Very few responses today, but the ones I get are pretty good. I guess I’ll just have to assume everyone’s being chill!
re: Your review to Genesect In Space 3: An Ultra Space Odyssey
18 Aprgemerl720 post
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12907900/
This is only the beginning of the fanfiction. On the next chapter, Genesect will encounter the Ultra Beasts for the first time as they attack Alola. Necrozma will be the leader the Ultra Beasts during the invasion, and he will steal the light of the region including the Z-Crystals, which were guarded by the Alolan Guardians. Also, Nihilego, will kidnap Lusamine in the fanfiction, meaning Lusamine will be a damsel in distress. During the invasion, Genesect will attempt to fight against the Ultra Beasts, with a little help of Jirachi and Hoopa Confined Form.
secs agoUh… I really think you should give original fiction a try, buddy. It’s really liberating. I talk about this more over here: https://www.fanfiction.net/topic/11834/165030563/1/Original-Fiction
re: Your review to Different Eyes
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12907963/
Hello, St Elmo’s Fire! I’m delighted to have such a glowing review right out of the gate. This is higher praise than I could have hoped for, and so soon after posting! I appreciate your candid message and your stated goals, and would be happy to receive useful criticism. I can only hope that you’ll be as impressed by chapter one, which I posted earlier, and by future chapters. Thank you again, and it’s a pleasure to meet you.
re: Your review to Different Eyes
2m agoA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12907963/
I was wondering how well the mention of mundane animals would go over with readers. I don’t mind alluding to poképhagia, but existing canon species are not sufficiently diverse – or palatable – to completely account for pokémon dietary needs. With that in mind, I feel justified in taking a step closer to the real world in this regard, as alluded to with the ‘Gotta Catch ’em All’ animation.
I’m pleased to tell you that what you’re picking up on will continue to be addressed. Less charismatic species will have their appearances and the problem of pokémon sapience will remain a theme.
My intent with Salem’s boredom this chapter was to portray animal stereotypy – the phenomenon of stressed animals exhibiting repetitive and even self-harming behaviour when given insufficient enrichment. Salem is a little smarter than real cats, more similar in intellect to a corvid or parrot, so being left alone so long is a serious concern for her.
However, I am trying to portray indirect negligence rather than abuse. Neglect is very common in our world with animals, but rarely addressed in fanfiction, in my experience. I suppose oppression and slavery are considered more dramatic. The general rule in this fic’s canon is that it’s difficult to force pokémon to cockfight or to perform labour against their will, but it’s easy to form a relationship with them in which the human partner subsequently fails to fully provide for their needs. In such a situation, a pokémon might have difficulty communicating those needs, but would certainly not be in a condition of slavery or abject suffering.
I think this chapter demonstrates some of the ethical problems with leaving a significantly intelligent creature alone with inadequate stimulation, and future chapters will certainly address other ethical implications of pokémon intelligence. I wouldn’t want to compare a developmentally mature creature with superpowers to a human child, though. Salem can, and does, physically leave when it becomes clear that she won’t receive the attention she needs. It may be arduous for her, but it’s an option a neglected infant doesn’t have.
Thanks again for your review! Every response to my work does a lot to motivate me, and I am sure I shall have the second chapter up by the end of the month. I hope that when it’s ready, you’ll find plenty to enjoy about it.
All the best to you!
Hey St Elmo’s Fire,
Thank you for the review. I will try to implement your suggestions as soon as possible. I have college work that keeps me busy. I keep on getting PMs from other members of that you and other members are praying on new writers. What’s up with that? And I do agree with you that it feels as though I am going through the motions of the plot. I already planned on taking a lot more creative divergences from the original story line since it feels very…rigid in its structure. Thank you for the review. I will attempt to write a stronger and better chapter next time.
Additionally, I was wondering if you could beta my story for me. However, people are saying you are flaming other writers. I understand what they mean but I don’t think you are flaming other writers. I read your review and it seems to be an overall honest review and criticism of the story. Thank you for that. I really need reviews like that.
secs ago[What’s up with that?]
As best I can tell, Dragon’s Blaze is mad about a review I gave her a while back and has enlisted her friends (?) to smear my name across the site as revenge. Just ignore them, they will get bored eventually.
I’m too busy for beta reading, but these people might be available: https://www.fanfiction.net/topic/11834/42724996/1/Beta-Thread-Signup-or-Request