Let’s start off the New Year with a record of how things are

Which is to say, let’s collect the author responses so far before setting off into poketerritory.

re: Your review to So Bad It’s Good
Nov 23, 2013DormA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9737668/

Really? Did you even read it? If you did, why is it the usual bad?

re: your review of “Alternian Nights – Romancing the Sky”
Nov 24, 2013Elizabeth CulmerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9405122/

Thank you! Sollux is an interesting character to write, precisely because of that seesaw — it’s very alien to my own temperament, you see. It was fun to run that up against Aradia’s determined cheerfulness, and to give him that moment of peace.

–Liz

re: your review of “Alternian Nights – Scourge of the Sea”
Nov 24, 2013Elizabeth CulmerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9405122/

Thanks! I love Vriska, Terezi, and their complicated clusterfuck of a friendship — it was fun to show them in a more lighthearted, less vicious moment (though of course their darker sides are still there in background implications).

–Liz

re: your review of “Alternian Nights – Sing a Song of Sixpence”
Nov 24, 2013Elizabeth CulmerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9405122/

Thank you! Bittersweet is one of my favorite emotions in fiction — present fluff enriched by past or future pain — and Vriska and Terezi are a gift from that perspective. (Actually, every Homestuck character is.)

–Liz

re: your review of “Alternian Nights – In a Purple Wood”
Nov 24, 2013Elizabeth CulmerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9405122/

Thank you! I wish this ficlet was longer too, but I had no idea what to do after that initial meeting. I mean, I know what I THINK happened, which is that Nepeta helped Terezi find her way home, and then spent the day in Terezi’s hive, and at some point they discovered that Nepeta’s moirail and Terezi’s best friend were the terrible neighbors they had heard so much about secondhand (which cracked them up for at least ten minutes straight), and then they discovered they were both into roleplaying, and eventually Pounce came looking for Nepeta and she had to go home… but that’s a series of incidents rather than a plot, and there was no particular theme or emotional through-line to tie it all together. So I quit while I had a good last line. +wry+

Cheers,
Liz

You’re review on The Kingdoms of Derse and Prospite
Nov 24, 2013abbykaddabbyA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/8955528/

I am sorry if my way of portraying these characters is dissatisfying to you, but as the author I have lease to do so. This is in no way an attack about your review, but if you didn’t like it, then why say anything further about it and waste your time? I am merely mortal and as everyone else does, I make mistakes. Furthermore, I would appreciate it if you would message me with you unhappiness rather than post it on my story. I repeat, this is not an attack. I am simply stating my dissatisfaction with your dissatisfaction.
~Abbykaddabby.

Replying about the review!
Nov 24, 2013regina-nigraA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9744748/

Thank you for the review! I know I didn’t plan out the battle correctly, and probably screwed it up more than I should have. Couldn’t really find more than 1-2 pesterlogs on it, so I sort of went of the wiki and tried to make it decent. The story was made choppily in all honesty, but I thought it made sense. Didn’t really see the obvious plotholes…

re: Your review to The Game
Nov 24, 2013Maeve-JuniperA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9770661/

Concerning the bit about the last paragraph, I have an explanation for that. The trolls are not the only ones to have Scratched their sessions, so this can be applied to all of them. The Scratch is, as you said, meant to give players a better chance of completing their session, but that doesn’t make them into the ‘perfect race’ as they would still have flaws, whether minor or major. Many people have won their session without, in relation to this story, being dubbed the ‘perfect race’. The trolls may have been improved for the game, but they were influenced by Doc Scratch, and even if they weren’t, the point of the Scratch is so help them win the session, not to achieve the game’s final goal. So to fully understand it would be best to view the sessions and the entirety of the game differently, the game being the bigger picture, while victories within individual sessions only contribute to the cause until the goal is met.

I’d also like to thank you for such in-depth constructive criticism, it definitely gave me a different perspective on my story :D I honestly didn’t realize how many semicolons I used until you pointed it out. I think I might be addicted to them lol. I’m also very appreciative that you pointed out my grammatical error, I really wanted to make this a clean story so that really helped me out.

