January Romance Pokeauthors, Week 1

As Farla said, I covered romance fic in January. It’s romance fic, so like 99% of my reviews were just standard grammar paragraphs and I won’t bother posting them. Despite this, I managed to get quite a variety of responses!


Firstly, the revenge reviews:

St Elmo’s Fire,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: Bartimaeus
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1

From: Guest
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:Who the f*** do you think you are? Your advice is a load of s*** you don’t know hat you’re talking about and you are an idiot. The stuff you put in about dialogue totally contradicts itself and makes you look dumb. What you are doing is bullying. I’ve reported you.

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Also got a troll for the very first review on my new fic!

St Elmo’s Fire,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: Blood is Thicker than Water
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1

From: Guest
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:Who is thicker than you? You’re a retarded a***.

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St Elmo’s Fire,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: Blood is Thicker than Water
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1

From: Guest
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:Little word of advice for you and Farla. Try to enjoy more what you read rather than focusing on accentuating every fault, minor or major, that you find on your readings. It’s not so much the advice you want to give, it’s the way you phrase it what ticks people off. You call it “sugarcoating”, I’d call it not being a self-righteous, know-it-all j***.

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St Elmo’s Fire,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: Blood is Thicker than Water
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1

From: Guest
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:shut up farla 2.0. nobody here wants your moronic grammar advice. you might as well get punched by a gorilla for being such an annoying grammar nazi.

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St Elmo’s Fire,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: Blood is Thicker than Water
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1

From: Guest
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:you are that stuck up farla’s slave. i want to spank your butt until you scream in pain

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Why aren’t people this creative with their insults in PMs?

St Elmo’s Fire,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: Blood is Thicker than Water
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1

From: Blah (Guest)
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Blah:Well witten or not, it’s people like you. Who take the fun out of everything, I get it. Your try to give them advice, but the way you set it out. Not to mention, you always go for Fic’s that have only just started out. Maybe, try reviewing to people who are also well written, so people don’t think your nothing, but a sad person. Who has no life and waits for a new story to publish. Even stories that are well written and only forgot to capitalise Pokemon names, when needed to. You people suck and you have no humanity. Write a nice review, for a change, jack a**.

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Ooh, my first “I hate you but I still have to admit this is good”! I’m finally on Farla’s level! :D

re: Your review to A Dance Of History
Jan 3LunarAbsol
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12305551/Okay, thanks!
I’ll make sure to remember that! ^-^

Reply
Jan 3hilzanne
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12305231/To quote Hau, “Boy, you’re a ray of sunshine, huh?” If you have nothing positive to say, go somewhere else.

Thanks for the advice…
Jan 4SpicyCocoa
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12306301/It makes sense for it to be that way, but by principle, I’m used to capitalizing Pokemon species names because it looks more appropriate that way (and I believe they do it officially as well so blame Nintendo and affiliated co. I guess).
And as I’ve mentioned, I’m not here for advice or tips on how to improve my writing; I don’t care about my skill level or being the best. I’m only here to provide content that is literate enough for people to get off to. I appreciate all of the advice and will hold onto it in any case of possibly writing for a more serious matter, but for the time being, anything I post here is mostly for fun and entertainment than proper grammar. I’m sorry if my mistakes irritate or annoy you, I’m far from perfect and never was great with English classes anyway, haha..

