So much progress made!
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10989782/1/Freinds-Together-As-One
Your title is misspelled.
[His Buizel ]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
“Its” is possessive, “it’s” means “it is.”
[“Buizel NO!” Torey watched in horror as Machoke repeatedly slammed Buizel on the ground, each smack more painful to watch than the last. Bones being shattered could easily be heard. Machoke finally ceased the attack, looking at Buizel with an evil grin. Buizel, whose face had been bloodied and battered, closed his eyes in horror, awaiting his fate.
“STOP HURTING HIM!” Torey desperately yelled, running towards Machoke, hoping he would release his beloved pokemon. Machoke’s trainer also ran forward, trying to stop the terrible scene.
Machoke glanced over towards Torey, before smacking Torey away with his free hand when Torey got close. Torey flew back in the air with grace, helplessly watching the scene unfold in slow motion. Machoke’s trainer had also attempted to stop Machoke, before recieving the same fate as Torey. ]
And pokeballs don’t work because…?
Torey really doesn’t seem like much of a friend. He sends out his pokemon knowing it’s weak and not up for a battle instead of just saying no. He then keeps trying to win as his buizel gets pounded rather than recalling his pokemon and giving up, and only even thinks to intervene at the point the machoke is going to outright murder his pokemon.
I suppose you could say this all not making much sense is because it’s all a dream, but if all of it, including Torey’s basic character, isn’t accurate, then it’s a pretty poor way of introducing the characters.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10989782/2/Freinds-Together-As-One
And I see we’re continuing with obvious solutions being overlooked. Does Torey not know how to write?
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10989833/1/Nothing-Wrong-With-Being-Normal
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[“Alright, that’s 150 straight wins, Linoone! I think it’s time we start our journey, don’t you?” asked the pumped-up Liam. ]
While I like the idea of a trainer starting at an older age because they’ve actually been training, the idea he’s been winning nonstop for this long just makes him look like a sue. It also begs the question of why he stuck around this long, because if he’s been doing nothing but winning for that long he can’t have been learning too much more with each match.
Also, you really need more of a plot than just that he’s a strong trainer and he beats all the people.
According to the giant wall of text at the bottom, this is a self-insert type of thing but the main character is the author’s kid.
Yeah.
Two, concrit.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10989971/1/He-Had
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
Write out numbers with letters.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10990058/1/Freedom-meets
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
“Its” is possessive, “it’s” means “it is.”
Write out numbers with letters.
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10990277/1/The-Girl-with-a-Heart-of-Ice
“Everyone has a secret. A secret that nobody is to know. Hazel has one too. However, even if she wants to tell it, she can’t Even she doesn’t know. Follow the Nuzlocke Journey of Hazel as she uncovers the truth behind her past. The important part is… Will she embrace it? Rated T because it’s a Nuzlocke. Better than other stories. Thanks to Curse of the Ninth for Inspiration. ”
Got this person already, and thank god.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10990447/1/Calem-s-Secret
Why are you shifting between [] and “”? It’s all spoken, the fact it’s a phone call doesn’t mean you need special markers.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Spellcheck.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Everyone’s already seen the opening, rehashing all the dialogue yet again while your character thinks it’s dumb like every other character is not needed.
One, concrit.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10990521/1/The-Way-of-the-Warrior
“Its” is possessive, “it’s” means “it is.”
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
This is way too short for a chapter.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10990664/1/May-the-Aura-be-with-You
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Three.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10990684/1/Hakuna-Matata
Script is still very much banned.
Blocked! Guess I told them already.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10990918/1/My-Sleepover-in-the-Pokemon-World
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Write out numbers with letters.
Stop capitalizing random words.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10991123/1/The-Very-First-Night
Got them already.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10991139/1/Blinded-Fire-Journey-of-the-Blind-Champion
Don’t put notes in the middle of your story.
[ a Beedrill]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[My face was filled with shock and hidden fear in that moment. That is how bad it was. My face had been ripped apart in an “x” formation, with the crossing over my nose, stiches over the slashes. My shoulders had slashes that went pretty deep and had stiches as well. I knew that they would leave scars for the rest of my life. My eyes were no longer brown and full of life, they were now an unfocused pale blue. I knew then why I couldn’t see with my own eyes. I was blind.]
