“I know what a proper noun is; I was an English teacher. Please stop being rude with your assumptions and check your own facts.”
| Jake Wolf | re: Your review to The Chosen One’s Awakening: Prologue |
 A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8896995/
I’m going to be honest with you and say, 1. Thanks for the criticism, albeit the tone I get from you is that I’m a no nothing lout who shouldn’t be aloud to write a story if his life depended on it. 2. Assumptions make an ass out of everyone, and I never said the story would have nothing bad and the main character wouldn’t fail. I implied it, but there are times where implication is an author’s tool of misdirection. 3. The reason the thing is broken up as it is, is mainly because I was always bitched at by people about the length of my paragraphs, 4. Fanfiction isn’t my strong suit I’ll admit that right off the bat without a single denial that maybe I completely fuckered this one up, but as long as at least one person enjoys it I’ll say fuck the majority and keep writing it. I even said in the legal shit, that if it offended you, you didn’t have to read it. If I somehow left out that my apologies and I’ll fix it. 5. I’m not a damn grammar major I’m a fucking dumb ass who flunked out of college and has mental problems out the whazoo, but has an ability to write stories so that’s what he does. 6. I respect your opinion, albeit I disagree with it to some degree, and again kindly thank you for your review. Last but not least 7. I tossed in the motto and other stuff just because I felt like giving ash a small amount of light, wanted to remember my childhood to a point, and because this story is meant to be a mix of humor, tragedy, pain, love, loss, erotica, and so much more. So again thank you for your review, and I bid you a good evening. |
| CuriousGeorgeKillah | Your Review |
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Thank you for your review, smart person. It’s good to see some intelligent people out there have taken the time to read and review some of my work, and don’t feel the need to excessively hate on it. In regards to your “Pokemon” problem involving capitalization, I will provide a quick synopsis of my own reasoning. The word “Pokemon” is not synonymous with the word “animal” as you seem to imply. “Pokemon” is an invented term fabricated by a company in Japan that refers to fantastic creatures. It is not a class like the word “amphibian” or “reptile” where such rules would apply. It is a term that requires capitalization, like a Death Note or a Dragon Ball. I see that the two other main problems that you have with this literature are its “inconsistencies” involving Ash giving up his Pokemon for new trainers and / or food consumption and the unusual style of giving a character somewhat out-of-character foibles. Both are understandable, so I will explain them in order: Ash gave up his Pokemon because he felt that it was best for the entire town to do so, and is far too unobtrusive to try and get his Pokemon back. They aren’t rare anymore anyway, so he has little need for them, as friends or otherwise. There’s an intention logic lapse in that he preserves his memories so meticulously, yet abandons what’s really important. That leads into addressing his room and clothing situation. Ash has simply not matured enough to realize his flaws and abnormal tendencies, and has likely developed unhealthy habits because of that. You have described two examples of this, but there are many more signs pointing to his disillusionment and immaturity. I hope all of this helped, even if you may not agree with me completely on many of these points. |
| jynxed1 | re: Your review to Tales of Overlooked Pokémon |
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A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8898415/
Thanks for the review! But to let you know canonically all names of Pokémon species are capitalized always as well as the word Pokémon itself (and Poké Ball, although when I looked it up I saw it was two words so I will change that). You can look up any article on Bulbapedia to verify if you want. Thanks again, though! Also for god’s sake, no, pokeball is one word. English doesn’t let you break up compound words like that. I guess we’ll just have to agree to disagree. I don’t need an English lesson and I’d rather go off of official sources rather than your opinion. But again, thanks.
That seems to agree with me. A link to Pokémon Adventures was meant to go with that, but I don’t think it went through. In it they capitalize as I did.Also according to the official Pokémon website, Poké Ball is two words, not a compound word. If you’re going to be condescending about someone’s knowledge of English, at least have your facts straight.I know what a proper noun is; I was an English teacher. Please stop being rude with your assumptions and check your own facts. |
God, I hope they’re lying, particularly when you see the other stories on their account.