Word or Advice
Jan 3princeofsparrows
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12304681/Umm…I appreciate the advice but…can I just write what I want? I title chapters because that’s what I like to do. [Life at S.O.] What the acronym means is in the chapter title. You capitalize a Pokemon’s name because it’s their name. Ash didn’t nickname his Pikachu “Pikachu” it’s the name of the entire species. And a name is a proper noun. Your argument that my story is absurd because not all Pokemon have opposable thumbs is ridiculous. In the show, “The Powerpuff Girls”, they made the girls use chopsticks in one episode even though they have no fingers. No one sent the creators of that show a letter saying all of it’s flaws.
Once again, I appreciate the advice, but I would appreciate it more if you had just read my story and left me be. Your reply was not really necessary. Thank you and have a nice night :)

Jan 4[You capitalize a Pokemon’s name because it’s their name. Ash didn’t nickname his Pikachu “Pikachu” it’s the name of the entire species.]

https://www.fanfiction.net/topic/11834/55376155/1/Capitalization-Thread

Really? You’ve a Human? Oh wait no species names aren’t capitalized, family and genus are and even then only when it’s part of the official scientific name, which is why we also don’t capitalize ape or monkey or canine.

To quote Wikipedia, “Deer (singular and plural) are the ruminant mammals forming the family Cervidae. Species in the family include white-tailed deer, mule deer such as black-tailed deer, elk, moose, red deer, reindeer (caribou), fallow deer, roe deer, pudú and chital. Male deer of all species (except the Chinese water deer) and female reindeer grow and shed new antlers each year. In this they differ from permanently horned animals such as antelope, which are in the same order as deer and may bear a superficial resemblance.”

Note which words are capitalized and which aren’t.

Should you click on white-tailed deer, it says, “The white-tailed deer (Odocoileus virginianus),” the same format as always. That’s also why we’re H. sapiens – Homo is the genus, sapiens the species. And note this capitalization applies only to the official Latin name, as it is rightly capitalized Hominidae but we do not say Hominids to refer to members of the family. That’s why deer can be a term for multiple species, but it’s not capitalized until you refer to them as Cervidae.

[In the show, “The Powerpuff Girls”, they made the girls use chopsticks in one episode even though they have no fingers. No one sent the creators of that show a letter saying all of it’s flaws.]

I’m pretty sure a lot of people did, actually. I’m not even in that fandom and I’ve seen posts about it.

But the thing is, the Powerpuff Girls presumably do have fingers, they’re just drawn in a simplified visual style that does not show the fingers. The same thing happens to plenty of other cartoon characters. Or hey, maybe they have telekinesis, they’re magic, that’s reasonable. But there are pokemon that are quadrupeds. They have no arms. How do they write?

Jan 4Can’t you just enjoy a story before you analyze it? Or maybe you can’t enjoy it because of what’s “absurd”. Why even read it if every little detail bothers you. I capitalized a Pokemon’s name. Big deal. A lot of people do it. You want to take my story down because you don’t like how I write? Or do you want me change everything I already typed so that you, the only person who has had yet to complain to me about anything, can enjoy my story? I know you can’t please everyone so if you can’t look passed everything you just told me about and enjoy the plot then I’m afraid we’re done here.
Thanks!
Jan 4BronZeAden
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12306718/Seriously, thanks for my first review ever. I’m going to take every word to heart in my work starting now!

re: Your review to Petalburg Flower (Brendan x Phoebe)
Jan 4TicciWorkQueenJeanne
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12306628/I don’t really see a problem. I’ve read tons of stories formatted in this way and it makes me feel way more comfortable writing like this. But thanks for the advice, anyway.

re: Your review to Pokemon Oneshots
Jan 4TicciWorkQueenJeanne
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12306737/After I publish the first oneshot, the rules chapter will be deleted. (If I can figure out how to work this thing, heh heh.) I’m a newbie here and have mostly been on Wattpad which is much more chill there, so thanks anyway. There are a ton of stories like these if you just search up Pokemon Oneshots that were never updated past the rules chapter.

