“your second point is a 20 year old discussion amongst Pokémon fans I won’t have again, I am one of the people who capitalized the name of the Pokémon as that’s what the games do. I just draw the line at all caps like the game. Also I find it odd that English is the odd language out on putting caps on most nouns anyway.”
53m ago
TheNobleRoar
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12069743/
Hello!
Thanks for catching a few of the punctuation issues and pointing out that the site labels chapters. I haven’t used this site in a very long time to publish anything and generally, I tend to miss a few of them, no matter how many times I reread through. I will go back to fix what you pointed out.
Also, yes, I know a journey needs more than the badge quest. It can get boring without conflict, stakes, and tension. I am in the process of planning such, however, I am still flip-flopping between possible antagonists I could use. I have already planned out some of the major conflicts among characters though.
Yes, I know people get tired of the same journey, but I have always thought it would be fun to try one of my own, regardless if people are interested or not. We’re all here just to have some fun writing and sharing, aren’t we? If people don’t want to read another journey, they can always just skip over my story. I’ll take a look though at what you have to offer.
Thank you~
1h ago
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12070838/
Hello,
Thank you so much for your review! I’m pretty stoked that the problems are all fixable. I’ve been worried on my end that this new writing style I tried was all rambling. Part of it was writing on an IPad (never again) but there’s no excuse for being lazy, and I thank you for rooting out the mistakes I slept on.
A comment on one of the corrections; I am a dope and forgot to add context about this word in the chapter, like I did for the term Instinct, but “Journey” refers to a special pact (dragon and rider sorta thing, but more of a ‘promise’). In this story, one goal is to try and take the pokemon formula seen in the games/anime/manga, and mystify, personify it. It’s sort of hard to explain outside the momentum of events, which is… why I need to remember to proofread…
As for ‘malboro’… my only defense is too much Final Fantasy :(. Honestly, I need to be using my spell checker (as bad as it is on an IPad), and taking a moment to relearn a few terms. I’ve written for so long about Mystery Dungeon, I never get to use examples like this.
Once again, thank you for the crit! I was already excited to write, but now I’m doubly excited because there’s an invested reader who is interested in my work. I promise to not disappoint — and to put these corrections in as soon as I’m able.
Best wishes,
Consarn
19m agoRodQuest
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12070642/Hello.
Thank you for your review and comments, and I will attempt to take on your advice for my future writings. Please keep in mind that I do write these quickly and for pure enjoyment.
All the best,
RodQuest
9h agoRhuen
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12066631/
On each point.
the very limited character limit for the summary was irritating me so it got shaved down to the most basic there is.
your second point is a 20 year old discussion amongst Pokémon fans I won’t have again, I am one of the people who capitalized the name of the Pokémon as that’s what the games do. I just draw the line at all caps like the game. Also I find it odd that English is the odd language out on putting caps on most nouns anyway.
my spellcheck and grammar check are complete crap at times. Small things like slip through from time to time.
As for anything else there, I assume the stilted bit is coming from the fact that fanfiction and fictionpress’s copy and paste system refuses to paste the scene breaks that no other site has problems with.
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So you want to do things just like the game, but in the same breath you acknowledge that the game isn’t a grammatically authoritative source and you shouldn’t copy it mindlessly? You’re not making sense.
It should also be noted that the games contain the line “No matter how far away things are, a Pilot’s eyes can see them!” Video games are not authoritative sources on proper writing.
The reason I insist on this is not because I like rules for rules’ sake, it’s that capitalizing common nouns all over the place is really confusing and makes writing hard to follow. This is especially a problem when tons of people use the species names as given names, for what I hope are obvious reasons.
56m ago
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12073342/
Sorry and thx for review. Actually, this is because my writer style like usual, plus this is a first time i’m in pokemon section as well
I think, i will….. rewriter this first.
Thx for review again
1h ago
Thank you for reviewing! If you wouldn’t have pointed that out, I might have never looked at it. I made the changes this very second (not sure when you’ll read this) and now the prologue is better! Please check out my story again!
Thank you.
19m ago
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12064312/
Thanks for pointing out! I hope you will continue reading.
CodessFanficsis it good
I don’t actually care about the story, I just care that you’re cluttering up the category by posting chapters as separate fics. The rules are in place for a reason, follow them.sorryThis was the person posting their chapters as separate fics… six times.
8m ago
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12075262/
Thanks a lot for the tips!
I appreciate any review to help make my own writing better, the notes about proper capitalization especially cleared some things up. I wanted to include the intro (I hope that is what you mean when you say “first chapter”) separate from the actual first chapter, it’s just kind of my own style of doing things.I’m assuming that when you wrote this, the only thing up at the time was the intro, hopefully all 3 chapters I’ve gotten in so far are available.
