“I do admit to not having read many new trainer
fics, (which, if you think about it is horribly genaric and cleched by
itself which is why I don’t read them”
wanted to say thanks for the review you gave my story. To be honest, I
was a little upset after reading it, but I just needed time to think
about it. My friends had told me that my grammar wasn’t all that bad,
but you helped me to see where I was making some mistakes. Never been
all that good with grammar, but I’m trying to improve. Again, thanks.
Also, I just wanted to clear something about the story. It’s my fault
for the misunderstanding, but in the beginning I never wrote that it was
Fennekin who knocked the tree down. I was trying to find a way to allow
the story to flow from calm to action. I guess I need to work on that. I
intend to go over it and fix some mistakes, but I’m a little
intimidated by Fanfiction’s rules. Would I be able to re-upload a
corrected version?
Once more, thanks for the review and pointers.
Hey, thanks for the review you gave me. I wasn’t really thinking a lot
when I was originally typing it. For the rest of the series I’ll think
about what you said in this and try to make the other chapters more
enjoyable and make more sense. Like I said, a lot of the ting you
pointed out I just wasn’t thinking of that much when I originally wrote
it, I just had given myself a deadline and was trying to get it done by
then, and it was also late at night. I promise most of, if not all
chapters from here on out won’t have Point-of-view switching as much as
in this one, with the exception of occasional switches from first- to
third-person. If a story starts out form the p.o.v. of say, Pikachu, it
will end with the p.o.v. of Pikachu. Again, I really did appreciate your
criticism, and hope to make future chapters a whole lot better.
Personally I’m happy to see someone how will speak their mind! So
because any of my friends I show this to will be like ” Great! Keep up
the awesome work!” But I want to know the cold hard truth. So could you
read some of my stories? Tell me what you really think. Also this is the
description of a new story I might start so tell me what you think!
Dawn and May have been best friends since preschool! But can friendship
last forever? Dawn and May are now in high school, but not any high
school a famous boarding school called ” Legendary Heights”. This is the
best school in the whole Pokemon world! But nobody knows where it is
some say underground, some say under the sea and most say it is situated
in the clouds, but who knows where? Follow the story of Dawn and May
following their dreams to become the worlds top coordinator pair! As
they meet new friends and rivals! And fall in love!!! This is the worlds
biggest academy will their friendship survive all the drama of school?
Find out in Legendary Heights!
Disclaimer: I do not own Pokemon sadly.
Most people might hate you but I don’t really care what people say about
me unless its “You f**king suck” if you say something like that I’ll
get mad. I will make a friend out of you! I swear I will! Unless you
keep ignoring me which is fine.
Thanks for the feedback. I read some of your other reviews to other
stories, and I have a feeling people aren’t as appreciative of your
critical reviews. However, your reviewing really helps me become a
better writer, and I thank you for that. I’ll fix and update the previos
chapters as fast as I can.
Funny you say this, because he’s got readers
Ramaxy18-chanA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/10053345/
Well, thanks i guess. I really never wrote any pokemon fic so i didnt
know about the names, thanks for telling me! And about the dialogue, i
seriously didnt know that you had to write them like that, so really,
sorry cause i didnt know. And, well, i dont think that i will change the
beginning…i dont know, i will maybe think about it but i seriously
dont know. Well, thanks for bothering and helping a beginner(in pokemon)
with her mistakes! Really, thanks. I will rather receive a nice message
than one saying “do you not know what youre doing?!” Or “you suck at
writting” or something along those lines.
I can see that you make a dine Beta, care to join?
Hey, take your flames elsewhere. Sorry my written grammer (still
learning, by the way) isn’t perfectly flawless and up to your standerds.
And speaking of never having read other fics, have you even glaced at
other stuff on here? I do admit to not having read many new trainer
fics, (which, if you think about it is horribly genaric and cleched by
itself which is why I don’t read them, but that’s hardly a reason to
call for the hanging of it’s writers, is it?) But some of the other
stuff on this site is unconcivably wreched compared to this, a lot of it
would put the first draft of Twilight to shame. By the way, I already
said that it’s half-modled after a game in my head, and having them wake
up is at least something – as opposed to the literal nothing the newer
games start with. Oh, and what I meant by original was actually doing
more in the opening that going down stairs, having mom tell you that
porfreesor whoever needs you, and going right to the lab.
But I guess it’s my fault. See, here I thought fanfiction, as in
unoffical fan-work, was only made for fun. I never knew it was to be
written in such flawless professionalism. I get that this is not an
excuse for skimping on the quality, but some of us prefer skill over
talent. I might not have read too many pokemon fanfics, but I’ve played
the games long enough to realize that the real value comes from the time
and effort of training. Which is worth more, the wild Rapidash you just
found, or the Raichu you’ve spent so long training up? During that
training, you’re bond to have low points, if you don’t your effort means
nothing and you can’t grow properly. Yeah, it’s not my best work, but
I’m still proud of it, and I’m gonna teak it until it’s better and from
thatI’ll be even prouder.
Zach, if this is you, I’ve told you I don’t need the help of someone
who’s idea of so-called criticism is nothing but insults, put-downs and
other malisious things you think are funny to do to people who’s dreams
of doing what they love don’t come true over night. The phase is trial
and error not trial and
I-get-everything-I-right-as-soon-as-get-it-so-I-have-right-to-act-however-want.
Stupid troll.
If you are not Zach, please ignor that last paragraph.
just wrote the reply to your reveiw which felt suspiously like a flame.
Before you go nuts, it has spelling errors as I was writing from a
tablet which is murder enough already.
Dude… I don’t care you are an expert on Pokemon Fanfics T_T I’m 12
years old and I don’t have to do everything perfect, plus I made out the
Fanfic of boredom.
MidnightRevelA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/10032620/
I really appreciate your criticism. I really do! By the similar charges,
i meant treasonous acts, not like girls sneaking into the academy. I
guess i should have made that clearer. And the capitalization is because
it’s like a proper noun. Like a name, just like it is with Pokemon.
There are going to be normal animals in this story, so that’s why i gave
them a proper noun. I know I should have at least hinted at some point,
but I got carried away with the rest of the story. i look forward to
any criticism you have in the future
JayandJoshStoriesA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/10054157/
Thank you for the memo, I’ll be sure to work on that in later chapters.
Also, with the last bit, I know my logic is awful but honestly I’m not
going to dwell on that part specifically. She ended up adopting him and
that’s all that really needs to get across. Still thanks for giving a
review. The first of 86 views!
Thank you very much for the feedback! I always appreciate it. I’m still
working on my writing skill so good constructive criticism is always
appreciated. I hope you continue to follow this story. :)
If you don’t like it, you don’t have to read it ACTUALLY.