactly what you’ve done to everyone else in this. They’re just there to fill out the scenery.
Like others have said in the reviews, this is incredibly dialogue heavy. Though, I’m not going to tell you that you should add more descriptions of scenery or battles or crap like that. Sometimes that gets way too into the purple prose territory, which so many young authors fail to grasp that it can get ridiculous. But, I might also suggest that maybe try to put more feeling into the characters’ body language. Show us how Hau, Lillie, or anyone else feels because God knows these other characters need fleshing out in this story. Most of the language we convey is not in what we say, but how we say it. That’s where I think you can remedy the dialogue issues.
But, one thing I’m not going to do is complain about the OOC thing. I do think it’s important that writers, fanfic writers specifically, find other ways to read into the canon and find new meaning or reinterpret it in their own way. I think you did do that well, and anyone who’s calling you out for making Hau too OOC is just blowing smoke because duh, that was the whole point of this story.
So, all in all, this story is kind of “meh” for me. It’s got some good concepts behind it, but the execution is just dead and lifeless. I think some efforts in characterization and expression would make this story not look like it’s held together with chewing gum and paper clips.
What’s interesting is that this is pretty much the opposite of what other critics have told me, so let’s see if this definitely completely impartial and not at all vengeful stranger whose only other review is on Farla can elaborate.
Calm responses today.
“How sad for you. Like any competitive sport, there is a stake, even if it isn’t saving the wold from an all powerful world ending evil.”
This was in response to me saying it’s wrong to kill people to win a tournament.
“I think you’re reffering to the fact I use dashes instead of quotations. That’s my languages way of speaking. Again, I couldn’t be and I can’t be bethoered to change everything. Besides, When I read my first fanfiction in english I had zero problemns adapting my sense of interpretation, so I don’t see why you and other people can’t do the same.” Why do people do this?