A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8953353/

the prologue is in italics because it’s a flashback. the text that is normal is Kenpachi talking in the present

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8953353/

Okay dude, take a second and calm the hell down. I appreciate the editorial advise, but c’mon bro, it’s a FANFICTION for crying out loud! Of course there’s going to be mistakes!!
Hikaru gives details like that to give the reader a visual; it’s not 100% from first person.
The whole point of him surviving the bullet wound and staring down his enemy is to express how brave and special he is. Hikaru is no ordinary boy, and my readers will see that more once I get into the climax of the story.
Thank you for your criticism, but if all you’re going to do is look for my mistakes and correct them, then don’t read it! I wrote this to give people something good to read; to share my ideas! When people click on the link to my story, I want them to read it for the joy of reading it, not to edit it and tell me what to do!
So, thanks, but no thanks. I hope you can find a Fan fiction that fits your standards.

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8952326/

Thank you for the review, but I don’t plan on changing the way I write anytime soon. I gave Miranda’s Houndoom the name “Sparky” because it is a common name for a pet dog, and the character had recieved and named these Pokemon at a young age. The official Pokemon websites and books capitalize the first letter of every Pokemon’s name, no matter if it belonged to somebody or not. I only described Swinub and Houndoom because 1) I was bored and 2) There could be readers who aren’t familiar with the Pokemon from Johto. The misuse of “it’s” was just a grammar mistake that I missed while revising, and I will fix later. I always describe my characters throughly so readers can get a good picture. I may take these things into suggestion later, but for now, my writing will stay the way it is. Thank you for the advice.

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8953093/

Hey, I’d just like to thank you for taking the time to write such a detailed and constructive review of my story. Honestly, a vast majority of the reviews I get are generic praise and “Good job, I love it” type stuff, so finding a rough in the diamonds, so to speak, is seriously refreshing. Thank you.

To be honest, I actually wrote this a long time ago and felt like posting it after going through some of my old stuff, thinking everyone would love it like they do with everything else I write. In retrospect, this story does kinda suck. Someday I may actually take this down at some point and rewrite it with fewer plotholes and more relevant exposition, but for now I’ll leave it up while I continue with my main project.

tl;dr Thanks for the constructive criticism. I may end up redoing this because I acknowledge how bad it 

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8953047/

Hello!

Thank you for your critique, I really appreciate it. I did intend for it to be that they’re keeping people in as well as out, but looking through it again I can see I didn’t do a good job of implying it. I was really only theorizing as to why the gym is under renovations yet has not changed between D/P and Platinum…anyway, it might have been a good idea but wasn’t executed very well.

Again, I very much appreciate your critique and will keep it in mind for next time.

-Crowbar.

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8949320/

thankyou for your constructive criticism. the way you typed it sounded like you were my English Teacher

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8955754/

Hi, I’m sorry if you didn’t like my story. The problem is that I was working on Microsoft word so it didn’t understand unless you put capital letters down. I will try and look at your comment and improve the next part but anyway thanks for leaving a comment.
P.S. I only said, I haven’t write it yet cos I just wanted to keep u informed

P.P.S OMG you so remind me of my English teacher, nah just kidding

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8954410/

I really appreciate the constructive criticism, but some of the stuff you said doesn’t really make sense to me.

First, you said that dialogue should be written as “Hello,” she said, but then you said that it shouldn’t be written as “Hello,” she said.

It also would’ve been a bit more helpful if you told me where I made these mistakes in my story. Also, I’m aware about the whole using the same punctuation in thoughts. I’m not bad at English, I just make mistakes like every other human on the planet.

I also fail to see how I *abused* epithets, so you if you could explain, I’d appreciate it. Otherwise, I’ll take what you said into consideration and ignore the hidden insult.

thank you :)

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8957242/

Is that so? Oops. Sorry, I haven’t read Pokémon fics in quite a while, and was somehow under the impression their names were always capitalised. I’ll keep that in mind from now on.

