Human sacrifice today! Well, as backstory.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10949126/1/Fear
[He felt that if he took even one moment to not be overly cautious, he would end up dead for not realizing the danger fast enough. ]
This doesn’t seem worded very well. If he feels like he’ll die if he doesn’t do something, he doesn’t feel like he needs to be *overly* cautious.
Also, odds are those fish dying a slow and acid-filled death given most fishtanks are are overstocked deathcamps, and even assuming proper care the fish are still suspended well above the ground with only glass holding the water they need to breathe in, relying on electricity and machines to that water and keep it the proper temperature, and relying on humans to restore the water and feed them and so forth. It’s the safety of a poorly constructed prison cell on Pluto.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
Terrified of everything is a bit of a change from the usual terrified of pokemon in particular, but he really doesn’t seem phobic here, just mildly nervous. He’s not worrying the roof will cave in or a meteor will hit him or he’ll get food poisoning or… And like most first chapters, it’s mostly filler. If he’s going to be shoved into being a trainer, you should just start with him getting a pokemon and having the phobia show in his behavior rather than spending an entire scene on him at a psychiatrist.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10949198/1/Ho-oh-s-False-Reality
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[she barley said. ]
Barley is a grain. It’s often used in beer.
“Your” is possessive, “you’re” is short for “you are”.
Three.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10949284/1/How-To-Roar
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[Mightyena jumped at the feeling of something hitting his side, snapping his head to look at the Swampert figure that lay beside him. It had a small dent in its head, possibly from the hit it just endured from the girl’s rough play. Disgusted, the Pokemon rose to its feet, ]
The mightyena is either a he or an it, pick one.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Do het pairings ever inexplicably get one of the other characters as their kid, or is it just slash ones?
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10949331/1/Introverted
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[“Your hand is soft,” he cut her off with a raspy voice, avoiding the gawk she was giving him; although he could see it from the corner of his eye. They continued their quiet walking, and he spoke up. “Like the purest stones, so soft.” ]
What?
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10949482/1/Pokemon-Epsilon-Emerald
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Write out numbers with letters.
[Pokemon Professors in all regions have changed the age restriction from 10 to 16 for many reasons. ]
Because the author wants to write about older trainers and didn’t bother to think this through?
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10949495/1/The-Road-To-Becoming-Awesome
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10949588/1/Pokemon-Delta-Emerald-Nuzlocke
[this is a Nuzlocke challenge! Three authors are taking part in it and shall be taking turns writing chapters!
If you’ve read Fire Emblem: Tales of the Amazingly Stupid, that’s sort of the premise. Wall breaks and all that.]
Well, that doesn’t sound promising.
Nuzlockes rarely work because the idea pokemon training is a nonstop murderfest makes no sense, and requires you redo the entire setting first.
Several people writing a story at once rarely works out well either.
And stupid doesn’t work out well at all.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Everyone is already quite familiar with the opening of the game. Yes, even people who haven’t played it, because every other fanfic author reproduced it already. If there’s any point skip to it, otherwise stop and figure out what the point is.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10949667/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-Mystery-Dungeon-Equilibrium-of-the-Opposites
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10949695/1/Under-Cloudy-Skies
[I would try to take my shoes off, but my feet swelled so much from being on this damn half-sunken ship that I couldn’t. ]
Then she’s really dumb, because anyone else would’ve taken the shoes off long ago. Also, her feet can’t possibly be swollen at this point. In these conditions, trenchfoot should’ve started almost immediately and by now her feet are rotting lumps.
Nuts aren’t nonperishable, either. They only store well in dry conditions.
This all really feels less “mental illness” and more “ridiculous misery wallow”.
Blocked!
Eight reviews.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10949902/1/Pokemon-Adventures-in-Hoenn
[This story has not been started yet, please wait a little longer and I will try to get the actual story uploaded.]
Then why the hell did you post at all?
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10950047/1/Star-of-The-Seas-and-Lands
This one again, now without mention of abortion or adoption, so vastly improved.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10950227/1/Burning-Determination
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[However, this year, Asuka was turning fifteen: the minimum age you had to be to be able to participate in the tournament. ]
Well, it’s an improvement over doing that with getting a pokemon at all, I don’t see what reason anyone would have for this rule. Why not just say this is the first year she thought she had a chance and decided to try entering, or else let her have tried in previous years? Or just that they announced earlier about the school and that’s what’s motivating her to try?
