Dragon Quill

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8657725/

Heh, I know. The main point was to build suspense (which I failed at miserably). My first attempt at a horror story. I’ll try to improve on the next one I write (if I make another horror story).

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8657725/

Nevertheless, I appreciate you fixing my little error there, and with your review I can learn from this and (hopefully) improve my projects in the future. Though some of the story could be read through interpretation, some of it is symbolism, but I agree, this whole thing was pretty slow and rough.

…And the worst part is, I’m planning to write a creepypasta…this cannot end well. XD Nah, I’m kidding, but I might do it…

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8660645/

Thank you so much! I will take your constructive criticism seriously, but for the moment, I have no time. ^.^” Homework, tests, and studies need to be taken first. (Though I usually do it at midnight, I need to get it done today because I’m not going to school tomorrow and I have got a lot of work to do…) Thank you again for your constructive criticism and patients!

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8648250/

Thank you for pointing this out. I really can’t believe I made such an obvious mistake though.

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8599246/

… Wow. Thanks for taking the time to review my story with such… Intensity? That probably sounds sarcastic but I mean it. :) It means a lot to me that you took so much time out of your day to write all that. I don’t really get good, constructive reviews and I’m not creeped out or scared by most things so these were all written haphazardly.
It was all kinda ‘well, I’ll try it’. I have never written a horror story before and wanted to do 5 so it was rather forced and I did all the editing myself so I anticipated a lower quality. (that was probably a run-on, yeesh)

I cringed at my own usage of ‘it’s coming for me’ but wanted to leave it in as ‘the journal’ way of writing left it hard to explain what happened. As far as arbok goes, from it’s pokedex entry saying that it ‘never gives up the chase’ it became a symbol of death and the inevitable. You’re right, though. The forest part was good on it’s own.
I was trying to step outside my box… I think perhaps sticking to what I am good at is the best idea. ;) There were definitely things to improve on, though
I think it was a great challenge for me- though perhaps not one worthy of fan fiction after Halloween. :P Better luck next year for me.

And… Oh holy smokes you reviewed all of them…

Okay, so ‘What Was Lost’:
It was an… Introductory paragraph. Like a dying message from someone who has paid the ultimate price for their selfishness. Again, I was merely toying with ideas. As far as the doll, I wouldn’t touch a doll like that and it is also reasonable that someone would think that the doll belonged to the person buried there.

King of Infinity:
Well… Never worn burlap so I guess I wouldn’t know. I saw him as a more tribal style warrior in my head- I understand if that didn’t quite make it to the page. Poultry vs Paltry- Well… Son of bitch. That one I have no excuse for. I know better than that, but sometimes the wrong thing ends up on the page. When I read the things I write, I often see what I meant to write and not what I actually wrote.

Low Expectations:
This is perhaps the only time I disagree with you. I understand that kids drown but no one knew he was by the pond to begin with. They wouldn’t know to look there and in a city, would assume the worst. When the second child goes missing in a similar fashion, you don’t immediately think ‘oh, serial drowning’ you’re going to think ‘serial kidnapper/killer’. When the mom from the first boy (who would be grieving immensely) starts raving (half dead and freezing) that she sees ‘faces in the water’ most people are going to say that she’s delusional from grief and her state of health. As far as Looker’s death goes, that was pretty much a mistake on my part- though in perspective of the other disappearances, I can cover that up with ‘oh, you know, those darn kidnappers.’ … Just kidding.

I know that you wouldn’t capitalize the names of pokemon and I often go with those rules, however, I like the way the capital separates the name of the pokemon. It’s always capitalized in the game and I rather prefer it that way. I have a tendency to capitalize ‘professor’ too for the same reason, though that I typically correct that (when/if I see it.)
And the eyeball, that magikarp did not sit around with an eyeball in it’s stomach (that IS ridiculous) as it swam around. It was caught for research soon enough after that it was still there.

Whew- alright. Again, thank you very much for the reviews! I really appreciate them all! Sorry if my response seems very ‘eeh, it’s fine’ because I can tell that you’re a very serious reader/editor/writer. While I admire your dedication and that of others like you. Unfortunately I am not like that and, mostly, I just like writing for fun and whoever enjoys it, enjoys it. :) So I hope that you at least enjoyed reading!
*Forgive any typos; it’s late and I am tired.

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8604739/

Okay! I thank you for your critic, and I’m sorry my story disappointed you. I hope I can win you over next time. Take care!

I was sort of hoping you could tell me what you thought of my actual story, not sit there and criticize me on every last little thing that doesn’t fit your bill. Quite frankly, I choose to capitalize the word Pokemon, and their names, because if you look out there, there aren’t many fics that don’t. Also, why bother even reviewing when you didn’t like it? Why not just leave? You know how sometimes, you’re bored and you doodle? This was like a doodle in the form of a story. It’s not perfect. Nothing is.

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8637291/

The characters in the story ARE the homestuck kids, in case you haven’t realized.

Or that you haven’t read far enough to be able to tell.

They are NOT OCs, let me make that point clear.

You are completely missing the point of my story. This is a horror AU. You could at least finish reading the later chapters before commenting.

That is exactly the point of an AU. An AU provides a new twist on the characters, keeping their personalities and perhaps some defining traits (like appearance, or signature colour) the same, but with different environments and other modifications that come with the environments.

You should at least give it some thought before shouting at ME about how DIFFERENT my characters are. That is the point of an AU. For example, Dave possesses traits of albinism in canon, having blond hair and red eyes. Albinism causes loss of pigmentation, especially in the eyes, which in some cases will cause blindness. The AU I am writing is a medical horror AU, and I do know my facts. The AU characters will have different traits, but they have the same personality. The conversations between Rose and Dirk are a fact. I have also incorporated ships that are widely viewed as canon.

By challenging my writing, you are also challenging my interpretation of characters AU-wise. Canon may be canon, but not all fanfics have to be strictly adhering to canon.

By challenging my AU interpretation, you are also challenging a sizeable number of RP blogs, artists and writers.

Check your privilege.

My writing style, especially for horror stories, is to only reveal the true identities of the characters at a later time. That is to create mystery. Therefore, it is perfectly legitimate.

I have also taken a glance at your own stories. Your newly updated Homestuck fic has nothing to do with Homestuck either, given your interpretation of mine.

As to why you are commenting on my story, which has more to do with Homestuck than yours, remains a mystery to me.

[Bingo. If they’re unrecognizable, then you’ve failed.]

Like I’ve said before, my writing style, especially for horror stories, is to only reveal the true identities of the characters at a later time. That is to create mystery. Therefore, it is perfectly legitimate, as the story has not progressed enough to reveal them all.

You missed that point. This is my own writing style, and you do not have the power to use my style as your point. This is my own writing style, and you do not have the power to use my style as your point.

[Did you miss where I very clearly said “setting”?]

Did you miss where you said very clearly ‘characters’?

If you’re not interested in the Homestuck kids, then fine.

Also, your story has received a sizeable portion of negative reviews. Though they were about your writing style, which I can understand, I would like to also point out that your first chapter was like mine, in the sense that it was also vague.

Well then, that is merely your interpretation. As a fellow writer, you do not have the right to judge my writing style. Then, deal with it.

And here’s my turn to ask what the ** is wrong with YOU. It does appear to ME that YOU are ALSO grasping at straws. I had to straighten out several easy concepts for you, and you still choose to misinterpret them

You are trying to force-fit your interpretation of AUs and other concepts on to me. We will just have to agree to disagree on their interpretations.

If you are able, I request that you remove your review. It is extremely offensive.