Except not meaningfully blind what with still being totally able to see. Really not sure what the point of this is. You say you wanted to write about blind Ash, but you immediately give him magic powers to make him as not-blind as possible. All he has to do is have a pokemon sit on his shoulder and he’s fine.
Also, spellcheck.
As an aside, I think there’s a lot to be said that what’s a disability and what’s a minor quirk would look very different in the pokeworld. Having a blind psychic trainer who sees through their pokemon’s eyes would be great if the author wasn’t screaming about how great it is they’re writing a disabled character and how incredibly challenging the world is because they are BLIND SO BLIND WOW.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10991139/2/Blinded-Fire-Journey-of-the-Blind-Champion
[I was finally out of the hospital. While there, I learned that there were more side-effects to my blindness than most cases. For one, I became really sickly. No joke. I seriously became sick easier than before, mainly respitory and cardio issues. ]
That’s not a side effect of blindness. He’s just also sickly from what happened. Blindness does not give you breathing problems.
[ My mom’s Meowth was resting on my bed, right beside me. Before you ask why my mom has a Meowth, it’s because my father gave it to her before leaving again. He died three years later. ]
So between this and the summary of [ Psychic!Smart!Ash. Different Starter! ] this is really not Ash. It’s an OC. Why are you insisting on saying he’s Ash with a totally different background and experiences and personality and powers rather than just saying you’re writing an OC?
[And, out of nowhere, Leaf made the comment that would end the friendship Gary and I have with her.
“Well, that’s another rival out of the game,” Leaf remarked after a minute of silence. Gary and I were staring at her in slight confusion, me just staring at the direction of her voice. After another minute of silence, Leaf spoke again. “Well, it’s just, Ash is blind now, and everyone knows that a blind person just can’t battle. They need to be able to see what’s going on in a battle and even with Ash’s new ability to see through the eyes of others, he needs to have physical contact with that person or pokemon. It just wouldn’t work in his favor.”
I felt anger like that I have never known boil in my blood. But before I could do anything, mainly start arguing with her, I heard a low growl that escalated into a hiss of pure hate. I looked down to Meowth, where the sound was coming from, and I turned to where I knew Gary was. I look inside me for the psychic power and pushed it to Gary, starting a mental conversation.
‘Lend me your eyes, Gary. I want to see this’
‘You sure. This might get scary’
‘I could always read the memory from you later, but I want to see it as it happens’
‘Okay, whatever you say, Ash. But don’t tell me I didn’t warn you’
After that, Gary grabbed hold of my hand and I was able to see what he was seeing. Leaf was looking our way with a smug look on her face. Gary then looked down to let me see Meowth about ready to pounce. In the next minute, the little cream-colored cat pounced with one paw having three glowing claws on each ‘finger’. Before Leaf could react, the claws slashed against one side of her pretty face. She let lose a scream of pain just as Meowth landed on the ground and walked right back to me.
Gary let go of my hand as my mom came rushing in at the scream. Leaf decided to be her usual bratty self and blame the Meowth, as she always did when things go wrong at my house. “That stupid cat of yours scratched me for no reason!” she yelled while in pain.]
Oh boy character bashing. That was desperately, desperately needed in this fic, good job.
[“That’s what you get for upsetting and insulting my Master!” Meowth snapped back, knowing that I could understand her. I had asked her after coming back from the hospital why she had been calling me ‘master’ ever since the incident, and she explained that she had always called me that, even when I was a baby, so I no longer react to the little cat calling me ‘master’. ]
And of course the fact he can talk to pokemon won’t in any way change the usual trainer/pokemon dynamic, because why make something a plot point that actually matters and does something interesting when you can just use it for sue points.
Eight.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10991158/1/Ash-s-Journey-In-Kalos
Write out numbers with letters.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Two.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10991176/1/Bizarre-Love
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10991212/1/A-New-Life-A-New-Chance
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Write out numbers with letters.
