In which either FFN is hella glitchy or posting/deleting is the new fad.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10937776/1/A-New-Hope

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10937527/1/Diego-s-Pokemon-and-love-journey

Capitalize your title properly.

Opening your story with a character waking up for the day is generic and horribly, horribly overdone, and to be honest, it’s so incredibly dull and boring a start that even if I hadn’t seen it, very literally here, hundreds upon hundreds of times before, I would still tell you you should have started at some other, interesting point. Also, no one will ever care what your character is eating for breakfast.

Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

When used in place of a name, it’s capitalized like one, so it should be “Mom”.

Write out numbers with letters.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.

Also, your POV is a mess and this is generally terrible. Get a beta reader.

One, by the author.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10937144/1/Begging-on-your-knees

Capitalize your title properly.

It’s not “normal POV”, it’s “third person POV”. The one that uses “I” and “me” is first person. Also, don’t jump between the two in a story, it’s just obnoxious.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts, so stop that.

There is no capital letter shortage.

Never use an apostrophe when making a word plural.

Get a beta reader.

[and i know it’s short but i was’nt at home i was using my grandma’s computer.]

That’s why FFN lets you save things in the Document Manager for longer than ten seconds. You could’ve put it there, come home, then worked on it further.

One, from author’s sister.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10937098/1/Pokemon-Acholibyte

Opening your story with a character waking up for the day is generic and horribly, horribly overdone, and to be honest, it’s so incredibly dull and boring a start that even if I hadn’t seen it, very literally here, hundreds upon hundreds of times before, I would still tell you you should have started at some other, interesting point.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Write out numbers with letters.

[“Well Uhh, I’m sorry to say I don’t have the usual, Grass, Fire, Water starters so I only have 2 for the moment.”
Kendall being like any kid impatient to get their pokemon says with a smile, “That doesn’t matter! At least it’s a Pokemon!”
“Oh… Then in that case, what do you choose? Vaporix the Dragon Lizard Pokemon or Clefix the Fairy Cat Pokemon?” He says surprised.]

Another overdone thing is having the professor be out of the regular starters and the poor kid saying that they’ll take anything and “anything” turning out to be a dragon type.

If it is vitally important they get a special dragon type, you can make it marginally less sueish by just saying those are the starters for the area.

Just having their rival be a one-dimensional dick doesn’t work in a story, and you’re not even doing that properly because you have your main character getting exactly the pokemon they wanted while the rival is stuck with one they hate. A rival character is supposed to be someone the main character eventually beats, but you’ve skipped that to have your sue protected from ever having anything go wrong.

Stop capitalizing random words.

[Well that was the first chapter… terrible am I right? Well maybe not… ]

No, you were right the first time.

Look around at the other OT stories posted in this category. Do you notice how 90% of them are exactly the same as this one? Do you notice how also, most of them never updated again? That’s because this kind of story is both boring to read and boring to write.

If you have some plan for a plot where the character saves the world or whatever that starts ten chapters in, start your story there instead, because no one wants to read ten chapters of nothing and most people simply won’t. If you don’t have any plan for a plot, stop posting, think of a plot, then start your story there. Cardboardcutout-man walks around Region X getting pokemon is not a plot, and stories need plots.

One review, which may or may not have been by the author, because by the time I reviewed, it was gone. What’s up with this?

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10937033/1/Hanabi

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.

“a male’s bellow ”

Don’t use “a male” or “a female” like this, they sound ridiculous.

[“My humble apologies for my discourtesy, Madam Henrietta, My name is Amarillo del Bosque Verde, and it is an honour to see you once again.” She rehearsed meekly.]

Your dialogue tags manage to go far beyond merely ridiculous into jaw-droppingly stupid. How could this have even seemed like a good idea? She rehearsed? You mean Henrietta isn’t there and this is all in her head as she practices what she would say? Because that appears to be what you just wrote because for some reason you thought using “said” would be more distracting than spewing nonsense everywhere. Your friend clearly doesn’t know how to edit or they would have stopped you, so find an actual beta reader next time.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10936932/1/Just-one-chance

Capitalize your title properly.

