“The point of this story was supposed to be a vague and unique concept that would make you think and imagine. It was supposed to have holes just like memories and life does. The things that happened in the story were supposed to be sudden and jumpy as that is just a view on life I happen to have and convey it into words.”
reply to review to Cycles
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/10799179/
Well, even if you can get never ending copies of the same object, they are not the original, no matter how many original codes you keep of that thing. Dave managed to find the code for his own brain through his grist-made camera, but that didn’t make the original brain suddenly appear in a jar and out of his head. it was still just a copy of the original, for how identical it could be it was *not* the original.
Dave can make a lot of copies of his shades, and combine his shades with other objects (like his phone earlier in the series) but that doesn’t mean that redoing the original code will give him the same exact shades that John gave him as a gift. just a copy that was as good as the original, but definitely not the same ones that he wore for years, that John bought for him, with all the emotions attached.
If you have a favourite plushie when you’re little, and it breaks when you’re an adult, you wouldn’t want just another copy store-bought. it wouldn’t be your original one anymore. it’d be just a copy, even if it was manifactured to be identical. and if you had the possibility of having the code to replicate it, it still would not be the original.
I never truly understood what sort of language WV is supposed to be speaking, and I expected him to speak some sort of sub-hearing fuzzy language, or just not speak much at all so even if Dave’s sash can make him virtually understand any language, and WV clearly seems to *write* in a way that humans can understand (unless that was just game construct) for someone who doesn’t seem to talk *ever* there are expected to be misunderstanding, especially since they are still different species.
thanks for the review ^^
Your review to RASP
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/10872338/
Thank you for your critique! I much appreciate it.
However, I try my best to avoid said, and could you please point out a definite example of the line you want me to fix? I can’t correct what I can’t find!
Also, randomnly capitalized words is a bad habit of mine. Which of them have I accidently done that to, so I can correct them?
A side note: words like Sburb, Cruxtruder, Totem Lathe, and Alchemiter are always capitalized in canon.
https://www.fanfiction.net/topic/11834/21887406/1/ covers dialogue in more detail. Short form, I said dialogue is written “as”, which is to say “in this manner”, because I was referring to the fact you don’t know how to write dialogue properly, not that there’s a particular time you literally wrote [“Hello.” She said.] as a typo.There’s also a section on capitalization there.
That felt mildly insulting. I’m sure there was a better way to word that…Also, I don’t feel that it directly helps, or answers my question: Where did I accidentally capitalize something that is not a name, proper noun, capitalized in the Homestuck comic, or the start of a sentence? I DID take English class. I know how capitalization works. I scour each section of the story for improper capitalization.
I would like to be told, using a sample of what I have written, exactly how my dialogue-writing is wrong.
I specifically ask this, because when I look at it and compare it to books I read, I see nothing wrong!
re: Your review to Rewind
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11486034/
Thanks for the review.
I was wondering where it’s shown that Homura’s power activates on Madoka dying, though? From most of what I’ve seen, it seems to be a general consensus that she activates them willingly.
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/10878692/
I feel like that’s a little harsh. Mainly in that the example you pulled is from the first chapter. I do address Damara’s issues later on. It’s written from Aradia’s perspective and she doesn’t know Damara’s history, only what she’s heard through the grapevine. As for the other characters, I did take some liberties but I wouldn’t go so far as to say they’re OCs. But hey, I can’t make you like it.
re: Your review to Brooding Caverns
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/10880942/
Well, thanks for taking your time to go through and help me with a few of my mistakes, but honestly, I’ve scrapped this whole story for now; I just don’t really feel like I can take it anywhere. I might be interested in going back and continuing, but that’s require a whole lot of correcting, and I’m honestly not even reading Homestuck currently, I’ve just sort of fallen out of interest with it. I’ve taken some liberties with this story and didn’t fully do my research to begin with (it’s admittedly a bit difficult to go through the various pages and check for exact quotes when the majority of them are labeled the exact same). If you do see anything in this story worth continuing, I’d be glad to start it up again, but at the moment, I don’t. Regardless though, thanks again for your time going through it.
re: Your review to How I Saved The World (Sort of)
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/10903317/
Well, you are now my little sister’s idol for being someone who can put me in my place, so congrats on that.
Seriously though, your reviews were huge eye-openers. Ideas which I used to think were nifty concepts end being too out-there. So thank you. I didn’t really like the way I wrote Nathaniel for some reason, but you’ve helped me figure that out, too. The strong points are things I’ll work on, for sure- I could definitely work on their family dynamic.
That scholarship money was pretty stupid, looking back at it now. And all the guns. Could’ve done it slower, I guess, like him feeling watched or whatever. I’m not sure what would work in replacement for the scholarship money, though. Some kind of sponsored tournament within the Academy?
Anyways, I’m really glad I joined that review exchange, and thanks again.
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11129488/
Thanks for your review! That is a good point; I never really thought much about the setup for the date. I figured they’d just go on a “candlelit hate-date” sort of thing quite often as Kismesises. And I think Snowman would be quite good with words; she could probably convince Slick to go skydiving without a parachute. Just a thought XP.
Thanks so much for your feedback! I really appreciate it!
