Twelve pages, and now only five hours behind!
Dialogue is written as “Hello,”
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new
paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up
into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new
paragraph.
paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up
into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new
paragraph.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
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Dialogue is written as “Hello,”
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[Rachel Montgomery was supposed to
start her journey a year ago but feeling as though she was not ready
enough, she had decided that it would be best if she waited one more
year. Learn a bit more about the Pokémon world and what not—even
though her dad taught her everything she knows about now—just to be
safe. ]
start her journey a year ago but feeling as though she was not ready
enough, she had decided that it would be best if she waited one more
year. Learn a bit more about the Pokémon world and what not—even
though her dad taught her everything she knows about now—just to be
safe. ]
So close!
If she was worried about not being
ready, she would have spent this time raising a pokemon. It’s not a
binary thing – you don’t have to pick being at home with no pokemon
staring at books or getting a pokemon and being shoved out the door.
She could have had a starter, she could have practiced battles around
her hometown, etc.
ready, she would have spent this time raising a pokemon. It’s not a
binary thing – you don’t have to pick being at home with no pokemon
staring at books or getting a pokemon and being shoved out the door.
She could have had a starter, she could have practiced battles around
her hometown, etc.
As a beautiful bonus, this would have
meant skipping the chapter you actually wrote, which is intensely
boring and full of you spending time on telling everyone the color of
her laces. The only reason to write about a professor handing her a
pokemon is if something different than usual. If it’s exactly like
everyone expects, you don’t need to repeat it again.
meant skipping the chapter you actually wrote, which is intensely
boring and full of you spending time on telling everyone the color of
her laces. The only reason to write about a professor handing her a
pokemon is if something different than usual. If it’s exactly like
everyone expects, you don’t need to repeat it again.
When used in place of a name, it’s
written Mom, in any other constructions like my/her/the mom it’s
written as such.
written Mom, in any other constructions like my/her/the mom it’s
written as such.
[a swetdrop ]
No.
[“Sorry kid, I don’t have my
Pokémon yet.” replied Rachel with a shrug as she cocked her
head towards the left, thinking that it was no big deal.
Pokémon yet.” replied Rachel with a shrug as she cocked her
head towards the left, thinking that it was no big deal.
“But I challenged you! You have to
accept!” he snapped.]
accept!” he snapped.]
This is stupid.
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This isn’t a story. Also, your grammar
is horrible.
is horrible.
This reminds me of when my little
brother would obsessively write out fake stats for fake characters
for fake games.
brother would obsessively write out fake stats for fake characters
for fake games.
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This really just seems gruesome for the
sake of it. There’s no real point to the story and it doesn’t do
anything particularly related to pokemon – you could replace this
with large wild animal of choice without any problem.
sake of it. There’s no real point to the story and it doesn’t do
anything particularly related to pokemon – you could replace this
with large wild animal of choice without any problem.
[She turned her head, and that was when
Anders saw the horrific scarring on one side of her face.
Anders saw the horrific scarring on one side of her face.
He threw up.]
People generally don’t throw up at
every little thing. And there continues to be no sign of plot or
purpose here.
every little thing. And there continues to be no sign of plot or
purpose here.
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You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Opening your story with a character
waking up for the day is generic and horribly, horribly overdone, and
to be honest, it’s so incredibly dull and boring a start that even if
I hadn’t seen it, very literally here, hundreds upon hundreds of
times before, I would still tell you you should have started at some
other, interesting point.
waking up for the day is generic and horribly, horribly overdone, and
to be honest, it’s so incredibly dull and boring a start that even if
I hadn’t seen it, very literally here, hundreds upon hundreds of
times before, I would still tell you you should have started at some
other, interesting point.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,”
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
When used in place of a name, it’s
written Mom, in any other constructions like my/her/the mom it’s
written as such.
written Mom, in any other constructions like my/her/the mom it’s
written as such.