[He didn’t want to be mean to her, but this whole attitude she kept up was really starting to annoy him. Yes, he realized that she was heartbroken, but it happened MONTHS ago. Yes, the broken couple had dated for quite a bit of time, and had known each other for much longer, but still, this kind of behavior was unacceptable in Gary’s perspective. She needed to move on with her life, and he wanted to be the one to see the future in at her side. ]

From the story overall, I think you meant for Gary to be a lot less selfish than he sounds here. Him trying to cheer her up? Okay. Him responding to her rebuffing him personally with SHE’S ANNOYING ME BY BEING SAD, THIS IS UNACCEPTABLE makes it seem this really isn’t about wanting her to be happy but just wanting her. From what you’ve written here, Misty may still be missing Ash, but mostly she seems to not want to be around Gary. If you want to present the pairing as a good idea, it’d have helped to actually show them interacting positively here and her only leaving once the topic was brought up, rather than Gary bringing it up the first line, Misty telling him to leave her alone, Gary continuing on the topic, and Misty literally walking away to, as him himself says, escape him. The earlier summary of Gary coming over to try to cheer her up and cook for her was a good start, but with what we’re actually shown, there’s no sign Misty liked that and plenty of reason to read it as Gary imposing himself on her “for her own good” when he’s just making her more miserable.

Also, use said, dancing around it is distracting, and when paragraphing, try to keep a speaker and their actions together.

[She glared at him in response.
“Piss off, Oak.”]

would be much better written as.

[She glared at him in response. “Piss off, Oak.”]

and so on.

Zero.

Refreshing the next one makes it disappear too. And the next one. Also, one says “Story does not have any chapters. Please check to see you are not using an outdated url. ” So, bugs?

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10937019/1/That-s-Amour

[ She’ll be devastated to find out I’m going to leave again,” he sighed as he looked down. ]

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

[“I remember that too professor. ]

Like here. It’s being used as a name, isn’t it?

This is insanely boring. It’s just people talking forever about doing stuff in one building or another. For god’s sake, you even waste time with the wake-up-eat-breakfast filler, and you don’t even get to that until halfway through the fic. This is endless filler.

One.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10937434/1/Pokemon-Indigo-League-Champions

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Opening your story with a character waking up for the day is generic and horribly, horribly overdone, and to be honest, it’s so incredibly dull and boring a start that even if I hadn’t seen it, very literally here, hundreds upon hundreds of times before, I would still tell you you should have started at some other, interesting point. Also, no one will ever care what your character is eating for breakfast.

Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.

[Green walked out of her room wearing a plain white shirt, along with black jeans with a stylized signature on the right pocket, she had a Pikachu clip in her hair and also wore a Pokèball satchel and white gloves. “What do you think Mom? Do I love snazzy or what?”
Her mother just stood there, not sure what to say. “Um…you look great dear. It’s A little plain but great.” ]

No.

Green is going out to run around in the woods through tall grass and bushes. What a mom would say is, “Um…you look great dear, but you’d be better off wearing pants you don’t mind destroying. And you’re going to lose the clip within a day. Also, why are you wearing gloves?”

[“I’m sorry Mom; can you at least send me a change of clothes when I get to Pewter City?”
“Sure but don’t count on me sending you anything too….revealing.”
Green turned as red as a tomato. “Mom that’s not what I was hoping for!”]

This is bizarre. She’s asking her mom to send her clothes that she currently has. If her mom doesn’t let her wear revealing, there’d be none in her closet. This is written like Green has no other clothes and is asking her mom to buy something and send it.