Lastly, you were completely correct on the message of the story, and I’m really sorry that it may have pulled you away from the story’s intent or seemed confusing. I’m not quite sure how to improve my story on your point about how it can be easily misinterpreted, since there are so many different options I could take. I could get rid of some of his extremely Scratch-ish dialogue, or I could put it as a note at the top… but I would really like you hear any suggestions that you may have.

umm
Nov 25, 2013XxtsunamidevilxXA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9758777/

is there a reason you are pointing out my flaws like i’m trying to be perfect.
life is getting a little tough knowing this…i’m not sure if you’re aware….
i kinda just enjoy getting things out my head, i’m not trying to aim for anything because i know i’m a dumb failure.

but thanks for the review i guess? if it makes you happy to know you’ve upset me a little then yeah.
well done on you i guess.

again
Nov 25, 2013XxtsunamidevilxXA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9806246/

you are making giving me orders i presume.
i dont see why you are doing this, are you an internet troll? jee is it your
job to make people unhappy?

just so you know: i’m not a person that has any potential.
you’ve probably heard this blabbering shit from a lot of teens but yeah, i’ve tried to end my life.
there is no purpose to it, so why am i alive? i question this, you might too, but for some reason
nothing will end me, it hurts because i know i’m a bad person and everyone around me agrees.

again, i’m nothing perfect, so anything you’ve written in this message
on the account of how stupid and imperfect i am i guess i agree.

k
Nov 20, 2013AphroditesRageA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/8793471/

now im not saying im the greatest writer out there but i already know there are many mistakes in my chapters, but you are really rude,,,,
i cant even finish this whole thing because im not going to consider this as any “help” or whatever you were trying to do.
i know nothings clean about my story
“Your grasp of grammar is atrocious. ” ohh wow you used a big word, many claps, such applaud.
im not writing this for you. i writing this for my friend.
if you think its so idiotic then why did you bother even reading it???
just saying.
you could have thought it was so ridiculous you could have stopped.
im not butt hurt about you thinking my story sucks, its not like anyone’s work is perfect.
thanks again for reading my shitty work though.

re: Your review to The Thief of Prospit
Nov 26, 2013MitspeilerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9456704/

I was still working out the mechanics back then but later retconned it into having all the money be platinum, and the idyllic description is supposed to be ironic compared to actual socio-economic conditions, like more realistic wealthy nations. Thank you for your discerning eye however.

Response to review
Nov 27, 2013MitspeilerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9456704/

Oy vey, you’re reviewing my notes too? Lol
This is the first I’m hearing that His Honorable Tyranny wasn’t a troll.
And you’re right on the money about Prospit not being all sunshine and rainbows. You may remember the description mentions being based on a movie? In some ways I found myself written into a corner with the plot I was borrowing but it all seemed very integral to the overall atmosphere and charm of the piece; at times I had to pick whether to do Homestuck or do Thief of Bagdad. Hence the reason that Jade is shown her potential suitors and then giver a prophecy about the rose tree, and the monster in the pit. In that movie, Bagdad is held up as an ideal city despite all of the bad things that happen in it; if it were really ideal, there wouldn’t be thieves, now would there? But it is certainly ideal (and incredibly beautiful) compared to the Mongol Empire (Derse in this fic). If you think I sound pissy I don’t mean to; this is my favorite story I’ve written and I’m glad to get the opportunity to discuss it with someone.

re: Your review to The Thief of Prospit
Nov 27, 2013MitspeilerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9456704/

Hmm, fewer notes here; you either got used to it or the fact that I started spending more time writing the chapters after the second one is apparent in the writing itself. This is probably my favorite one after the second and possibly the conclusion. Upon reflection, all the rainbow sand probably got a little annoying after a while (it will recur a lot) though everyone seems to love the interaction between who I have dubbed The Super Derse Bros. You may have noticed that everyone still has their classes from canon, although Kanaya and Aranea are now priestesses. This was…I can swear I had something to say about that *shrugs*

re: Your review to The Thief of Prospit
Nov 27, 2013MitspeilerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9456704/

Well in the movie our protagonist just wishes for an army; I have the characters work for it a bit more.

re: Your review to The Thief of Prospit
Nov 27, 2013MitspeilerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9456704/

What sounds pretty?

responce
Nov 27, 2013MitspeilerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9456704/

Hmm, never thought of it that way before. My angels are totally evil of course.

