16 MaySomecallmeMichelle

That is not what my question is. What it entails is why you assume the fic to be anime centered. More specifically. “I don’t watch the anime, so I’m not going to be able to review this story on content. Please tag your story as anime fic to avoid this problem. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section.”I won’t go as far as to claim that my story paints the canon picture of Bugsy in canon, as with everything in fanfic I am taking my headcanons and what ifs and building on them, however I tried to stick as close to the games as possible. Bugsy does mention inventing u-turn, the saffron-goldenrod connection you get after beating the elite four and unlocking kanto is, as far as I know, game only. I have been told by someone who took a glance that Misty’s fear of bugs is an anime only trait. If so it must have seeped and blended with what I “knew” about the character. I’ll look forward to painting her more in the gen 2 light – which to be fair only shows us that she could be in a relationship with someone, and is annoyed at being caught.

I thank you for the ortographic corrections and you did make me wonder about some of the things I had planned. I am sure that gym leaders plan for every occurence, and a fire type not showing up in Bugsy’s planning would be an oversight. Maybe an apricorn that cures burning?

I apologise for the incovenience. I realise you must get like a dozen of these a day. I am just curious however. I agree entirely with everything else in the review. But the anime instead of game world, did confuse me.

Thank you in advance.

1h agoThank you, say I have another question that might be kind of dumb in hindsight.

The professor is not capitalized. However would “Professor Oak, and Professor Elm” be, given that those are their names, or wouldn’t it be capitalized due to them being titles and not official names?

I just want to make sure I’ll stick to as correct a spelling as possible, given I’m not an English native.

16 MayDerrykman

Here’s a little fact for that “Pet” thing you said. Pokemon are still technically the same thing as people, mainly because humans just so happened to want more power because of them tending to be greedy, so they created something that could theoretically catch anything, except humans, The poke ball. This is literally how it would work if the games were real in another universe. The lore even states in the Japanese version of diamond and pearl, that humans (or what was actually said, “people”) and pokémon used to get married. So don’t pick arguments with me, you little troll.P.S. Your trying to troll a person who can see the future but only for stuff that concerns himself, so I wouldn’t be able to see your future.

40m agoHey there,

Sorry about that… There’s been quite a lot of things going on in my life that make me really touchy about the things I care about.

Sincerely,
Derryk Sullivan (Derrykman)

P.s.

Please respond, because I have a few things to tell you about myself.

17 MayIzzyaro

You know, when I posted my last Pokémon fic I got a message advising me to block you and a few others because of the possibility of getting reviews like this. I welcome criticism as long as it’s polite though, so I’m glad I didn’t bother.Anyway, to your review. I do understand where you’re coming from with the capitalisation issue. I’ve been playing, reading, and writing Pokémon for a long time, and it’s something I’ve looked into before. Honestly, I’ve become so used to seeing Pokémon names capitalised in the games themselves that I simply can’t write them any other way, it just looks completely wrong to me. I appreciate your comment and I do understand, but as long as it’s consistent I don’t see the problem in using either method.

Perhaps, but personally I got the feeling that Nanu was more interested in looking like he didn’t care than actually not caring. I highly doubt he stayed so close to Po Town just because the rent was cheap. We didn’t hear any complaints of his attitude from Hapu when she mentioned him having to give trial-goers their Poni Grand Trial, and we know how seriously Hapu takes the island traditions. Maybe I’m just being more optimistic, but I prefer to think he’s burned-out and depressed, rather than actively resentful.

That’s one way of looking at it. I did try to make it clear that Kenzo was an anomaly in Team Skull, and that his refusal to back down was a symptom of refusing to accept any sort of authority, even Nanu’s or Guzma’s, unlike the rest of the Skulls who mainly just want somewhere to fit in. I’m not sure the stigma from failing the island challenge is that great, if everyone completed all the trials I doubt they would be so impressed by the protagonist and Hau doing so. I see it more as the Gym challenge, where children do it to explore and collect a team, but only those who are really serious about battling actually concentrate on making it to the League/Grand Trials. I do think Nanu plays a role in keeping the Skulls away from serious crime, considering they are only seen as a nuisance by the rest of the islands. If Guzma hadn’t gotten involved with Aether, I’m sure his priority would have continued to be the rest of his runaways.

That got a little out of hand, but I hope it made sense. Thank you for the civility of your review, and I hope we can politely agree to disagree on some issues.

42m agoMaybe, but I also highly doubt that every single person you meet in Alola has completed the island challenge. Sure, everyone does a trial or two, but how many would really take it seriously enough to go all the way? We also meet that Ace Trainer outside the waste disposal site north of Malie City, and his father is frustrated with him because he gave up on his trial, not because he failed it. He’s perfectly happy when his son loses to the player, as long as he tried his hardest. Of course some families will react more badly than others though. Regarding Guzma in particular, I think his family history, and Kukui’s perceived betrayal contribute more to his anger than the island challenge does, but I’ll freely admit that I don’t pay as much attention to him as to some other characters.

Apologoes if that didn’t make sense, I just got back from a ten hour theatre shift.

17 MayDecent Pretzel

Hey, just noticed your comment three months late. Sorry. I’m bad at being on top of these things.I had two copies of the story because there was a glitch with publishing the first one. By the time I figured out how to fix that, I had already uploaded the second one. As for the grammar rules, thank you, I am well-aware of proper nouns versus singulars, as most people are. But, I do honestly thank you for letting me know proper capitalization for fictional species when writing in fanfiction.

17 MayNorse Kode

How about if you don’t like how I write don’t read or comment on it.

5m agoI guess I can appreciate that you don’t respond back to her or her friends and add to the argument. You seem like a nice person in general–at least from what I’ve read in a few bits of text. To be honest, I read your review again and I’m sorry, I didn’t read it properly. You were actually very nice in your introduction, and though the rest was frank that bit was warm and welcoming, and your last few sentences were very sweet. I still don’t totally agree with what you are doing, in that many people on this website are doing it just for fun, not to be critiqued, but I have to admit most of your advice was helpful.

I made some edits by the way. Some of the grammatical mistakes I made were simply from carelessness, and they slipped into my writing because I didn’t edit properly. The ‘breathe’ bit I did not know though, so many thanks.