Dragon Quill

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8917628/

On the contrary I thought I did they were in character most of the time. Giovanni is scheming and ambitious, just how he is in canon. Why do you think they are out of character? And the story has only just started, it takes time for characters to develop and this is a different setting and different things will happen to them so of course they may end up being completely different people.

You say that I don’t have an interest in my setting. Well read all of The Other King and that will prove you wrong.

The original tale is located at www dot fanfiction dot net slash s slash 7111678

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8892885/

Effing troll, you don’t have to read it

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8916743/

Hmm, didn’t notice these errors. I always thought Pokemon names had to be capitalized like names.

MORGAN has tight security. This is just a way to say, “Look, we’re giving you tools to escape, but you can’t.” Like dangling a key that doesn’t fit into a lock. But that’s a good point. I’ll go more into detail over their environment later.

Thanks for pointing all this out! Really appreciate it!

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8918801/

I’m sorry I really am trying to do my hardest

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8918801/

I wasnt thinking at the time and that was the only thing that I could think of her to do or say.

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8919748/

Wow thank you so much for your advice and i will work on that dialogue, this was and is my first fan fiction so i didn’t exactly know how to do so i just wrote my story. But thank you so much for your review!

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8918844/

Ummm thanks? you must be a beta reader. Look the Jewel is a magical powerful orb, made by Arceus. Plus it’s fiction. So it can do anything related to giving life. The movie said it was meant to give life, it didn’t say how. Imagination, duh. Arceus can foresee the future to some extent, like a Palantír, (because he’s the god of All pokemon) so he knew humans would rise again. It’s a no-brainer to recognize that this is ARCEUS we are talking about, who’s GOD in the pokemon world, at least with some weakness when he lacks its plates (I’m calling it a he cause that’s the dub in the english movie). And there were plenty of Lucarios and Gardeviors at the time, so half of their entire species were reformed for the humans’ Sake. It just doesn’t say directly. Sorry if the story’s ACTUALLY engaging. Plus when you say I should’nt capitalize a pokemon’s name, well, spell check says otherwise, which is what fanfiction WANTS me to use. Every there’s a new paragraph, there’s a NEW subject!? That makes a story more confusing, not better. With all of my paragraphs dealing with the same subject and foreshadowing a future, that makes the story all the more continuous, with NO confusion, whatsoever. You seem a little bit to technical to understand that and lack the creativity for understanding this. Sorry if a few Gramer errors displease you, but the story is good, and it’s structure. So yeah. Thanks for the advice and this is my answer.
Today 6:30AM

An also, I deleted my AN chapter, and plus, my character POVS are for character developement. I explain my reasoning in the AN of ch. 7 You ever heard of character developement? Well, I am going to continue my story, and it’s going to be good like this.
Today 6:36AM

Plus , what would YOU know about a continuall story. YOU written over a hundred stories for longer than I have and yet almost all of them are just one-shots. Plus you’ve been on this site longer. I just started writing stories, so cut some slack, and be less detailed. Once you ask about the story, character developement, setting, THEN, we’ll talk.

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8918298/

Did you just rewrite almost my entire first chapter? I’m sorry, but the way you did was very rude. I realize I had a few typos, but first of all you aren’t my beta-reader, so don’t you dare try acting like it. Second of all Pokemon’s names are their names, such as “Druddigon” or “Pikachu” which makes them proper nouns which means they should normally be capitalized. Third of all, and most importantly of all, they’re just flipping kids. Ten-year-olds for Christ’s sake. Cut them some slack, will you? Characters grow in every story, which makes them unique and lovable. It wouldn’t have been okay if they ate someone else’s eggs, but I don’t see how you were able to pull that it would have been from that context. It feels like your review, well, a good chunk of it was a waste of time if it was just to rewrite basically the entire chapter.

I can take criticism pretty well usually, unless you do something like this where you just blatantly call my Fanfiction bad, rewrite my work without my approval or even so much as a warning or notification, and are just rude.
I hope in the future if you were to review again, you would be a little nicer. If not, then I would much rather you stay away from my work.

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8916744/

1. Actually, I’ve never seen a fanfic that does that. I’ve never seen that ANYWHERE, not even Bulbapedia. I respect your opinion, but I’m not changing my writing style when I’ve genuinely never seen anyone do what you’ve suggested. At least not in the Pokemon universe.

2. As far as your other two points, you’ll have to wait til next chapter for an explanation.