Response to review
Nov 27, 2013MitspeilerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9456704/

I was going to argue that the fight with the angels earlier was necessary to Karkat and Vriska’s relationship development but you’re right; it could have just been some other monster(s) to let the angels keep their mystery while also making the desert seem a bit more populated. I could have added a bit more to this chapter to establish the threat of the angels without fighting them earlier. Of all your criticisms so far I think this is the one I might take most to heart (and once again I do appreciate your taking the time to do this).

the penultimate reply
Nov 29, 2013MitspeilerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9456704/

We can finally discuss canon! Vriska’s luck is a finite resource and without her god-tier powers, she cannot replenish that resource, so yes, they won’t work right. I completely and utterly failed to explain that in-story *bows deeply*
I thought you would actually hate this chapter because I am full of myself and tend to think that the evidence I leave for twists is entirely too subtle, but thank you!
Partly I liked the poetic symmetry of having Vriska start off as the lowest of the low and end the story as one of the strongest beings in the setting. However, for an in-universe explanation, well we get into Kanaya’s characterization in the sequel. Suffice it to say that it did have something to do with Vriska.

the penultimate reply: revision
Nov 29, 2013MitspeilerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9456704/

Sorry, that last line should have said ‘to do with being attracted to Vriska’ but I became distracted while I was writing.

reply
Nov 29, 2013MitspeilerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9456704/

Ah thank you for sticking with it, though now I’ve kipped over to the blog and seen that you probably would have kept up with it anyway, so I suppose thank you for mostly enjoying it. Your assessment I think is fair, and most of the points where you’d be wrong were really just caused by my not explaining a thing properly. Once again I’ll refer to Brandon Sanderson; in the Mistborn trilogy we see that introducing modern democratic ideals to people that have never interacted with them before would have largely negative consequences, so the king ends up having to act much more sternly than he would like. I would say that my major problem was not taking the time to develop the thing enough; I’d decided I was taking too long to finish this project (which I said many times was supposed to be over with quickly) and determined to finish it before November with the result that some chapters were finished in a day just for the sake of getting to the next one. Also I completely went off the rails of the movie about three fourths of the way into it. AR’s character assassination: I thought he was minor enough for me to get away with it (though the one comment do far on your review of this story apparently took issue with it). The thing I realize now that I completely failed to do was make clear that Rose was the cause of the plague and that Kanaya had only just arrived. I should have done something akin to what you said and had the battle over with more quickly, perhaps even anti-climactically, and had the really climax be a confrontation with Kanaya some time later. As for being disproportionately bloody, well so’s the source material (by which I mean Homestuck)
As for Eridan and Calliope, which I’d forgotten to comment on; I feel sort of morally obligated not to ship him with anyone that actually met him in canon, and really did hate him for quite a while.
So in conclusion, the story has faults and I acknowledge them, you pointed out several more and I acknowledge many of those too, attributing the others to either difference of opinion or some other flaw (i.e. my lack of planning/development) just to be contrary. Once again, thank you for taking the time to read and enjoy. A question; do you read first and then review or do so as you go along? The first way seems to me to be the most accurate so you don’t go off on anything that’s explained a few paragraphs later, but would drag on forever in my opinion. Ah well, thank you one last time!

reply again
Nov 29, 2013MitspeilerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9456704/

I must say that once again I wrote myself into a corner with the battle, blah blah you know my excuses by now, that is, if you’re reading my responses; I assume you are because of what your profile says. for all I know you are a professional editor ‘slumming it’ with fanfiction (the enclosure talons are here to indicate that I respect fanfiction as an artform; what’s your opinion?) but if not I ecnourage you to pursue that path, although the fact you’ve been on here since 2001 tells me that you’re older than I am. Now I am curious by what you meant about Dave, Equius and Eridan’s view of things? You just pointed it out without opining whether you thought it was good or bad or some manner of interesting and that slightly distresses me (but only slightly).
Oh I just remembered something about a comment on an earlier chapter but I can’t remember…
I do know that I fixed a lot of typos but not for the ff(dot)net version because I kept putting off dealing with the interface until I forgot about them. Ye gods I may even have said it already in that one really long note…bluh.
I am interested in hearing, what with my discussion of the arcs, what you think the strongest story arc is?

Also
Nov 29, 2013MitspeilerI greatly admire your dedication to reviewing things and that is not sarcastic in the least. You are correct, no one reviews anymore (it is so infrequent that I started dating one of the few people who did) and a good stern talking to is what some people need to improve, though I may just be biased since I came out favorably.

