The Other Pokeauthors, Part 62

“You seem to be convinced that the convention of the English language is to not capitalize the names of Pokémon, but this is clearly false. The convention of every single person using the English language to write about Pokémon, except for you and perhaps handful of others on this website, is to capitalize them. While you may not like it, the English language has adopted this new convention to talk about these new entities. It doesn’t frankly matter whether “a Pilot’s eyes” is correct, because we not talking about pilots, we’re talking about Pokémon. To use such a condescending example despite its irrelevance is to discredit yourself as an authority. “

re: Your review to Of Ultra Beasts, Skull Fragments, and a Snarky Espeon
Jul 25Butterfly Kitty
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12585121/

Hello!

I appreciate all of your feedback for this story. I will take extra care to fix all grammatical errors and the language used.

That being said, this IS just the first couple of chapters. I have a very strong idea of what will be conveyed in this story, and how I want to portray the characters and their backstories. If you wish to stick around to see where things go, you can, but I won’t make you. I am aware of what Team Skull is (in my opinion, I love that this team was full of kids who fell through the cracks rather than random genocidal adults, I think that having Team Skull this way makes them much more dynamic and believable), and future chapters were going to explore some of the origins of the team as well as what really went on behind closed doors.

Once again, I appreciate your feedback. I will take it all into consideration to refine my work in the future.

secs agoOkay, that’s good. But the talking pokemon?
8m agoIt’s only Moki. There’s a whole backstory, but as there’s only been two chapters put out, and only one with that particular pokemon (a chapter where both characters are used to her behavior), I haven’t been able to get that out yet.
 
re: Your review to Pokémon: Rise of the Poké-Teams – Muffin\’s Story
Jul 25IrkenGirl
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12585122/

All of these are definitely something to look into more carefully. Thanks for helping me out; any non-flame criticism is helpful for improving the story.

As for how TMs work, I rarely watch the anime, so I kind of filled in my own thoughts as to what it would be like to have an incompatible TM be used on a Pokemon. Though I do think you’re right about that.

secs agoIt’s generally agreed by fandom that the TMs are instructional videos. That’s why they look like CDs.
16m agoOkay, now that makes much more sense. Thanks!
 
re: Your review to On Again, Off Again
Jul 25ElrondURPG
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12585602/

Hi, St Elmo’s Fire,

Thanks for your feedback! Always good to have an extra set of eyes picking up the typos that Word’s spellcheck can’t. I would like to ask for clarification on one point you made at the end:

“A story about everyone being terrible is not terribly fun to read about, especially not one that also wallows in sexist stereotypes.”

I can’t argue against the first point, but I would like to ask you to expand upon the second. As this is my first foray into the world of publicly-readable fanfiction, I can wholeheartedly admit that I’m not as attuned to the issue of sexism in literature as I should be. It’s hard to identify those issues in my own writing and improve, however, without textual evidence. If you could provide some examples of the sexist stereotypes you found in my writing, and explain how they were detrimental to the story, I would really appreciate it.

I’d also love to discuss the issue of capitalizing Pokémon names. Per your request, I’ve read Farla’s “Capitalization Thread” in order to familiarize myself with the arguments that you’ve already heard. I want to thank you (or Farla, rather) in particular for the section titled, “But an authority of some sort did it and I blindly obey their will!” I happen to be a major fan of blindly following authorities–particularly Noah Webster, who made some arbitrary but ultimately helpful decisions in his 1828 “American Dictionary of the English Language.” If early nineteenth-century Americans hadn’t blindly followed that authority, we might still be spelling words like Chaucer did–that is to say, irregularly, and with lots of extraneous Es. Conventions are important, and despite the faux-authoritative tone of the Capitalization Thread (which also wants me to blindly follow its opinion), the convention in every single part of the Pokémon canon, from the games, to the anime, to the officially-sanctioned books, to every official website and every fan site, to literally everything else except perhaps your own writing on this tiny corner of the Internet, is to capitalize Pokémon names in every instance. So, my dear, I’m afraid the words are “Pokémon,” “Pikachu,” and “Charizard,” and I shall write them correctly.

That being said, I’m from the USA, and my country’s education system is indeed a “sick joke.” Please make sure to add me to the tally Farla alluded to at the end of that thread, because I love a good competition and, as everyone knows, America is #1.

Thanks again, friend!~

secs agoAll your female characters are vapid and shallow, especially Sandra. You’re using the cliche of the henpecked boy who is so put-upon by unreasonable selfish girls who don’t deserve him and can’t see his greatness. You say the issue is supposed to be that he’s too obsessed with winning championships to give his girlfriends real emotional connection, but that’s not what you show. During the date with Sandra, I spent the whole time wondering why he was ever attracted to her in the first place; she’s a terrible person and an emotional black hole. Spending more time with her wouldn’t fix that. Meanwhile, his mother and sisters are bratty and vapid and only seem to serve as obstacles to him getting things he needs.

[Conventions are important, and despite the faux-authoritative tone of the Capitalization Thread (which also wants me to blindly follow its opinion), the convention in every single part of the Pokémon canon, from the games, to the anime, to the officially-sanctioned books, to every official website and every fan site, to literally everything else except perhaps your own writing on this tiny corner of the Internet, is to capitalize Pokémon names in every instance.]