P.S. LOVE your profile pic!
Thank You (Yes, really)
Oct 15Mr. Miniike
One day I was causally checking my email when I saw that my overly long Homestuck fan fiction that I hadn’t updated since early this year had some new (negative) reviews on it. I was mildly amused. This was followed by reflection and then odd gratitude.
It’s pretty obvious that I’ve all but abandoned the story, but it’s too recent for me to file in the “what a funny child I was” category, so actually realizing how tedious the whole thing turned out was humbling to say the least.
Do I regret it, though? No. I’ve written hundreds of crappy stories, but this was the first time I tried to structure a plot, worked with actual lore, and outlined characters. I spent hours trying to see things from my character’s point of view and figure out pacing, and the results of all this time and effort were…well, you can see for yourself.
I’m taking a writing and composition class right now, so rereading this story has been embarrassing. But as I looked over the pointless author’s notes I thought I could get away with, I remembered why I wrote this story in the first place: to improve my writing and get feedback. I believe I now have done both, however marginally.
I don’t know if you’ll actually read this personal introspective garbadlygook, but if you’ve made it this far, thanks. My writing efforts seem slightly less pointless now.
re: Your review to An Untold Ztory
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11007451/
It was not errased from the page, it was errased from my computer, something that I explained on other sites
It’s mysterious bc I have no idea what happened to the original story
The idea of AUZ is that it begins with the same old, same old and then stuff happens, it’s mostly just a backstory for the four characters so that the reader meets them now and I can use them in the future without having to explain much
It’s not stupid writing is a quirk, one Robin, one of the most active characters, uses and one the other characters associate with her, it is wierd for her not to use her and it comes as a good way of telling when things are about to go sour
Of course, had you actually read through the entirety of this story you would be able to understand the usage of the letter “z” instead of the letter “s”
But thanks for your concern
Oct 17Dimmension Traveler
Thanks for correcting my grammar. I’ve always wrote stories that way and shown them to my friends but they never bothered to correct me. Sorry I couldn’t thank you sooner, my life has been one thing after another. I’ll remember that next time I write anything.
re: Your review to Teamwork
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11003028/
I don’t know when you wrote this review, but thank you! Constructive criticism is always nice.
re: Your review to Take Out the Gunman
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11321921/
re: Your review to There’s more than one way to stab
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/10832646/
Yeah, looking back on it I could have done a lot of things better. I was kind of rushed to write it and I wasn’t going with my usual fanfiction editing process. Thank you for giving me an honest constructive review of my story though.
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11407718/
Thank you so much for the review! Good constructive criticism is difficult to find these days. I’ll be sure to take your suggestions into account, and I may even publish another chapter in more of a story format. Thanks again for review.
re: Your review to The Midnight Crew
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11478212/
1.) The story was just supposed to be a loose interpretation of something that could probably never happen.
2.) I didn’t use quotation marks for dialogue because that’s how Hussie does it for them.
3.) Spade’s character dynamic was supposed to have changed because falling in love kind of make you change a lot.
4.) I didn’t want to focus on anything here, it was more of a “here’s an idea and a some plot, now let your mind wander.”
5.) Their personality traits are never stated too strongly in the Homestuck fandom, which is the one I am and due to having a request from a fan, I wrote this on the little facts I knew.
6.) The mess with the relationship was supposed to be just that, a mess. If you’ve ever been in a relationship dynamic like that you would know that’s it feels like and that’s what I wanted to get at.
7.) Having Spade’s die like that seemed like a fair way to do it, make things sudden and with just enough time for Clubs to see and hear something he “wouldn’t understand” or as I tried to convey, tried to convince himself he didn’t know.
8.) I also vaguely hinted, as is the nature of this story, that the reason Clubs could see Spades ghost was that he was special to Spades in life.
9.) Building up to these things was not the point, it was supposed to be like small glimpse of Spades life as we caught them, a more “trying to grasp life as it goes by” kind of concept that I felt went with the plot.
10.) The ending was supposed to be them finding peace, and finally being together again, where everything has caught up and they’re all finally able to grasp their memories and each other.
The point of this story was supposed to be a vague and unique concept that would make you think and imagine. It was supposed to have holes just like memories and life does. The things that happened in the story were supposed to be sudden and jumpy as that is just a view on life I happen to have and convey it into words. I’m sorry that this all was made unclear and that I was not able to portray things as you would have liked. I hope that this really helped you better understand the story and what is going on as well as maybe gave you a reason perhaps to like it or at least handle it better. Thanks for the time and for reading this, I appreciate you taking the trouble to write this review.
re: Your review to Danza
Oct 28Obvious Ghost
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/10218883/
That last line might be the highest praise I’ve ever gotten. Homestuck fics have the potential to be horrendously bad.
For real, though, thanks! That means a lot. It’s really fun to write short oneshots like this, but they often don’t get much attention since they’re on the front page for a blink and then gone. So getting feedback at all is awesome, and I’m glad you liked it!
Overall, there continues to be the sad correlation between a fandom where people don’t review and a fandom where people don’t scream at me for reviewing them. Oh, FFN. When I said I wanted people to listen, I didn’t mean at this cost.