Eh, not much.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7773264/1/Pokemon_TRI_DUNGEON
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” he said or “Hello!” he said, never “Hello.” He said or “Hello.” he said or “Hello,” He said or “Hello” he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as “Hello.” He grinned, never “Hello,” he grinned or “Hello,” He grinned or “Hello.” he grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” he said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” he said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” he said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” he said, “is it.” If there’s no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like “Hi. This – ” He looked around. “- is it.” And the same punctuation and capitalization applies to thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Use spellcheck.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7773310/1/Your_Beautiful
Your” is possessive, as in, your story, “you’re” means “you are”.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” he said or “Hello!” he said, never “Hello.” He said or “Hello.” he said or “Hello,” He said or “Hello” he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as “Hello.” He grinned, never “Hello,” he grinned or “Hello,” He grinned or “Hello.” he grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” he said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” he said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” he said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” he said, “is it.” If there’s no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like “Hi. This – ” He looked around. “- is it.” And the same punctuation and capitalization applies to thoughts.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7773549/1/Darks_Journey_Kanto
[*Groan* ]
Never do this. You’re writing a story, not an unusually lazy script.
Don’t use quotation marks with thoughts, it makes it look like it’s spoken aloud.
[My name is Dark Stone]
His name is ridiculous.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[I officially receive my license today from Professor Oak, the most renowned Pokémon researcher in the Kanto region. I’m 15, and could have set out for my adventure as a trainer at 10. Yeah, I have a trainer’s license. I never was forced into this sort of thing, nor was I held back (far from it), but I thought a researcher’s license would be a better idea. I figured it would give me some real purpose for exploration and discovery, and if my journey ever ends I could fall back onto lab work without going back to school. ]
This is also ridiculous. He could have spent those five years getting experience he could then use as a researcher, but instead he’ll be starting behind everyone else. Even if he doesn’t much want to journey, he could at least have spent the time raising a pokemon of his own, which would still have gotten him practice with pokemon as well as made his eventual journey much easier.
And if part of why he’s doing it is because he doesn’t want to end up back in school, why would he choose to stay in school an extra five years to start with.
[“Oh, Dark,” she blew her nose ]
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” he said or “Hello!” he said, never “Hello.” He said or “Hello.” he said or “Hello,” He said or “Hello” he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as “Hello.” He grinned, never “Hello,” he grinned or “Hello,” He grinned or “Hello.” he grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” he said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” he said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” he said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” he said, “is it.” If there’s no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like “Hi. This – ” He looked around. “- is it.” And the same punctuation and capitalization applies to thoughts.
[I’ll be back from time to time, mom ]
When used in place of a name, it’s capitalized.
[I pulled her in for a huge. ]
Hug.
[“Gramps, I’m here for my license!” Oh great. It’s-
“Light! ]
And here I thought naming the main character Dark Stone represented some upper limit on absurdity.
And now it’s just him walking around the same places as every other OT fic.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7774085/1/The_Flying_Hero_Rainbow_Wing
[Kako was watching an exciting Pokemon battle on TV. She watched a battle on TV with her stuffed Clefairy and Togepi. Kako watched as the fierce male Nidorino use a poison sting attack against the scary Gengar. ]
This reads like it’s written for second graders. It’s incredibly simplistic.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[“Kako, this will be the last time you will see you’re father,” Her mother said, “Say you’re last goodbye to him.”]
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” he said or “Hello!” he said, never “Hello.” He said or “Hello.” he said or “Hello,” He said or “Hello” he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as “Hello.” He grinned, never “Hello,” he grinned or “Hello,” He grinned or “Hello.” he grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” he said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” he said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” he said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” he said, “is it.” If there’s no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like “Hi. This – ” He looked around. “- is it.” And the same punctuation and capitalization applies to thoughts.
Your” is possessive, as in, your story, “you’re” means “you are”.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7774131/1/Pokemon_The_Kanto_Journeys
[allow me to introduce myself. My name’s Alexander Reed, but due to my mother wanting a unique name for her child, people know me as Wednesday. In terms of looks, I have silver eyes, brown hair spiked up (as I can’t keep it any other way), freckles, and about 5’11. ]
If his mom wanted a unique name for the kid, she could have just named him Wednesday. Humans don’t have silver eyes. No one is “about” 5’11, because by the time you’re listing inches you’re being pretty damn exact.