People talking about nothing is not really that interesting.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10991250/1/Teasers
Are against the rules. Just work on actually writing your story.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Don’t put notes in your story.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
One, author.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10991347/1/You-re-A-Toymaker-s-Creation-Trapped-Inside-a-Crystal-Ball
lrn2troll.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10991389/1/Ash-and-May-s-wedding
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10991586/1/I-will-gladly-fight-to-be-alone-with-you
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10991595/1/A-Return-to-Hoenn-Ash-Battles-Brendan
Never open with a list of ages. If it matters, it should come up in the story, if it doesn’t you’re just wasting everyone’s time.
Similarly, listing the characters’ teams is definitely a waste of time.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Battles with no actual consequences are not interesting enough to hang a whole story on.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10991630/1/Pokemon-Restart-The-Folly-of-Space-and-Time
Write out numbers with letters.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Also, don’t use stated.
[“In our defense, we were trying to help everyone out.” Dialga replied. “Ash has saved the world, along with the Legendaries in it several times, and we were worried about when he would eventually grow too old to continue doing so.”]
While it’s fun to try to find explanations, there’s the problem that there’s a pretty huge gap of time between “ten” and “too old to save the world”.
Might work if you said that the issue was time markers and made it work much like the anime actually does, where letting him age somewhat would make it harder to stop his aging later (just as in the anime it’s easier to say he started at ten and never aged than that he started at ten, spent a year in Kanto and turned eleven…) and it’s just easier on the timestream to have the last point time works properly be when he becomes a trainer.
But given unless Ash is spending a decade per region he still shouldn’t be nearing old age, they probably need some other issue like that there’s something really bad coming down the line in like a hundred years or something and they’re acting now to keep Ash around until then.
[“There is a way to fix this!” Dialga quickly stated, drawing Mewtwo’s attention.
‘How?’ Mewtwo asked.
“We can reset time to when he was younger.” Dialga began. “Ash will retain his memories of what has happened, along with his Pokémon, but everyone still in this dimension will forget.”]
We’ll fix the part we keep resetting time by resetting time HARDER and also making Ash aware of it this time? And this will help because?
Learn to write actual scene transitions.
[‘It is a long story, but here it goes.’ Mewtwo began. ‘You see, it all started when I noticed you seemed to be stuck at being 10 years old, no matter how much time went by, and that your knowledge kept getting reset, along with some things about the general knowledge of humans altering, so I set out to find and correct this state…’
-Much later-
‘… and that is how I found out what happened to you and how Giratina and I are making Dialga and Palkia fix their mistakes. Any questions?’ Mewtwo asked as he finished up, only for Ash to raise his hand. ‘Yes Ash?’]
No, seriously, proper transitions. Like here, all you had to do was write was something like “Mewtwo explained what was going on and finished up saying, “…and that was how I found out what happened to you.”
You could even cut most of the actual paragraph because the reader just saw it happen.
[Misty Waterflower, maid of Ash Ketchum (and one of his girlfriends due to a rarely used law), woke up alone in bed. This was a bit unusual, as her employer is a kindhearted man, who doesn’t like risking waking his girls if he can help it, so he usually waits for them to wake up, since when they sleep at his house, he and his girls share a bed, however, there had been times before where he had to get up before them, so it wasn’t too strange. The fact that her bed wasn’t quite as comfy as usual on the other hand, was, as was the fact that when she woke up she noticed that she seemed to be in the Viridian City Pokémon Center alone, not in her employer/boyfriend’s house, let alone his room.
She quickly took survey, and found that all of her beloved maid dresses were missing, and that her only Poke Balls on hand belonged to Staryu, Starmie, and Goldeen. She quickly came to the conclusion that she was back in time, shrugging any bizarreness off, as stranger things had… will… whatever, happened around Ash and Co.
“I need to find what date it is, so I can meet up with Master Ash.” Misty said with a nod. “Oh, I hope so-ever much that he has his memories too, I wish to return to his service.”]
Well that sure went to hell fast, didn’t it.
Really, it’s my fault for not skipping out at the first opportunity on a harem fic.
Six.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10991631/1/May-and-Dawns-journey
Capitalize your title properly.
