Mostly rather boring stuff, some better written than others.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12806021/1/On-The-Beach-By-Dusk

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

[His queasing stomach sat uneasy, threatening to make him sick at any moment. ]

You mean “queasy”. You’ve got a lot of minor errors like that. Also, this contains too much redundancy. If his stomach is queasy, then the reader knows it’s uneasy and threatening to make him sick. Each of those things means the other two.

[He drank it down greedily, the cold spring water did wonders for the dehydrated salamander. After a few more scoops of water, his belly was full, and his paws were shaking from what he could only describe as excitement.

Then not. His paws began to burn, lightly at first, but steadily increased in intensity. His eyes lit up in fear, and his jaw pressed down tightly wincing in pain. His paws felt as if they were being jolted with bolts of electricity and held in a roaring fire.]

Also, it really doesn’t make sense that a charmander would be hurt by touching water but die if they don’t drink. Given this is PMD and the charmander is presumably a former human, it’d probably have made more sense for him not to need water but to think he did only to get sick from swallowing it.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12806103/1/Battle-for-the-Throne

This is a reasonably detailed battle description, but it can’t change the fact none of this particularly matters. It’s a foregone conclusion Calem wins and even if you did go with the twist of him losing, well, we know he just trains and comes back, it’s not like there’s any permanent consequences to this.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

[“Your turn, goodra!”]

So, any time you’re using the species as the pokemon’s personal name, it’s capitalized like any other person’s name would be. Also, if Calem’s nicknaming his pokemon you should probably do the same with Diantha’s. It’s awkward when only the protagonist uses nicknames.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12806173/1/Skin-and-Ivory

“Its” is the possessive form. “It’s” means “it is” only.

[“I’m sure Lord N will make a fine king,” Rood said]

If you’re delving into this scene, it’d be good to explain what they were thinking a king and crown meant, in the grand scheme of things. It makes for a cool opening but doesn’t get much context beyond that in the game itself.

[his unconditional love for Pokémon (though he always insisted in calling those creatures his ‘friends’)]

I’m not clear what the point of this aside is – “though” means there’s some contradiction, but however crazy you mean Team Plasma to be, it’s excessive for Rood to be so unhinged as to be tripping over basic thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

It occurs to me now that maybe the king thing was supposed to be another layer of tying N to the dragon myth, but even that just raises new questions about if the idea was actually resonating with the dragons to create a chosen one or about convincing the rank and file members with the pretense he was chosen.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12806217/1/Disguise

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

[It was a pale yellow, faded from age and neglect. ]

This seems too coincidental.

The pokedex entries and the room of pikachu pictures, suggest a lot more intent went into its disguise than already being halfway there to a pikachu costume through blind chance. If you want it to make an attempt at hiding itself before trying to impersonate pikachu, other rags – or general trash, like cardboard boxes – would be a better starting point.

Similarly,

[You figured that maybe if you covered up your face, people wouldn’t be scared of you anymore. They’d play with you and feed you and pet you and love you, just like they did to their other Pokémon.]

[You wanted to warn the creature that it wasn’t safe, that the humans would scream at it and hurt it and chase it away. But the second it ran into one of them, something peculiar happened: they bent down and stroked its head.]

It already knows it’s being treated differently from other pokemon, so why would it think this other pokemon would be mistreated? Why is one particular pikachu a revelation?

[You shifted attention to the human. They had four other Pokémon with them that they gave the same love and attention to. None of them look like you.]

Especially since the particular person it ends up picking treats all of them the same.

People talking about how pikachu is their favorite seems a much more likely path to deciding that’s the best disguise to make. The canon one appears to have gotten the idea pikachu are the most loved based on the fact pikachu are popular in media. If it’d noticed pikachu pictures and kids holding plush pikachu, then the trainer had loudly declared they love pikachu and then gone on a bit about its ears and red cheeks, then that’d explain why it decides to go with that in particular.

The ending lines of this are wonderfully creepy, but the lead up needs work.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12806448/1/Aura-on-Chains

[The fire that once brought warm to the cave he called home was gone.]

Warmth. You’ve got a lot of mistakes like that all through this fic. Proofread and look for a beta reader.

Semicolons should only ever be used when connecting two complete sentences and even then almost never.

[The nidoking may had been strong but in close range combat he was no rival for the terrifying strength of the four-armed pokémon.]

Poison resists fighting, though.

[“What do you think you are doing?” Machop growled. Angry. But not as angry as Riolu.

“It was an accident! What is wrong with you?” Riolu took a paw to his head trying to suppress the throbbing. That was a strong punch Machop landed on him.

