Today we learn that female trainers winning pokemon battles is terrible and they need to stop.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11732928/1/Mittens-and-Gloves

I managed to recognize this name as someone who blocked me! Wow, me.

Anyway it’s a fic where there aren’t any pokemon and it’s a bit more conspicuous than most because it means the gloves/mittens divide isn’t adulthood/childhood so much as able to grasp pokeballs/not able to and possibly having nothing at all to do with what people prefer for warmth.

Four reviews.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11733035/1/Origin-of-Harmony

[Challenges: Pokémon Diversity E9: a drabble novel (like how you would write a regular multichap) with “chapters” under 500 words ]

A drabble is a word for something written and edited to be precisely 100 words. If it’s not a hundred words, it’s not a true drabble, if it’s not precisely any number, it’s not even in the spirit of one.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11733297/1/Stolen-Dance

Semicolons should only ever be used when connecting two complete sentences and even then almost never.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

Write out numbers with letters.

One.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11733918/1/Tensou-Pokemon-Goeiger

Try harder.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11733936/1/old-friends-new-lives

Capitalize your title properly.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

[“Arceus, Looker, relax!” she laughed ]

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

[Her lipsticked smile was one that I sort of recognized in that I saw it in myself sometimes – the ‘oh, Looker, you bumbling idiot, I love you anyway’ smirk  ]
[This was not what Looker needed. He was going to go and get his heart broken, and then where would this mission be? ]

Can’t really be both that she’s jealous because Jupiter actually reciprocates Looker’s feelings and assuming Jupiter’s just stringing Looker along. Also generally, women hating each other because of a guy is a really tired plot and you need more to it than just that.

One.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11734009/1/A-New-World-A-New-Life

So not only are nonstory chapters banned, but this isn’t even a long author’s note.

This isn’t really a chapter. More of a long author’s note. It’s what, a hundred words? And you still wasted everyone’s time posting that as a separate chapter rather than your first chapter actually being your first chapter?

One.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11734183/1/Pokemon-Better-than-the-rest

Capitalize your title properly.

Don’t use ‘ for thoughts, it’s too close to ” for speech. And it’s a bad idea to use bold for pokemon speech, especially when you’re already using bold for all sorts of other things.

Spellcheck.

[but for now it is OCxRenamon ]

Then it’s a crossover and should be posted as such.

Write out numbers with letters.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

This is littered with errors. Proofread better and get a beta reader.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11734215/1/Twelve-Wishes

[Eyes glued to the hypnotic motion of near perfect curves, for a guy ]

Okay, so, people can be attracted to guys and not girls. A guy can just have nice curves without that having the qualifier that obviously a girl’s would be better. You’ve already got the opening villain being a predatory gay guy, you really do not want to pile anything else in that makes it seem like you’re saying homosexuality = freaky deviant lesser version of real attraction.

I do appreciate Ein getting thoroughly murdered, though, as well as the story continuing to show no one else knew who the guy was or had any idea why someone would do this.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

[the spheres of sapphire ]
[deep blue orbs. ]

Don’t call eyes spheres, orbs, etc.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11734263/1/No-Mercy

Poem.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11734436/1/Revolution

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Semicolons should only ever be used when connecting two complete sentences and even then almost never.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

[surprisingly, the King kept the apartments in very nice condition despite the rest of Mauville’s niggardly appearance.  ]

Look, you’re clearly very pleased with that vocab word but no, rubble and chaos and disorder isn’t “stingy” and so its synonym isn’t appropriate here.

One.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11734479/1/Pokymon

“Parody” doesn’t mean “bad” and certainly not “boring rehash”.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11734543/1/Friends-at-the-Chateau

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

[ it seems that you and Grant get along very nicely, *wink wink nudge nudge*” ]
[*Viola is not amused -_-* ]

Don’t do this.

Battles are not inherently interesting and just shouting orders is particularly not.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11734558/1/Cloud-Bros

If you think your story is “stupid” that doesn’t make it parody/humor.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

Two, one mild crit.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11734742/1/Sinnoh-League-Victors

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

[so that’s mute point. ]

“a moot point” is how it’s written.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

Eight because it’s about Ash being better than in the anime.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11734779/1/Guilt-and-Forgiveness

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11734796/1/Baton

I really love how each shift in POV turns things on its head while still managing to fit all in the same universe. Bored and distracted with trivial stuff to awesome showmanship to murderous seriousness to whining to Giovanni at the top, complete with an explanation of why the whole thing is set up as it is.