Response to three reviews
Nov 29, 2013MitspeilerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9456704/

Happy American Thanksgiving! I say this because most of the people who read my fanfiction are not actually from the US, at least not the ones that I interact with regularly. Came back from dinner to three of your reviews, so I shall respond to all three of them. I’m glad; I was afraid you’d lost interest.
It’s been a while so I can’t quite be sure of exactly what I was thinking when I wrote some of these chapters but I’m sure I had implied that 1) there is an upper limit to the characters’ powers that is not sufficient to retake the city themselves, and 2) people are stronger in the timeframe immediately after manifesting their powers, especially if they got those powers by ascending, which is to say through a near-death experience. And I’m not reading along with you so I might be wrong and once again it has been a long time, but I’m sure the Regent had a butler, not a guard. This is however meaningless because whether I actually implied it or simply meant to imply it they ended up being too strong anyway and I shamelessly included another powerful character on the Dersite side at the eleventh hour.
It’s funny you mention the flaws in the Karkat/Vriska arc because most people seem to think that that one was the strongest and the others could have been done away with, whereas you seem to prefer the Derse Bros (not that they were ever unpopular).
John needs supporters because otherwise he’d just be a dictator and I needed to establish that the people of Prospit would be indifferent to his return, though I concede that on that last point I could definitely have expanded. Also, while the primary inspiration for this movie was The Thief of Bagdad I actually took many plot points and arcs from other films from the golden age, one of which is Fritz Lang’s Metropolis which involves a princely character being cast down and working in a factory under hellish conditions and becoming involved in a revolution. It’s also why I included the speech from a Charlie Chapalin movie. I’m a bit chagrined that the term ‘dictator’ is too much of an anachronism for a story with armored knights, magic and guns with multiple rounds inhabiting the same setting. You are making the classic mistake of assuming that a fantasy setting is completely identical to the real-world time-period it most resembles, which is becoming increasingly untrue in modern writing. You should read the Alloy of Law by Brandon Sanderson; not only do I highly recommend it but it also serves my point by being a high-magic world with Old West technology, medieval-esque society organized around noble houses, and modern psychology and sociology. It also strikes me as a bit nit-picky that you wonder where the purple bloods are keeping their money. Firstly, they are pillagers and they love treasure (in-universe that is let’s not discuss canon yet) and secondly Dave notes a very large pile of Dersite currency right out in the open when he faces Gamzee.
As to why it was Feferi: well just because it would come across as more shocking to have her be stab-happy and also because I had just done an adaptation of the Little Mermaid with Meenah as the mermaid and I felt I would be retreading old ground, even if some of the readers for this never read that one it just didn’t feel correct in my head.
Oh goodness, rereading that I seem a bit rude; once again I am simply excited to have someone to discuss this story with.

yeah
Nov 15, 2013ApocalypseGripyou’re right. you’re really right about everything. i don’t know, i just kinda figured, well she has had a pretty long life? so maybe some things grew on her? it was more as a teasing kind of thing. but you’re right, i actually kind of hate that story. tbh, i really shouldn’t be writing at all.

re: Your review to Of Spades Of Hearts
Dec 1, 2013Black-Rock-Shooter-XA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9554964/

Thank you for the criticism! :)
I’ll be sure to look out for that kind of stuff for later stories (plus correcting this one a bit)
…Anything I didn’t screw up on?

While going to their profile to see what story we were talking about here, I found amusement on their profile instead of the usual Jesus-got-someone-else-raped-yay story.

 
2) Would #1 and #4 ever get in a fight?
 
No. Both Arceus and Mewtwo are very level-headed… at least… mostly…
Well, Mewtwo is cool, but… Arceus… don’t EVER betray him -_-

Which is hilarious because it seems like the answer both of them would give even though they’d be getting into a fight if they ever came within a hundred yards of each other.

About that review from long ago.
Dec 2, 2013Spyromaster64I don’t even remember back that far really, but I typed in my own username into Google just for the hell of it and came across your LiveJournal profile with an article titled “Authors, Part 4”.
I’d just like to say, I really enjoyed reading the hilarious reactions from the writers of the stories you’d reviewed – even when I saw my own. No joke.
I wasn’t the most socially… well, I guess you could call it sane back then. I wrote that I was 17 on my profile, but really the reviews on my stories were going to an 11 year-old who just ticked the checkbox that said “I am 13” upon signing up.
I’m 15 now, and looking back on it, I can’t help but laugh at myself. I don’t even recall what the review said, but I obviously overreacted.
So, here I am to say thanks for the review – which is what I should have said long ago anyway.
And I really like your LiveJournal. Keep it up.

