Some quality science fail and one outright insane author.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10961454/1/Wave-Re-Endemic
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Well, this is kind of intriguing, but I can’t make heads or tails of it – which I was okay with for the first section, but through the unending regular kids in school section it was pretty annoying.
[“That is impossible. The existence of a second set of brainwaves suggests he has a second brain.” ]
Also this is just really not how the machine works.
[“You’re honestly suggesting he is growing another brain?”
“It is either that or his brain is producing two entirely separate types of waves.]
See, the brain is an organ. You can tell if there’s an entirely separate one in there by just seein if there’s a second organ or not. If the machine’s giving abnormal readings, the answer would just be that his one brain is malfunctioning. And the machines are pretty much shit anyway, they’ll find brain activity in a bowl of jello.
Zero.
Does anyone else know what’s going on?
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10961503/1/Mightyena-s-Adventures
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[‘Why? You want to catch me?’ Mightyena spoke. The girl was shocked.
“You can talk?!” The girl was surpised.]
Spellcheck, also don’t have pokemon talk for no reason.
[‘Yeah. I can talk. Sure, I’ll go with you. You need your own protection againist Wild Pokemon.’
“Okay. Pokeball, let’s go!” The girl catches Mightyena easily.]
And if you’re going to have talking pokemon, you have to treat them like any other character, which means they get their own motivations rather than existing solely to support your character. Why did this mightyena just show up? What was his life before this, and why is he so fine giving all of that up to go with a stranger?
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10961519/1/WIP-Title
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10961734/1/Hot-reuniouns
Capitalize your title properly.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
“Its” is possessive, “it’s” means “it is.”
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10961746/1/I-Can-t-Believe-It-s-Happening
A reupload that ends with the author’s note:
Hi guys! Hope you liked this first chapter! I chose Amourshipping since it’s the trendiest one right now. Please review, favorite, and follow! Especially review since I wanna see what you guys think of my progress compared to Reunion of Memories since I want to see if I improved as a writer or not. :)
I also hope you guys can find any misspellings in the story and help me correct them :), I would appreciate that very much.
Remember to review! I love seeing them and using them to help me improve! Trolls and spam as well as unnecessary reviews just like the one Farla posted in the old version of this story are absolutely not accepted. In relation to that, I would just like to know if any of you agree with Farla that my grammar is wrong. I will not get mad at these reviews because I want to know if what she said is actually true.
Going by the reviews, apparently the original version said something about my writing but sadly it was edited out by the time I reached it.
Also, ten reviews, because the category rewards only the worst things.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10961750/1/Pokemon-Unhinged
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10961810/1/Pokemon-Ambitions
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
“Your” is possessive, “you’re” is short for “you are”.
It’s really not a great idea to include the very opening of the game. It’s obviously aimed at the player and not the character.
Opening your story with a character waking up for the day is generic and horribly, horribly overdone, and to be honest, it’s so incredibly dull and boring a start that even if I hadn’t seen it, very literally here, hundreds upon hundreds of times before, I would still tell you you should have started at some other, interesting point. Also, no one will ever care what your character is eating for breakfast.
[ and Taillows ]
You’ve mostly not bee capitalizing, which is correct, but you’ve done so here. Also, pokadots is also not capitalized.
Write out numbers with letters.
“Its” is possessive, “it’s” means “it is.”
Getting a first pokemon is not inherently interesting. If you’ve got an actual plot to this, you should start your story there.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10961899/1/Big-Top-Bungle
Eh. The previous one was fun because it suggested things about the world, this just seems more random.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10961924/1/Greatest-Desire-Worst-Nightmare
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Write out numbers with letters.
And yet another of these everyone’s-evil-to-Ash-fics. It’s been done and done terribly, it’s really not something that needed another fic.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10962092/1/Maxie-s-Bad-Day
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Four.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10962121/1/Problems-are-to-be-expected
This really doesn’t seem like it stands as an actual oneshot. It’s less a story and more a status update on the characters that doesn’t go anywhere much.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10962157/1/X-Y-Legends-Ultimate-Masters
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Write out numbers with letters.