And talking pokemon. That rarely works
out well. It’s really awkward to write characters as intelligent as
the human and with no problem communicating while still having them
following his orders for some reason.
out well. It’s really awkward to write characters as intelligent as
the human and with no problem communicating while still having them
following his orders for some reason.
[I glared at the innocently-smiling
pig. I liked you more when you were cowering. I mentally sighed. ]
pig. I liked you more when you were cowering. I mentally sighed. ]
And indeed it has gone bad astoundingly
fast.
fast.
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Opening your story with a character
waking up for the day is generic and horribly, horribly overdone, and
to be honest, it’s so incredibly dull and boring a start that even if
I hadn’t seen it, very literally here, hundreds upon hundreds of
times before, I would still tell you you should have started at some
other, interesting point.
waking up for the day is generic and horribly, horribly overdone, and
to be honest, it’s so incredibly dull and boring a start that even if
I hadn’t seen it, very literally here, hundreds upon hundreds of
times before, I would still tell you you should have started at some
other, interesting point.
Write out numbers with letters.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,”
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
[Today I leave for almia. ]
[Todays the day eevee.” ]
If it’s someone or something’s name,
it’s capitalized. Also, it’s “today’s”, short for “today
is”.
it’s capitalized. Also, it’s “today’s”, short for “today
is”.
“I” is always capitalized,
not just when you feel like it.
not just when you feel like it.
“Your” is possessive, as in,
your story, “you’re” means “you are”.
your story, “you’re” means “you are”.
And now it’s a wall of stupid chatter
that doesn’t matter and is too irritating to read, so I’m just going
to stop now. Your grammar’s terrible, get a beta reader. Also, learn
not to jam in so much irritating filler.
that doesn’t matter and is too irritating to read, so I’m just going
to stop now. Your grammar’s terrible, get a beta reader. Also, learn
not to jam in so much irritating filler.
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Semicolons do not indicate
sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically
correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously,
and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a
semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences
are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically
correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously,
and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a
semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences
are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new
paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up
into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new
paragraph.
paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up
into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new
paragraph.
[Moving on, his eyes focused on the
chair, which had begun to spin around, revealing its occupant: a tall
man in a stark white suit, with gleaming white skin, silvery hair,
and piercing red eyes, clearly an albino. ]
chair, which had begun to spin around, revealing its occupant: a tall
man in a stark white suit, with gleaming white skin, silvery hair,
and piercing red eyes, clearly an albino. ]
An albino ferret maybe. Humans don’t
have red eyes at all, and even just the super light blue albinos get
is enough to screw up their eyes so much they’re blind. They don’t
make very intimidating villains is my point here. Pick some other
genetic disorder to stigmatize.
have red eyes at all, and even just the super light blue albinos get
is enough to screw up their eyes so much they’re blind. They don’t
make very intimidating villains is my point here. Pick some other
genetic disorder to stigmatize.
Someone should have a fic of some
villain dyeing his hair and wearing layers of white makeup to pull
off the creepy albino look.
villain dyeing his hair and wearing layers of white makeup to pull
off the creepy albino look.
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You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[Today Alex had gotten her first
Pokémon, since she was one year older than me she was already twelve
and the fact that she had the chance to begin her journey made all
the kids look up to her. ]
Pokémon, since she was one year older than me she was already twelve
and the fact that she had the chance to begin her journey made all
the kids look up to her. ]
Trainers start at ten.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,”
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
And for some reason he’s obsessing over
blue flames, because ??? most powerful fire type but no one listens
because his life is oppression apparently and he starts crying.
blue flames, because ??? most powerful fire type but no one listens
because his life is oppression apparently and he starts crying.
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Spellcheck. Less optional than you
apparently think! Your grammar’s pretty terrible as well.
apparently think! Your grammar’s pretty terrible as well.
[My pokemon’s not a shiny! It’s a hack!
I don’t know who would do that! This is a new game so this shouldn’t
be possible. I tried to erase the game ]
I don’t know who would do that! This is a new game so this shouldn’t
be possible. I tried to erase the game ]
God creepypasta protagonists get more
unhinged and stupid by the month. Who the hell cares?
unhinged and stupid by the month. Who the hell cares?
