1h agoACEOP1810
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12103663/

Thank you for your criticism. I will try and take your advice. It is kind of hard when I’m doing this from a phone so I am bound to make mistakes.

7h ago12Storm12
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12102007/

Ok will do thanks for the help

1h agothejuvenile
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12098699/

Hello!

I just wanted to thank you very quickly for being my first review for my story Vanquish. I know my writing has a LONG way to go on the journey for improving. So, I also wanted to thank you for pointing out all the things that I completely missed. You’ve inspired me to take the time to go back and re-read and fix my errors, so for that, thank you! If you don’t mind me asking though, what were your thoughts on my story as far as the storyline is going?

3m agoalonewithaviolin
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12101479/

thank you very much for spending your time on helping point out my mistakes. I will spend some time, fixing it adnd hopfulling getting it up to scratch so to speak. Thank you.

alonewitaviolin

20m agoAmorLor
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12105404/

Thanks,sort of haven’t wrote anything for a while so hearing that helped. I will keep all that in mind and try to make my stuff better.

14m agoIcee The Hedgehog
Thanks for taking the time to review my fic.

I do understand the mistake on Pokemon species, but for me, it just feels wierd to not capitalize Pokemon names because they are Pokemon names. However, I’ll try thinking of it like animal names and learning to lowercase them.

The last part of the review really wasn’t nessacary. That fic wasn’t even supposed to be serious. And I PLACED THAT BIT,OF INFO IN THE BEGINNING. If you expected a strictly serious fic then you shouldn’t have read. It’s just something to entertain people who DO like my work until I get my next serious chapter fiction up. Going as far as to basically tell me that I shouldn’t post on ffn was very rude and unessacary.

Thanks and have a nice day

4m agoI’m not going to sit and argue all evening with you about this. I can tell doing so is a complete waste of time.

All I’m going to say is please have more respect for people’s work, and don’t assume that a fic is not a fanfiction because canon isn’t always being adhered to. If you do not like a fic, then don’t disrespect the work by telling them to move it to an original work because it isn’t following canon to the letter. Either kindly critique the work or just don’t read.

Thanks and have a nice day.

49m agoThe Royal Serperior
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12107108/

Just until I get enough OCs for the actual story, plus there’s the announcement piece that I have to work on

9h agoFireflyLake
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12105240/

You have got one interesting review. Thanks for your time, but I will proceed in writing how I like. If you don’t like it, that’s fine. Have a nice day.

24m agoZelenal
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12106293/

For starters, I appreciate the fact that you took the time to review my story.

I capitalize things as they’re capitalized in the games for the most part. If you want to complain to someone about that, go complain to NoA.

I don’t know what’s wrong with the profession of Sara’s parents. It’s not outside the realm of plausibility.

Except when it’s not a title. The words “mom” and “dad” are rarely capitalizes and words such as that are practically never capitalized if they follow a possessive.

I have a reason for that but that reason won’t become apparent until significantly late into the story. To put it succinctly, I needed someone more emotionally mature than a 10-year-old, even a precocious one like Sara.

Normally, I’d agree with you. However, Sara’s backstory plays no major part in the story going forward so I needed to get the basics out of the way. That’s why I posted Chapter 1 alongside the prologue. The details that you see in Chapter 1 are likely to be the last time you hear of it since it’s just not important to the plot.

Once again, I thank you for the review.

42m agoNightfang316
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12107077/

Thanks for the OC and the feedback. To answer a few questions.

1)Thanks for the info on the review thing. Ill be sure to update that when I can,
2)Regarding the whole pokemon thing with pseudo legendaries. Trainers have to go to a they might not have a chance to go on a journey once they are 10. But ill think about this later

Once again,thanks

4h agoCircusofMine
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12107558/

Thanks for your review! Yeah, it’s been a while since I’ve written anything, so my grammar is still a little bit rusty.

I’m glad you enjoyed the lighting section! I’ve been listening to a lot of fictional podcasts and the writers in those always do a great job of really setting the scene with little details like this. I really wanted to implement that in my writing, and I’m glad to see it’s working to some extent!

You can definitely count on some of your plot questions getting answered in the next couple chapters!

– Jared

1h agoShonex
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12108453/

Hey, I just wanted to say thank you for the constructive criticism on my fanfiction. I’ve seen your reviews on some of the other stories so that’s how I knew to fix the pokemon capitalization whenever I would start writing my own; it really helps!

As for Slowpoke’s name, do you think I should edit the first chapter or save it for down the line? I realize starting off with a special name for Slowpoke would make more since because he’s family, but I just want to hear your thoughts on this.

I’ll try to get the plot going up in the second chapter, though it may not be executed perfectly.

I’ll put the way I describe the narrator in a different spot so it doesn’t look so awkward, and I’ll swap that empty space out for text that will hopefully flow well together.

Lastly, I’ll edit the chapter and fix the overuse of epithets. I hope to see you around again, because I know there’ll be some things that’ll need help.

1h agoTalkingbirdguy
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12106306/

The dropdown menu has the number of the chapter next to the name of the chapter, so I think it should be okay. At least, that is what I see while on a computer. I am no so sure when it comes to phones and/or tablets.

I think what I meant to do there was say: He waved his hand and told me, “Take the day off.”
I must have missed that in the editing process. Thanks for pointing it out.

I capitalize the names of pokemon simply because most people call any pokemon they see by their species’ name until they find out if they have a special name of their own. I agree that your logic is sound on all accounts, but mainly for the real world. In the subbed anime, the few that I have watched, they have capitalized the name of the pokemon both before and after learning the actual name. Because of this, I think the pokemon universe goes by different rules when it comes to stuff like this. I will, more than likely, stop capitalizing pokemon in the future because you do make a good point when it comes to that.

I simply have not brought in many pokemon yet. It is a sort of flaw of mine when, in my efforts to make the plot as believable and logical as possible, I tend to make things more closely resembling reality towards the beginning. The next chapter should have more pokemon and begin to diverge from resembling the real world so much.

To conclude, I thank you for your review. You made some good points and I do enjoy it when others point out my mistakes and offer possible solutions. I hope you have a pleasant day.