[18 Trails ]
Also, did you mean “trials”?
[The Masters often added in stopping crime syndicates, though they did not fight them head on, they still stood alongside their allies and were ready to aid if the chosen hero failed. Though they had not yet been called upon ]
Aided. Also, how exactly did they “often” help if you just said it’d never actually come up a single time?
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Two, one extensive concrit.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10962427/1/Fires-of-Prophecy-Legend-s-Fall
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10962438/1/If-Everything-Goes-Well
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
“Your” is possessive, “you’re” is short for “you are”.
[ (Author’s note- I’m not describing Shauna’s, Calem’s, Tierno’s and Trevor’s Outfits or appearance. If you don’t know what they look like, play X and Y, or look it up. End of Author’s Note) ]
Don’t do this. If you don’t want to describe them, don’t. Don’t waste even more time going on about how you’re not doing it.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10962443/1/Pokemon-Crystal-s-Destiny
[What a boring day. It’s the usual, but still. Why can’t I have a pokémon too like Gold does? It’s totally unfair. I mean, I know I shouldn’t be jealous of my best friend, but it’s really unfair. I guess since my mom doesn’t have a pokémon, she can’t really do anything about it. ]
But she could just ask Gold, because if he’s got a pokemon he can catch her one.
[ I’ve always understood pokémon, which can be good and bad. ]
Generally a bad thing in fanfic.
[“Do you want chikorita?” ]
Should be “a chikorita” if it’s not being used as a proper name, while if he’s using it as the pokemon’s personal name, it’s Chikorita.
One, concrit.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10962457/1/Skeletons-In-The-Closet-Monsters-Under-The-Bed
[We planted my grandmother’s bones deep in the earth, with a knife in her pocket so she could cut her way through Purgatory and a pair of freshly-cut swanna wings in her arms to ensure her flight to heaven. ]
I really love this opening, and as well as generally how you’re working pokemon into the fabric of the world. Plus, mysterious tablets! Always great. Really looking forward to seeing where this goes.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10962498/1/I-Know-You-Care
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[“That’s okay Iris,” he began, lifting his suitcase from the bed. “no matter what you say, I know you care.”]
You’re doing dialogue right for almost all of this, but here, either the dialogue alone would be “That’s okay Iris. No matter what you say…” and so the “n” should be capitalized, or it’s “That’s okay Iris, no matter what you say…” in which case you shouldn’t have a period in the middle and the whole thing should be [“That’s okay Iris,” he began, lifting his suitcase from the bed, “no matter what you say, I know you care.”]
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10962509/1/They-re-out-there
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
It’s okay, four letters.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[“Why are we even trying this? It seems impossible enough already!” The scientist said while looking at the other scientist. “We don’t even know if it’s out there or not.” ]
This seems like a serious misunderstanding of what science is. If you don’t know if something’s there, then you try an experiment to find out.
[ As told, I work with James and right now James has stuck on a theory that Pokémon exist in outer space. I think it is ridiculous. Pokémon in outer space? That is just impossible in my opinion, but James insists in continuing and as a good friend, I can’t say no. ]
And this is just dumb. There are pokemon that are living rock chunks. There are pokemon that are made of metal. There are pokemon that are ghosts. If it’s considered perfectly reasonable for people in our world to try to find life in outer space when all life we know of is fleshy, reliant on above-freezing temperatures, and easily damaged by radiation, then the only thing they’d think was ridiculous was the fact they hadn’t already found hundreds of pokemon in outer space.
[“So what was James´ special surprise for tomorrow?”
“He said that we were going to build a machine. The machine would send up radio signals to see if anyone would respond to it. I think it is one of his better ideas, don’t you think?
“It is a good idea but I have a small question.”
“Yes?”
“What if you can’t communicate with them?”]
Overall, this seems like you were writing this for our world and then clumsily pasting in pokemon. People can’t properly communicate with the pokemon sitting next to them, let alone do it by sending “signals” We aren’t beaming radio waves into space in the hopes they’ll bounce off a space whale, the idea is that the radio signals will be picked up by another alien *entire technological civilization*, which will then build a machine to send the signals back.