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Plotwise…the battles read like the game, with all the focus being on using stat boosters and type matches and such, and everyone involved having fully evolved pokemon with advanced moves, so they’re really not much more interesting than just reading a transcript of two people battling on the internet. And like that, there’s little at stake – you haven’t given me any reason to care about if she gets to go to trainer school, and besides, the better she does the less it seems like there’s any point to her going somewhere to learn about battling.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10950231/1/Liebe-Love-Amour
Instead of throwing a tantrum and deleting, fix the mistakes.
One. Also, if you’re going to do this, learn how to block.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10950472/1/The-Topaz-Project
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[ professor Oak ]
If it’s part of his name, it’s capitalized the same as any other name.
[“What is this supposed to be?” yelled a confused, angry audience member “You said you would show us a device that could change the way of Pokemon battles forever. Not a machine that helps people play musical chairs! I hope you don’t ask for a volunteer.” As soon as he said that the audience began whispering fearfully, some began making bets, while others hoped that they would be spared. ]
This sounds like how elementary school kids would react, not adults.
[ His assistants scrambled to the side of the stage and brought out a crude bag dummy filled with straw. The screens changed showing the area behind the dummy to prove that the link worked. The room remained quiet waiting to see the so called spectacle. Suddenly the haunter began forming a shadow ball. The audience looked at the professor to see if had moved, but to their surprise he just stood there gazing at the back of the haunter. ]
…the proof of telepathy is that a pokemon does something without a verbal order? All that’s needed if for the haunter to know to attack the dummy. Is that supposed to be impossible? How can anyone possibly form a bond with pokemon if they’re roughly as intelligent as rocks and unable to do anything without an explicit order?
[“Yes I just have one question.” said the man “Is it true that this machine was used to combine things together, and it is true that you not only used it to combine gems and metals but an apple and a bandanna? ]
Banana, and also there’s no connection between a a telepathic link and teleporting things into a blob.
[“Could you combine a human with a pokémon? If it was redesigned back to what it was before?” The professor thought about it and sighed “Yes…you could do that, but that’s impossible it would take years to do that.” ]
See this is irrelevant because the greater issue is that the resulting hybrid would die a horrible death within minutes.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10950557/1/Apocalypsis-I-The-Old-World
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[ Another law was that nobody under the age of 16 was allowed to use Pokeballs. Though ]
This never makes sense and doesn’t result in anything good.
[Though, that didn’t stop nearly everyone from becoming friends with one or two wild ones they’d met at some point. ]
This is the one bit that’s different than every other overage trainer fic, but of course you immediately say that this doesn’t apply to the main character.
[It was extrordinarily rare for someone to choose a starter, but decades back they used to all the time. ]
Ie, it was in every single other OT fic, but shockingly it’s going to be the same here too.
[ I loved Pokemon, every single one of them without fail and I probably would have befriended an entire team by this point if it wasn’t for my policies about waiting. ]
Your story keeps explaining that this makes no sense. Entire-team-already kid setting out sounds like it’d have been interesting.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Kid get first pokemon then wanders off into the rest of the region is not an interesting start.
Four.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10950566/1/The-One-Who-Would-Be-King
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[the rulers, the king and queen, will on the seventh month of the year bare a child two years in a row. ]
Bare = naked. You mean bear.
Also, people don’t actually have that sort of clockwork reproduction, so what happens when the queen doesn’t get pregnant, or does at the wrong point of the year, or gets pregnant only to miscarry? Have two kids is doable. Have two in the exact same month two years in a row? Every generation? Not so much.
This would make more sense if it was just a thing that the rulers aimed for, and when they managed two kids in the exact right pattern, everyone celebrated it as a sign of good luck. Otherwise it should just be that they always sacrifice a kid and traditionally wait to have two kids before killing one.
“Its” is possessive, “it’s” means “it is.”
