The Other Pokeauthors, Part 115

“I am someone who appreciates constructive criticism. There is a fine line between you giving criticism to help someone and criticizing someone because you think you know everything. You are really flirting with that line here. I’m sure it isn’t just towards me because someone felt the need to PM me and warn me about you and a few other people who are doing the same thing. I’ll be the first to admit that my grammar and spelling aren’t always correct and that I make mistakes when writing. The whole point of FanFiction is to write and read stories about characters you love. It is all for fun and doesn’t have to be perfect. It is people like you who feel the need to point out everyone’s mistakes that take the fun out of this. This is a small hobby of mine, not my job. I don’t have to be correct in my grammar and all. If that bothers readers, than they simply won’t read my work and I am perfectly fine with that. I won’t be taking any of your “corrections” and I’m not changing my story to an anime fic. I’ll leave it as is. Feel free to not read any of my stories if it bothered you that much. If you simply can’t help yourself and end up leaving another rude comment on any of my stories, then I would be MORE than happy to block you. Have a GREAT day.”

Can you stop annoying people with your reviews.
23 JunLuckenhaft
No one is listening to what you have to say. People will right THEIR stories how they please.

Your ugly, your breath stinks, and you keep making these stupid reviews, so could you just stop?

secs agoDo I know you?
re: Your review to Beloved of the Sea
23 Junbabeycakes09
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12974964/

I am someone who appreciates constructive criticism. There is a fine line between you giving criticism to help someone and criticizing someone because you think you know everything. You are really flirting with that line here. I’m sure it isn’t just towards me because someone felt the need to PM me and warn me about you and a few other people who are doing the same thing. I’ll be the first to admit that my grammar and spelling aren’t always correct and that I make mistakes when writing. The whole point of FanFiction is to write and read stories about characters you love. It is all for fun and doesn’t have to be perfect. It is people like you who feel the need to point out everyone’s mistakes that take the fun out of this. This is a small hobby of mine, not my job. I don’t have to be correct in my grammar and all. If that bothers readers, than they simply won’t read my work and I am perfectly fine with that. I won’t be taking any of your “corrections” and I’m not changing my story to an anime fic. I’ll leave it as is. Feel free to not read any of my stories if it bothered you that much. If you simply can’t help yourself and end up leaving another rude comment on any of my stories, then I would be MORE than happy to block you. Have a GREAT day.

secs ago[I’m not changing my story to an anime fic]

You do realize this means people actively searching for anime fic will not see it, right?

All I told you is how to format dialogue. If you think that a neutral explanation of grammatical rules is “rude”, you have issues. If you can handle the initial shock of comments like mine then blocking will be a fine solution, but if the very concept of people saying things like this upsets you, you really need to host your work on a website without public comments.

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I don’t need an explanation. When I’m writing in a professional position when my time comes to that, then I will be sure to check and recheck to ensure my writing is grammatically correct. Like I said, this is just something I do for fun. I don’t remember going out of my way to ask you how to format dialogue. So please don’t go out of your way to correct me. This is not a high end journal or magazine. It’s a site for people to have fun and enjoy what they do. I don’t have issues, I can assure you there. I’m not upset at all. Enjoy the rest of your day.

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re: Your review to The Phantom Rebellion
24 JunThe Reeds of Enki
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12975840/

Ah, I see you’ve decided to jump aboard the review train as well. Fair points, what you said. If I were to restart this, I might give a bit more explanation as to why people are afraid of ghost-types as well as an explanation for something that ties the plague of sorts to ghosts. It doesn’t take a whole lot of ‘dex surfing to see that ghost pokemon can be born of either pokemon or humans (but by death), and usually are born with a powerful hunger for vindication (life force, revenge, etc.) The gastly line, for example, is said to have been conceived by the ill-wishes of the dead. Banette was born from a discarded doll that seeks out the child that cast it aside. You can even turn a banette back into a stuffed doll by treating it kindly, apparently. Alolan marowak are said to have their dead mothers’ vindictive spirits acting as a shield for them. Drifloon like to steal young children away and kill them. They can burst apart and are made larger by the more souls they have absorbed. Vindictiveness is a pretty common theme with ghosts, as is the idea that they aren’t really manifestations of flesh and blood. How you can breed them is honestly a big question to me, asking in a way that goes beyond game mechanics, of course. Does breeding a gastly take from some pool of built-up grudges in the world? Does breeding a yamask into existence take from a deceased human soul? The games don’t handle this well, and honestly, I doubt one could breed the average ghost type into existence; you might be able to *create* one though, which is even more morbidly interesting to me.

As for a people having mistrust in ghost-type pokemon, I can see why there’d be more than a little bit of healthy paranoia. If the pokedex is to be believed, lampent hang around hospitals just so they can wait for people to die… and then steal their souls. I don’t know about you, but if my elderly grandparent were in the hospital and I saw a pokemon from the litwick family hanging about, I’d be pretty quick to chase it away. There’s so much to be worked on here! Like, seriously. I took this and made it into a political thing and *badly* when I could have turned this thing into a real horror show just by browsing through the ‘dex. Apparently, the protagonist here’s choice ghost pokemon likes to take wandering spirits, but for a *benevolent* reason, which is to carry them to “where they belong.” I could have had the main character’s family be a family of occultists, spiritualists of sorts that work on a pumpkaboo farm to capture wandering spirits and aid in their peaceful passing. Hell, they probably wouldn’t even like to see a drifloon wanting to play tag with a young child, because they’d know what that meant. Alternatively, they could work beside dusknoir, whose goals would be very similar.