Opening your story with a character waking up for the day is generic and horribly, horribly overdone, and to be honest, it’s so incredibly dull and boring a start that even if I hadn’t seen it, very literally here, hundreds upon hundreds of times before, I would still tell you you should have started at some other, interesting point. Also, no one will ever care what your character is eating for breakfast.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Zero.
The end of the 22nd!
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Write out numbers with letters.
A summary is not a fic. If you’re sure this is absolutely necessary (and by the looks of it most is pretty irrelevant) then it goes at the top of your first chapter, not by itself.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10992150/1/The-Game
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10992220/1/Pokemon-Legends-Are-Reborn
Write out numbers with letters.
[ For as long as he could remember, every time he had tried to talk to someone, they just ignored him. The only people that accepted him was his friends back at the orphanage ]
So in other words, plenty of people he talked to didn’t ignore him.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
Four.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10992270/1/A-Smoldering-Kindle
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[Ash had amazing talent when it came to drawing. It didn’t matter what it was, she could draw it with her eyes closed, often time it was just from the memory alone. Professor Oak joked once and said she would make an amazing Pokemon sketch artist when she got older, she was already really good at it. ]
Okay, so in addition to Ash being a girl and losing a leg, also she’s great at drawing. Why exactly are you saying this character is Ash and not a regular OC?
No seriously why the fuck is this a thing.
Four.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10992322/1/2024
[March 3, 2014- Formation of G5 syndicate, led by Giovanni, Cyrus, Ghetsis, Lysandre and Greevil, former leaders of Team Rocket, Team Galactic, Team Plasma, Team Flare, and Cipher. ]
Why does everyone work together? Why are people who want to rule the world okay sharing power, and why do they think people who want to destroy the world are good partners for it?
The timeline seems rather compressed (ten thousand pokemorphs in under a year by breeding? So they’ve got lots of babies? How does that help?) and silly in general. If the only point of this is to try to justify the present setup, you’re better off with a basic summary of how things currently are rather than timeline down to the exact month.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10992322/2/2024
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
The kind of stories that work in gameplay don’t translate well to text, and this is a good illustration of that. The player making a choice to deny someone entry because of their job has meaning, hearing about someone else doing it not so much.
Also, not really sure why you decided the best choice for evil totalitarian government would be the one that started off caring about pokemorphs and pokemon.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10992508/1/Reflected-Stars
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10992515/1/Dark-Roses
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10992601/1/Pokemon-A-Girl-s-Journey-Book-Two
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Also, look up pokemon species if you don’t know how to spell them.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10992686/1/First-Jouney-An-Alpha-Sapphire-Nuzlocke
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Why is everything but dialogue italicized? That’s incredibly annoying.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[Of course I did. Being a trainer, a professional one like I wanted to be, was more than just pitching Pokemon against one another. You needed to get your license and a badge case, and the license meant that you needed to be tested on your basic knowledge of Pokemon. It meant a full physical to see how fit you were and if it was responsible to let you go on your own on a journey.
He set the rules in motions of course. He didn’t mind. He’d seen me battle and knew that I was suited to it and that this was just a routine thing. I mean, nobody had been diagnosed with it in three decades, and I’d been tested at the age of five and the tests had come clean and none of the strain just spontaneously showed up. Or so we thought. Guess the world was about due for a new case, because my tests came back positive for Type B Nuzlocke.
“I. . . Eliza, you know what this means, right?” he asked after telling me.
I didn’t answer right away. I was feeling a little numb. The Nuzlocke Afflicted were a different brand of trainer. They tended to rise to the top, to be better than other trainers. Their was all sorts of perks depending on which strain you have that would develop in time. At a great cost, too great a cost for most of the- most of us.]
Nothing you wrote makes any sense.
Two, one concrit and one author response.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10992708/1/Pokemon-Fate
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[Go for it!” Redwood said. “See your friend for life!”
“For life, huh?” In Niras you are bound to you Pokemon and can’t have more than six. You obtain one new Pokemon when you beat a contest. Not like those in the other region, but you show your bond with you Pokemon. This Pokemon was everything, and will be my fate. I hope it’s cool or cute. Or a dog. I love dogs.]