[Only their blood-cells contained the remnants of the unexplainable micro-bacteria mutation known as Aura.]
Maybe you didn’t notice, but that explanation in Star Wars just enraged everyone, in part because it’s a very bad one.
(Also here it just suggests you could accomplish the same thing by draining some blood regularly.)
[A hollered voice called out. ]
Hollered is a synonym for called, not an adjective.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[“The governments around the world are terrified, so at the request of the King and Queen of Aria, all males from the age of 13 to fucking 40 across the world are to go under mandatory blood tests!” ]
But you just said they prefer girls for the sacrifice, so if they were going to be picky they’d say girls only, plus they’re clearly desperate and shouldn’t care about the gender (or, for that matter, age) of whatever person has yummy blood.
Three.
After I posted I realized that probably the idea is to find someone to be the new king instead, because obviously finding a kid and having them have two more kids and hoping that those kids also have magic yummy blood makes more sense than just feeding Ash straight to the angry gods.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10950664/1/Will-You-Come-With-Me
Don’t label flashbacks.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10950689/1/The-Good-Daughter-of-a-Bad-Man
[Rhyhorn racer ]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[How Serena longed to meet her, Serena was turning eighteen the next day and she was going to ask her dad if she could go on a pokémon journey (of course that was just a ploy so she could meet her mother). When she was fifteen, Giovanni had given her the most beautiful Fennekin whom Serena loved greatly but she had never battled with it. ]
So, how long has she been planning the pokemon-journey-to-meet-Mom thing? Because training her pokemon would’ve really helped with that.
[“Heh,” Clemont pushed his glasses up. ]
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
“Its” is possessive, “it’s” means “it is.”
Two.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10950723/1/Advanced-A-New-Beginning
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
This is insanely boring. Just because things happen in life doesn’t mean those things are inherently interesting.
Three.
I think this is one of those areas where fanfic is worse off than original stuff, because fanfic is often about filling in gaps and that leads to people forgetting that maybe canon didn’t bother showing people move because there wasn’t much worth watching.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10950771/1/Pokemon-Z
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Write out numbers with letters.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[ “Say…do you remember that Eevee you would always play with after you came home from trainer’s school?” he asked.
Nicole sighed. “She was my best friend…she even saved me from a Starly attack one time…I bet she misses me a lot.” the girl then noticed the Pokeball in her father’s hand and her face instantly lit up. “I-Is that the…You caught the Eevee?!” she asked excitedly.]
Eevee are rare in the gameworld and dirt-common in fic, making them a really poor choice for starter. It’d have been slightly less sueish if he’d just bought her one to cheer her up, rather than her special wild pokemon friend somehow being an eevee despite there being so many more starly to get to know.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10950771/6/Pokemon-Z
I skipped to here to see if this story was going anywhere and nope, boring pointless battle filler.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10950832/1/A-whole-new-world
Capitalize your title properly.
Write out numbers with letters.
[both Pokemon ]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
The only thing more boring than starting with a character waking up to get their first pokemon is starting the night before. Kid wanders around being a pokemon trainer is not a plot. If you’ve got one, skip to it, if not, stop and think of what your story’s actually about rather than writing stuff that doesn’t matter.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10950953/1/Formal-Attire
A drabble is the term for a writing exercise of exactly 100 words.
[sweatdropped as she walked into the room, ]
That’s a visual shorthand and this is text.
It’s nice to see you’re writing dialogue correctly, and without bizarre speech tags too. I like how you write the two of them, they seem honestly happy around each other.
Two.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10951006/1/Our-roles-reversed-The-queen-and-her-protege
I HAVEN’T PLAYED THE GAME YET DAMMIT HALF MY CHRISTMAS PRESENTS WERE HIDDEN AND NO ONE CAN FIND THEM
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10951026/1/A-Day-In-The-Life
It’s “okay”, four letters.
[Have Misty, for a moment, ]
Has.
[Maybe I just couldn’t read into it…” ]
Think you mean something along the lines of, “Maybe I misread her.”
[He looked more determinated this time. ]
“Determined”.
Overall, it looks like you need to proofread a little better.
