Jan 24mewchild22A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11746806/

my chapters are gonna get longer think of these two chapters like a prouloge and now the chapters start for real the chapter im doing right now is much better than the first two

Jan 24ProfessorLugiaA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11746113/

Let me begin with this: I apologize for the delayed response. I was out of town over the weekend and was unable to access the Internet. I normally reply to reviews within eight hours.
I am chastened to see that you don’t agree with the way I post my material. I do understand that this specific ‘story’ doesnt make sense to those that don’t read my stories, and I respect that you pointed it out to me. However, in that same regard, your blunt approach on the situation leaves me no choice but to explain my reasoning.
I’ve done this before, with officer Magnezone’s files, and If you read the nonstory chapter ban guidelines, nowhere does it state that character bios violate that rule. Although, you do make a valid point. It is true that Victors files are not intended for people that haven’t read my stories. It is for those that are reading my stores, and occasionally need a reminder of what species the characters are, and don’t want to spend the time finding the specific chapter that I post the character bios on in my main story. So I please ask you to understand. Even if you don’t approve, I am doing nothing that violates site rules.
That being said, I do not appreciate the way you handled yourself in that situation. Telling me to ask myself if anyone cares about what I post is disrespectful to me both as an author and a human being. You could have been more respectful in two ways: PMing me your issue with my material, as to avoid posting it publicly, and toning down your utter disregard for my style of writing. I politely ask that you please be respectful if you review my material again. Thank you.
-PL

Jan 24The Transform Queen GenevieveSo you do realize in the games and everywhere else Pokemon are refered to WITH A CAPITAL AT THE BEGINNING.

Jan 25widerissA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11748983/

Okay, thank you for the correction, I really appreciate it!

Jan 25PolarissbA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11749466/

Thanks for the well thought out reviews. You raise some valid points, which I’d like to address.

I’ve been trying to bring a somewhat more realistic Pokemon world into my stories. I haven’t hit it yet in my plotlines, but trainer-Pokemon relations, what being trained is like for a Pokemon and what it takes for them to trust a human’s judgment over their own, is a major theme I’m trying to address. Suffice it to say here that Tracy trusts that if Ryland tells her to attack, there’s a good reason for it. This is something I’ll be exploring in much greater detail in other stories; one of the disadvantages of this setting is that these stories are necessarily snapshots.

Poke Balls are another thing I’ve thought about a lot – you know, maybe Team Plasma had a point. I can’t see Pokemon just being happy carried around in balls all the time, and that is something I intend to genuinely address in other stories. I have a full page of ruminations about Poke Balls in the journal section of my DeviantArt, and this is the best I’ve been able to realistically come up with and still fit the games.

I added the part about Vaporeon’s gills because they’re only mentioned in the Gen III Pokedex. Their placement and function I sort of made up (at one point, I was considering writing it such that a Vaporeon’s lungs can work in both water and air). My other story, Tyler’s Search, ends up exploring Vaporeon physiology and abilities pretty thoroughly, so I’ve had to invent details that aren’t supplied from canonical sources. See Tyler’s Search ch. 17 for where exactly the water-breathing part comes from.

Also, I know capitalizing Pokemon species may not be ideal, but since I grew up referencing the games, Bulbapedia, and all their capitalization (but not the anime, nor PMD), it just feels wrong to lowercase them. Maybe one day I’ll get over it. I also capitalize things like Trainer/Catcher both to show that wild Pokemon look at them as a sort of featureless group, The Enemy, and that among owned Pokemon it’s sort of a title, not just an occupation. Perhaps not the best, but it’s the convention I’ve set for my stories.

The remark about Umbreon and dark moves primarily references Dark Pulse, which is described in the games as “a dark aura filled with horrible thoughts.” I interpret that to mean that it’s used with the specific intent of causing pain, not just winning a fight, and requires dredging up painful/dark memories and emotions for that purpose. This is also a reference to an Umbreon named Zahna in my Tyler’s Search story, who in particular has a problem with this. I’ll admit it doesn’t apply to all dark-type moves. However, I’ve always thought Umbreon should have access to other moon-based moves like Moonblast, despite not being a fairy type – I usually associate them much more closely with moonlight than darkness.

Rieka’s story might need a little perspective, because Kamzez97 gave me her age as several millennia old, due to something that happened to her in an ancient temple. He also said she was completely alone until his character encountered her. I ended up with a very different story and world than the one I usually work with (for example, her evolution wasn’t instantaneous and involved no glowing), so she turned out fairly unique. My logic was that most Eevee that die in that environment either die of old age or getting eaten. The fact that Rieka suffered near-fatal injuries (keeping her in the snowdrift for days) at a young age, without being eaten, makes her somewhat unique. She’s not the first Glaceon, but they’re rare in this time and not seen by Eevee as being a related species. Eevee do adapt a degree of cold resistance normally, but actually evolving requires far more exposure, at least in this story. For this series, working with whatever non-canonical details people give me about their OCs is half the fun.

Thanks again for taking the time to read through these and give thoughtful responses. I do appreciate the feedback.