[Professor Oak was speaking with Green’s father, Mr. Ketchum: the Indigo League Champion. The two had once been rivals back in the day but now they keep it all at a minimum. Professor Oak had relatively spikes brown hair and a bit of a smirk too. Mr. Ketchum’s hair was tamed by his hat but a lot of it was still showing from the sides.
“Hello Green, we didn’t see you there. My name is Professor Gary Oak; I was a friend of your father. He asked me to give you your very first Pokémon. You should consider yourself a very lucky girl; I left my lab in Sinnoh just to be here.” Professor Oak said]

Why on earth did you have a paragraph explaining things followed by Oak repeating those same things? Do you think your readers forget what you wrote within a line or two, or do you think they’re just too stupid to understand anything unless you say it more than once?

[“Not to worry, I planned out how each gym will go depending on my choice. Bulbasaur will easily be able to beat the first two gyms, however Charmander will have the hardest time out of all the three making him a pretty challenging choice, but Squirtle will be effective on the first gym and pretty ok for the second gym. I chose Squirtle since I don’t want anything too easy but yet I don’t want anything too hard.” ]

God this is so dull.

Just because in the game you have one path and your victory is certain doesn’t mean it works like that for actual kids in the world. In the games, most people have a whopping zero badges, and just having a grass type wouldn’t change that to two.

It seems like you have some sort of actual plot intended, so figure out what’s actually relevant to that and skip to it, rather than plodding along novelizing the opening of the game first. Everyone already knows the opening and if we wanted that, we’d go play it and make our own choices about how easy we wanted the first gyms to be.

And this one’s disappeared, but the one review it got still displays. WTF, FFN. Why must you make my life difficult?

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10937582/1/Pokemon-David-s-Journey

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Write out numbers with letters.

Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.

[“Mum, dad, David!”  ]

When used in place of a name, it’s capitalized as a name, so, “Dad”.

[“Muuummmm?” David asked in his annoying question tone, “when can I go on a Pokemon adventure?” David was now 11 and was desperate to go.
“David…” his mum said, “you are never going on an adventure, you need to look after me and your dad.”]

This is stupid. He’s eleven. He’s not going to be any use to them for at least a decade. There’s also no explanation for why his older brother can go but he was picked as future slave.

[David’s mum walked into the room, to find the note.
“George! David’s ran away on a Pokemon journey!” she shouted.
David’s dad came through and said; “After his first loss he will come back, leave him, there is no reason to call the police, as I say, he will come back after his first loss]

So why even tell him he can’t go in the first place?

“Your” is possessive, “you’re” is short for “you are”.

[“What did you say your name was again?” asked Elm.
“David,” said David, “David Dragontamer!”
“Ok, print, and here we go!” said Professor Elm handing the small red card to the 11 year old.
“Thanks!” said David, over the moon about the fact he was a trainer now.
“Dragontamer…” said Augustine, “I’ve never heard that name before…”]

Is this because he just made that up on the spot? If so, good job, that sounds like something an eleven year old would make up as an alias after running away.

[Hello again! What do you think of the story so far? ]

You needed more planning.

First, a good reason for them telling him no.

You actually have a bit of this in his brother not getting a pokemon until thirteen while he’s only eleven when he runs away. If his family didn’t like the idea of trainers at all (maybe they want their kids to be doctors or something) and were going to make him wait another two years to even get a pokemon, that could be his motivation to run off and do it himself. More on his brother would help here – maybe his brother only keeps the cyndaquil as a pet and spends his time studying instead, and his family is always telling him to be more like his brother and stop talking about pokemon battles.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10937919/1/Pure-Hatred-to-True-Love

This is pretty terrible, from the opening where for some reason you thought transcribing game battle text was exciting through the way all the characters act insane and keep monologuing their feelings to the suddenly let’s be in love and fuck. Serena was particularly bad – she knows one pokemon is constantly abusing others, then gets upset when the other one finally manages to fight back.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10936413/1/Espeon-s-Cruel-World

If you’re just writing stupid misery sues living in nuclear families with beds and laptops, why claim they’re pokemon? Just admit everyone here is human and stick it on fictionpress.