Seriously every fucking time they
talk about someone “hacking” their cartridge. I don’t know
where it even comes from because the original creepypasta were
bootleg cartridges, not normal cartridges changed by the magic of
hackers. Is this something unique to poke-fandom and our legion of
idiots screaming about the evils of hacked pokemon?
talk about someone “hacking” their cartridge. I don’t know
where it even comes from because the original creepypasta were
bootleg cartridges, not normal cartridges changed by the magic of
hackers. Is this something unique to poke-fandom and our legion of
idiots screaming about the evils of hacked pokemon?
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You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[supper-ancient ]
Proofreading is important.
[It appeared that a few members had
broken off (despite quite a show that Matthew made), and began to act
independently, and they had stolen Legendary Pokémon in the process.
]
broken off (despite quite a show that Matthew made), and began to act
independently, and they had stolen Legendary Pokémon in the process.
]
The plot of the RS games is that Team
Whichever getting their hands on even one legendary is
apocalyptically bad. You can’t follow up with “and then the
remnants of the team stole a couple legendaries that were just lying
around but it’s no big deal”.
Whichever getting their hands on even one legendary is
apocalyptically bad. You can’t follow up with “and then the
remnants of the team stole a couple legendaries that were just lying
around but it’s no big deal”.
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Humans don’t have red eyes.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,”
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new
paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up
into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new
paragraph.
paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up
into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new
paragraph.
[The man said to the man in the special
container as he leaves the special chamber. ]
container as he leaves the special chamber. ]
I’m not sure I understand exactly how
special this all is yet.
special this all is yet.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
And now Misty’s been fridged.
And not there’s a chosen one prophesy
getting chanted. Just don’t do this kind of thing, seriously. You do
not need to lay out your entire plot and end with “and by the
way they totally win, yo” in your first chapter.
getting chanted. Just don’t do this kind of thing, seriously. You do
not need to lay out your entire plot and end with “and by the
way they totally win, yo” in your first chapter.
Wow. The two are so adorable and cute
and faintly sad that they’ll end up bitter rivals and then suddenly
something weird calls for and then abducts Red and I have no idea
what’s going on! Excellent.
and faintly sad that they’ll end up bitter rivals and then suddenly
something weird calls for and then abducts Red and I have no idea
what’s going on! Excellent.
(0)
Try harder.
(0)
And on that sour note we end the
29th.
29th.
What the hell is wrong with you? If
you’re posting this story two weeks from now, why the fuck did you
think you needed to post an announcement about it now?
you’re posting this story two weeks from now, why the fuck did you
think you needed to post an announcement about it now?
…and we begin the 30th. I’m
starting to have second thoughts about reviewing rather than
reporting.
starting to have second thoughts about reviewing rather than
reporting.
(0. But it’s already got follows.
What the fuck is wrong with people?)
What the fuck is wrong with people?)
There are seven thousand stories just
on this site in this category with “pokemon” in their
title. “New” features in another thousand. There are over
four hundred “chronicles”, more if you include
misspellings, even more with “begins” and “beginning”,
and even more “Character Name”‘s whatever. There are
almost eight hundred with “legend”. There are fourteen
hundred with “journey”, twelve hundred with “story”,
almost three hundred with “quest”, and two thousand with
“adventure”. The different region names appear another
thousand or two times. “Saga”, “region” and
“champion” come in around two hundred. In sum, you should
try to choose an original title that has to do with your story in
particular, not something that indicates it’s yet another story about
a pokemon trainer.
on this site in this category with “pokemon” in their
title. “New” features in another thousand. There are over
four hundred “chronicles”, more if you include
misspellings, even more with “begins” and “beginning”,
and even more “Character Name”‘s whatever. There are
almost eight hundred with “legend”. There are fourteen
hundred with “journey”, twelve hundred with “story”,
almost three hundred with “quest”, and two thousand with
“adventure”. The different region names appear another
thousand or two times. “Saga”, “region” and
“champion” come in around two hundred. In sum, you should
try to choose an original title that has to do with your story in
particular, not something that indicates it’s yet another story about
a pokemon trainer.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,”
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
And it’s yet another fic opening with
an obviously fake dream sequence about a trainer fighting in the
championship, because god forbid we ever actually start there.
an obviously fake dream sequence about a trainer fighting in the
championship, because god forbid we ever actually start there.