Four.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10951164/1/Adventures-in-Kalos
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
Four.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10951383/1/Mother-Ninetails-The-journey-continues
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
[“A clever trick running threw the pond like that. ]
Through. Also, vulpix is a fire type, it doesn’t make much sense for them to use water to hide their trail. If you’re just writing them like talking regular animals, what’s the point of using pokemon?
Also, you have a ton of sentence fragments. Get a beta reader.
One:
Spacemarine64 chapter 1 . 22h ago
I don know if your doing a completely “vanilla” or normal pokefic but one of the characters could be a mutant scyther that is a firebug steel type with hands and flame wrist blades along with instead of wings it has a jet pack that runs off fire. hope you like the idea and use it but you obviously dont have to because no one can make you do anything. but love the story hope to see it continue.
SM64 signing off Cya!
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10951597/1/He-Lie
Lay. You meant lay every time.
Zero.
On that note, finished with January 6th! Let’s keep going a bit longer, see if I can get to the top of page 2 in the archive.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10951698/1/Surprise-For-TheeFirstEvils-contest
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Stop capitalizing random words.
Write out numbers with letters.
Spellcheck.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10951747/1/Ash-s-Angel-An-Amourshipping-Story-Part-2
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Write out numbers with letters.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10951773/1/The-Dreamers
Write out numbers with letters.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10951821/1/Calling-Of-Shadows
Character bios continue not to be actual stories or even something worth showing people.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10951899/1/In-the-Woods
[This is a drabble according to this category’s definition of a drabble, which is to say that it’s not an actual drabble. I just lied to you, to call it a one-shot would be a more accurate definition. ]
I appreciate this.
[It also doesn’t star the Kalos queers ]
Unfortunately, you’re a bigoted asshole.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10951930/1/Partners-In-Crime
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks.
Zero.
About halfway up the page, think I’ll stop here.
“Spacemarine64 chapter 1 . 22h ago
I don know if your doing a completely “vanilla” or normal pokefic but one of the characters could be a mutant scyther that is a firebug steel type with hands and flame wrist blades along with instead of wings it has a jet pack that runs off fire. hope you like the idea and use it but you obviously dont have to because no one can make you do anything. but love the story hope to see it continue.”
Good lord.
“[It also doesn’t star the Kalos queers ]
Unfortunately, you’re a bigoted asshole.”
Correct me if I’m wrong but I believe the author was being self-deprecate here, a majority of his stories feature Kalos characters.
Yeah I was wondering whether it could be a term of endearment. It still sounds unfortunate without context, but fandom is one of the few places where you see (often queer themselves) people calling things “gay” affectionately more often than you encounter it as a slur.
EDIT: NVM, I just took a look and apparently all their Kalos stuff is het. WTF.
So then it is a term of endearment, it’s just being used in an arguably triggering fashion, the comment doesn’t make sense otherwise.
Or, we could both be wrong and he could just be archaically referring to them as oddballs. I wonder if Farla had considered that.
Yeah because that’s likely.
I think we were both sort of right, in that it’s an insult being used affectionately, but calling straight people queer as an insult is super gross regardless of the context. “Trigerring” has nothing to do with it, it just implies that being queer is a bad thing.
[ I wonder if Farla had considered that.]
Original-queer doesn’t even pluralize like that. “Those queer people” is original use. “Those queers” only means THEY IS GAY WEIIIIRD FREAKS!
“It also doesn’t star the Kalos queers, but the less said about those two, the better.” is the full sentence. So no.
FIIIIIIIINE. There’s something else I was thinking of writing “for you” anyway. But you should still work on finding that game, because if I can get this thing to work, you’ll probably want the cute fluffy femslash to wash it down. >::::)
I want it, but it is super, super lost. So far Mom’s uncovered the book she wanted to give me, although I have yet to see that one either so she may have relost it.
“You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard.”
Farla, would you mind clearing something about this for me? At first I was confused because many sci-fi and fantasy works (like “The Lord of the Rings”) capitalize the names of “races” or species, but then I realized you were specifically comparing pokémon to animals. So, if pikachu, for example, were an intelligent species, would it be correct to write “Pikachu”?
“Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.”