With regards,
Spyromaster64, aka. Arkus Eon

My Christmas gift from the internet! From now on let’s just assume everyone who seems crazy, childish or surprisingly undereducated is really eleven and not a sign there are insane childish adults who never learned to spell.

re: Your review to KankrixDebate Reader- That’s debatable
Dec 2, 2013A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9131244/Thank you for the constructive criticism. I’ve never been very good with grammar, however in reader inserts [y/n] is generally accepted as a way to say “your name” and so I don’t think I’ll be changing that. Otherwise, I shall try to improve, and thank you for reading!

re: Your review to Communism
Dec 3, 2013MourningInMistA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9228547/

Thank you for a lot of the points you brought up. I know I’m not that good of a writer but it helps to have people helping me with this sort of thing. A lot of the ideas you brought up are great. I just wanted to make a couple of things clear.

“Well, for starters, communism already has a meaning and it’s not walling people into communities.”

I know. I was referencing the fact that is a big problem affecting how people live but also referencing the fact that it is a JohnKat ship name.

“Also, by this point there’s really nothing to do with Homestuck.” its more of an AU but I still kind of get it

“[BR/N: besides a few editing you need to do i think you are ready to proceed into writing this next chapter Ms Anna, and i will help thee anywat byyyyyyye 3 ]”

Yeah that was my beta reader I didn’t realize until now that I forgot to remove that before posting it.

I’m bringing this chapter to edit a lot and fix a lot of mistakes before I continue writing the second one (I just started writing it recently I have some problems with procrastination but I’ve been better).

 

re: Your review to Scarred
Dec 6, 2013solluxlover123A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9862404/

Hey! Go easy on me. It’s my first fanfic! Sorry if it’s not up to your standards. I’m just doing what i enjoy doing. maybe you could give me ideas on how to make it better?

Reviews
Dec 12, 2013Dear Farla,First of all, I would like to thank you for taking the time to closely read my story and review it. Secondly, I know my story has a lot of errors. I’m a busy high school student so I don’t have that much time to edit (if I have any at all). It seems that your opinion on the matter is that fanfiction must be perfectly proofread (I’m sorry if I got the wrong impression or offended you), but I feel that it is more important to write and get the story out there with imperfections than to never post any of my stories at all. Which is what would end up happening. This was just a little story idea I got that I wanted to write for myself. At the beginning, I knew there were some (many) conflicting things in the first chapter, but I just wanted to get it out there. I’m sorry you don’t agree with some of my characterizing and headcanons, but most of it was garnered from roleplaying. The British and Southern Belle accident was there probably because I forgot to delete it. My apologies if that bothers you. Also, some of my grammatical issues occur because it seems that every year my English teacher teaches grammar different (and sometimes wrongly). I do take full responsibility for the rest of it though. I felt your criticisms were a bit harsh, but thank you for the reviews anyways.

By the way, there is a super important secret that may or may not be used depending on which direction the story goes in.

Good lord has the multiple mediums of fandom backfired on fanfic. Characters based off someone’s yearlong RP session are not canon characters anymore.

re: Your review to The Excess Session
Dec 15, 2013A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/8902315/yooo I wrote this when I was like 13 of course it’s gonna be shitty uwu your fluffy profile picture does not mask your frozen soul.
jk but like seriously no need to flame a thing written by a preteen ouo

re: Your review to A Stabdads Story
Dec 21, 2013lunanoelA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/9704561/

I appreciate all of your reviews and will, in time, rewrite most of the chapters in order to fix the spelling errors and miscalculations, and I thank you for pointing those out. I have not fully read all of your reviews, though I will in time. I will also make sure to point out when a chapter is pinpointed towards a specific character before the chapter begins. Finally, when it comes to having female characters in the background, I will go back into my chapters and see if I can give female roles more importance in the story and in future chapters. I apologize if this makes the Stabdads AU fanfiction take longer to update, but I will do what I can.

Thank you for your reviews and concerns.

And their newest chapter does indeed involve Terezi viewpointing for us! They’ve also added some very, very extensive author notes.

Review for SBARG
Dec 22, 2013Ack! I just noticed that you gave me three wonderful reviews and I didn’t notice until now! I hope that in this PM, I can answer some of your questions. :)”How is she unaware of the other players of her session/able to bounce around the planets of kids not in her session?”

As I said in the summary, this is based on an event that happened in Tumblr. Literally hundreds of people joined the session so it’s hard to keep track who’s there or not. At one time, HIM began blowing some planets, Void and Space players managed to save some planets through pocket dimensions (my character was unaware of this ploy and just assumed that HIM missed those planets, as she was still was able to travel through the gates).

…Eh, probably should have explained between parentheses.

“Speaking of being unaware…it’s pretty unsettling that this fic just says the solution is to start massacring the opposite army and then that’s what they do, as if it’s no bigger deal than mowing down opponents in a regular videogame.”