[What if Mei-Sensei caught you?! You’d
have detention again and we wouldn’t be able to meet with Professor
Sycamore! You BAKA!” She yelled as she whacked her best friend
over the head with her hand.
have detention again and we wouldn’t be able to meet with Professor
Sycamore! You BAKA!” She yelled as she whacked her best friend
over the head with her hand.
“Ouch, ouch, ouch…not my fault we won’t need all this
Clara-Chan. ]
Gratuitous Japanese too. Lovely. Also,
your grammar is terrible.
your grammar is terrible.
Write out numbers with letters.
When used in place of a name, it’s
written Mom, in any other constructions like my/her/the mom it’s
written as such.
written Mom, in any other constructions like my/her/the mom it’s
written as such.
“Your” is possessive, as in,
your story, “you’re” means “you are”.
your story, “you’re” means “you are”.
[A Platinum and Destiny-Red
Language-Lock:
Language-Lock:
The Rules:
1. Starter is a level 2, lonely female
Murkrow. This Murkrow, for story reasons, may not learn flying type
moves other than the Pecks. (Or, as it turns out, Pluck, since it’s
also a pecking move.)
2. Standard Nuzlocke stuff, faint = death,
first encounter = only catch
2a: Pokéballs clause – that first
encounter bit doesn’t take effect until you get your first batch o’
balls.
2b: No legendaries. At all. They’re freakin’ deities, man,
you are not going to stuff them in a tiny little ball and chuck them
in a PC box.
3. Every Pokemon must have a story-related handicap.
This DOES affect how they are used.
3a: Except when grinding in
certain cases, because two or three turn kills really throw a monkey
wrench in the works.
4. Shinies clause is ON, Dupes Clause is OFF,
Bullshit Clause DON’T EXIST.
5. Arceus help me.]
Murkrow. This Murkrow, for story reasons, may not learn flying type
moves other than the Pecks. (Or, as it turns out, Pluck, since it’s
also a pecking move.)
2. Standard Nuzlocke stuff, faint = death,
first encounter = only catch
2a: Pokéballs clause – that first
encounter bit doesn’t take effect until you get your first batch o’
balls.
2b: No legendaries. At all. They’re freakin’ deities, man,
you are not going to stuff them in a tiny little ball and chuck them
in a PC box.
3. Every Pokemon must have a story-related handicap.
This DOES affect how they are used.
3a: Except when grinding in
certain cases, because two or three turn kills really throw a monkey
wrench in the works.
4. Shinies clause is ON, Dupes Clause is OFF,
Bullshit Clause DON’T EXIST.
5. Arceus help me.]
The only chance these have of being
halfway decent is taking the framework of how things went in your
game and weaving a story around it, not saying this is how things
actually work. So presenting this as following these rules is a
pretty big sign before things have even started that you don’t get
this, don’t know what you’re doing, and think deaths and misery alone
can carry a story.
halfway decent is taking the framework of how things went in your
game and weaving a story around it, not saying this is how things
actually work. So presenting this as following these rules is a
pretty big sign before things have even started that you don’t get
this, don’t know what you’re doing, and think deaths and misery alone
can carry a story.
And indeed your prologue goes on to
just have a lot of misery sloshing all over everything without so
much as detail, let alone explanation.
just have a lot of misery sloshing all over everything without so
much as detail, let alone explanation.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[“The relevant information is all
in there, but in brief, you would be disallowed from training any
Pokémon which seems likely to outlive you.”
in there, but in brief, you would be disallowed from training any
Pokémon which seems likely to outlive you.”