Review
Jan 4MKLemonsMango
I’m sending this to personally thank you for your review. I can now use dialogue correctly, and edit my story to make it better. Also, I’d like to say each writer writes differently, but I would like to look as professional as possible. Thank you for your aid in my cancerous fanfiction career!Sincerely, Ya Boi Guzma Cheese
re: Your review to May’s New Beginning
Jan 5Shaddy419
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12308362/Thank you! Yeah I definitely need to do more work editing, but it’ll improve as this is my first time actually trying to write one of these. I’ll get to work on the dropdown thing once I get better used to this site. I’ll get to work on fixing the other thing also. I truly appreciate the constructive criticism. It’ll help me become a better writer.

re: Your review to Stars in the Sea
Jan 5DBT the mediocre
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12307768/Hi! Thanks for reviewing my fic, Stars in the Sea, with that page of reference. Admittedly, I got confused on the use of Pokemon as in the franchise or pokemon as a creature within a story. But it’s a lot clearer now, and I edited the fic, so thank you for making it more grammatically correct!

vogelimkafig120
https://www.fanfiction.net/u/6554790/

Reply link: https://www.fanfiction.net/pm2/post.php?rid=202934134#new
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Subject: re: Your review to Progress

A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12308516/

Hello! Thank you for taking the time to give me constructive criticism. While I do agree in regards to sentence structuring, I would like to dispute your points pertaining to Lillie and and the capitalization of Pokémon and the names of said Pokémon.

The reason why I had Lillie forgive Mohn is because of what happened in the game. When the player becomes the Champion of Alola, Lillie goes up to them and explains that her mother was recovering. She then tells the player that she gave Lusamine a scolding but forgave her in the end. Even I couldn’t believe it at first because of how much emotional pain Lusamine has caused to Lillie and Gladion. In a sense, Nihilego’s influence on Lusamine was the reason why she went completely insane, maybe that’s why Lillie forgave her so easily, especially since they went to Kanto in order to rid of its neurotoxins from her system. To me, I can guarantee that Lillie would do the same to Mohn, I just had it where Gladion is distant from him. Speaking of which, I’m planning to write about it soon.

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re: Your review to Stars in the Sea
Jan 6LunarAbsol
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12307768/I do think that Pokémon should be capitalized. F.e. if you watch the anime in sub, you should notice that “Pokémon” as well as their own names, like Charizard, Meowstic etc. are capitalized as well.

Jan 6https://www.fanfiction.net/topic/11834/55376155/1/Capitalization-Thread
re: Your review to Please, don’t go
Jan 6GreyWolfSyndicate
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12309189/I appreciate it, really! I’ve always kind of struggled with dialogue, and I’ve never had a betareader to really go through and correct my writings, so it is a little difficult as for dialogue. I feel the same about the height too, I just didn’t really know how to change it without it feeling like it was missing something, so I just left it. If you or anyone you may know, however, are capable of betareading, I would greatly appreciate a nod to either one of them. My strength is finding ways to create twists and plots and interest in a story, but unfortunately not in writing them perfectly.

re: Your review to Sunshine in the Winter: A Leafeon x Glaceon Fanfic
Jan 6HyperNovaFox
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12309976/I completely understand what you are saying, unfortunately, chapter 2 has already been written so I’ll try to improve in chapter 3. Thanks for the review!

re: Your review to Waiting for You
Jan 6AquilaTempestas
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12310708/Though I appreciate your feedback, I follow the Poke Grammar Rules Bulbapedia uses which is also known as the German method (Germans capitalize their nouns).You can take your lectures elsewhere, but thanks for trying anyway. Good day to you. Have a nice day :D~Aquila

Jan 6Except the story is in English, not German, so it has to follow English rules. You also failed to capitalize every single noun, not just ones related to pokemon, so no, you aren’t even doing that right.

Jan 6I honestly think you’re a fantastic person, St Elmo’s. You seem like a lovely intelligent person to be friends with, and I’m so honored to have you share your advice with me.

Please continue your crusade into the Pokemon fandom by sharing your wise words of wisdom with the grammatically clueless authors. Keep fighting the good fight! Share those words of wisdom :) God bless you, and have a happy 2017 (and keep fixing up those grammar mistakes!)

re: Your review to The Sinnoh Crisis
Jan 7Subject 666
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12311822/Thanks for your review! I’ll make the necessary changes when I get home later.

