Lot of standalone author’s notes today.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12271912/1/Echo-of-Infamy
Read this: fanfiction {dot} net/topic/11834/55376155/1/Capitalization-Thread
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
This is not nearly as clever or original as you think it is.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12271970/1/Poisoned-by-Hatred
You shouldn’t delete and repost, it messes up everyone who’s already favorited and followed. Stories can be updated through the document manager without deleting them.
You did at least fix the most minor of the things I pointed out, but the story itself is still a mess and you still haven’t placed this in the Anime world. Once again, you need a beta reader, which can be found here: fanfiction {dot} net/topic/11834/42724996/1/Beta-Signup
Alternatively, just write in your native language. Most of the errors you’re making are unique to English.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12272617/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-Frozen-X
Read this: fanfiction {dot} net/topic/11834/55376155/1/Capitalization-Thread
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[“Coming in a sec.” I speedwalked over and opened the door. My mother stood there, with a cruel look on her face. She gestured to some men in suits behind her, who walked in, took my shirt and hoodie off, and chained my hands up to the ceiling. She pulled out a whip and turned me so that my back faced her.]
This seems extremely out-of-character. Diantha doesn’t seem this comically evil in canon.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12234081/2/Pocket-Portal-at-Parisa
[However upon seeing Rhys drag Iolana out in her pajamas, Kidra went on the defensive. Iolana tried to calm the situation, but that didn’t stop Kidra from being suspicious of Rhys. Kidra inserted herself in the group, making Rhys or Iolana unable to say anything.]
Great! It’s really rare to see positive friendships between women in stories, so I’m glad to have contributed Kidra to this. Looking forward to seeing how this develops.
[“This better be good,” the blonde said.
“No one even invited you, Silvery,” Rhys stated with an irritate tone. “If you don’t want to be here, then just leave.”
“Seriously?” the blonde snapped back.]
I did picture her being a bit better at handling people, though.
I wonder how these characters will react to getting their powers.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12273380/1/Advanced-Commando-II
This belongs in the Anime world. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section.
I appreciate that you’re not capitalizing pokemon.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12273430/1/Hana-s-Pokemon-Adventure-Kanto
Read this: fanfiction {dot} net/topic/11834/55376155/1/Capitalization-Thread
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Non-story chapters are banned on this site, and character bios aren’t usually good ideas to include in a story anyway. If the information in them is relevant, it should come up organically within the story.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12273587/1/Pokemon-Tech
Script format is banned on this site. You’re an author, not a screenwriter.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12273909/1/Amourshipping-One-Shot-Under-the-Mistletoe
This belongs in the Anime world. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section.
Read this: fanfiction {dot} net/topic/11834/55376155/1/Capitalization-Thread
You should separate your author notes with a horizontal line; otherwise, they look like part of the story.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12273938/1/The-Butterfly-Effect
This belongs in the Anime world. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section.
Read this: fanfiction {dot} net/topic/11834/55376155/1/Capitalization-Thread
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part <i>is</i> considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
Also, a new speaker means a new paragraph. Not following this rule makes the story unreadable.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12274047/1/Lana-Adventure-to-Confessing-Ash
This belongs in the Anime world. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part <i>is</i> considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
Read this: fanfiction {dot} net/topic/11834/55376155/1/Capitalization-Thread
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12274420/1/Amourshipping-Date-Under-Stars
This belongs in the Anime world. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section.
[*Flashback*]
This is jarring; it’s better to use generalized scene transitions. Time and place should be clear from context or narration.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12274434/1/My-Non-Nornal-Life
[“If you could review that would be fantastic! Also I don’t wanna run out of ideas so please do for more content! Thanks!” pokemonwriter127]
This should go in your author’s note. Summaries should be about the story itself.
Non-story chapters are banned on this site. This should go in your author’s note, not stand on its own.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12274434/2/My-Non-Nornal-Life
Not using paragraphs makes me not want to read your story.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12274654/1/Betrayal-a-curse-and-a-lot-of-love
Your title isn’t fully capitalized.
