The Other Pokeauthors, Part 140

“The irrelevancy of this review lies in both the hypocritical correction of the fanfiction chapter and the multitude of similar reviews found in other chapters and fanfiction works.

The review section is best served as a discussion of chapter content, not a check for grammar or other similar actions that should be discussed either in private messaging or beta reviews, none of which I’ve demanded.

Please refrain from wasting from you and my time in mere grammatical controversies that none only do this site not require but also inapplicable to professional writers due to their personal style, contribution to plot, and other noncommercial intentions.”

re: Your review to Pokérus REVAMPED
11 NovMultikirby-Chaos7
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/13114735/

Ah, so you’re the ‘cyberbully’ I was warned about by that Hybrid of Fate chap. Gotta say you were quite a bit more cordial than he made you out to be.

I’ve actually heard the argument for not capitalizing ‘Pokémon’ and the names of species before. Usually how I do it is generally how you suggest, though I capitalize Pokémon names if they’re the actual name of the Pokémon (read:they weren’t named when they were caught.) But the capitalization was a conscious decision I made to the contrary, due to themes I’m going to be addressing during the course of this story. Thanks for the feedback though!

As for the Johto thing, you’re partially right. I’ve personally always viewed Hoenn’s ‘claim to fame’ to being close to nature and having harmony between society and the wild, hence why so many of the town names are compound words about different parts of nature. My introduction to Johto was SoulSilver, and that version of Johto had more paved roads and technology, like the Olympics (i forget the exact term). Johto always struck me as more ‘traditional’ than ‘nature-centric’. But you’re right in that East’s assertions of ‘making apricorns into Poké Balls’ is going to be more or less proven wrong, because of course that’s not how they do it.

Thank you for your feedback though! The minor errors are taken into account. I’ll try to fix stuff like that for my next chapter – I’ve been fighting the demotivation bug for a while so when I finished this first one I just wanted to get it up and out there right away, so I didn’t exactly proofread most of the chapter.

Thank you!

re: Your review to Ice-Cold
11 NovOfficeSupervisor
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/13117993/

all this information is really helpful, I appreciate you taking the time out of your day to point out these errors, and the feedback will be put to good use for future chapters.

Review
11 NovB-League Bratwurst
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/13109571/

Yup, realized that I missed some of the dialogue formatting. Honestly, I struggle with it sometimes and I don’t have anyone to proofread for me. It’s difficult to find your own mistakes and I wish I had a beta to help me out with stuff like that. I’d run it by my wife, but she’s not the literary type.

And I don’t watch the anime either, so I don’t really know what you mean by changing the world tags. It really isn’t an anime fic. I marked it as AU in the summary and warned that it was a medieval fic. My only experience with Pokémon has been the games up to ORAS and the first season/movie of the anime.

I really liked the idea of writing a fic where Pokémon are actually terrifying monsters like they should be. These are animals that can manipulate the elements themselves and likely tear us to pieces without much of an effort. I wanted to write a fic that looked at them differently than the games and vast majority of fics do.

If you weren’t going to review the fic for the content, then why did you mention it at the end? Not being a dick, I just want to know. Don’t get me wrong, I love that you took the time to review, but with how little your review actually touched on there’s not much I can take from it.

secs ago[And I don’t watch the anime either, so I don’t really know what you mean by changing the world tags. It really isn’t an anime fic.]

Then… why did you use anime characters? The characters aren’t really acting anything like their canon counterparts, so it’d make more sense to use the more impressionable game versions. Since the anime characters only exist in the anime, using them puts up a barrier to entry. If you want a general fic that’s accessible to everyone, you shouldn’t use them. Especially given what a radical departure from canon you’re taking, it’d be better to use OCs.

[If you weren’t going to review the fic for the content, then why did you mention it at the end?]

Transparency. If I just tapped out after the dialogue paragraph you’d be even more confused.

re: Your review to Title: Paths of Mystery to Enter
12 NovUnknown Pathfinder
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/13116578/

“Don’t be afraid to use said; lovely word, won’t bite, usually more fitting than whatever fancy verb you’re using in its place.”

This sounds extremely condescending…

“This is a very simplistic way of writing battles. You should try to break free of the mechanical “trading blows” …”

I did utilize techniques, dodging and other things?

secs ago[This sounds extremely condescending…]

“Said is dead” is also extremely condescending. Some people have such an ingrained aversion to the topic that I have to be forceful to get a message across.

[I did utilize techniques, dodging and other things?]

I don’t see where? That’s the only battle in the chapter, and there’s only one more round after the part I quoted, which followed to same format of “trainer orders attack, description of attack happening”. It’s not, like, bad, but it can feel a bit sterile if it’s never varied.

I’d recommend looking at this story if you’re confused about what I mean: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11960983/1/Gods-and-Demons-ad-terminos-terrae

7h ago“Said is dead”
I never said that.