In the event, one way to “end” the event was to go to the battlefield, help the Prospit army fight against the Dersite and perish, or go to his HIS abandoned planet and input the code to scratch the session. Also, have you actually read Homestuck (I’m sorry if I sound rude)? Derse and Prospit are literally walking pieces of chess fighting each other and SBURB is a videogame.

“Which does, I guess, fit the mention earlier of not caring about the other kid she entered the game apparently died shortly after entering.”

Not hearing any news =/= Dead. The person that I agreed with to cooperate actually stopped contacting me after some events and randomly decided to join another team without telling me anything. I just found out after the big finally.

I decided that I will not continue the story because I tried to join another SBARG session (a 2nd version, if you will) but it was going way too fast and I couldn’t keep up. I keep forgetting to edit this story. XD

It’s funny that you say that she isn’t caring about others, because she became quite attached to the last group she joined (a small army led by Josh). But the timeline did reset and she became anti-social again. So in a way, you’re right.

So thanks again for the reviews and the tips for writing!
Merry Christmas!

So let’s add this to the list of sins RP has to answer for.

I actually responded to like half the people this time…eventually. So let’s say that’s my New Years resolution.

9 Comments

  1. Reyna says:
    If you don’t mind me asking, how do you organize what stories you read during NaReWriMo? I’ve been considering doing one of my own (though definitely not this month) and I’d like to know how to better peruse the archives. Do you search for the oldest stories updated/published for the month or do you choose the most recent?
    1. Farla says:
      I do slightly different things, but generally I start at the back and work my way forward. For the pokebinge, I set the category to display by date published (date updated gets you million-chapter stories.) then go back to find the start of the month and work my way toward the newest stories. October 31st review scare is all stuff categorized as horror posted within the month of October. Homestuck is all fanfic that involves carapaces or carapace-related characters, working from the very start of the category forward.

      If you’re doing a more selective review run, working from the most recent to least has a lot of advantages. By nature, it’s most effective to review something that’s posted recently, since the author’s definitely still around and they aren’t ten chapters in when you’re correcting the underlying flaw in the first chapter, so if you’re selective enough you expect to be able to cover a decent chunk of time, making sure you get the new stuff and then working backward is probably the most useful way of doing it. The reason I go oldest to newest is just it’s easiest to keep track of and ensure I hit everything.

  2. Ember says:
    “your fluffy profile picture does not mask your frozen soul.”

    Stronger than one! Stronger than ten! Stronger than a hundred badfics! o/

    “Also, have you actually read Homestuck (I’m
    sorry if I sound rude)? Derse and Prospit are literally walking pieces
    of chess fighting each other and SBURB is a videogame.”

    DDDDDDDDDD:

    1. Farla says:
      There’s nothing to D: about because it’s just a videogame! Murder is fun!

      Someone really needs to do a fic about a player like this.

      1. Ember says:
        The problem is that disregard for NPCs is so very much the default that self-aware fic about a villainous player would be difficult to write in a way that really distinguishes it from all the fic that isn’t self-aware about the ethical issues. This is the sort of situation where the best thing would probably be a metafic project like Lucki where you use how normalized the problem is to make the readers complicit in the tragedy, but you can’t have a denoument like Lucki’s where reality reasserts itself and actions suddenly have consequences when the only reality that matters in this canon is the Game’s narrative, and it is very much on the side of protagonist-centered morality.
        1. illhousen says:
          POV is everything. You can do a one-shot fic from the point of view of an NPC observing player’s actions. Sure, the NPC doesn’t matter in the grand scheme of things, but that doesn’t mean she doesn’t hape hopes and dreams. The key here is to show how unnatural the usual murderhobo attitude of most PCs is.
          1. Farla says:
            Actually, you know what’s the most unnatural? Murderhobo + escort quests, where the narrative of the story is that you’re supposed to be helping the NPC along because you care about them but the player’s doing it because they want the quest reward and they’ll go right back to corpse looting when they’re done.

            Hm… I think I have an idea.

            1. illhousen says:
              Certainly. It helps that escort missions are universally hated by players because of generally poor AI bordering on suicidal.

              Which in the hypothetical fic can be explained by the situation and personalities of people involved.

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        2. Farla says:
          Well, you could do a lot with just description, including the parts that aren’t there – that exact same fic with the Dersites screaming and cowering as they’re slaughtered, discussion of the blood everywhere and maimed bodies trying to crawl away…that would get something across.

          For a longer fic, having one of the characters do this to the horror of the rest would also work.

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