“As for it not being Pokémon. That was the first chapter, and it says in the description this is about a high school that these Pokémon are attending. It obviously isn’t going to follow the game or the show. It is not following characters from the game or show. It will be different. This is however considered a Pokémon fan fiction. Just because the Pokémon act sort of humanlike is not the sole deciding factor in what the fanfic is or isn’t. Again I thank you on grammatical corrections but I do not appreciate you putting it down saying “This has nothing to do with Pokemon”.”
HellBorn RayquazaA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12262941/
I understand what you mean with grammar.
I would like you to PM me any mistakes you see and I will try to fix it. As for it not being Pokémon. That was the first chapter, and it says in the description this is about a high school that these Pokémon are attending. It obviously isn’t going to follow the game or the show. It is not following characters from the game or show. It will be different. This is however considered a Pokémon fan fiction. Just because the Pokémon act sort of humanlike is not the sole deciding factor in what the fanfic is or isn’t. Again I thank you on grammatical corrections but I do not appreciate you putting it down saying “This has nothing to do with Pokemon”. Please keep thing like that to your self or send me a PM. I do accept criticism just not putting my story down. Thank you and have a good day.
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If you think that calling a story original fiction is putting it down, that says a lot more about you than it says about me.
There is nothing wrong with original fiction. It is not inferior to fanfiction. It simply is not fanfiction. People come to this site to read fanfiction, and it’s inconsiderate of you to clutter up the archive with unrelated stories. As I said in the review, there are websites that do allow hosting of original fiction, and your story will be better in the long run anyway if you free yourself from a canon that’s irrelevant to the story you want to tell. For instance,
[Just because the Pokémon act sort of humanlike]
They do not act “sort of humanlike”. They act exactly like humans, down to having the exact same social structure, education system, and behavior. Remove the references to fur and this looks like a standard high school romance novel. I should have mentioned this in the review, but…
[The teacher opened the door]
[“Okay now, you may work with two partners on this sheet.”]
How do they do this? Most pokemon do not have opposable thumbs, and the main characters are quadrupeds. If you want to write about pokemon, you need to take these things into consideration. If you aren’t interested in writing about the things that make pokemon uniquely pokemon, then I am completely baffled by your decision to write about them anyway. You clearly want to write about humans, so just… write about humans. The pokemon stuff is only getting in the way.
Take into consideration that I may have a different thought structure than you. Also you can work on a sheet without writing. Yes this may have the same social structure and education system because I wanted to. Just because it is the same doesn’t really mean it isn’t about Pokémon. Yes this is a typical high school fic but, I want it to be Pokémon. Not humans whatever it seems.Also one more thing. It is going to be more about the pokemon themselves as the story goes on. It is just them in the school, for now. Did you ever think about where they came from? The answer will come in time and more questions will arise in the second chapter. There is a new character being introduced, and it will be a huge part of the storyline.secs ago[I want it to be Pokémon.]
Okay, but why? What can you do with these characters that you can’t do with a normal setting?
You are forgetting the second part of what I said. It’s just at schoo, for now, and it will get more about Pokémon as the story continues. The first chapter is a foundation of what comes next.School**I would recommend reading this: https://www.fanfiction.net/topic/11834/142411850/1/First-ChaptersThen I ran into this guy again:
KnightsKingA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12262941/
St is all you do critisize us for you amusement if so please don’t hellborn doesn’t need it neither does Silver or me now stop if all you do is critisize you can stop let him right how he wants to if you won’t then I’ll report you this isn’t a threat just a warning from a fellow righter because me Hellborn and Silver are friends irl we talk and stuff but we don’t tell each other our stories so now hush and be quiet or go critisize some one else because all you do is critisize people and it’s annoying as crap so stop me let him write his way or I will definitely hurt you
Your friends are perfectly capable of defending themselves. I had a productive conversation with Hellborn the other day about this, in fact. If they were actually distraught and were just putting on a composed act, tell them to *stop doing that*, it’s really unhealthy. If they don’t want to have to deal with me, they can block me.Ok but dude just don’t critic us so much? It’s also unhealthy for you cause you are most likely older than the three of usAgain, if you don’t want me to criticize you, block me. It is on you to exercise self-care, not me.No response, but neither of them have blocked me either. Good lord these people are dense.
ThatOneNateA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12262634/ Thanks for the advice! I’m sorry but I am new to this website! If you don’t mind me asking, what did you think of the story? I am curious to hear what you thought! And also do you have any recommendations so I can improve? If not that’s fine! But thanks if you do! I hope you enjoyed it and have a great day or night!
HeavyJ15A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12264369/ Taking down the story to fix the problems, I noticed along with a couple problems even you didn’t mention that could affect the story long term. Will re post the redone version when I am done.
You know any good betas? My only good one is busy at the moment.The thread I linked to has a number of good ones, and you can ask directly for more. https://www.fanfiction.net/topic/11834/42724996/1/Beta-Signup
PikachubikedestroyerA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12264613/Thanks for the info! Although I am SLIGHTLY confused… thank you for supporting me like this! IDK if I will, tho.. XD
BlazetatoA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12266083/ I’m sorry that you don’t like it you are the first to complain on this and not that I copied it even though I stated I got permission to do it. Thanks for the advise and Also English is not my first language but that is not an excuse I’m sorry if you don’t like it I just used the layout of the original author vzizzel for the first 2 chapters. Again sorry if you don’t like it.
MilesPrower162A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12266917/ Hey I am truely sorry about that. Again this is my first time writing on http://www.Fanfiction.net and I am trying to get used to things. I was also using Notepad and the way things are done on there are weird. Also, the 5 years before part is a flashback. The story is a flashback of the main character’s life and decisions he makes up until the point where he is telling the story/remembering how he got to the point he is the champion. Sorry for the grammar errors as Notepad has no spell check or grammar corrections on it so I can’t really do anything about that. But I hope you will stay tuned and keep reading!Current Champion of Alola,
Miles
Zephyr JohnsonA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12267107/ Okay, I understand that this is a website where there are reviews for a reason. Although, what I’m getting from this one is, you looked for all of the smallest parts where I could’ve messed up, don’t get me wrong I did make many grammatical mistakes, and just mistakes in general. Although, I do appreciate your help, like I said I’m seeing this one as a complaint.
You have white text throughout the second part of the post.
Fixed. I hope.