Aqua Jet was used to dodge

That story was kinda dull imo

secs ago[I never said that.]

I never said you did. I was providing an example of other common advice given to authors. Advice always assumes you don’t know something, so it’s always going to sound condescending.

Hello ^^
12 Nov[anonymized for protection]
Hi. I saw your review and saw the mini argument that transpired. I’d one like to thank you for the review your comments have been noted but I would also like to share my thoughts as well. I was at work when the drama started. I was very agitated and a bit upset. I Love and appreciate the opinions of all my readers and I often live by the philosophy that there is ALWAYS room for improvement. Now what upset me was not you correcting my grammar you were pointing out things YOU felt needed to improve or be changed. what did bother me is you really had nothing to say about the story itself. Yes, I appreciate when my readers point out mistakes but it really helps to hear whether I am doing good or if i flat out suck. and another thing whatever this drama is about people stalking or bullying or whooha I’m hoping to be kept out of it. In all my years of being on Fanfiction I haven’t had an issue with anyone. I would kindly take in people’s thoughts and very seldom did i lose my temper. IF I every had an issue I would personally message them and I very rarely block people. I try to avoid blocking people at all cost honestly. But when you have drama pulled starting on something you have pride in, something you love and worked really hard on…and then deal with drama at work and get super happy and excited just to see that someone left a review only to see complete bullcrap…It really disappointed me that Fanfiction has changed so much that the immaturity is so high. I really hope I didn’t come off as a bitch, but I really just needed to say how I felt. Thank you for your time.

I snapped at them for acting like the drama was my fault, but they did apologize afterwards. They said they wanted to avoid drama, so no more identifying details will be posted.

re: Your review to Affectionate Desires
12 NovFrozenAlive97
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/13118253/

I highly appreciate you taking the time to write your corrections, and I completely agree with all but one. I have an additional note for another of your comments.

[she says heartwarmingly.]

The rest of the story is in past tense, so this should be as well.

I do not exactly believe this story was completely written in the past tense, though it is true it is narrated omnisciently in the past tense.

‘Cute’…never ‘beautiful’ nor ‘gorgeous’. How I wish to be more to you Kyle… I think it’s time to try something new… thought the eevee]

You seem to switch narrators here, which is jarring. It’s more immersive if you can keep us with a consistent perspective.

I do see this as true; however, this one in particular I attribute to the way I wrote this story. I feel it to be of value despite the fact it could totally be improved. I see this more of a situation to avoid in the future rather than fixing it here. This is completely something I did not even realize until you pointed it out, so thanks!

re: Your review to Atonement
12 Novpokegabert
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/13117858/

I’m gonna be blunt… I don’t care… anymore…

secs agoI’m not sure what you mean?
re: Your review to Wanderer of End
15 NovCratormaster
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/13112842/

The irrelevancy of this review lies in both the hypocritical correction of the fanfiction chapter and the multitude of similar reviews found in other chapters and fanfiction works.
The review section is best served as a discussion of chapter content, not a check for grammar or other similar actions that should be discussed either in private messaging or beta reviews, none of which I’ve demanded.
Please refrain from wasting from you and my time in mere grammatical controversies that none only do this site not require but also inapplicable to professional writers due to their personal style, contribution to plot, and other noncommercial intentions.
In conclusion, please do not comment on my chapters anymore. I do not welcome you.

secs ago[The review section is best served as a discussion of chapter content, not a check for grammar or other similar actions that should be discussed either in private messaging or beta reviews]

Nope! Reviews are for readers to say whatever they feel like. You don’t like that, you can go to a website that doesn’t have a public commenting feature.

23 Comments

  1. Embershine says:

    Great response to that last PM. No nonsense or pandering, just a firm stance. The author is a little contradictory though, seeing as this came straight from their profile. Authors who cannot handle actual commentary tend to act out like this.

    {Also, plz comment to make my stories better. Seriously, reviews are very much appreciated.}

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    1. N says:
      That user is pissed to learn about the fact St used them to bash his detractors. Also, the anonymous nonsense is useless St they came to me already. Cut the crap I can always find out who did it.
      1. Roc says:
        Hybrid, I must ask you again what you hope to accomplish here. I’m pretty sure none of your comments have ever managed to rattle us up; if anything, they’re just disturbing because they show what kind of person you are.
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        1. N says:

          Hybrid, I must ask you again what you hope to accomplish here.

          Annoy you as you do to everyone else.

          I’m pretty sure none of your comments have ever managed to rattle us up

          There is a whole thread (several from this group), and the fact you tried to block me that proves otherwise.

           they’re just disturbing because they show what kind of person you are.

          Nope they show how negative our relationship is

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          1. Roc says:
            [Annoy you as you do to everyone else.]

            Yes, Hybrid. Because even though this sort of chatter is kept on the forum/blog site where it matters, you have no problems going on other irrelevant forums/sites, complaining to people who don’t want to hear it.