[What he soon learned was that even if Aqua was batshit crazy, they were a well-oiled batshit crazy. They had leadership and factions and forethought, so that even when they led members off a figurative cliff and into a literal ocean, it was with a clearly articulated purpose. It really unified the whole team. ]

This is glorious. Really, each character is just an endless stream of diamonds as they speak, but this wins because you harnessed the inherent hilarity of Team Aqua to new wonderful ends.

[Oh, and for the next two weeks, make sure trainee Leonard Nix’s rations are cut in half. ]

I’m not quite sure what the point of this is, though – I get that Giovanni wants everyone to stay in their roles, but he isn’t wasting Giovanni’s time here, since Giovanni promptly deals with the guy he tattled on, and his only ambition seems to be to slavishly obey Giovanni’s rules. My best guess is it’s annoying he bugged Giovanni at all but [Two weeks of shenanigans was enough. If he wanted yelling and cheering, he would have just stayed home. There was only one person he could turn to that would understand. It wasn’t Ben or any of the drunk party boys Leonard was with in basic training. No, he had to talk to the man who shared his vision of a society controlled by Rockets. ] presents it as if his only option is his fellow trainees or Giovanni, rather than that he’s bypassing whatever system Giovanni has for handling this. If he’d made a formal report and then bugged Giovanni because the guy wasn’t canned fast enough and it must be because Giovanni didn’t get his very very important report yet, that’d make more sense.

[Her fangs can snap a wartortle’s shell right in half. ]
[and the boy tossed out his wartortle in self-defense. After a quick skirmish, the grunt’s koffing was taken down and the boy continued onward. ]

Also, I like that even the guy monologuing about how only he knows how to run Team Rocket properly doesn’t make quite perfect decisions. He could really use that guy’s raticate now.

Three.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11735257/1/Shining-Stars

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11735339/1/My-Partner-My-Friend

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11735366/1/Where-You-Least-Expect-It

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

You really don’t need to open with filler scenes of them entering a pokemon center, having the standard conversation, and Brock hitting on Nurse Joy in the most generic way possible. Similarly, Team Rocket doesn’t need to take several paragraphs to explain that once again they’re going to try to catch Ash’s pikachu. The “typical intro to pokemon” thing you say you’re doing is a complete waste of time. Your chapter should’ve been about them actually trying to do something, not cut off with them saying they will.

One, intensely vague crit.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11735688/1/The-reunion

Capitalize your title properly.

Write out numbers with letters.

[There she was, 16-year old Touko standing next to the gym. A lot has changed since she left to search for N. To maintain fighting skills and increase them, the girl has accepted every single challenge and defeated everyone, making her rough. Touko was chased by the cops, forcing her to change her appearance. ]

That doesn’t make the slightest bit of sense.

[ about 6’3 feet tall.]
[about 5’3 feet tall. ]

If you’re giving the number down to the exact inch, it’s not “about” that tall, it’s that tall.

It’s “okay”, four letters.

[It was a rough battle (A/n: I suck at this XD), which ended in a draw. ]

Sticking an author’s note in a story is far worse than anything you could be apologizing for.

[Now, Touko gave up the title of the Champion of Unova. The Champion was Nate. Together, her and Cheren got married and became leaders of the Aspertia Gym. As expected, they specialized in double battles. ]

It’s hard to decide what’s more annoying, the choppy nonsense plotting or the fact your story is all about how it’s horrible of her to want to be a great trainer and everything is fixed when she accepts she shouldn’t be and gives her title to a guy so she can marry a different guy.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11735738/1/An-innocent-prank

Capitalize your title properly.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Semicolons should only ever be used when connecting two complete sentences and even then almost never.

One.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11735826/1/What-s-worth-fighting-for

Capitalize your title properly.

[“Challenger is out of usable Pokemon, Misty wins the match.” Referee announced. ]

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. (“Speak” is not a speech verb.) In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

“Referee” should be “the referee”.

[But reality check was different, gym mostly depended on me, so I’m stuck here even if I don’t want to be.]

You generally have a ton of wording issues. Get a beta reader.

Also no, Lance should not be showing up to say Misty’s doing a bad job by being too good a trainer and should either lose on purpose or go away so other people can lose on purpose for a bit. What the hell made you think that was a good plot point.

Three, two crit.