And perhaps you could help me with this, too, if you don’t mind? :-) I thought you capitalized job titles like doctor and professor when used in direct address (or when accompanied by the professional’s name – so Smith is a doctor, and Dr. Smith is a consummate professional)?
Fantasy loves Random capitalization for Emphasis. You shouldn’t take it as an instruction. The word ‘humans’ isn’t capitalized, so neither should ‘elves’ or ‘orks’ or whatever.
The word Caucasian is capitalized, though, but it’s tied to a geographical region. So if your orks are called such because they consider Ork Mountains their origin, you can call them Orks.
Title directly preceding a name becomes part of the name, so ‘Doctor Smith’ is capitalized while ‘doctor’ isn’t, even if you talk about Smith specifically and just omit the name.
Well, Tolkien used “Elves”, and he was a philologist, so I’m not sure it’s “random”. :-) And Caucasian is also capitalized even when referring to Caucasoids.
As for the title, I’ve read differently. See here, for example (Rule 6a): http://www.grammarbook.com/punctuation/capital.asp
No need to be nasty. Illhousen is right in this case. Fantasy loves nonsensical capitalization, perhaps even more than YA.
The reason Tolkien capitalized “Evles” and “Men” was to distinguish them from the already-existing words. It was a useful way to add important information. He didn’t do it with things like “orc” or “hobbit” despite them being analogous since those words didn’t already exist and there was no need to delineate them from everything. Races should not be capitalized. (You now sometimes see “hobbit” cap’sed for the same reason official sources capitalize Pokemon, which is copyright.)
Additionally, titles and professions are capitalized when used in place of names, as Farla often says. “Doctor” is a common noun in normal use and is not capitalized.
Ah, so it is capitalized when talking about a specific doctor, like in, “Well, Doctor said…”
Good to know.
Basically if you could sub it out with the doctor’s first name and have it still make sense, it should be capitalized. “Well, Doctor said…” is right, but “Well, the Doctor said…” is wrong.
I didn’t mean to sound nasty. Sorry, illhousen!
Hm… I believe Tolkien did capitalize Orc and Hobbit as well, Act. Or at least, this edition I have here does: “Most of the Hobbits and the Men of Bree went off then and there in a huff, having no fancy for further entertainment that evening.”
But wait, let’s leave Tolkien aside for a moment, he’s not really the point. What I’d like to know is if the “no capitalization of races or species” is a hard rule, or if different style manuals allow for different usages?
As I said, new editions sometimes (incorrectly from a literary standpoint) capitalize “hobbit” for copyright reasons (ie, copyrighted words are always capitalized). My copy of The Hobbit/LOTR from the 1970s does not. (edit: Actually, a quick look on Google books confirms it’s not capitalized in common use even in the 2012 edition. Presumably the quote you pulled meant to refer a specific group of interest, hence the capitalization for emphasis on importance.) Can I ask what edition you’re referring to?
Yes, it is. As illhousen says, unless the name derives from a proper noun such as a location (eg, Orlesian, German shepherd, East Asian), it shouldn’t be capitalized. Even in scientific writing, it’s genus names that are capitalized, not species (eg, E. coli, Sepia officinalis, etc.).
Er… Well, before I answer that, let me reiterate that I DO own a physical copy of the book, only it’s the Brazilian edition. So, when I looked for a version in English, I settled for a not-so-physical copy. For what it’s worth, it says the text is taken from the 2002 edition published by Houghton Mifflin, and basically, every time race is used as a collective, it’s capitalized – like this:
” ‘Maybe hunting Orcs came on him and he fled,’ said Legolas.
‘He fled, certainly,’ said Aragorn, ‘but not, I think, from Orcs.’ ”
But when it’s in the singular, it’s not:
” ‘Yes,’ he said, ‘they are quite plain: a hobbit’s footprints. ”
The reason I was confused by the “no capitalization of race / species” is because when I worked at the company that translated Stargate SG-1 into Portuguese, the network insisted we keep the capitalization of species’ names exactly as in the original – Goa’uld, Jaffa, Ori, etc. -, when in Portuguese, the correct form would be to not capitalize them. And it does fit what I’ve seen in many fantasy / sci-fi works, which capitalized the names of races / species (although, now that I think about it, R. E. Howard didn’t capitalize “serpent men”).