Also, your grammar’s awful.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10936268/1/Haven-t-We-Been-Here-Before

This is pretty eh. It’s quite predictable and doesn’t really explore the concepts, instead you sidestep it by having the ultimate answer be that he’s destruction so he can murder anyone attacking Xerneas, even though the cycle setup means he can only defend her when she’s asleep and is totally useless in the periods she’s awake and most likely to be running into trouble. Also despite the fact he destroys stuff automatically no matter what he does, and that you showed having the power warps whoever has it to become more hateful, and this all generally being a really dumb plan if that was the intent.

It’s really not clear why Arceus couldn’t just explain the whole “I made you destruction because I needed a heavy hitter” idea, especially since not knowing made him turn bad for a long time while he stewed over this, so it seems pretty counterproductive. Also not clear why there even is a destruction in that case as the rest of the areas don’t have a dedicated murderlegendary so it’s clearly not mandatory.

Part of the problem, I suppose, is that this is immediately written into a corner by you making life = goodness as opposed to life = life. Life, for example, shouldn’t be able to heal disease, since that’s just more life. It might be able to speed a wound’s closing, but it certainly couldn’t sterilize it. The flower gardens you have her making everywhere can only happen if other things are cleared from the area, otherwise taller plants should be blocking the light or existing grasses and flowers should already be growing in the same place. Etc. It’s entirely possible to have destruction be a part of renewal, but you ignored that whole aspect in favor of making the focus be romance.

And trying to make it a message about depression is just bizarre, since getting turned into a literal engine of destruction but realizing you have a purpose and it’s to murder anyone who might hurt your girlfriend so it’s okay you kill people by breathing is kind of not applicable to most people’s lives.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10936552/1/Explorers-of-Future-Past

No one needed yet another novelization of the opening of the game. It’s been done.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10936573/1/Making-Assumptions

[“There’s no room for Brendan,” May replied with a frown, before crossing over to the nearby table and taking a chair from the vacant table. She set it down beside Steven and flashed him a satisfied grin. “There.”
The boy- Brendan, she had called him- chuckled nervously, obviously affected by the glare Steven was sending him. He sat down slowly in the chair that had been intended for May.
“How have you been, Steven?” May asked, pleasantly oblivious to the murderous aura that was surrounding her dear friend.]

See, this kind of thing is less “haha, silly Steven, May actually loves you!” and more “oh my god May run away from the psycho, nothing good will come of dating this man”. Steven being this bitter and aggressive about the misunderstanding marks him as terrible for a relationship. It’s not cute that May’s enamored with him, it’s just very sad because going by this, he’s going to fly into a jealous rage every week when he sees her doing things like speaking to another man or going out when he’s not there to keep an eye on her, and ends with him murdering her and/or whatever guy he imagines she’s cheating on him with.

[Really, it baffled Steven as to why May would bother with such an immature brat. Oh, he could imagine the kisses, the way the boy would slobber over her like a rabid Poochyena. He could imagine the boy’s tiny, groping hands fumbling with the clasp of May’s bra clumsily until she sighed and undid herself. He could imagine the way the boy would focus on his own pleasure before hers, leaving her unfilled instead of focusing on making her moan and cry out and beg for more and-
“Brendan’s notmy boyfriend,” May’s innocent voice cut through his gradually darkening thoughts. He froze for a moment, feeling his heart begin to pound heavily again as it was filled with hope.
“He’s not?”
“No,” May replied calmly, smiling in that way which always seemed to make his heart skip a beat. “We’re old friends; he’s like a brother to me.”
If Steven had been distracted, he might have missed the way the boy flinched at May’s words. A pleased, vindictive feeling ran through the man as he came to the realisation that his moment of weakness and jealously was not as unfounded as he may have thought.]
Really. The only way this doesn’t end with him murdering her and/or whatever guy he imagines she’s cheating on him with is if when he inevitably attempts it, she’s fast enough to kill him in self-defense.

There are ways of showing a person is in love with another person other than unhinged, murderous jealousy.