It doesn’t make any sense that a region would both heavily restrict what pokemon you can have and also give them out randomly.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10992809/1/A-Girl-and-Her-Ghost
Well, this is nicely creepy. Curious where you’re going with it.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10992828/1/The-Pinnacle-of-Masterhood
Actual drabbles!
[I remember it started getting a bit boring after I caught Mewtwo and Red spent ages trying to find Mew under that lorry. ]
The perfect summary of the original games.
I like the idea Green’s hanging out there too and Red’s not totally isolated.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10992841/1/Pokemon-Red-Blue-Green
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
The professor’s speech in the opening of the games is really obviously aimed at the player and not characters. The fact it starts with welcoming you to the world that the characters have spent their whole lives in is somewhat of a tipoff.
[All our foreign Pokémon were taken away from us and are now mostly isolated from the world. ]
That really doesn’t make any sense.
Write out numbers with letters.
[Once they turn 16 they will all be eligible for a partner. When woman are of this age they will wear shorter shirts and tops to show they are ready to be married. ]
Jesus christ what is wrong with you.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10992944/1/GOLD
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10993006/1/Pokemon-The-Hybrid
Capitalize names.
[As he ran he reviewd all he knew about him self. His name was Aero he lived in Waterfall town until it was destroyed. And he was a mix of pokemon and human genes. ]
Why would anyone think about that while they’re running away?
All sentences end in punctuation, not just when you feel like it.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10993057/1/Killing-Boredom
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10993077/1/Pokemon-Mystery-Dungeon-Explorers-of-the-Sky-Retold
Don’t put quotation marks around thoughts.
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
Script format’s banned.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10993094/1/Tale-of-Misfits
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[After that day, I swore revenge on them, regardless of the fact that I don’t have any Pokémon and didn’t want to be around them after what happened to my dad. ]
This really doesn’t make sense. All it does it make everyone involved look like an idiot – her for not thinking to use pokemon, them for somehow getting their plans sabotaged constantly by a kid who can’t even travel between towns.
[After clicking the button on the Poké Ball and throwing it into the air, I saw a flash of light zip down to the ground in front of me before it faded to reveal a Pokémon. Standing there was a little Mudkip, but what surprised me the most was its color. Instead of being the normal blue color, this one was a mix of light purple. Not only that, but it had this angry, irritated look about it. ]
So sueish.
Look, if you wanted her to get a special pokemon, at least do it by a different method than that the pokeball she grabs at random is a special sparkly pokemon with special tailored personality just for her.
[“I usually bring in Pokémon for young Trainers to start with, but this Mudkip was brought in from a reserve. Apparently, the other Pokémon there thought he was too different and began to torment him. He was sent in to me so I could find a way to make him less hostile. Alia, it took you a minute to accomplish what I hadn’t in a month.” ]
This would mean more if she’d actually done anything much to earn it. Instead, you’re just declaring she’s so great and wonderful that asking it to help means the mudkip likes her and there’s no problem.
[The Mudkip nodded after a few second’s pause before leaping up at me and landing on my shoulder before I had the chance to flinch. ]
Really, what’s even the point of giving her a disgruntled pokemon if that vanishes before it’s even hers?
Oh and now magic pokemon speech ability sure why not she’s pretty much at max sue already anyway.
One. “I’m not usually the biggest fan of changing out the game protagonist for an OC, because lots of the time it’s a gateway to Mary-Suedom. ” Oh god is this what’s behind all the OC-Ash stuff?
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10993099/1/Kellyn-s-Altomare-adventures
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
Write out numbers with letters.
Script format’s banned.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10993261/1/Contest-Competition
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10993581/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-The-Chase
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
Why would an arcanine even have a cage it can melt through in seconds? We don’t put polar bears in cages made of tissue paper.
[Unexpectedly, the Arcanine began to speak. “I’m sorry,” it said. “I didn’t mean to scare you. I’m not going to hurt you, but I would like to ask for your help.”
The girl was surprised to hear the Pokémon speaking. “You… you can talk?” she said warily.
“Yes,” said the Arcanine. “My owner taught me how. However, I can only be understood by those who are pure of heart, like yourself.”]
