“Thank you for the help. I really do appreciate it but, this is fanfiction. A place where I can write about anything.”
I’m very sorry
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12250511/
Look, I’m a bad author. I accept that. My previous works are terrible, including the one I’m currently working on. However, I must say, you are definitely a good reader. You were able to point out the tiniest, and most substantial, flaws in my writing, and I sincerely appreciate that, from the bottom of my heart. You are, for certain, one of my greatest readers, for not only taking your time to write such great criticism, but also to not strictly praise my work, as many others have done in my other cringe-worthy story. In all, sir/ma’am, I have great respect for you, and will work towards fixing any errors you have pointed out.Thanks!
secs agoYou don’t need to apologize just because you made a few mistakes. You’ll do fine if you listen to feedback and keep working to improve.
re: Your review to Lights new adventure
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12251647/
I reposted it for a beta reader I’m just waiting for them to review it or PM me it.
re: Your review to Live a Little
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12251821/
First of all, thank you for taking your time to review my story!I’ve never heard of that dialogue rule before. I assume it’s something that’s gone over in a college class? None of my teachers have ever mentioned it before. Then again, the only time I ever had to write a story in class involved describing an event that had taken place in the history unit we were learning about.
As for the capitalization, I always thought it was a personal preference on whether or not someone wanted to capitalize the name of Pokemon. Most of the stories I’ve read capitalized the names of species, so I did so myself.
As for the first chapter, yeah, I know, it was pretty lame. Beginnings aren’t my forte and summaries are even worse. I wanted to give a taste of how Irene struggles with social situations. It’s definitely understandable to me that you dislike her as she comes off as an unlikable character with her constant stream of negativity as she faces others. But that’s her personality, really. All bark, no bite. Except, well, she doesn’t have the guts to oppose what she wants to most of the time.
Not everybody, including Irene, has the maturity to adopt themselves to unfavorable situations. She could remove herself from the clique of teenagers she mentally berates, but she doesn’t because she didn’t want to be a loner. It’s admirable that you were able to stop hanging out with people you didn’t like. Irene, however, lacks the courage to leave her group to go talk to other people.
I know no one really wants to be around a downer like Irene. I’m not going to try to excuse her petty actions that I know are disgusting. One of the biggest conflicts in the story will be how she learns to get along with others rather than shut them out because she finds things she doesn’t like about them. She’ll evolve from being extremely judgmental – something I tried pointing out by having her internally insult those around her, but it looks like I did a poor job of that – to having a kinder, more open mind.
It does all seem a bit cliche, but I’m going to try to work through this story to grow to be a better writer (at least I hope so, or else everything I’m doing would become a waste). With people like you teaching me grammar I haven’t learned yet and giving me different perspectives of what I’ve written, I think I’ll learn a lot with this fic :)
secs agoOh, her being unlikeable was intentional? That removes most of my complaints, then. I’m sorry for how uncharitable I was, but you’d be amazed how many authors play that straight.
[Not everybody, including Irene, has the maturity to adopt themselves to unfavorable situations. She could remove herself from the clique of teenagers she mentally berates, but she doesn’t because she didn’t want to be a loner. It’s admirable that you were able to stop hanging out with people you didn’t like. Irene, however, lacks the courage to leave her group to go talk to other people.]
I don’t think this was gotten across very well, though. I wouldn’t call it “admirable” that I tuned out from social contact for most of my childhood — I believe that is actually the most common and straightforward solution for people in Irene’s situation, but it’s not necessarily the most healthy in the long term. Basically, this scene gives the impression that Irene chose this intentionally — in my experience, you don’t just happen to get sucked into a group of friends, you have to actively make an effort to engage with them and stick around past their initial overtures. So it’s not just that Irene won’t do anything to get out of this, she actively got into it in the first place, which raises an even bigger question of “Why?” The answer seems to be what you said, that she doesn’t actually want to be alone, but that isn’t explained at all in that scene, and her constant hatefulness and bemoaning of her introvert problems actually implies the opposite. It might be wise to elaborate and expand on that line about how she hangs around them because they took her under their wing — I dismissed that as a throwaway cliche, but if it’s actually a major part of her character, it should be explained further. What is she so afraid of that she’s willing to put up with this? Even if she has trouble admitting it to herself, you should hint at these things in her narration.
Basically, it sounds like what you’re trying to convey is an unreliable narrator who’s a worse person than she presents herself as, at least at first. That’s extremely tricky to do well, so you’ll need to pay a lot of attention to little details to make sure everything works.
[I’ve never heard of that dialogue rule before. I assume it’s something that’s gone over in a college class? None of my teachers have ever mentioned it before.]
The current state of English curricula is a disaster. You’d have to take a specialized creative writing course to learn things like this.
St Elmo’s Fire,
A new review has been posted to your story.
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1
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Harry Pottr dies.
re: Your review to Eon Team
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12252280/
Thanks for your advice. I’ll take it in mind and use it for future reference, as well as for correcting my first chapter.
re: Your review to Tortured Light
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12251881/
I will look the thread over and decide if that is something I wish to do. I emailed an author about that a few years back and they said that the Pokemon were always capitalized. It could be that they were wrong or that may be just how they write their fics. Anyways, I will go back and consider making the changes. If I don’t, then I’m sorry. However, just from looking at the thread, I do see a lot of sense in that.
re: Your review to Angel from Hell
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12252667/
The characters are from Pokemon. And later on I’ll send them to earth were Pokemon exist.
re: Your review to The Story Of How I Died
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12253116/
Thank you for the help. I really do appreciate it but, this is fanfiction. A place where I can write about anything. I love the characters and I wanted to make a story that involved those characters. I see nothing wrong with it. It came from my imagination and I wanted to make a story that didn’t have to involve Pokemon. I’m sorry if it doesn’t please you.
secs ago[I really do appreciate it but, this is fanfiction. A place where I can write about anything.]
No; that would be original fiction. All fanfiction draws from some source material — this is its greatest strength, the ability to draw on a setting and concept that viewers are already familiar with, but that also means that something with no relation to the source material is not fanfiction, by definition. Your story had nothing to do with the canon characters or the canon setting. So, I genuinely don’t understand why you didn’t publish this as original fiction on Archive of Our Own or Fictionpress.
3m agoI honestly never heard of those. I’m a beginner in writing. I have been on Fanfiction for years and I have seen similar stories with original fanfiction. So I thought I would post my story here.
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12253569/
The website has designated Pokémon as a game so it will not be found in the anime section
secs agoYou might want to read my review all the way to the end.
Got blocked after this!