A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8918464/

Thank you for the review and being nice while pointing out my faults. I really did think that what I put down could be counted as a prologue but if not, how is a prologue supposed to look? Also, with the capitalization, I honestly didn’t know that i wasn’t supposed to capitalize pokemon. I thought that I was supposed to, since Microsoft Word kept on telling me to capitalize, so thanks for letting me know about this. Anyway, thanks again for the review and your polite, but helpful, review!

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8925412/

well thanks for going into detail on what I’m screwing up. Most people tell me I’ve got bad grammar and leave it at that; though it is a bit daunting to suddenly receive a wall of 101 corrections (I’m still unsure how to write that in text, and I’m not looking forward to a battle with a Grammar Nazi)

I’ll be sure to take note of everything you’ve mentioned. Usually my Grammatical mistakes are born of ignorance of these little esoteric titbits and no one bothers to explain exactly what I did wrong, and as such i thank you for that.

again I’ll restate that writing this was a heat of the moment decision, and as such is more of a recreational exercise, though I guess it wouldn’t hurt to improve upon my grammar. i will freely admit that this is not my best chapter, nor has it had a huge amount of passion poured into it.

thanks again for all your help, I’ll be sure to take you advice to heart. coincidentally, is there anything notably good that you would like to comment on about the fic so far?

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8926434/

Everyone has their own way of writing and I prefer captalising the names of Pokemon like Pikachu and Charizard, it keeps me in the right. 
I am very bad with my grammer when it comes to the proper use of comma’s etc and the Sneasel is working with the ghost’s but it is an uneasy partnership which will be explained further later. 

I am still learning when it comes to writing and this isn’t supposed to be a series fic, it is more to get me back into wirting and to get idea’s to flow. I thank you for your help farla, and characerization has never been my strongest points. I shall attempt to do better

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8926434/

Again thank you. 
As for why i havn’t explained again wil be explained in the following chapters.

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8922976/

Hello, thanks for the criticism, but I feel the need to explain and defend some of my choices.

Firstly, in the Pokémon games themselves are their names not capitalised? I’m used to seeing them written with capital letters. The same applies for their moves.

Also, the first section of the game is really slow paced and boring because it’s setting the scene, I have to set the scene too. I’m not sticking directly to the plot so I have to explain it. Same goes for clothing really. I can’t show anyone a picture so I have to describe it.

Secondly, I hate the idea of mixing the real world into the Pokémon world, that’s why I used ‘butterfreed’ instead of ‘butterflied’. It seems more natural to me that way. I don’t want to blur the lines here, mentioning real animals would just be really awkward.

Finally, regarding Rosa. We don’t hear her voice at all in the games so I’m trying to give her one. Her character is going to develop and change as she progresses through the plot.

Thank you,
Woodtea.

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8926937/

Hello Farla, 
First, I would like to thank you for the constructive critisicism, even though I would appreciate if you didn’t begin with the phrase “this is a mess”. 
Second, the beginning and end aren’t really journal entries, their more like a prologue and epilogue. As far hating his parents, well he’s at that stage in life where ‘his body is changing’ sort of thing and he’s trying to sort through everything and has some angst to spare, so he uses it on his fighting parents. And the problem isn’t the gambling per say, but a mixture of the fact that he’s underage and doing it irresponsibly is.
Finally, the elite 4 is hardly about nepotism. But Alder is the champion, and he raises three trainers who end up strong enough to be on the elite 4. Note that grimsley still had to beat his predecessor before he could actually get in, meaning that alder didn’t actually ever say yes, he just offered it. And as far as asking permission goes, I envision alder as an employer and to get a job, you have to apply with the employer, right?
In conclusion, I based the story around a little tidbit from Nintendo dream magazine. Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work!

Sincerely,

Karnik

Um thanks? LOL. To start off I capitalize everything, especially pokemon names or types because I’ve been asked to do so in my other stories since readers can’t see them. For the Flashback, I know I wrote that wrong, but I didn’t bother fixing it. I have the flu, that’s the only reason I could’ve started this story. I’m just trying to write right now, not pay too much attention to grammar. I hope you understand. Thanks for leaving a review. 

Dragonheart1234

Dear Farla,

Thank you for your review, helpful reviews such as yours are the reason why I actually posted on this site in the first place rather that the kind which go along the lines of “oooh loved it. I may not actually get around to editing my story, but don’t think that I’ve completely disregarded your advice. Some of the mistakes that you brought up (the use of its instead of it’s, and daddy instead of Daddy ones) are my own silly fault for not editing it properly. In regards to the point you made about capitalisation for pokemon names I concede to your point. And finally in regards to the use of semicolons, I actually had the same thought myself, however at the last minute I changed it back. It seems I have gotten myself in a rut courtesy of my university’s strict policies on correct use of punctuation. And, after having re-read the story, I understand what you mean regarding the lack of focus in the plot.

My only request is that you do not post your review on your blog, but I will understand if you disregard this request.

Many thanks,

The-Ultimate-Fudge

The main reason is that my initial plan for the posting of this story was to, hopefully, get a review like yours which was able to help me get focused on my writing and then to remove the story. While I respect fanfiction, it really isn’t how I like to write, which may explain why the story seemed to be more about the domestic abuse than the actual pokemon. However, when all is said and done, it won’t bother me if you do post it, just that in a few days the link will be dead.

I apologise for the inconvenience this may have caused you, but I did have my reasons to do things this way. However, I’m still grateful for the review.

I am truly sorry that I have upset you, and I did not intend to upset anyone as much as it seems that I have upset you. However, that doesn’t change the fact that I will be taking the story down. My reasons may not be good or, under the scrutiny of others, make any sense whatsoever, but they are still valid to me. Sorry.

Upset, irritated, either way I am sorry. This has caused way more trouble that I intended, or than it is actually worth. I do not see a point in continuing this argument, or whatever it is, as I don’t believe it will get anywhere. My intentions were not to become a pain in the arse on a global scale, yet it seems that I have become one. All I can say now is that I’m sorry and leave it at that.

I had a quick question. I know you enjoy giving review but why? What’s the purpose of giving reviews to piss people off?

Is it to make them better? Or something else? Im just curious. Because im a curious person lol