On your reviews
Jan 7TicciWorkQueenJeanne
Hello! I don’t mean to be rude at all, but I’ve seen a problem with your reviews. :D You tell people not to capitalize Pokemon’s names, but that is wrong. Anime subtitles capitalize wild Pokemon’s names and in the Pokedex entries. Pokemon Cards do the same, as do the games. You capitalize a Pokemon’z name always. I may be new to , but I’ve been watching Pokemo9n for five years and writing for three of them so… Yeah. You do. Literally every popular fanfiction does as well.
Jan 7https://www.fanfiction.net/topic/11834/55376155/1/Capitalization-Thread
Jan 7Ah yes a thread of idiots is going to convince me to stop when actual canon evidence shows you need to capitalize a Pokemon’s name, it’s just canon that you do.

Jan 7“No matter how far away things are, a Pilot’s eyes can see them!” The games do not model correct capitalization in other respects either. Go look up the actual grammar rules for capitalizing “professor”. Notice how the games spit upon that. Then go look at how the games started off writing it PIKACHU and POTION, so no, the games don’t even consistently do it your way.The games also gave us the hideous “Legendary Dragon-type Pokemon” construction, either because treating all these words as trademarks in-universe means they can’t use plural forms so “Legendary Dragons” was out, or because they simply hate decent writing just that much.

Jan 7“Decent writing” Lol the games writing are just fine. I write it how they write it. Stop acting high and mighty like you can control literally everyone in the fandom.

Fox McCloude
https://www.fanfiction.net/u/609541/

Reply link: https://www.fanfiction.net/pm2/post.php?rid=203079413#new
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Subject: Could you cut me some slack?

A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12312193/

You know, I first wrote this story in Spanish, and it’s not easy for me having to switch between formats when I make a translation. Thing is, I’ve written this way for years, and it’s the first time someone complains on me not using “the correct format”. Force of habit, I don’t like breaking up sentences halfway through, either.

Out of curiosity, did you even enjoy the story itself? I get the feeling that might not be the case.

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Fox McCloude
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What do you know, one look at your profile, and turns out I was right. You know, you’d make a pretty good movie critic, should you choose that as your personal career. Perfect for people who focus so much on the negative that they don’t take their time to actually enjoy something.

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I lost my responses for this one. I believe I told them to block me if they didn’t want my reviews.

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Fox McCloude
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As a personal rule of mine, if I read something I don’t enjoy because I found it by chance, I don’t comment on it. I’d only do so if the person who made it directly asked me to read it and give my opinion.

Among other things, what’s the point in enforcing these “rules”? Who set them up, anyway? Does it really matter that much? I’m not seeking to become a professional writer, I just do this for fun and to meet new friends.

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I said that’s a valid choice but I like to point out errors when I see them.

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Fox McCloude
https://www.fanfiction.net/u/609541/

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Are you aware that people are more likely to take offense, not so much at what you say, but rather, at HOW you say it? You’re lucky that you caught me on a good day, otherwise, I might have lashed out at you. If I don’t know someone, I’d rather not to take any risks in potentially pissing off a person and gaining an enemy for a trivial reason. I’d ask you why do you feel you have to do this, but I get the feeling I won’t like your answer. Good luck with your little crusade.

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And blocked.

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ValarPrime98
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Subject: Stop This Instantly!

Hi there. I will do my best to follow the guidelines that you have sent me, but frankly, I am getting rather annoyed by your rather unnecessary nitpicking. You have made no mention whatsoever of what exactly is wrong with the story, and yet instead send that list to me AGAIN?! WTH?!
I do not appreciate this sort of feedback from you. If you do this, I will see to it personally that you are blocked from sending reviews. I’m dead serious.

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I laughed and said people already tried that with Farla so good luck, then told them to block me.

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