That makes no sense. How did the owner teach “talk but only to purehearted people” and why not spend the time on something useful, like writing to be understood by anyone? Or just how to read maps, since that’d have solved the current problem.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10993651/1/Free-Fall
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Two.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10993725/1/So-much-for-running-away
Spellcheck.
Write out numbers with letters.
You need a space after punctuation.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
One.
Also, author mentions the story was deleted, so I guess bad grammar does still get stories deleted? FFN moves in mysterious and inconsistent ways.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10993807/1/Strange-Comfort
Write out numbers with letters.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Opening your story with a character waking up for the day is generic and horribly, horribly overdone, and to be honest, it’s so incredibly dull and boring a start that even if I hadn’t seen it, very literally here, hundreds upon hundreds of times before, I would still tell you you should have started at some other, interesting point. Also, no one will ever care what your character is eating for breakfast.
Starting your story with an experienced trainer is really rare, but having that experienced trainer then just wander through the same boring events as every newbie squanders that.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10993835/1/Path-of-Trials
[The red and white orb within his mother’s hand had enraptured the boy’s attention ]
It’s really obvious you’ve prioritized “sounding smart” over “actually saying what you meant”. Trying to read your sentences is unpleasant.
“Its” is possessive, “it’s” means “it is.”
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10993950/1/The-Hero-and-the-Skald
[I could not understand my reasoning for staying in the Black Dagger bandit group. I do not know the exact price for attending the Bard’s Collage and it was a pretty steep price from what I’ve heard. I probably just got so used to the risky and lucrative business of stealing from caravans and other travelers. It isn’t so much of the short term lifestyle, but the lack of change in my life that was unhealthy. ]
…what? None of these sentences seem to have anything to do with each other.
[ She said, “I don’t have anything beyond what I don’t need to survive.” ]
Also proofreading would help. Various other errors too.
The plot of this really doesn’t make much sense. First the character says the person coming seems really strong and that she’s “typeless” which is another really bad sign. Then they figure out that the only thing of value she has is her giant murder sword. So why exactly are they engaging her? Banditry isn’t about being a random encounter to anybody who walks by. It’s a consideration of risk vs reward. Even if they win against her at all they’ll just get the one sword, and they’re pretty much guaranteed to get horribly maimed along the way. Even if the sword was awesome enough to be worth someone dying, bandits generally aren’t known for their strict discipline and loyalty, making it pretty hard to convince a group of people to attack on the basis the survivors would be happy with the sword.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10993950/2/The-Hero-and-the-Skald
Continuing to not make much sense. I mean, at least she seems sane in pointing out that she has no reason to pay a guy to guard her when she just kicked his ass, but it doesn’t make sense he’d even try this. Also doesn’t make sense he’d try to prove himself in a fight when he already lost.
Really, just asking to travel with her at all is a hard enough sell given he was trying to rob her an hour ago. Really hard to believe she’d end up agreeing when he claims the defeat was the work of the gods rather than her own skill, that she needs his protection, and that she should pay him. Any of those would be a reason to tell someone to fuck off even if they hadn’t just tried to murder you for your sword.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10993980/1/Pokemon-Delta
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[“Don’t worry, Gramps actually studied human medicine for a while, then he decided he’d rather work with Pokemon. I’m sure he’ll get him stable,” Gary replied, returning his Electivire to a Pokeball. ]
Hm, that’s actually a pretty good excuse for not just taking him to the hospital.
[“Well, let’s go back inside, I’m going to call for a doctor, just in case I missed something,” Professor Oak said.]
And Oak’s being even more responsible. Nice.
Don’t label flashbacks.
Well, this seems different. Curious where it’s going.
Three.
Also, the last fic of Jan 23rd! So done for the night. I’ve now made it to the bottom of Page 1.
Aww, whatever filter you’re using skipped me.
Only stuff first published this month! Means fewer total fics and avoids the problem of telling someone their first chapter’s terrible when they’re thirty chapters in. I’ll try to collect everybody else for a Feb post, I guess.
That’s what I get for trying to game the system.
:(
That’s less than a week away!