[“It is the ”thing” that will transmit our signals to any Pokémon in outer space and eventually receive signals back.” ]
Seriously this looks like you literally wrote the whole thing using the word “alien” and then turned it to pokemon, not understanding that we aren’t looking for aliens that are biological radios to bounce signals off of but looking for intelligent life that can build something to respond.
[“Test one! Barry, you turn it on in 3…2…1…Now!” I pressed and the first signal went away into outer space.
“Let’s wait for ten minutes and see if anything happens.
We waited another ten minutes.
“Test two! Barry, turn on in 3…2…1…Now!” I pressed the button and the signal went away.
We waited another ten minutes. Nothing happened and many scientists left.]
Also you know how “light-years” is a really big number of miles, yet everything around is multiple light-years away because space is really, really big?
Assuming the “signal” is light (which no, not how it’s done), it’d take eight minutes just to reach the sun. Assuming there was something on the surface of the sun, it instantly understood what we were doing, and instantly sent back a signal, it’d still take longer than ten minutes to get there and back. It’d take hours to reach Pluto. Assuming Mars was at its closest point to us, assuming the tiny beam of this signal hit something, it’d take four minutes to get there and four minutes back, giving two minutes for whoever received the signal to figure it out, build something to respond, and send it within this timeframe.
In conclusion, next time you want to write a story centering around some scientific thing, look it up first.
Zero. Also, apparently this was something they did for school.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10962521/1/A-Ranger-s-Shadow
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
[the Library. ]
Don’t capitalize random words.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You really don’t need to have a chapter that’s just a character sitting around saying that this is before he started doing anything interesting.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10962681/1/Red-Paths-May-Be-Worth-It
[“Careful your neck doesn’t get sore. It might hurt in the morning,” Brock commented, sending her a peculiar expression at her daze-like state. Dawn seemed to snap out of it a moment later. After taking another moment to gather herself, she wordlessly began unpacking for the night, starting with her sleeping bag.
“I guess the sky looks pretty nice tonight,” Ash brought up. Brown eyes reflecting the stars as he gazed above, he smiled – one of his loving, genuine smiles that warmed the hearts of everyone who knew him. “It actually kinda reminds me of old times.”
“Of her?” Brock inquired gently. It was a loaded question; he knew. ]
Just use said. Way less distracting.
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
Two.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10962683/1/Pokemon-Alex-and-Sammy-s-Kanto-journey
Write out numbers with letters.
Don’t center all your text, it’s really annoying.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Being related to canon characters doesn’t inherently make your characters interesting. Your story needs a plot, not a bunch of namedropping.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10962758/1/Primordial-Beginnings
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
“Its” is possessive, “it’s” means “it is.”
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10962827/1/EPIC-RANDOM-T-OR-D
No.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10962859/1/Pokemon-Revolution
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[ The guard shown his flashlight, showing cages packed with a pink like and pig like creatures, all having an empty expression. ]
Shone, “pink like” makes no sense you just mean “pink, and it should be “all with an empty expression”. You have a lot of other grammar errors. Proofread better and get a beta reader.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10963077/1/Pokemon-Champions-Fight-For-The-Legendaries
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor. Or legendary, seriously stop that.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Don’t ask for OCs. You’re entirely capable of doing it yourself and that way produces characters that actually fit the story as opposed to being a terrible mess.
Four.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10963178/1/Wakarimasen
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10963187/1/The-End
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
Random people dying of old age isn’t really tear-inducing. Fic that makes no sense unless people already know and give a damn about your OCs is not a one-shot, because for obvious reasons it can’t stand on its own. It goes with whatever story they came from.
Two.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10963242/1/Pokemon-The-Legend-Beyond
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Eight lines is not an acceptable chapter length. And no, calling it a prologue doesn’t change that, prologue doesn’t mean an eight-line incomplete chapter either.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10963301/1/Pokemon-Academy
Already got this person, thank god.
Zero.
Also, stopping here for the night!