This sort of situations are the ones which lead to a fight. And this sort of fights are the ones who finish with only one pokémon standing. ]

You seem to be trying to do a thing about brutal nature, but in nature, animals don’t usually get into fights for no reason. The machop is wasting time and energy attacking him and risking injury or death in the process. Hitting Riolu to get the other guy off of him would make sense, as would attacking him if the food Riolu’s after is something the machop wants to keep for himself. But just getting mad at a stranger who’s apologizing and no longer a threat is a terrible decision as far as long-term survival goes.

Also, when this is your introduction, it’s hard to see anything meaningful about the Red Arena section. We see two pokemon battles in the wild. One looks like it’s going to be to the death and the other only ends because a third party drives off the attackers. In that case, even if the humans are having pokemon fight to the death, they’re not doing anything that wasn’t already going to happen – and they’re caring for the surviving pokemon which might actually make it less deadly overall since it means instead of dying by violence or starvation or sickness they only die by violence. I don’t think that’s what you were going for.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12806707/1/Daybreak-Summer

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

Giving a bunch of humans names that slightly relate to espeon or umbreon nicknames and then having them wander around doing nothing doesn’t make it pokemon fic.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12806780/1/Ballad-of-Strength

[ This is my first time writing something and putting it on the internet, something I am quite subconscious about. ]

Self-conscious. Instead of just worrying about it like it’s out of your hands, try checking things you’re not sure of so you can know you did it correctly.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12806910/1/Pokemon-Champions-Tournament

Look, you really, really shouldn’t ask for characters. It might seem like it’s harder to think up characters than have someone else do it for you, but it’s actually far more work to try to figure out how to write a random batch of personalities and backstories, then figure out how you can make them fit into your story and get along with each other. If you make up characters based on what you need for your story, it’s not only a much better story for it, it’s easier to do. Almost all SYOC stories end up never updating, those that do often die after a chapter or two, and even the ones that continue a bit longer are plagued by meandering non-plots and characters who don’t seem to have any point to their scenes

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12807177/1/Finder-of-Arceus

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12807252/1/Parasect-s-Pizza

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

You similarly shouldn’t be bolding periodic words.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12807348/1/A-Bitter-Medicine-of-Strategy

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

“Its” is the possessive form. “It’s” means “it is” only.

If you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” You don’t need to use colons every time.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12807482/1/Advanced-Alternative

Semicolons should only ever be used when connecting two complete sentences and even then almost never.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12807487/1/A-Journey-of-her-Own

There are just shy of ten thousand stories just on this site in this category with “pokemon” in their title. “New” features in almost two thousand. There are over six hundred “chronicles”, more if you include misspellings, even more with “begins” and “beginning”, and even more “Character Name”‘s whatever. There are a thousand with “legend”. There are two thousand with “journey”, seventeen hundred with “story”, three hundred fifty with “quest”, and almost three thousand with “adventure”. The different region names appear another thousand or two times. “Saga”, “region” and “champion” come in around a few hundred. In sum, you should try to choose an original title that has to do with your story in particular, not something that indicates it’s yet another story about a pokemon trainer.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

[Ryhorn]

Rhyhorn. Check the spelling of pokemon species.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

“Its” is the possessive form. “It’s” means “it is” only.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12807533/1/Pmd-Red-Rescue-Team-Adventures-of-Gabi-and-Kaitlin

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

It’s “okay”, four letters.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12807559/1/The-Pikachu-House

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

[On his Pokefinder he found two pictures that he didn’t remember taking]

This is where it gets really, really forced. You’re trying to do the spooky picture thing but for some reason you missed that spooky pictures are supposed to be taken by someone. Why not just say he took the picture?

What’s added by turning to the reader and saying, “Actually, I’m just copying a standard checklist with no interest in bothering to make any of the pieces connect!”?

[The second picture was almost the same, except the Pikachu had been replaced with Mimikyu, and where the little girl had once been, sat a Zorua.]

Also, you aren’t even using the right checklist. This isn’t a ghost story, where the reveal is that something that isn’t supposed to be real was there. It’s a fairy story, where one creature impersonates another, and it might be surprising to realize that they’re so good at putting on an act but you’re not threatened by the knowledge they exist at all.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12807921/1/A-Resolution

[An age old chaotic war between science and traditions involving the Devon Corporation versus the Draconid people. The conflict between technology and the Lorekeeper’s prophecy were fought to decide which was the better choice in destroying the meteorite in order to save the world. It didn’t matter despite any circumstances or excuses as the world would end, and a pointless civil war between two groups with different beliefs shouldn’t take place. It was a waste of time, effort and energy.]

