Idiot assholes, more people who can talk to pokemon and don’t care, weird porn.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13469354/1/Truth-of-a-Champion (0)
[Everything else was irrelevant; height, weight, ability, species, moveset… it would all depend on who got there first. Christopher was certain that it would be him. ]
Uh.
I really don’t know what you’re trying to say here. You seem to have jumped between talking about starter pokemon and talking about the trainer getting a starter pokemon midsentence.
[he was more than prepared for his ‘destined day’, arguably the most important day in any trainer’s life. ]
I mean, you can argue anything. But really, it’s only fanfic that treats this as the most important, and even that seems to have more to do with the fact most fanfic only gets about this far – OT fic that actually goes anywhere hits plenty of more important days.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like trainer or professor or gym.
[“Unlike most starter Pokémon I present to beginning trainers, I bred these here at the ranch.” Oak explained, “Because of the limited amount of Pokémon that I still have, I used other Pokémon in the same egg groups which resulted in the potential for egg moves.”]
This kind of obsession with game minutiae is a bad idea. Egg moves make little sense outside of a mechanic, limiting movesets like this only makes for less interesting battles, and even using in-universe reasoning, it’s simple enough that if people cared about egg moves they’d just take that into account when breeding rather than treating it like the semi-secret mechanic it is from the player POV where you have to do everything yourself.
[“Professor Oak…” He timidly began, “Will any of the trainers from today have a chance of becoming the next Champion?”
The ageing trainer took a deep breath before responding.
“No.” was the Professor’s answer, the words cutting deep into the boy’s heart.
“As much as I would like to claim that any of you will be the next Champion, I cannot. It will take many years of dedication, resolve, doubt, failure and triumph to come anywhere close to it, something that can hardly be seen in someone’s youth. Ultimately it will come down to one important factor; how far are you willing to go. As it stands, the Champion is alone in their position, meaning that they had to overcome all of those around them to get to the top of the League system. They were not born to be a Champion, they became a Champion through training and sacrifice, not because it was in their family or because they were destined to be so. At the moment, it all depends on the bonds that you have with your Pokémon and those around you. Never forget that and you have as good a chance as everyone else.”]
…okay, so “do any of us have a chance?” and “will one of us definitely be the next champion?” are two completely different things, and if you wanted Oak to answer the latter, you shouldn’t have written him being asked the former. If someone asks if there’s a chance, and the response ends with there absolutely being a chance, the answer should not be “no”. This makes it seem like Oak either didn’t pay attention to what he was being asked or he deliberately ignored it because he wanted to give a big speech.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13469356/1/Journey-through-Unova-The-Ballad-of-Juan-Burgans (0)
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like trainer or professor or gym.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.
[Colress tsked, “My dead lady, you are mathematically in no position to negotiate with us. You carry no leverage and have no choice but to fully comply with Team Plasma.”
“This is insane!” Marshal suddenly shouted, jabbing a finger at the camera and causing his fellow Elite Four to flinch. “You’re all cowards for hiding in that little boat of yours! Come to the Pokémon League, and we’ll show you how a real trainer fights! Until then, you aren’t getting squat,” the tough words failed to remove the smug expression from the scientist’s face.]
I don’t think it was necessary or a good idea to have Marshal and company to be idiots. They’re here to negotiate due to Team Plasma being able to harm Unovan citizens, why would any of them be shouting that no actually, /they/ demand Team Plasma comes somewhere and does something and they don’t care about anything else? It’s not like Colress’ high moral standards demand that he only start raining icy death upon Unova if he gets a complete refusal. He’d believably do this in response to anything short of immediate unconditional surrender, and honestly it’s more believable he’d fire the gun even given that than it is that Marshal or anyone else would be shouting about how they demand a fair pokemon battle and don’t care about anything else.
Also, pretty sure you meant “dear lady” and not “dead lady”.
[Meanwhile, Juan left the police and rescue crew to a futile effort of saving those trapped inside the Treehollow. He had seen the efforts to melt Kyurem’s ice in other cities and knew that there was nothing he could do to help. He was annoyed at Team Plasma though, for ruining yet another location to train and hone his Pokémon’s skills before the tournament. At this rate, he’d never be prepared for the League! ]
[“Yes, I did,” Grey poured himself a drink, staring at his guest with intense, silver eyes. “As you may have noticed, the Unova region, and consequently myself, are dealing with a most serious problem in the form of Team Plasma. Specifically, their tendency to freeze and destroy several major cities has hurt Cyneca Industries’ bottom line, as well as my own, long-term goals for the future. I’ve attempted to stop them by myself but have seen little success thus far.]
I’m assuming them being selfish assholes lacking any redeeming features is an intentional choice, but there doesn’t seem to be any other factors pushing this into being entertainingly selfish assholes or intriguingly selfish assholes or any other reason why they should be getting featured.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13469429/1/The-Adventures-in-Kalos (1)
Your title is painfully generic. Do a search and look at just how many other fanfics have done this already.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like trainer or professor or gym.
[ With her is a shiny Umbreon, ]
Nothing says “doesn’t actually care about pokemon beyond status symbols” like a trainer just happening to have a rare shiny pokemon as their friend.
[ Since Alec found Ethan, he found out he could understand almost all Pokémon perfectly. This has surprised many people, but he doesn’t broadcast it. ]
This is a really bad thing to throw in for specialness points. If you suddenly found out all animals were of human-level intelligence and capable of begging for your aid, would you really just shrug and continue on with your life?
It’s also quite noticeable that Alec is only really interacting with other humans.
[ “What in the name of Arceus is going on?” Alec asked himself. ]
Not actually a thing in canon.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13469571/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-Summer-Camp (4)
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like trainer or professor or gym.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13469665/1/Hapu-s-Kahuna-Trial (1)
I mean, I’m assuming the whole thing is designed around kink here and that can get into some very specific scenarios, but it is really difficult to believe that anyone is fine getting set up to be assaulted and raped just because she’s fine with the sex itself. I could see this sort of cheery attitude if it was just that they were planning to coerce her but she’s completely down with it, and I could see someone so fine with it they didn’t realize the original plan was getting chained up by force, but even by porn standards, totally fine with people planning to chain her up so she could be raped is excessive. If it’s supposed to be a surprise reversal, she should still be doing something to ensure these guys who have established they really do not care if she enjoys herself don’t do anything to ruin that, like tying them up first.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like trainer or professor or gym.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13469771/1/pokemon-high-school (0)
Capitalize your title correctly.
[I would like to clarify that I have translated it from Spanish using a translation page (it is not google haha) because even my English is something basic to translate a text ]
I’d suggest not doing this. If people are fine reading something with translation problems, they’ll run your existing fic through a translator.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like trainer or professor or gym.