This belongs in the Anime world. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section.
[Bold means that a Pokémon is speaking in human language out loud
Cursive means that it is a person’s thought
Between () means translation from Pokémon language to human language so you know what the Pokémon is saying.
*action* anything between these signs means the character is for example laughing, eating, etc.
” well this means a character is talking obviously”]
I guarantee you do not need this key. If basic actions aren’t obvious from context, you’re doing something wrong. You also shouldn’t use bold for standard actions, as it’s extremely jarring in prose, and you should describe actions instead of just saying them.
Read this: fanfiction {dot} net/topic/11834/55376155/1/Capitalization-Thread
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
You should separate your author notes with a horizontal line; otherwise, they look like part of the story.
[Chapter 1: Trouble at the Sinnoh league.]
Titling chapters in the story itself looks kinda weird; the dropdown menu should suffice.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part <i>is</i> considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
[“Pikachu pika pi”, (come on Ash let’s get going)]
Also, writing out both the gibberish and the translation is really awkward. You should just write out the translation, or if it’s important that the viewpoint character doesn’t understand it, you should structure the scenes so that we don’t need to know exactly what’s being said.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12274679/1/Start-from-the-Climax-Ash-VS-Axel
This belongs in the Anime world. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section.
[Japanese Title Iteration: Saisho kara Climax da ze! Satoshi Tai (VS) Yamato!]
Don’t do this.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part <i>is</i> considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12274682/1/AdvanceShipping-One-shots
This belongs in the Anime world. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section.
You should separate your author notes with a horizontal line; otherwise, they look like part of the story.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part <i>is</i> considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12274740/1/A-NEW-BEGINING
Try harder.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12275067/1/Pokemon-Sun-and-Moon-Fanfiction-Someday
[You’re the first Campion Alola has ever Had!]
Proofread.
[“(Y/N)” – Your Character’s Name]
You really shouldn’t do this, it looks incredibly awkward and, ironically, jars the reader out of the story. It’s better to simply structure the prose so that the protagonist’s name is never mentioned.
[“Speech”
‘Thought’]
I guarantee you do not need this key. If basic actions aren’t obvious from context, you’re doing something wrong.
You should separate your author notes with a horizontal line; otherwise, they look like part of the story.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part <i>is</i> considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
It looks like this should be marked as “complete”?
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12275100/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-To-be-the-Best
This belongs in the Anime world. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section.
This is far too insubstantial for a first chapter. Remember that your first chapter is your opportunity to hook your reader – in other words, to show them what makes your story unique and worth reading. Rehashing the exact same opening we’re all familiar with in the tone of a documentary film does not do that. If you have a plot, start there; you’re not obligated to cover every mundane detail leading up to the inciting event. See here for more information: fanfiction {dot} net/topic/11834/142411850/1/First-Chapters
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12275151/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-Mystery-Dungeon-Fragmented-Paradise
Centering all your text makes it difficult to read.
I appreciate that you’re not capitalizing pokemon.
[“Icour, we tried our best.” a soft, solemn voice said]
And you’re generally writing dialogue correctly, but you used a period instead of a comma here.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12275396/1/Alolan-Trials
Non-story chapters are banned on this site, just so you know. It’s a good idea to provide some story context anyway, so that submitters know which characters will fit with the setting.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12275476/1/Alone
This belongs in the Anime world. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part <i>is</i> considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
Also, a new speaker means a new paragraph. Not following this rule makes your story unreadable.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12275684/1/Daniel-and-the-encrypted-stone
Your title isn’t fully capitalized.
Please make a summary that actually tells people what the story will be about.
Titling the story and chapters in the story itself looks kinda weird; the dropdown menu should suffice.
A new speaker requires a new paragraph. Not following this rule makes your story unreadable.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12276018/1/Love-in-complete-darkness
Your title isn’t fully capitalized.
Non-story chapters are banned on this site. This should go in your author’s note, not stand on its own.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12276065/1/Ask-Pokemon
Script format and interactive stories are both banned on this site.