They then demand I remove their story from the C2 because they’re so offended. I counteroffer they go edit their other stories to follow Nintendo’s official site first (just look at that shameful lowercase “trainer”!) and they say no and block me.
| ChaiKnight | re: Your review to Decree to Greatness |
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A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8892480/
I’m going to reply to all your reviews here, although it probably won’t be long. First off, I’m glad you are helping me with (well, correcting) my grammar. I am not a native English speaker, and I’m not used to dialogue. Furthermore, I don’t see the issue of capitalizing Pokemon or Pikachu, as they are up very much up to the writer. They do not have an official place in any dictionary and Gamefreak/Nintendo (whichever hosts the official site ) capitalizes Pokemon names. Pokemon is also to be spelled “Pokémon” or more correctly “POKéMON”, though I don’t feel the need to do just this. Regarding your questions about Nick’s Scyther, I’m not going to get into great detail about him just yet. I’ll let his actions speak for him for now. But I DO actually give hints about Nick’s actions, and that sentence explains that Nick wanted his Scyther to be accustomed to the confines of his Pokeball. He battled a Caterpie and a Metapod (who only used Harden). What did you expect? |
| Golfer2012 | re: Your review to Aura with Amnesia |
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Thank you for helping, but I already got a beta reader (which I forgot to include) *sweatdrop* Sorry about that. |
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A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8874317/
Wait, this part
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize
words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should
capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu
is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper
noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or
trainer. Or professor.
Is incorrect, actually, because these things are SUPPOSED to be capitalized.
If you get a Pokemon game, look in the Pokedex, then you’ll see that you ARE
supposed to capitalize ‘Pikachu’ and ‘Pokemon’ and even ‘Professor'(as it does
in-game)
An entry would be like this
Pikachu (Mouse Pokemon)
They sometimes use an electric shock to recharge a fellow Pikachu. (Etc.
etc.)
Also, I wanna see what you say about this before I post it. Criticism may
help. Or not.
Ash sat up, groggy and tired. He shook his head to try and rid it of the
sleepiness and pulled himself to his feet. “About time you woke up,”
Meloett…
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If the site insists on not letting you even view the PM when you’re blocked, you’d think they’d realize it’s stupid to let the other person send the PMs.
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Whoops. *Ash with a capital
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I’m pretty sure I didn’t miss anything important, though.
| Painty Trancy | Reply to your review, and thank you for it |
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To make catching a Pokemon a little easier, it’s best to weaken the Pokemon instead of trying to catch it right off the bat. That’s why Staravia was ordered to attack Nightmare. Nightmare doesn’t leave the Tower because that’s his home. It’s all he knows, he doesn’t want to leave. “It’s” and “it’s” are the same thing. Like “blonde” and “blond”, either of them are fine. But, your review was con-crit and NOT idiotic flame, and for that I thank you! I just thought I’d clear up that it wasn’t meant to be, well, based off the anime, and I probably should’ve put that in the summary or something. Unless it’s a Creepypasta or something like that, I’ll probably base the story off the anime. I think I can re-write it some. Thaaaank youuuu |
So, on the one hand…[“Yes, my love. I’m taking him to the escape pods now,” Biggie said confidently.
“You know, sometimes your words just hypnotize me,” She smiled.
“Lol,” he responded, but before he could finish she was dead.
Suddenly the alarms started blaring even louder and a voice came over the intercom, saying, “Wee-ooo, wee-ooo, that’s the sound the alarm makes. And this is me telling you that there is an emergency. The ship is going to explode in two minutes and we only have room for one more person.”]
[“Wake up its time for school!” Mom yelled at me from the other side of the door to my bedroom.
What? School! No! Maybe this had all just been a dream my whole life and now I was going to school instead of getting my very own Pokémon! “Just kidding, lol!” Mom said laughing now inside my room by my bed. “Time to go to Professor Pine’s lab to get your first Pokémon!”
