A few teal deer, but nothing much of note.

Name: thethoughtprocess
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2476348/
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Subject: your review

Thank you for the constructive comment! ^^

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Name: TheCupcakeNerd33
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/3321330/
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Subject: re: Your review to Keronémon

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/7701650/

For your information, I was writing with at my father’s house. He as almost no
money and can not afford have internet. I had to wait for 2 weeks to post
this. I’m sorry thet your family is rich and not devorced, but not everyone is
that lucky. So, next time, think about why they might have said that; or look
at it from their point of view. Now I have to leave and make dinner for my 5
younger siblings.

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This tripped my bullshit filter, so I clicked on their profile where they have one of those shitty lists of stereotypes where you’re supposed to bold the ones that apply to show stereotypes are dumb. According to that they’re a rich kid.

I wonder if this is sort of like that thing where you’re supposed to reply to bigoted jokes by saying, “Hey not cool, I’m (x)!” even when you’re not.

Name: the2016TC
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/2932606/
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Subject: re: Your review to YuGiOh! Gotta Catch ‘Em All?

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/7714573/

Umm.. first off thanks for the critique. That may not be something you hear
every day, but I do like it when people call on me for mistakes that I’ve
made. I really do like the reviews no matter how mean they might seem.
Anyways, I know I made a lot of mistakes in the story, but I’m a first timer
at this. If you’d prefer that I state every reason for every sentence that I
write then fine. (Please do not feel insulted or offended by how that last
sentence may seem, but like I said I’m new at this. I do think I’m a bit
entitled to making a few mistakes.)

[A few warnings before we start:]

I know just because I’m saying it won’t change diddly squat, but they need to
know certain things before they continue reading. It’s there just in case they
don’t like certain things in a story. Example: genderbending

[1. Yugi and Heba will be VERY OOC!]

I want them to be this way. I do have my reasons for making it like this. So,
I should have been clearer and added that it would be explained in future
chapters.

[3. Their Pokemon were chosen spur-of-the-moment. So DON’T JUDGE!]

I’m actually not quite sure if you were talking about the number 3 or the
actual sentence, but let me be clear and say that I completely missed the skip
in numbers. The actual sentence was not a mistake. I don’t want people telling
me that I chose the wrong for Pokemon for whoever.

[4. The battles may not be the most descriptive things you’ve ever read.]

Now this..yeah this is where you were definitely right, but it is not as if I
was going to right an attack and magically have the chosen Pokemon KO’d.
However, you’re right. That sentence really gives off the wrong kind of vibe.

[5. Some of my OC characters will be involved, but like Ash and friends it’ll
probably be short cameos.]

You make a good point on this. However, they’re not there on a whim. They do
have a bigger role. Like I’ve stated before, I need to be clearer on the way I
want things to be taken.

[6. Oh and I’ve decided to make Ryou and Malik females.]

Umm.. this one I really don’t know why you disagreed with. However, if it’s
because you don’t like genderbending or just the change in Ryou or Malik’s
gender doesn’t sit well with you then there’s nothing I can do about that. I’m
sorry.

[Mainly because I don’t know if Yaoi pairings are OK in a K+ story.]

I’ve just never read a story with those kinds of pairings, and the story
itself is K+.

[~Summary~

Two years ago, the Yu-Gi-Oh! gang was somehow teleported to the world of
Pokemon, but before they could even get a glimpse of this new place all of
them except for Yugi and Heba mysteriously fell into a deep sleep. Finally,
the rest of the gang wakes up and almost immediately start searching for a way
home. However, while they were sleeping, Yugi and Heba were out traveling,
training Pokemon, and over all falling in love with this new dimension. Now,
the gang is on their newest adventure searching for their friends, but
convincing them to go back to their real home is easier said than done.]

You are so right about this! I have so many unexplained events in here. I do
need to fix that, but sometimes a reader will be smart enough to know that the
summary is exactly what it is: a summary. It’s just an overview of EVERYTHING
that happens in the story. They have to understand that they’re not going to
get the whole story in one little paragraph. If they don’t then.. tough.

[their Pokemon ]

You can blame Wikipedia for this.

[3 main parts ]

Yes, I should write the actual word ‘three’. Thank you for telling me this.

[The hospital was added later on after a number of people became extremely a
few years ago. ]

I completely missed that. That’s just awful.

[Also, no, professors do not also run hospitals for humans. There are existing
real hospitals and that’s where anyone would be sent.]

Yes, I should change that, and I will. However, I want to give off the sense
that that is how small Pallet Town is. Do you know of a small town that has
its own hospital and not just an ambulance? Using Professor Oak was just a
simple way of adding this. It wasn’t really thought out, so thanks for that.
Though I do need to change Professor Oak being a doctor, I will not change the
hospital or its location, but I will change who runs it and possibly why it
was created.

[This isn’t really a story. All you do this chapter is talk about the place.
That’s nothing more than a (an overly wordy and boring) opening for a scene,
not a full chapter than can stand on its own.]