[a Growlithe ]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[“I’ll be there.” She claimed. ]
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” he said or “Hello!” he said, never “Hello.” He said or “Hello.” he said or “Hello,” He said or “Hello” he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as “Hello.” He grinned, never “Hello,” he grinned or “Hello,” He grinned or “Hello.” he grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” he said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” he said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” he said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” he said, “is it.” If there’s no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like “Hi. This – ” He looked around. “- is it.” And the same punctuation and capitalization applies to thoughts.
Speaking of said, use it instead of trying to dance around it.
[That’s when I saw the female beside him. ]
Only assholes talk about women as “females”.
[“You two are going to be traveling together.” Professor Oak informed us. “So please, take all the time you will need to know each other better.” ]
Is there a reason Oak decided to find a hot girl and order her to travel with him?
…and now it’s Team Rocket clones complete with a filler motto to inflate your chapter.
[The Next Morning…]
Don’t label scene breaks.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7774193/1/Things_Green_Shouldve_Done_But_Didnt
The point at which you’re not telling someone’s mother they’re still alive, and keeping it up for years, is the point at which it’s not “a childish promise” or “respect” or anything but you being a loathsome human being.
The morality of the category worries me. The author seems aware it’s wrong, but not to have any inkling of how much.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7774781/1/Audino_A_Pokemon_OneShot
[the Mamoswines ]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Don’t use ‘ for thoughts, it’s too close to the ” for speech and makes it look like the thoughts are being spoken out loud.
[Machops face ]
Always use apostrophes for possessives.
Anyway, this really feels incomplete and not too well put together. The reason that trained pokemon would beat up an audino is clear, but not why other pokemon would ignore them or mistreat them as well.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7774934/1/A_New_Pokemon_Story
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” he said or “Hello!” he said, never “Hello.” He said or “Hello.” he said or “Hello,” He said or “Hello” he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as “Hello.” He grinned, never “Hello,” he grinned or “Hello,” He grinned or “Hello.” he grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” he said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” he said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” he said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” he said, “is it.” If there’s no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like “Hi. This – ” He looked around. “- is it.” And the same punctuation and capitalization applies to thoughts.
“It’s” is short for “it is”. “Its” is the possessive.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7775069/1/Torrential_Rain
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Your story is riddled with errors. Proofread better.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7775122/1/Talking_by_the_Sea
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” he said or “Hello!” he said, never “Hello.” He said or “Hello.” he said or “Hello,” He said or “Hello” he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as “Hello.” He grinned, never “Hello,” he grinned or “Hello,” He grinned or “Hello.” he grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” he said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” he said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” he said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” he said, “is it.” If there’s no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like “Hi. This – ” He looked around. “- is it.” And the same punctuation and capitalization applies to thoughts.
Your” is possessive, as in, your story, “you’re” means “you are”.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7775427/1/pokemon_XD_gale_of_shadows
This is terrible. Look up a basic grammar guide before you post.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7775693/1/Why_does_my_life_have_to_go_wrong_like_this
Capitalize your title properly.
Write out numbers with letters.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
[I know that most girls would pick Chikorita, but I’m not most girls. I hate shopping, I hate makeup or nail polish, I don’t care about getting dirty, I hate dresses or skirts, I hate pink, and I don’t care if my nail breaks. ]
The vast majority of young girls aren’t obsessing about their nails breaking either. Sorry, dear, you’ll have to try harder to be a unique little snowflake than that GASP you don’t like pink!!!
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” he said or “Hello!” he said, never “Hello.” He said or “Hello.” he said or “Hello,” He said or “Hello” he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as “Hello.” He grinned, never “Hello,” he grinned or “Hello,” He grinned or “Hello.” he grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” he said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” he said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” he said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” he said, “is it.” If there’s no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like “Hi. This – ” He looked around. “- is it.” And the same punctuation and capitalization applies to thoughts.
I’ve really come to loathe girls whose only personality traits seem to be defining themselves in opposition to some imaginary femininity. Stop implying all women but you are a monolith of stupid opinions.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7775757/1/Meeting_the_characters
This is terrible. Look up a basic grammar guide before you post.