“Oh, I hope so-ever much that he has his memories too, I wish to return to his service.”
…she said sarcastically, then shuddered and went to take a shower to wash off the slimy feeling that horrible, horrible dream had left her with before heading to the gym she ran.
(SERIOUSLY WHAT THE FUCK)
Apparently the idea is everyone’s an alt-version from different universes. And since it’s a harem fic, they’re all from hentai games.
Harem fics.
They have a tendency to go into a really creepy territory really fast.
At best they objectify women (and it’s almost always male lead, female harem, not the reverse) and treat them as trophies the protagonist “earns.”
At worst… Well, at worst there is slavery mind control stuff, complete with body changes for women to be more attractive to the protagonist and violent rape. Presented positively. Of course.
“Oh god is this what’s behind all the OC-Ash stuff?”
Probably. That’s how it generally starts in other fandoms: there is a backlash against OC Mary Sues, which turns into a backlash against OCs in general as they are all regarded as Mary Sues even when they aren’t (like, I’ve seen people complaining about a very minor OC who was present in one scene to serve as a plot device).
So the Mary Sue writers switch to turning canon characters into Sues instead.
It is often regarded more positively because a lot of people identify with canon characters (who are often designed to be the audience surrogates to begin with), so it feels less like author masturbating in public and more like author giving you a handjob.
BUT POKEFANDOM IS ANCIENT AND NEVER FELL INTO THAT TRAP!
IT WAS OUR ONE GOOD POINT! OUR ONE GOOD POINT!!!!!!!!
And now it did. Soon, every protagonist will be named Ash. They would be given different parents, moved around in a region most appealing to the writers, would be given different personalities, genderswapped, their appearance will be changed, they would have various superpowers granted by some experiments, mystic events or inherited from their new parents.
But hey, other canon characters would be present too, with much less drastic changes! (No matter how little sense their presence makes in a new context.)
They will be bashed. Always.
Oh god I have to update Unoriginality again.
I thought I was done. ;_;
I liked Unoriginality, it was one of the few parodies of fanfic that didn’t come across as hugely arrogant.
Yay! I thought you were done, but you’re not!
I’ve think I’ve seen author from other fandoms that do write these types of story write the same sort of story for Ash. It’s a migration.
I’m guessing the reason for all the Ash hoopla in TYOOL 2015 can be summarized for two reasons:
The Unova arc is the worst thing ever where all the things wrong with the anime are made as bad as possible, plus some things straight outta bad fanfic. We got:
Ash losing to a another trainer having his first battle ever,
Being completely balls on head retarded in general,
Iris and Cilan being annoying caricatures of Misty and Brock.
Team Rocket being super serious and competent outta nowhere and getting a promotion to spy on Team Plasma with no payout or reason or sense.
Meanwhile, the Kalos arc is the best thing apparently because “Ash is in love with Serena! Lololol Ash is finally
setting himself up for kids!”
So, you got all your Ash-Betrayal Fics (one is actually named as such from a quick look at FF), your “Fixing the Unova arc” fics, even some you thought was okay/good, and all the people irritated at Ash enough that they thought being a sue was a better alternative, so they named all their OCs Ash in spite.
Also, while in 5th gen, the Video Games were a lot more popular while the anime sucked. Non-Ash OCs stem more from the video games fandom. Kalos was weak story and character-wise.
But that’s basically Orange Islands and Johto. And we all dealt with that the proper, mature way, by bashing him into the ground and saying our OCs were so much better.
“Also, author mentions the story was deleted, so I guess bad grammar does still get stories deleted? FFN moves in mysterious and inconsistent ways.”
See, this is exactly how I see deletion going down at FFN. So many fics directly violate their rules that I like to imagine that the arbiters of FFN wander the site aimlessly, dazed with power, deleting haphazardly and purely on whim, with no system in place and no one to answer to, knowing that for every fic they delete five that violate the same rule will appear in its place, yet satisfied in the knowledge that they are mildly inconveniencing individual people.
It’s beautiful, really. Like a bunch of lazy bureaucrats waging an endless low-stakes battle against an eldritch abomination that can barely be contained, let alone defeated.