Not really sure where you got the idea this is an ideology thing. Zinnia isn’t fighting with Devon over who gets to save the world or over some older grudge that’s making them ignore the peril. She isn’t getting in the way because she’d prefer to have things go the prophesy route. For that matter, she knows full well the prophesy is not a sure thing and would presumably have jumped at any better option. She just thinks what Devon’s doing is evil because mass murder is generally considered evil.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12808002/1/Pokemon-The-Odd-One-Out

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

“Your” is possessive, “you’re” is short for “you are”.

[“How would you like to become the newest Champion of the house of legends?” There were a few seconds of silence before Rain replied.

“That’d be awesome! I accept!”

“Thank goodness, I was thinking you might not want to!” Light exclaimed as she rubbed her forehead. “But! First and foremost, let’s heal that string of pokerus that blocks you’re moves!”

Light handed Rain a pill that he swallowed and instantly cured the pokerus. “Now! Let’s teach you a few moves! Which one do you like?” Light asked this as she pulled out a few TMs and HMs and also two Z-Crystals!

“Woah, um, how about feint attack, dark pulse, shadow claw, and quick attack. Then, how about a darkium Z!”]

This is a horrible idea.

If you’ve just introduced a character before handing them random powerups, you should’ve started the story after this point instead. This is just here so you can list the powers your mary sue of an umbreon is getting handed to him, which is awful writing. If he’ll need the powers for the rest of the story, start it off with him in a situation where he needs them and uses them.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12808017/1/Pokèmon-Omega-Quest

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

[I heard Lance said]

Say.

[“He’s not a legend because he do, in fact, exist,”]

Does.

[“If you did find him,” ]

Do.

I’d really recommend a beta reader.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12808083/1/Mega-pokemon-crossover

Capitalize your title properly.

Crossovers should be posted in the crossover section.

[Also the age to be a pokemon trainer in Alola is amped up to 14. Why? Because I want to try to make a story no one has read.]

Maybe next time bother to read any other fanfic before going on about how original your fic is. That way, you won’t be announcing you did the same cliché bad idea as everyone else like it’s some brilliant innovation of yours.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12808121/1/Ketchum-Family-Joy

Write out numbers with letters.

Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12808269/1/Electric-tamer-Ash-by-sojoukou-senkuo

Yet again a fic by somebody else.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12808279/1/Bonnie-s-checkup

Capitalize your title properly.

Script is banned.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12808346/1/Out-in-the-Pumpkin-Patch

Already got them.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12808841/1/Lost-Hope-Remastered

Spellcheck.

It’s “okay”, four letters.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12808848/1/How-special

Capitalize your title properly.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

[VISION

“Ash!” I said leaning over him as he lay on the ground crushed by a tree.

END VISION

“Ashy you got to move.” I pushed him out of the clearing and then went back for the pokemon. Once the pokemon was out of the clearing it looked at me hard. Then it darted away as a tree came crashing down in the clearing.

Dream end]

Learn to write proper transitions.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12809360/1/The-Stranger-In-The-Mill

Don’t capitalize every word.

Write out numbers with letters.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12809411/1/A-Risky-Career

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

[Pokémon battling was portrayed by the anime to be all fun and heroic, but Alex knew very well that this was far from the case. In fact, society frowned on battling for the most part- not because it was unethical, but because people who got into it usually flunked out and became jobless, with no relevant workplace talents. After all, battlers only had two ways of generating income: sponsorships and tournament winnings (both of which required you to actually be good). ]

You just described most sports, except with sports there’s also permanent physical damage to many players while with pokemon the resulting creatures can be used for other tasks. And yet, our world doesn’t roundly reject sports, so why would the pokemon world be frowning on the comparatively few consequences facing mediocre pokemon battlers?

[“Hey! Wanna walk together?”

Alex wasn’t surprised at her offer. Janet was outgoing and loved to constantly talk, so it was only natural that she would want to accompany someone.

“I can’t. I’m kind of in a hurry,” blurted Alex. Sensing Janet’s disappointment, he added, “Sorry.”]

This doesn’t make much sense. Aren’t they going the same way? It could be that he expects her to go at a much slower pace, but you say he gets winded as soon as he jogs off, so he’s obviously not actually traveling all that fast. You should really explain what the problem is – is she really that much slower? Is he concerned that carrying on a conversation will scare off pokemon he wants to catch?

[“Ahh. So, are you too busy meditating right now, or would you like to have a Pokémon battle? I see you’ve got a Magnemite there.” asked the boy. ]

Should be more like

[“Ahh. So, are you too busy meditating right now, or would you like to have a Pokémon battle?” asked the boy. “I see you’ve got a Magnemite there.”]

Keep asked with its question or use a different speech tag.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12809422/1/Ash-s-Mostly-Dream

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things – or used in place of one, like “mom” can be. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

This is insanely boring.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12809483/1/Dinner-Party

Blocked!