            [There is a whole thread (several from this group), and the fact you tried to block me that proves otherwise.]

            The only reason why that thread existed was because people were getting upset over you yelling in their review sections. Things wouldn’t be this way if you didn’t treat FFN like your personal stress ball.

            [Nope they show how negative our relationship is]

            The relationship is negative because you are acting like a child, thinking you can barge into private sites where you know you’re banned just so you can say how people suck.

            1. N says:

               thinking you can barge into private sites where you know you’re banned just so you can say how people suck.

              You mean the private site that’s actually public and is violating FFN rules?

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            2. Farla says:

              Sevenways, please. You submitted multiple false reports (under multiple names even!) to get this site taken down, so you know this is our privately owned site and we know you know it.

              Why do you lie to make yourself look like even more of an idiot? Do you just love lying even that much?

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            3. N says:

              You submitted multiple false reports (under multiple names even!) to get this site taken down,

               

              None of them fake. You are breaking so many rules that I’m not surprised you still lie about it.

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            4. Hyatt says:
              What are those rules, then? Name them specifically and link to the official list of rules along with the violations.
              Reply
  2. Red says:

    The strong hatred many fanfic writers have against basic grammar and spelling rules will always irritate me. If you write something you have pride in, why would you not want it to be at top form? Why put less care and attention to your fics (which you write for enjoyment) than you’d put into a tedious English assignment, or an answer in an exam? Why would you willingly let your writing reflect badly on you?

    My grammar is atrocious, so I guess I really can’t judge – but a bit of effort isn’t too much to ask, especially when doing so will benefit the writer’s own self esteem.

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    1. Roc says:
      Personally, I think it’s because of the sole fact that fanfiction is, at its core, a hobby. There are people who don’t take it seriously enough to be at the bare minimun of accepteable quality because there are no actual consequences if you have bad writing on a free writing site. The most you’ll get are a few critical reviews, but since you’re allowed to ignore them, their opinions won’t guarentee anything.

      Internet anonymity plays a part in this too because nobody knows who you are except the site owners. Even if you present yourself as someone who makes lots of easy-to-fix mistakes (and also insisting that you won’t fix them), as long as you’re hiding behind a username, you’re not actually tarnishing your image.

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      1. Red says:

        That’s sad. I can understand not wanting to be serious and flawlessly precise about one’s hobbies, but I’ve always felt that hobbies – particularly artistic ones – should be more than just slapping whatever comes to mind together to form something cringy. But yeah. I can relate to an extent: I wouldn’t put much effort into art the way I would with my writings. You wouldn’t catch me uploading my rough, ugly sketches online though.

        I’m pretty self-conscious when it comes to showing people things that I’ve created, and writing has always been important to me – so that’s definitely influencing my view.

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    2. N says:

      The strong hatred many fanfic writers have against basic grammar and spelling rules will alwaysirritate me. If you write something you have pride in, why would you not want it to be at top form? 

      Then tell that to St Elmo’s Fire. They and Farla suck at grammar to the tenth degree. That and story telling.

      1. Roc says:
        “It’s and Its mean the same thing!”

        Sure, Hybrid. Sure.

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          1. Roc says:
            https://www.fanfiction.net/r/13121689/

            Elmo: It’s spelled “translator”.

            Hybrid: No, it’s not!

            Suuuuuuuuuure, Hybrid.

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  3. B League Bratwurst says:
    Hey, I just want you to know that mayyybe you shouldn’t post every pm response here. I’m literally getting harassed for not telling you to fuck off. So please, if we ever do have any more pm convos I would appreciate it if you didn’t post them.
    1. Farla says:

      Oh, that’s not the PM, she’s hassled a number of people who didn’t reply but just got a review after she demanded they block us, but regardless if you don’t want future PMs posted they won’t be.

      1. B League Bratwurst says:
        Thanks. I’m really sick of this honestly. Can’t even stay neutral cause they harass me into blocking them at this point.
        1. N says:
          Hey none of us harrassed you. (except Fire but he doesn’t even count)
          1. So Hybrid, now that an author has explicitly told you they want you to stop, you do understand that if you don’t, you are admitting to the world you don’t actually care about the authors?

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        2. JackPK says:
          For what it’s worth, “not blocking” isn’t a sign of non-neutrality, it’s a sign that you don’t want to get sucked into the bullshit.

          If someone is kicking and screaming trying to drag you into the mud, you don’t have to let them keep doing so for the sake of some perceived appearance of neutrality. It’s fine to just put up the walls that keep them out of your lane.

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    2. Yeah, removing the PMs wouldn’t have saved you; as she readily admits, she stalks people to find out who hasn’t agreed with her. If you don’t want someting specific you said to be public you can tell me up-front, but if it’s just Hybrid you’re concerned about, you can block her.

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