Jan 25Lovelorn FennekinA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11748102/

That’s a good point about the capitalisation, which is something I made a point in not doing. However, I did somewhat rush the first chapter, hence why there was more the one kind of mistake. I will remember to update and take out the capitals when addressing Pokemon species that are not their actual names.
As for the dialogue, I am still a student in Creative Writing in my second year, so I am not 100% on my writing skill, which is partly why I have started this account. My tutor/mentor is really my only form writing and grammar definition. I am told (and she is a PHD mind you) when writing dialogue, we should only use quotation marks, as it is the narrator quoting a character, whereas as speech marks “I said this” is only used when characters are quoting another character within dialogue. Do not quote me on that, because again, I am not completely certain. ^^”

I will your points into account, as you are actually trying to help me and I am still a bit shaky with dialogue in general. Though I would like to confirm if your description of dialogue is correct with my mentor if that is okay?
And thank you for reading my first chapter.

Jan 25Pogona104A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11748097/

I want to thank you for your honest critique of my story, and that it was much appreciated. I also wanted to let you know that I did make some corrections to it, which will hopefully improve it further. And again, thank you for your constructive feedback.

Jan 25ShadeslayerZycronA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11742071/

ok i will keep it in thought

Jan 25PolarissbI recently stumbled across a Pokefic entitled “Chance.” It’s not on here, as far as I can tell, but I found it on deviantArt. It follows an OC Trainer named Evelyn who went through the DP storyline and then lost against Team Galactic at the end (this is the background, where the story starts). Dawn and Lucas both die in the process. At the final moment, she gets to timetravel back, replacing herself on her first day as a trainer so she can retry things with all her experience, hopefully keeping everyone alive and winning in the new timeline. It takes things pretty realistically, since she changes things almost immediately and ends up with a completely different team from the one she came to love, much to her initial dismay.

Jan 25a writerooA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11747631/

Thank you so much for this insight into my story. I’m currently writing the second chapter for this story and I’m going to take your advice in hand. The first chapter was just something that came into my head so it is kinda funky but I did have many faults in it, no excuses. Again, thank you for helping me become a better writer.

Jan 25nick the pikachu2A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11748991/

Sorry, I’m just rusty and not as hyped. When I first started writing stories, it was on Microsoft word… Now I have notebook, I could just try to get it….

Also, thank you for commenting and pointing out the issues.

Seriously, Nick The Pikachu2. :)

Jan 25SquirtoranA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11751122/

Thank you for reviewing, but I promise it will be more original than it is now, and yes, I have HUGE plans for the plot. Just give it time. I assure you there will be a lot of character and plot development as the story progresses. Have you read the other chapters? Those are a little more exciting.

Jan 25Time thief GrovyleA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11745504/

I apologize for my shitty story and I understand 100% if you have been offended. This was to be my first fanfic and I wanted it to be unique and adventuresome. Whereas I have been writing for years, I have recently experienced a writers block and was under pressure with little time to write. This is due to work and school. I also have trouble writing with this device (iPad) and found it very difficult to write and post stories. Grammar and punctuation are not my strongest subjects and now that I re-read I understand what you were getting at. I am simply going to stop with fanfictions and continue writing my own personal soon to be copyrighted book series, The Chronicles of Fjiori. It’s about my fantasy world basically. So don’t be looking forward to part two.

Jan 25TawnypawA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11751283/

After you.

Jan 25MysticBeatz21A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11751969/

Oh, I didn’t know that. Thanks for telling me this. Not trying to be sarcastic.

Jan 26FaewyndA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11753760/

Thank you so much for pointing these out to me! I’ll be sure to tweak these points before I upload the next chapter!

Jan 26ElJadiusA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11751281/

Hi,
Firstly, thanks for your tips on speech and punctuation. I will admit, I’m not the strongest in those areas.

However, I’m just going to point out that I’m not being (or, at least, trying to be) sexist towards girls. When Auran says, “She’s a girl.” I’m not implying that girls are inferior to men in any way. As a girl myself, I was saying that generally, girls are a lot more sensitive to things than boys are (who would probably rather play football, than spend their time thinking over pointless arguments such as who has to pay). And, for the record, that was an example, not saying that girls can’t play football either.

I have merely observed in real life that my friends who are girls react more sensitively to things my boy friends would let go of. That isn’t being sexist at all.

Also, when I say, “Eve was to be the first female to take over caring for Star Town.” I couldn’t have meant it in any offensive way. Before, I stated that Eve’s grandfather had founded the village, which had been passed on to his only son, and now the father’s only daughter (did that make sense?). Anyways, it wasn’t a case of choosing male over female, but simply the first (or only) born child.

I apologise if my writing seemed sexist or offended you in any way. I really would never be sexist towards girls, especially considering that I am one myself. Thanks for the review – I’ll be more aware of this in future chapters.

Jan 26VDM-WielderA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11750256/

Yeah I know, It had little to no plot, guess that makes mine another one of those kinds of stories :), P.S how do you edit chapters?

Jan 27However, I’m gonna write a serious version of Sometimes I Question My Life while writing the current one.
The reason why is because when I first wrote SIQML, I tried writing seriously, but when I noticed a lot of plot holes, I filled them up with major nonsense. P.S I changed the title of the story, Sometimes I Question My Luck.
When I do write the serious version, could I ask you about your opinion on how to improve it?