The young man took the folder and leafed quickly through it,
before looking up. “In plain English, sir?”
“In plain English, Godfrey, you would be expected to only
capture the sickly, weak, injured or deformed Pokémon you ran
across.” The professor tapped his cane lightly on the floor.
“…because they’re going to be…” The young man
frowned, looking distinctly contemplative.
“Yes. I know, and I agree that it is unfairly harsh.”
The professor drummed his fingers on the head of his cane as he
continued. “You would still be permitted the services of the
Pokémon center, PC system and store, of course, but you would be
restricted as far as your choice of teammates might go. Also…”
The old man hesitated, then. “As you would be capturing those
Pokémon that would likely not survive for long, anyway, I think it
best that you prepare yourself for the distinct possibility that any
severe trauma might kill one of your team.]
Well. You get a point for figuring out
how to explain your setup, but lose a million for the sheer insanity
of it. “You’re dying? Okay, catch crippled pokemon for
deathmatches, this makes sense!”
how to explain your setup, but lose a million for the sheer insanity
of it. “You’re dying? Okay, catch crippled pokemon for
deathmatches, this makes sense!”
(3)
Don’t label POVs.
Write out numbers with letters.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,”
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
Semicolons do not indicate
sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically
correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously,
and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a
semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences
are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically
correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously,
and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a
semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences
are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
(3)
Write out numbers with letters.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
This really seems too try-hard, and
without the general over the topness needed for a setup that’s about
making your entire society follow the game’s designated protagonist.
It’s not just that they assign the NPC weak pokemon for the player to
beat, no, they have weird DNA rattata that can never level they hand
out? Then the main character NPC…runs off and leaves the rattata
behind, even while talking about how there’s lots of other pokemon to
catch who are all loving and cool, therefore they can’t catch any
pokemon and then suddenly attacked by angry bird and suicide.
without the general over the topness needed for a setup that’s about
making your entire society follow the game’s designated protagonist.
It’s not just that they assign the NPC weak pokemon for the player to
beat, no, they have weird DNA rattata that can never level they hand
out? Then the main character NPC…runs off and leaves the rattata
behind, even while talking about how there’s lots of other pokemon to
catch who are all loving and cool, therefore they can’t catch any
pokemon and then suddenly attacked by angry bird and suicide.
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Dialogue is written as “Hello,”
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
This seems less an explanation and more
a string of author fiat. Everyone but Ash is a jerk to the kid. His
parents don’t care about him except for the banning him to be a
trainer until eighteen because you say so. Therefore he decides to
catch legendaries. Which he decides can only be done with an absol.
Which immediately shows up and hops in a pokeball for him.
a string of author fiat. Everyone but Ash is a jerk to the kid. His
parents don’t care about him except for the banning him to be a
trainer until eighteen because you say so. Therefore he decides to
catch legendaries. Which he decides can only be done with an absol.
Which immediately shows up and hops in a pokeball for him.
[Annoyed, Tobias released his Absol.
Not wanting to resort to violence, he commanded a Shadow Ball, which
purposely missed the man. ]
Not wanting to resort to violence, he commanded a Shadow Ball, which
purposely missed the man. ]
Do you not know what violence is?
Then somehow the stupidity of Tobias
trying to catch Darkrai makes it decide to let him catch it, at which
point he discards the absol he was caring about seconds ago because
you say so, and then he turns even and abuses the legendary.
trying to catch Darkrai makes it decide to let him catch it, at which
point he discards the absol he was caring about seconds ago because
you say so, and then he turns even and abuses the legendary.
There is really no plot to this. It’s
barely even a series of events, let alone ones that follow one
another in a sane fashion.
barely even a series of events, let alone ones that follow one
another in a sane fashion.
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[It’s an action packed story. With a
bit of lemon. Or maybe not. It’s kind of hard to pull off lemon with
a kid, y’know? ]
bit of lemon. Or maybe not. It’s kind of hard to pull off lemon with
a kid, y’know? ]
Oh christ. I should really stop reading
now, but I’m morbidly curious.
now, but I’m morbidly curious.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu
or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re
using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu.
