“we don’t capitalize words like mouse or wolf because they are not the species name. Words like Pikachu or Charizard on the other hand, are the species name, so they should be capitalized.”
I thank you for both your critiquing of my story and for sharing your opinion with me.
I appreciate your review, even if it is a cute little novely account.
“Its” is possessive, “it’s” means “it is.”
Yeah thanks, got that. As for the rest of your review, especially this
“Rearranging your word order to sound more like Yoda just makes things sound stupid.”
Yes that’s the point, it’s a stupid crack fic made by a stupid person for stupid laughs. Thanks for the review, cheers!
Bananafish IIA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11009627/
Hello, Farla,
First of all, thank you very much for the review. I felt that something wasn’t quite right when I posted this but I couldn’t quite put my finger on it. Your review summarized the problem nicely and helped me discover more holes in the story, and for that I am very grateful. I’m also glad that you liked Longwisp and Fogscale.
Second, an idea that I thought I’d try out with this fic is differentiating between pokemon that are essentially animals (dwebble, ryhorn, etc.), pokemon that are like Chronicles of Narnia-esque intelligent beasts (krookodile, murkrow), and pokemon whose cultures could be vaguely humanlike (mawile, hariyama, etc.), and perhaps even a more alien perspective, like in ChaoticXXHearts’s “Time Dilation”. Even if I made this more clear in the fic, I agree that tightening up the rest of it is a must, but I would also like to hear any thoughts or suggestions you might have. If there’s not much to say, though, I can respect that, too.
Sincerely,
Bannanafish II
Dear Farla,
So you think you’re so great at English?
How’re you at maths?
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HAHAHAHA.
Yours sincerely,
ShinyDragonair2
So just wanted to say thanks, now that I have the chance!
MizucharoshiA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11008955/
Thank you very much for taking the time to read through my story and for providing constructive feedback. Because of it, I’ve learned something new and will do my best to tidy up my paragraphs.
Ahaha, thank you! Your review seriously means a lot to me, and I’m really glad to hear you liked the fic.
Also, I’d like to thank you for the additional exposure: the fic’s hit count jumped from 16 to 27 after your review, and I suspect it’s all thanks to you.
How dare so few of you click on the link. Go now and rectify that.
Hi there! First of all, holy shit thank you so much for this. I rarely get feedback and something like this is fucking gold dust excuse the language ha, ha XD Okay let’s begin:
Yeah that’s an old habit unfortunately XD An old English Teacher taught me that to write dialogue it has to have a comma if someone is replying to it. A full stop if a conversation has ended, that sort of thing. I have a feeling it’s not correct… XD Right okay; I’ll be sure to give all this a big read through. It sounds like I’ve been doing it all wrong to be honest ha, ha XD
Aw yeah that’s actually another bad habit I have that I need to get out of. Although that said I much prefer capitalising “Pokémon” itself because I use it in a general sense if that makes sense. Pokémon’s names yeah I capitalise anyway. Some things I overly do it but I will agree. XD I need to break out of it.
But my god thanks so much for all this; I never expected to get any feedback like this at all on this site by this point. Thank you again; I don’t know what else to say. XD I really do appreciate it.
First of all bring a condom before you Fuck my mind and second of all I can paragraph I use a kindle sorry lol and I don’t worry about the basic stuff but ill try harder :)
LoneLudicoloA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11007614/
Thank you! These are definitely some useful tips. I’ll be sure to keep them in mind in the future. Again, thanks.
WinterNightwingA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11006154/
I believe you should capitalize words like Pikachu or Charazard. Ex.) The wild Pikachu ran from the battle. The reasoning is a lot like yours, we don’t capitalize words like mouse or wolf because they are not the species name. Words like Pikachu or Charizard on the other hand, are the species name, so they should be capitalized.
If Lawrence III was moved to somewhere else, he would mess with legendaries there, every region has legendaries that the public might see somewhat often. Kanto- Moltres, Articuno, and Zapdos. Johto- Entei, Suicune, and Raikou. Hoenn- Regirock, Registeel, and Regice. Sinnoh- Mespirit, Uxie, Azelf, Cresselia, Darkrai, Heatran, and Shaymin. Unova- Landorus, Thundurus, Tornadus, Keldeo, Cobalion, Terrakion, and Virizion. Also if Lawrence III was moved to somewhere else, there would be no point in the story.
Yes, I know about writing out the numbers, but I do it as 0-10, 20, 30, 40, etc., I write out.
Okay, like I said, sory for the typos. I’m working on them, but my computer keeps reloading this site and can’t keep it stable for 5 minutes. Anyway, Jinjira is trying to deny the fact she likes N, but Cheren and Bianca are making it hard because they know she likes him. With N being gone, she tries to tell herself she’s gotten over him, but she really hasn’t. I’ll get into that in the second chapter.
And don’t worry, Jinjira will definitely run into N again.
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 MoaKing chapter 1 . 17h ago
Wow this sucks, exuse me for the bad maners man and grammer, but I made that fic you review in 2 hour, How am I going to cheek it twice in three in the morning HUH!
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| Guest chapter 17 . Jan 30
shut up you grammar nazi. nobody needs your trashy advice so keep it in your penis.
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| Guest chapter 17 . Jan 30
Farla, you are a big dorky piece of shit who deserves to get shot by the U.S army. Morons like you are a waste of space on planet earth.
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| Pro-Amateur 404 chapter 17 . Jan 29
… Cannot comprehend what you are trying to show in your story. Why don’t you look at yourself in the mirror and apply your so-called review to yourself?The point is that your story is very hard to follow. The sentences are extremely choppy that it lacks the continuation for the next sentence. Why don’t you add more details so the reader can properly understand?
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White text galore.
You people complain so much about a little unreadable blindness-inducing formatting! You didn’t really need your eyesight, did you?
The glorious return of white text!
“How’re you at maths?”
Well, that was kinda surreal, especially considering the second message.
“First of all bring a condom before you Fuck my mind”
A wild Fuck appears!
Seriously. I understand Why people capitalize pokemon, But why do They feel The need to capitalize Random words outside Of Homestuck text quirks?
And I see your kismesis got a second wind. Though there are still seem to be far less “reviews” than before. That saddens me.
And I see your kismesis got a second wind.
If they need to pause for breath this much when they’re barely even singing, I am disappoint. I did like a thousand reviews! I won’t accept a kismesis who can’t keep up with me.
Oh hey, I missed Growth the first time! (had a brainfart and restarted) Off to click the link.
An wut to the Pi comment.