Thanks for the review! I’ll try to cut down on the colons. :D

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8956412/

Thank you for your critisizm. Just like the anime always was, the police are no where to be found. The character trusts her pokemon and if her pokemon trusts Ingo and Emmet, she will too. Pokemon sence emotions. I forget to put those parts in since I’m always writing this at school. I have some funky program for my laptop which always corrects my “its” “it’s.” I decided to have it so she has to pay for the pokecenters since it helped my write the story easier. Who in the right mind gives away food and places to stay for the night for FREE without it getting over crouded? I guess it was very lazy on my part that she basically forgot about what happened the night before on the train. I should of mentioned about the character being too proud to call the police and decides to brush the incident off. This is my first time ever making a story out of my free will and I appreciate it very much that you took time to review my story. I can tell you are quite experienced from the way you wrote your review, and again, I thank you. I shall be more careful with writing the story and I find out how to, I’ll try and fix the other chapters’ transitions, I just made my account 3 days ago, same with my story.
Today 3:01AM

I appreciate your critisizm, but you didn’t have to be so rude about it. This story already makes more sence than a lot of the pokemon fanfictions I’ve already read. People can tell that I enjoy writing this story and I strive to get better at it. Though I do feel slightly offended by some of your comments, I will still try to abide by your review.

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8956012/

Well i’m sorry if you don’t like my story. and ouch, harsh much. I’m not the greatest writter ever so this is all still very new to me. so don’t go bitting people’s heads off. i am happy to recieve advice but i don’t like being told that my names are bad or that certain things are not to your liking.

Don’t like it, then don’t read it. it’s that simple.

Trainer out!! :(

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8954017/

You see like you have issues with bossing people around and thinking that everyone just loves you’re opinion.

I don’t.

You are very rude. If you don’t like my story, then get off it. You don’t belong here if you don’t like what’s here. I’m only in 8th grade English, so I couldn’t know any better. My teacher is not a grammar nazi like you. She does have a better adititude and vocabulary than you.

And you do realize since I don’t have a laptop, I use my iPod’s note section to type all this…? So my iPod sometimes does stuff without me knowing, alright? So calm down. Nobody REALLY wants you’re opinion. If you’re just gonna nit-pick about the negative stuff in people’s stories, then get off of here. Reviews are NOT to mock or ridicule people, it’s to complement someone’s hard work and POLITELY give them advice to make a better story.

If you’re insane enough, you will nazi this.

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8954017/

One more thing with you’re nit-picking. My English teacher told me to do dialoge like that.

“Hello,” she said with a grin. “How are you doing?”

Because if you take out what’s not dialoge…

Hello, how are you doing?”

I saw this Japanese song title that had it that way. Are you gonna nazi them?
Today 4:40AM

No, I didn’t stop making false assumptions, a fail attempt of trying to be smart.

I’m saying if you are not gonna give me POSITIVE constructive criticism, get off my account and leave me alone. Yeah, you may have better writing skills than me, but you obviously do not know you absolutely do not have the right cram the English language down my throat. I don’t like someone other than my English teacher to tell me what I should do in my writing and what I should not. Like I said, I’m in English 8A. I am not on here to show off my “fantastic writing skills” like you seem to be. I’m here to give people something to read in their bored times, and they don’t nessisarly (go all nazi on my iPod for not knowing what word that is) have to LIKE it. I happen to have a talent in the Fine Arts. I am a good artist, writing is my SECOND thing (if you wouldn’t stop nit-picking about every little thing that makes you explode and get mad).

I’m on here to give people something to read and relate to. NOT to rub it in people’s faces that I’m a better writer than all of FanFiction and shove them grammar mistakes down their throats, just for my satisfaction.

This is a place to write things, GOOD OR NOT. This is not some professional writing website where you get paid and all that goodie stuff, this is a way for people to express themselves and others will relate and not mock you for you’re likes, points of views on things, and opinions. And if you think you’re so good, why don’t you write a book and send it to a publisher? That would save us two a whole LOT of trouble.

I don’t want you’re “opinion” and “constructive criticism”. Get off of my profile and stories or I’ll get you off myself.

I hate people who find the negatives in life. Find the positive in every bad situation instead of complaining how bad you have it. You’d feel sorry if you heard mine.