“OMG you bitch!” I thought sassily, and got up and started to get ready. I looked in the mirror and started to put moisturizer on my boyish face. My name is Xylark, which is pronounced like the word skylark but not, I’m 14 years old, have dark brown hair with blonde highlights and a style like the mixture between Justin Bieber and Harry Styles, and eyes that shine gold like one of those chocolate coins with gold wrappers. My skin is tan almost like I’m Spanish but I’m not because I’m white so I look really sexy and my moisturizer has a lot of subtle glitter in it so I always sparkle. Also, I’m gay which means I’m sensitive and more intelligent than most boys. One time I had an IQ test and the doctor said I scored higher than any other person he had ever met and he said he had met some smart people like Einstein.]
These two are clearly parodies. Even so, spelling is consistently correct, and their grammar and plot improves significantly in what is likely their first serious story. That would mean that their only significant grammar issue is with proper nouns, which, in an ex-English teacher, still makes me want to throw myself off a cliff, but not quite so vehemently as before.
On the other hand, the content of the second parody reads like it came from a teenager who was frustrated with finding only crap when searching for OT fics. If they were a high or middle school English teacher, they could be familiar enough with teenagers to write one convincingly, but I don’t see why they’d bother.
However, why would anyone lie about being an ex-English teacher? I mean, do people really do that? And if they did, why ex-English teacher, why not just say they are one?
In summary: I don’t know. But I really hope they’ve never taught English.
They’re consistently capitalizing/punctuating dialogue wrong, though. I wouldn’t say that can’t be part of a parody, of course, but basically the quality of them is more loldumb than a real parody. Which, sadly, doesn’t rule out an adult. Maybe by “ex-English teacher” they mean they’re unemployed and have nothing better to do with their time than see how closely they can copy crappy OT fic.
As to the lying – it’s the internet, all I know is that people bring up qualifications to win arguments and it’s really hard to tell who’s lying and who took advantage of lax standards.
Come to think of it, I know one of the things my school did was take teachers they hired for one subject and use them for the reading classes as well. That would fit well with saying ex-English teacher like the status is more about current employment than certification.
I’m actually kind of impressed by some elements of that second parody. “Thought sassily” is brilliant, as is the baffling eye color simile. And “Hey, ever notice how darker skin is only considered attractive on white people?” is a far more nuanced commentary on racism than I’m used to seeing in Pokémon fanfiction, however much that might sound like damning with faint praise.
But yeah, I also really hope they’ve never taught English.
On a slightly-random note, when people describe their characters’ skin colours, I rarely ever find OCs that are people of colour.
I actually did see one that had one of the main character’s sidekicks was African-American. The whole fic seemed to have some weird obsession with that, actually, to the point of getting into exactly what percent ethnicity another character was.
“”It’s” and “it’s” are the same thing. Like “blonde” and “blond”, either of them are fine.”
I assume this person meant “its” and “it’s” are the same thing, and NYAAAAAAAAAGH
On a more positive not they weren’t too attached to that and seem to have calmed down. It seems like a knee jerk thing.
Not quite as bad as the first part, but seriously of all examples, “blonde” and “blond” aren’t exactly the same either. One of the few gender-conjugated words in the English language and almost no one knows or cares these days.
“”Pokemon” is an invented term fabricated by a company in Japan that refers to fantastic creatures.”
That’s . . . the least stupid explanation I’ve heard so far.
People have used it a lot before though, and it still doesn’t make sense…like, even if it’s an invented term, they are definitely actual words as soon as we start using them to communicate things, so they’re not exempt from grammar.
It’s a common belief, unfortunately. A lot of books now capitalize made-up terms of the author. It’s one of Harry Potter’s many literary sins, for one.
Re, the English teacher: One would think that someone who taught English to others would have a basic grasp of how commas wo–
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…Oh, that explains so effing much.