Well, many thanks for the help! :-)
Tolkien was basically breaking the rules for a purpose. It does seem likely he did it because he wanted to emphasize the difference between man and Man (you should stick it to the latter).
Capitalization of other races probably came from the desire to keep things consistent.
Normally, no, you shouldn’t capitalize orks or hobbits.
As for your other examples… Basically, a lot of people were copying Tolkien without understanding what and why he was doing. The capitalization thing is a tragic and unintended legacy he has left behind.
Co-signing Illhousen’s answer– he did it with really good reason, and people copy willy-nilly, hence the proliferation– and adding that if the copy you found really has each instance capitalized, the editor should be fired. Damn.
eta: Also, can’t know for sure, but if the names of the races in SG-1 are copyrighted, that’s probably why they insisted you capitalize them, to make sure it was clear they were owned.
So it’s not enough to just use the race as a collective – “the orcs kept on marching” -, it should only be capitalized when making a broad statement about the race as a whole – like “Man is the wolf of Man”? Huh, that’s actually just like in Portuguese. And here I’ve spent all this time thinking it was different in English.
Thanks, Act! Now I know! :-)
Technically, you shouldn’t capitalize even when making broad statements. “Man is a wolf of man” would be correct.
What Tolkien did is an analog of capitalizing Sight, as many urban fantasy stories do. It is done because there are two words: ‘sight’ and ‘Sight’ – which are written the same but mean different things. Capitalization is used to create a difference between them, so the reader would understand right away what are you talking about.
(like “The Lord of the Rings”) capitalize the names of “races” or species,
NO THEY DON’T!
Tolkien writes men, elves, dwarves. The only exception is when he’s talking about the race as a singular entity and making sweeping statements about the nature of Men or Elves, which further underlines the fact capitalization is supposed to be pulled out when you’re trying to distinguish the word from how it’s regularly used.
So, Aragorn is a man, but it’s in the nature of Man to destroy itself. Something like that? But then, how about “Most of the Hobbits and the Men of Bree went off then and there in a huff, having no fancy for further entertainment that evening. […] The Dwarves and the two or three strange Men that still remained got up and
said good night to the landlord, but not to Frodo and his friends”?
Edit: Ah, yes, I see it now – ” ‘I saw him, Mr. Butterbur,’ said a hobbit;[…] “. So, when it’s a collective, we capitalize, but when it’s a single member of that species, we don’t capitalize? Is that it?
Farla, is something wrong with the blog? I’m noticing the homepage frequently listing many more comments than each post has.
Disqus is really bad with keeping track on comments.
The number of comments listed at the end of a post rarely matches the number listed on the homepage, Recent Comments section doesn’t show new comments until ten-to-twenty minutes later than they are posted, refreshing a page sometimes causes some of those comments to disappear from the section…
Oh, and sometimes it’s impossible to see the comments at all.
Those glitches were around for a long time and are unlikely to be fixed.
refreshing a page sometimes causes some of those comments to disappear from the section…
I think this one is actually caused by there being too many comments on a post, so some are hidden under the “more comments” thing. If you click directly on a comment, it and those it’s a direct reply to show up, but those around it won’t.
I meant that the comments disappear from Recent Comments section. I don’t have troubles viewing comments themselves on specific pages.
My favorite is when you view the blog on mobile and a post has like 700 comments.
Are you sure it wasn’t just one of your FSN posts?
There’s actually bunch of zero-comment posts that sucked up two or three FSN posts’ comments at once.
That’s actually Disqus and Blogger having a fight.
Blogger’s comment system is terrible and doesn’t even handle basic threading, so I put on Disqus, which loads after Blogger’s basic template. Disqus then goes on to post your comment to the page itself for backup/search engine reasons.
However, this second part has been hilariously glitchy for a while, where sometimes all comments during a timeframe will get posted to to a single post, but you can’t see this because you’re just viewing Disqus’ display and the rest is hidden. So when you see something has a few hundred comments that turns to zero, that means hundreds of comments were posted all over the place but Disqus messed up with Blogger.