Some SYOC weirdness, but chill otherwise.
PokeSyocSorry, I’m going to have to reject this oc right off the bat.
Why?It doesn’t meet the requirementsHow so? All forms are filled out.You didn’t bother to read the first chapter. The guidelines are clearly stated. This shows your lack of care for the story, and as such I can’t even look at your OC for consideration.I did read the first chapter. I don’t see how anything there contradicts my submission. Can you please give me a clear answer instead of dancing around my questions? What, exactly, is the problem here?Evidently, you did not, as you can’t see how your submission is automatically disqualified. The title was supposed to be a specific phrase. I put that in the chapter to verify that the submitter read the chapter. If he/she failed then he/she didn’t read, simple. Your title was not the one given, therefore you did not read.Wait, is it supposed to be this… “don’t forget to title your message SYOC for PMD fic!”? That in the middle of a paragraph at the very bottom is not exactly clear advertising, especially since it’s after all the important stuff. It’s far more likely for a skimmer to see it than someone who read from top to bottom. I also assumed that was a general request to submit a PM with a title that made it clear this was a submission, because you don’t have a monopoly on PMD fic. If you’re going to do this sort of thing, you need to convey what you want more clearly.It’s very clear. It’s written in fine print. Actually, you’re the only one so far to not title the message correctly. Your logic that a skimmer would be more likely to see it is inherently flawed as well. That simply doesn’t make sense. If you read through the whole chapter, and dont just look at the form and copy/paste it, it’s extremely easy and clear to see. Thats the reason its at the bottom of the page, the important stuff doesn’t stop with the form. In fact theres an important tidbit of information directly after the sentence in question! Also, “Dont forget to..!”, without fail, means do what follows it. That’s apparent enough for anyone with even a little common sense. I never assumed I had a monopoly on PMD fics, where does it say that? I just am running two separate SYOCs, so I need a way to keep them organized. Your laziness has prevented that, and as such, I can’t even look at your submitted form, much less accept it. If I need to convey it more clearly, then why, out of 11 submissions, have I received 10 with the proper title, and only one, yours, with a incorrect title? It’s your mistake, not mine, as proven by this evidence.
SYOC authors continue to have no idea how to properly vet things or how to communicate.
1h ago
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12081187/
This was some amazing advice. If you don’t want to be my beta reader then do you know of anyone else would want to be?
Directed them to the beta signup thread.
34m ago
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12083416/
Thanks a whole lot, St Elmo! Sometimes those mistakes slip through, so things do need a little polishing (it has been a while since my last story here). I’ll try to make the next few chapters a lot more accurate, thanks!
And of course, thanks for taking the time to let me know; not a whole lot of people will do that, you know!
29m ago
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12082677/
Thank you for the criticism.
7h ago
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12082345/
How am I supposed to know that?
Reading the rules and, I dunno, common sense? It shouldn’t be surprising to learn story chapters are for story content.
Boby335I want to thank you for reading and reviewing my fanfic for one and for two thank you for pointing out what I did wrong. It sucks being criticized however I did need some of that. I was a little afraid of writing more in this chapter because I thought that it would give too much away, but you are right. As it stands now all Ben is seen doing now is just walking and sleeping with nothing to do. Not an exciting chapter at all. Onto another issue I have such an inconsistent schedule with uploading chapters that a beta reader is somewhat impossible at the moment. I have another question though when you wrote about how I formatted my dialogue wrong I double checked the sentence you gave as an example and I saw nothing wrong with it. It could just be me though. Any who thank you again man I will take this to heart and try to make the next chapter, or rather, the updated first chapter better.
secs ago[I have another question though when you wrote about how I formatted my dialogue wrong I double checked the sentence you gave as an example and I saw nothing wrong with it.]
Ah, sorry, the paragraph doesn’t directly address it. It’s an extension of this: [The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part is considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned].] You have non-speaking sentences leading into dialogue with a comma, which doesn’t make sense, since you can’t lay awake a sentence.
Wait, is it supposed to be this… “don’t forget to title your message SYOC for PMD fic!”?
Weird, what a vague little dummy check requirement. Normally I would do something like “if you understand these terms, include the words ‘pumpkin sharpshooter’ in your character profile”, but I’ve seen some other weird ones applying for jobs, like there’s a space for your CV and cover letter as separate files in the system, but the ~secret test~ is to merge them and submit them as the resume file. I guess.