This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which
are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be
applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like
telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[A Kirlia! I had seen them before. They
battled like no tomorrow. ]
battled like no tomorrow. ]
In my experience they battle more like
glass cannons.
glass cannons.
Don’t put author notes in text. Also,
look types up yourself.
look types up yourself.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new
paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up
into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new
paragraph.
paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up
into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new
paragraph.
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This really seems more wish fulfillment
than proper story but at least you avoided the usual tropes and
didn’t go on about hacking or voices or blood. Your grammar’s
horrible though. Fix your story up.
than proper story but at least you avoided the usual tropes and
didn’t go on about hacking or voices or blood. Your grammar’s
horrible though. Fix your story up.
(3)
Learn to troll properly.
(1)
Write out numbers with letters.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,”
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She
said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or
“Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next
sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, in which case it’s written as
“Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned
or “Hello,” She grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech
verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally
stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore,
if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she
said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this
is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” or
“Hi,” she said “This is it.” And if you’re
breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she
said, “is it.” Also, remember that generally “said”
is the best speech verb to use, and even more importantly, “stated”
is not.
(1)
Ah. Just about caught up at last.
On the brighter side I’ve come out the other side of this month with three fanfic ideas, one a nice contained thing I’ll be
posting tomorrow with deepest vindictiveness, another a longer thing
that’s a melding of a bunch of ideas, and a third long thing I’m not sure I’ll
commit to but may end up doing if the seething doesn’t go away.
posting tomorrow with deepest vindictiveness, another a longer thing
that’s a melding of a bunch of ideas, and a third long thing I’m not sure I’ll
commit to but may end up doing if the seething doesn’t go away.
What is with all the albinos this month…?
Ages ago, I read something about someone who was working for a group for albino issues, about the fact that they were really sick of how albinos would show up in movies and books, especially when albino people usually aren’t great at gunning people down or any part of a car chase but the part where you drive through stuff. (Neither are albino rats, admittedly, but at least they’re not significantly worse compared to their fellows.)
That’s silly, I thought at the time. And after that I looked around and wow, sinister albinos everywhere.
:D! Farla fic! I can’t wait!
Is one of them Moemon? Please tell me one of them is Moemon. I don’t want to keep feeling tempted to do something about that myself.
……..well in that case it definitely isn’t about how great owning girls is and you should go write something bloody on the subject right away.
The idea I had was for a longer story, and I kind of doubt even spite is a powerful enough force to get me to commit that much to a Moemon fic. But who knows, maybe if the stars line up just right I’ll do it for Halloween or next year’s NaRe. The female protag scenario you mentioned in our email exchange kind of collided in my head with your rant from years back about how stories about magical world-hopping Jirachi plot devices need to be scarier because magic is terrifying.
Oh, that is a good idea! I was thinking of just taking the setup of the pokeworld being an actual place you can move to and the games being a super bowdlerized adaption they export.
She would initially not get why Professor Guy was apologetic he only had a female starter for her, nor his knowing “ah, very well then,” when she said that no, a female one was perfect! Then things would then become terrible very fast and I would become miserable and shouldn’t write this.
The lack of reasonably good stories (or at least stories worthy of a review not just copied from wherever you keep your review templates) is a little bit saddening, I feel. Also, if you’ve got three new fanfic ideas, does this mean we’ll be seeing more of Unoriginality?
Eh, tis ever thus.
Bear in mind I’m presenting the category a bit worse than it (probably) is because I’m only doing what’s been posted this month, so I’m getting a much higher percentage of newbies on their first chapter and terrible fics that’ll never be updated again. Longer running stories tend to be better – plenty are still bad, but they usually manage a certain baseline competency.
And no, none are Unoriginality. Thought I might write some sort of How-To forum thread on when to start a story and how stories need to have some point to them.