Ghost types are just so damn creepy, *and I love that!* If I were to actually take the pokedex seriously, I could turn it into something a little more interesting. For one, I don’t think the Phantom Rebellion would be the good guys. Not exactly the bad guys, but maybe people would have good cause in wanting to see pokemon like shedinja, who can steal spirits away just from anyone unfortunate enough to take a quick glimpse inside the crack in its body, gone for good. They could even be a group of cultists, possessed by pokemon who *want* the world to die from a giant, grudge-inducing plague, preying on the fears off pokemon trainers who don’t want to hand over their cherished ghostly pal so that they could be killed, permanently and their suspicion of a world that would actively hunt ghosts down. But alternatively, there are useful ghosts like shuppet, who absorb negative emotions like a sponge, so people appreciate their existence. There’s even a proverb about shuppet, which is really cool.

I could see people from Alola having signposts that warn not to leave unattended sand castles overnight, referencing sandygast. There’s so much to be worked with here; there’s the good, the bad, the creepy, the malicious, the helpful, and the in-between, such as in Mismagius’ case, who *knows* that people who associate it with purely bad things won’t likely take kindly to its presence, so it sometimes helps people in addition to cursing people.

If a plague were to happen, or any cause of mass death, ghost types would almost certainly appear in the droves. Children forcibly taken from their parents in a fit of painful illness, the stuffed dolls from the dead children coming alive to exact revenge on a child forced to leave it… There’s a lot to be worked in there. But when you’ve got things like gengar, which can apparently become serial killers with the oddly relatable motive for not wanting to be lonely on the loose, messing things up for an already on-edge group of survivors, the idea of just labeling ghosts as the enemy as a knee-jerk reaction doesn’t seem all too unreasonable. And in this story, ghost-types would be unnaturally more common than other types, as they are born of death and fear. The world would have to be a lot more broken, a lot more desperate, but I could see people abandoning rational thought and not taking the time to figure out which ghosts might not be harmful in their bid to stay safe. Think about it; not only could a family of litwick, accompanied by a lampent or chandalier be haunting you, waiting for you to die, they would *want* it. Then imagine people’s failsafe for death, the idea that the deceased have gone off to a better place taken from them, because you realize that there was a lampent (or any soul-stealer) outside grandma’s door, and now she’s probably just food, fodder for a soul-stealing engine of terror.

Lots of rage, lots of resentment. Lots of vindictiveness… perfect breeding grounds for even more ghosts, which would, in turn, create a vicious snowball effect. Yes, the story was horribly bad for so many reasons, not even including just how I took the premise, but I’ve grown enough to the point where I think I might be able to make it into something worth reading. It’d certainly be a nice exercise to see how much I’ve grown since then. What are your thoughts? Is it even worth remaking? I might be honor-bound to at least *try,* given how I’m disappointed when others don’t do the same when I review for them.

7h agoOh, on a more random note, apparently dusknoir’s pokemon cry, when slowed down to extremely slow degrees, becomes *extremely* creepy. There’s a youtube video that shows it; I can link it to you if you’re interested. I found it pretty cool, personally.

secs ago[I could have had the main character’s family be a family of occultists, spiritualists of sorts that work on a pumpkaboo farm to capture wandering spirits and aid in their peaceful passing.]

Yeah! That’d be really cool, and tie in nicely with themes of prejudice and lost traditions. There are lots of cases throughout history where a dominant class or culture has thrown out the baby with the bathwater based on poor understanding, and it’d be really neat to contrast that with a remnant group who actually knows how things work.

What you’ve already outlined here sounds really interesting. Like you say, ghosts have a wonderfully creepy aesthetic, and there’s a ton to explore with them given an initial premise of a terrible catastrophe causing them to become a major presence.

re: Your review to Whole
27 JunBinario
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/11181218/

Hello and thank you for leaving a review! It makes me happy that this old thing is still getting readers now and then.

First of all, I appreciate you taking your time to point out grammatical mistakes. While it’s not an excuse, English is not my mother tongue. I have realized that, when I started working on fanfics, my English writing was not as good as I hoped it could be. Proofreading “Whole” (or anything else) has slipped my mind for years. Now I see that I should take a few hours to inspect my stories. It’s something that has been pointed out before, and now I’m willing to take heed of the advice.

You make very good points regarding the characterization of the three legendary dragons. I would love to discuss what I was thinking when I wrote this but, frankly, I only remember a vague idea of “Kyurem goes mad”, and that hardly makes for a good conversation on the topic. Nevertheless, I’ve been meaning to review this story and rewrite it altogether. Thank you for bringing my attention back to it.

I’ll consider your views on the Tao dragons when I start to rewrite this thing. Maybe it’ll remain a story that’s not quite what you’re looking for, but I think it’ll become better anyway.

A final PMer said many reasonable things, but among them talked about Blaze PMing them and disagreeing with her claim we were flaming people, so for their own safety that’s not going to be posted.

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  1. Ghost Of Us says:

    Maybe one day we can post PMs without worry of people getting harassed for their opinion.




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  2. You know who says:
    St Elmos Fire: so when are we getting this done.

    Jaxco: soon because fuck Katana and blaze.

    Farla: then we can do our review months in peace thanks very much.

    Jaxco: no prob

     

    Take a wild guess how that ended up. Now then if I catch this happening again the three of us will be having a issue.




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    1. Farla says:

      Blaze, why the fuck do you think making up a sentence and sticking names in front of it is going to trick us into thinking we said it?




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      1. CrazyEd says:

        That is 100% exactly how you talk, though.




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        1. It really, really obviously isn’t.




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          1. Hyatt says:
            I don’t think it’s how anyone talks.



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            1. Ghost Of Us says:

              Never seen them talk like that so nah, they don’t




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          2. Farla says:

            The best part is she fucked up on the apostrophe. Nothing says legitimate copy-paste like typoing someone’s name.




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    2. Hey by the way, whatever happened with that anon-review spam? Are you giving up after only one batch?




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