46m ago
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12075286/
Thanks for reviewing. I fixed the mistakes. I’ll look over it again just to be sure. About the name thing though, it’s later explained that some Pokemon prefer a human name while others do not. Jolteon is one of the characters that choose to go by his Pokemon because he wants to. He has a human name (revealed later in story). I have many characters that go by a human name. (They appear in chapter 2 which isn’t done yet) I hope I cleared that up. Anyway, thank you.
O…kay then?
18h agoA Forest Wind
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12074429/
It’s not done yet. That was just explaining stuff in the story. I’m making new chapters, therefor an introduction to a following story isn’t against the sites rules! Thank you for nothing.
7h ago[I’m making new chapters, therefor an introduction to a following story isn’t against the sites rules!]No, it still is. Abuse reports are submitted by chapter, not by story. Each chapter must include story content.
Also, don’t respond to your reviewers with a review, it’s really childish and an abuse of the review system.It did have story content. And that review as to make it clear to others that that is part of a story! And I have no idea what an Abuse Report is and I have never abused anybody! And I know the rules very well and this has story content!So this had lots of stuff to do with the story. You can tell people who have written warrior Fanfictions and have an allegiances page it’s against the site rules since it has no “story content”.
So even if you were trying to help, or trying to bring me down, it didn’t help, and t hat didn’t bring me down. So long.Also lots of fanfic writers post a review on their stories, like I did.3h ago[Also lots of fanfic writers post a review on their stories, like I did.]
Yes, many people break rules and do strange things. That doesn’t change the fact that it’s a bad idea. The place for that kind of information is in your author notes, on the fic itself; isn’t that clearer to readers anyway?
[I have never abused anybody!]
I mean a rule abuse report. It alerts the moderators that a story has broken a rule. You can see it under “actions” at the bottom of every fic.
[It did have story content.]
No, it did not. Story content means prose, narrative, plot, like you’d see in a book. What you wrote was like an encyclopedia entry. That sort of thing can go in author notes or your profile, but it can’t stand alone as a chapter.
Ok, I’m really sorry. But I do pay close attention to the rules and this was supposed to be like a glossary, because I made up a bunch of stuff(obviously), so in my eyes it had story content. Next time I will try to do that on the fanfic or what you said. I thought reviewing in the reviews would be easier because many people read reviews of stories or review themselves, and they would see it there. Um sorry. But still, in warrior Fanfictions, they have a chapter where there are alleignaces which doesn’t have any narraritive, or plot. Oh it’s like describing the cats and the clans. So is that allowed in the rules and can I still keep that meant-to-be-like-a-glossary chapter?And I’m really sorry if I was mean, and I probably was, but even so i should probably think of different ways to give the information I wanted to…Hmm, it sounds like you might prefer Archive of Our Own. It’s a fanfiction site with much laxer rules, so you can post stuff like glossaries as independent chapters. You might even be able to get away with it here if you write the glossary from an in-universe perspective. However, I still think you should have a story chapter posted alongside it, at the very least, so new readers know what the story will be about.That’s a good idea! I can work on that tomorrow! Thank you so much for the input!RedIronFangThat is a lot of things I might need to work on… Thanks for the review though! I do need to work on this yes, and I’ll have you know that I first typed this up on an ekectric typewriter at first. Of course excuses won’t help in the fact that I do need help. I do thank you for taking the time to help me with this, and hopefully I’ll have the first chapter tomorrow… I hope I’m spelling all of these right… Kindles don’t give any kind of warning if you are! Lol anyway stick around if you like, I always have copies in the back!
Lol I finally had a look at what you meant by what you had said about in your review. The part about the sections not seperating… and I can’t help but laugh. Y’see I used microsoft word document 2010 to write this part up and I used the underline function to make it look good between paragraphs… only problem is the underlined part never transferred over! The more you know right? Lol10m ago
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12075937/
Ok thank you I will fix them, I’m sorry about that. Thank you for explaining that to me. I will fix them all in a moment. (At least the ones I think are incorrect) You could’ve made the review nicer? It makes me sad but happy :(:
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I’m gonna capitalize what I want. Thanks, though.
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LightningZenThanks for the review, and i am a new writer, so sometimes i don’t know any rules, but please help me with any tips and review, and could you give me any tips in short sentence for my next chapter so I will do better, anyway thank you very muchSincerely
LightningZen
https://www.fanfiction.net/topic/11834/21887406/1/Writing-Guide-Part-One-Grammarhttps://www.fanfiction.net/topic/11834/142410565/1/Writing-Guide-Part-Two-Story
https://www.fanfiction.net/topic/11834/42724996/1/Beta-Signup
These may be helpful.