Jan 8OrangeBerry15A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11716740/

Thank you for your input. I appreciate it.
Alrighty, first things first, I wrote this wanting to keep it as close to the original game as possible, however, I had a few ideas for things later on that would venture off from the original story a bit. So, yes, waking up was necessary to my story. I agree, it is overdone, but I’m not really looking to stand out or publish this. I just wrote it for fun.
Secondly, yes, I intend to capitalize every Pokemon. That’s how I roll. Most Pokemon merch, books and other media, capitalize the name of a Pokemon. I haven’t seen “charmander” without capitalization. I understand your concept. I would never capitalize “Deer”, it be stupid, but this is fiction. And frankly, to me, it looks nicer. But it’s whatever floats your boat.
Oh yay! Grammar! My worst enemy! I honestly do appreciate this one. I freaking suck at all that. I barely proofread this chapter myself, but I sure didn’t have anyone else proofread it.
Thank ya! I’ll apply this to my future writings!
Thanks, Farla, for your input, but as I said before, I’m staying true to the story, and you better bet I’ll even write in when they go to the Pokemon Center. Every. Time. :)

In all seriousness, I’m not interested in finishing this story right now. I have no motivation for it, nor the time to work on it. It was just a one shot I wrote 5 years ago, and I had hoped it would develop into something more. Maybe one day.
Thanks for reading!

Jan 8SharpEyLogicA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11716717/

(Hiding a little disappointment here…) Thanks for the advice! I’ll just tweak my stories to how you said and it should be better

Jan 8Virgil’s InfernoI’d like to thank you for your very well composed review. It’s quite embarrassing really, letting such sloppy capitalization mistakes escape my admittedly poor editorial technique. Your remark upon what turned you off of the story in question is a little troubling. The rambling was noted and done on purpose because it was meant to be a story that would often switch narrator and perspective. Thus I needed to distinguish the titular character’s. way of narrating. Nonetheless I’m beginning to wonder if this alienates some readers who don’t enjoy this particular style, as I’d hate to write page long foot notes dissecting jokes about Freudian psychology and historical figures.
In closing, thank you for your invaluable feedback. And best of luck in whatever endeavors you may find yourself currently working towards.

Jan 8wolfboydude52A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11555981/

Thank you, I rushed this out, so it isn’t perfect. (or near my normal standards) Also, this is the PMD universe where 1 apple fills half of your stomach. 1 apple every day would keep you alive in that universe but not much more.

Jan 8NeonTheEeveeA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11717550/

Again this is my first story, so I’m not that good at writing or plotting. But I agree that the first chapter doesn’t make any senses. I’ll fix it so it makes more sense. Thanks for the review!

Jan 8QuantumN0VAA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11717032/

Thank you for reviewing my story, first of all.

Secondly, the addition of Ch. 1 was not intentional and you are completely correct about that, though I had thought about possibly dividing the story up into three different parts so there would be some time passage between each one of the chapters instead of doing a bunch of filler chapters. It was originally a force of habit and I respect you informing me of that.

Thirdly, I apologize for my atrocious grammar and spelling. I haven’t really done a story on here before aside for one my girlfriend had repeatedly requested me to put up. I appreciate the input about proper capitalization especially because I was never quite sure of how to go about it with these stories. I find myself capitalizing things like the names of Pokemon because I am so used to them being that way in the games and shows because it was the name of the certain species, the same goes with Professor and Pokemon Master, because I thought of them as the name of certain titles and all of that.

Additionally, to reply to your comment about the last part of your review, you are completely correct. I had not thought of it in that way and after reading what you had said, I looked back at the story and have decided to revise the story and replace the story I had originally posted with my redrafted version.

Thank you for your feedback on my story. I will definitely remember it and I feel like this can help me moving forward with my future attempts at writing.

-N0VA

Jan 8TheBlackPrince3A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11705695/

First of all, thanks for your opinion and constructive criticism.

To address the concern with the dialogue, if you didn’t know, I’m a blind person and I use a screen reader to read and write. Another thing is that when I was writing this story, my PC broke down and I had to use my cousin’s PC which didn’t have MS Word which usually spell checks everything. Though I know that it isn’t an excuse, I’m ashamed to admit it that in the flow of writing, I didn’t notice those mistakes and English isn’t my first language. But I assure you that I’ll try my best to remedy that in the future.

The second thing, I know that I could have just used the names of Ash, Brock and Misty but as it was just the introduction, I didn’t think it would be prudant to rush into the story without any description. Trust me, I received a lot of complaints about my lakh of description and “my rushing into things” in the original story. Moreover it added some variety in the story. It gets a bit boring to always read Ash, Misty and Brock.

The lakh of capitalization for Pokémon here and there – The same reason as before; the flow of writing and lakh of spellcheck. It’s the same with “Professor Elm”. But I promise that I’ll proofread the chapter many more times before posting it.

The accessive description of Pokémon – As I received many complaints about my lakh of description, I thought that a little description wouldn’t hurt anyone. Though I understand how you feel; I myself often skip the descriptions if I’m annoyed. It’s probably better that I followed your suggestion. But what do you think about my description of Larvitar? Was it better if I described some of its features spread out in different paragraphs and interactions? Sorry but I think I can’t avoid all of the descriptions but I’ll try to tone it down. Hope you’ll not get upset and stop reading the story.

The battle being pointless – I beg your pardon. I think that it was a great way to show Ash’s battling skills and that of Misty. More importantly, it showed that Misty had gotten stronger than she was in the anime by travelling with this fic’s Ash Ketchum. And it was a training session for the Silver Conference. I also needed a way to show Dragonite’s power as it’s going to be the only training session that I’m going to write before the Silver Conference. Another reason is that Dragonite is going to face stronger opponents in the future and so that people doesn’t say “Hey, how did Dragonite suddenly become super strong all of a sudden?” Besides, many battles in the anime are pointless and don’t have any reason. I’m sorry that you found it disappointing.

I hope I covered all of your concerns and you won’t stop reading this story. Thanks again for your review and voicing your concerns. I really appreciate it.

Jan 9MaidMikuruChanA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11717207/

?? uh, I might have messed up one quotation, but that’s it lol. I get that you’re trying to help, but you come off as a dick with nothing to contribute. I’ve gone through the story and I capitalized everything. Next time, try to comment on the actual story and give one like of “correction”. I get that you’ve written stuff on this site for like ten years, but no one wants to hear you spout off on a well formatted/written story. thank you :)

Jan 9Kindness and ExuberanceI just wanted to say thanks for reviewing my story! Your feedback is really useful and constructive.