You’re right. It is boring. I wrote it this way, because I needed to actually
get a sense for how I want this story to be. It’s just the first chapter. If
it was the entire story, then I would definitely rewrite the whole thing.

Also, I don’t want it to stand on its own. That’s why it’s a CHAPTER! If I
wanted it to be a One-Shot, I would have stated it’s a One-Shot! Oh and you
don’t put ‘a opening’. I would think someones who says that I should proofread
should do the same thing themselves.

[That’s it… It’s not much, but it’s all my tired brain has got! So don’t
judge!]

No one held a gun to your head and forced you to post it right then. You could
have easily saved the file and kept writing later.

(Um yeah that’s just harsh. Yes, I could have easily saved the file. Yes, I
could have kept writing it at a later date, but it wasn’t put there to explain
why it was short or boring. It was just a bit of humor. Don’t kill me for
trying to be a little lighthearted after finishing a chapter that’s been a bit
hard to write.)

I’m fairly positive that I’ve addressed all of the things you stated in your
review. As I said in the beginning, thank you for the your insight. There are
many points that I really need to work on. I need to be clearer in my wording,
and I need to proofread everything I write. However, everyone is entitled to
their own opinion. In mine, I this is not my best story, but I like it the way
it is.. even with all of its flaws.

Once again, thank you for your opinion. I’m sure it’ll be a great help to me
when writing the next chapters and in editing this one.

Good-Bye,

the2016TC

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Name: VampireNecromancer
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1807378/
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Subject: re: Your review to The Champions

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/7716014/

Hi, and thanks for your review. I will use it to improve my writing. However,
their is one thing I feel that must be addressed; the no yaoi thing.

I knew I should not have written that, that some one would take it the wrong
way. In any case I have no problem with gay people or relationships. I don’t
care if people like to have relationships with others of the same sex and the
fact that you accused me of being a bigot hurts me, but since you don’t know
me I guess it should be expected. The only reason why I wrote (No Yaoi) is
because it is because the majority of FanFiction I have seen consists of Yaoi.
This is something I don’t like to read and do not have the ability to write. I
just did not want anyone who may like this story to expect it. I am clear?

VampireNecromancer

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Name: Ballgurl97
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1912854/
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Subject: re: Your review to The Johto Prince A Lost Prince’s Tale

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/7714309/

First off, I appreciate your review. I think some of this could really help
me.

I guess now that I look back at it I have to agree with what you are saying.
When “the king”(Blue/Thomas in this case) asked what was wrong with the
eevee’s fur, I guess I was trying to imply that he was so nervous and excited
about the kid beind born he had overlooked it- but I guess I really didn’t
make it clear.

Anyways, thanks for the review. I’ll delete the story for now, and try to take
some notes and write a better prologue chapter. If you could I would like for
you to read it when it’s posted and see if it’s any better. I’ll try to use
this review of yours for help.

Thanks again,
Ballgurl97

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Name: mysticsage0
Profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1722367/
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Subject: thanks for your time

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/7713268/

Hi Farla,
I just wanted to respond and say thanks for spending the time to really send
me a thoughtful review. I’ll try my best to work on the stuff you pointed out
and make my next chapters better.

As for your questions about the plot:

The dosage is important because it increased the concentration of the virus
shortening the incubation period and transformation time needed.

Assuming that the scientists were careful with their previous tests those
tests would have been far less drastic and at a far slower rate. The
scientists would have had more time to handle with their own trauma as the
transformations took place. Eliza being only an assistant means that she
wasn’t as used to the process as the more lead scientists because her main job
before this test was simply to take care of any specimen before they went
through the process which will be explained in more detail later. As to why
she helped him that will be explained later in the story as well, but for now
lets just say seeing how much pain and suffering he was experiencing really
shook her into action.

As for the reason that she and the other scientists are unaffected is also
going to be explained, but I think I said in the story the best the scientists
were able to create was a fifty percent success rate for the virus meaning
that half of all human and Pokemon have a natural resistance to the virus
anyway. So theoretically just assume that she has that resistance until she is
explained a little more.

to explain Giovanni’s motives:
Giovanni has been working at this plan for ages to the point where he’s
becoming impatient because he has suffered setback after setback for years
which will be fleshed out further in later chapters. Due to this finally
reaching this phase of the process made him a little overly excited and caused
him to throw caution to the wind. As to why he wants Neko to be more human
then Pokemon is because he wants to groom him into becoming his second in
command and he doesn’t want to deal with a wild animal. He understands that
due to the fact that he won’t be able to control everything he needs someone
he can trust to get the work he needs done. He wanted to meet with Neko that
time as well because he simply wanted to stroke his own ego and instill a
sense of superiority over his Pokemon by manipulating his emotions. That is
the same reason he wanted Eliza around, because he sees her as an easy way to
manipulate Neko and as a bargaining chip he can use if Neko begins to get out
of hand. He sees Eliza as someone weak willed who can be easily controlled.

I hope that answered your questions and thanks a lot again for reviewing it
really helps and I hope you continue reading the story.

until your next review,
Mysticsage

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