Let me drill this in your head.

Write a darn book if you are SO good at the English language. I bet you’ll get you’re book back with proof reading marks, no matter how well you wrote it. And don’t tell me you’re too young because my friend set in a book to a publisher and they liked her story. So, if you like writing so much, then start making some money so you can make your own perfect writing website.

“Where I drill grammar through your ignorant, thick skulls.”

I have an A- in English, so back off. I’m an 8th grader. For all I know, you could be in college, still wasting your life on silly websites like these. I’m only on here in my spare time.

Now, leave me alone.

Man your reviews are mean!

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8953527/

Thanks for the help! I’m not being sarcastic or anything either. Grammar has never been my strong point so I’ll try and fix up those mistakes in the future. I’m sorry my story doesn’t appeal to you and it’s random, but I’ve seen much worse. There are people who like my story so I’m going to continue with it, you just don’t have to read so if I have any more horrible mistakes it won’t bother you! Thanks again! :)
Also, half the time my ipad screws it up so that might be why too.

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8954739/

Thank you for the tips. However, Pokemon are always capitalized.

Please stop being a psyco to my friend TheLegendaryKitty19, it’s really petty.

“This is correct,” stated Envy. “This is incorrect.” she continuted. “However, it works when the next thing is another sentence.” She looked up from the iPhone she was typing her note to the online writer with the incorrect grammar on.

Uh, hello. I just want to say thank you for the review, I did it in a bit of a rush and well, you saw what happened. I will be taking the story down and starting a entirely different one. So, once again, thank you for the review. :)

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8954082/

I just have one question. Is it wrong to have four guys in the main group? I would think of it more as a preference issue rather than something that I would consider a problem. I haven’t done anything with them as of right now, but if I really do come off as someone who is just casting off the girls as one-dimensional characters, then I would be happy to take some constructive criticism.

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8956516/

Hi, thanks for your review! Your critique is very helpful, and I’ll get to correcting the grammar errors.

I’ll get to fixing the quotes around the thought. What happened was I originally wrote this in third person, but then rewrote it to be in first person. I didn’t catch that the quotes around the thought is effectively useless.

As for capitalizing Pokemon names, I’d say that is a more of a stylistic preference, because in the games, Pokemon names are always capitalized regardless if they are used as a proper noun or just referring to the species. I prefer the names to be capitalized since I’ve never seen it otherwise.

Thanks again for the comments!

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8953597/

Thank you so much for your thoughtful review. I’m glad to get some constructive criticism; it really means a lot. I have plans to change all of the errors you’ve pointed out. However, I wasn’t sure what you meant by [So their pre-contact oral history is gone then.] in response to [The single most famous of these stories surprisingly does not detail hostilities between the Sinnohans and natives, but rather one friendly relationship that changed the lives of many.] Could you explain that to me?

Thanks again,
Ebaz

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8929143/

Thanks for the review~ I appreciate it (even though You just insulted it and din’t say what I did Okay)

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8928071/

I’m sorry… I know I’m a bad author and I’m glad you gave me the critism. I really like writing and I feel I shouldn’t if I don’t know how… you’d probably agree. Again, I’m really sorry. If the story is really that bad I’ll just delete it. I’m in sixth grade so please don’t be so harsh with the grammer and things… this is only the second story I’ve ever tried writing (I’m telling the truth). If you want, just reply and you can ask Kayla to finish writing it…

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8928071/

I read some of your things on your page… I’m not saying I’ll delete my story but I appreciate you stating my mistakes. I was thinking about deleting any ways because I know I have bad grammer and I’m not exactly an A student when it comes that stuff. I’m better at poetry but I wanted to try something new. Not everyone likes the same things and again, I’m really sorry for not doing these things right.
1 hour ago

But I’m happy with it and I’ll fix my stupid senseless mistakes! I really don’t care what you think of it! As long as I’m happy with my work I’m fine! Now keep that critism coming because all it will do is make me better! I know a readers opinion is important! Now forget about those top two cooments and reply something! I will not, and I repeat, will not! Block you!