Okay, but the convention of the English language is to not capitalize them. You said you read the thread, so I know you know this. In case you somehow missed it, here is the relevant section:

“No matter how far away things are, a Pilot’s eyes can see them!” The games do not model correct capitalization in other respects either. Go look up the actual grammar rules for capitalizing “professor”. Notice how the games spit upon that. Then go look at how the games started off writing it PIKACHU and POTION, so no, the games don’t even consistently do it your way.

(If you have a counterargument, post it to the thread.)

1h ago[Okay, but the convention of the English language is to not capitalize them.]

You seem to be convinced that the convention of the English language is to not capitalize the names of Pokémon, but this is clearly false. The convention of every single person using the English language to write about Pokémon, except for you and perhaps handful of others on this website, is to capitalize them. While you may not like it, the English language has adopted this new convention to talk about these new entities. It doesn’t frankly matter whether “a Pilot’s eyes” is correct, because we not talking about pilots, we’re talking about Pokémon. To use such a condescending example despite its irrelevance is to discredit yourself as an authority.

Thank you for the rest of your feedback, however. On the subject of sexism, I do certainly agree that many of the characters are not as fleshed-out as they should be. On the other hand, I disagree that Austin is somehow the exception to the rule. I’ve done a poor job of showing it, perhaps, but my intention was that Austin should seem just as unreasonable and vapid at times. I can see how lowering him to everyone else’s level rather than raising everyone else up may make for a less enjoyable story, however.

[During the date with Sandra, I spent the whole time wondering why he was ever attracted to her in the first place]

This is a piece of feedback I’ve received elsewhere and wholeheartedly agree that I didn’t do a very good job of explaining, if at all. Addy is meant to be the exact opposite, but I didn’t take enough time to develop her as a character.

secs agoIf you don’t want me to be condescending, don’t act purposefully obtuse. The convention of the English language is that common nouns are not capitalized. Pokemon media spits upon this, as the pilot’s eye example demonstrates. You are arguing that you want to use the convention of Pokemon media instead. I am arguing that they do not deserve this blind obedience, because the pilot’s eye example shows they either do not understand or do not care for proper English conventions, and modeling your writing off of such a brazenly inaccurate source is misguided. Not all authorities are equally valid. The established conventions of the English language supercede the localizing decisions of one company.

St Elmo’s Fire,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: Blood is Thicker than Water
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1

From: Guest
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:hey you h*** moron are you having fun copypasting you stinky garbage spams on other people stories? ew what a nasty turd you are. you are nothing but waste of space in this planet. people like you should get their fingers chopped off with a giant axe. i feel sorry for the dolts who mindless follow you.

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The censored word is “horny”. I don’t think they know what that word means.

St Elmo’s Fire,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: Blood is Thicker than Water
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1

From: Guest
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:your reviews are not needed. go rot in hell you don’t-know-it-all grammar nazi

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St Elmo’s Fire,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: Blood is Thicker than Water
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1

From: Guest
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:your so-called reviews are trash just like your trashy stories.

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St Elmo’s Fire,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: Blood is Thicker than Water
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1

From: Guest
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:DON’T TELL ME WHAT TO CAPITALIZE AND WHAT NOT TO. YOU DON’T KNOW NOTHING SO SHUT YOUR TRAP FOREVER YOU PIECE OF CRAP.

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These were all posted in the span of 15 minutes.

Then later, after Crazeegab’s freakout:

St Elmo’s Fire,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: Blood is Thicker than Water
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1

From: DarkwingedLancelot ( https://www.fanfiction.net/u/8708346/ )
Reply URL: https://www.fanfiction.net/pm2/post.php?rwid=252639071
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St Elmo’s Fire,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: Blood is Thicker than Water
Chapter: 1. Chapter 1

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I have no idea who this person is, but it looks like I reviewed some of their favorited stories.

re: Your review to Gold, Silver, and Crystal: Prologue
Jul 27Pachalo
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12583561/

Thank you, this was actually very helpful, I appreciate the critique!

re: Your review to poke\’mafia
Jul 27FXCF
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12589811/

One, thank you for the advice. I will attempt at following it in the upcoming chapters.
Two, a guest on my more recent stories, the succubus awakens, said that they could not wait for you to roast me. Fill me in on why the guest would wait for that?

secs agoI have a reputation for giving harsh reviews. Some people like to play me up as harsher than I actually am.
2m agounderstandable.
 
re: Your review to Kalos With Skills
27m agoKaze no Ryuu kami
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12588343/

Thank you for your suggestions. Pokemon is not under Anime/Manga category so it isn’t possible. I will try to do better in dialogue as well as grammar issues.

secs ago[Pokemon is not under Anime/Manga category so it isn’t possible.]Please read what I actually wrote.

7m agoDoesn’t matter since it won’t change anything.
secs agoYes it will. This is a separate feature from the category designation. Look at your story in “Manage Stories”.
14m agoDoesn’t matter since it won’t change anything.
13m agoI did, sorry, that was accidentally reposted. So, why does it matter?
secs agoWhy does what matter?
1h agoThe change in category since it won’t change the main one
secs agoIt’s a tag that affects searches. It allows people to search specifically for anime fic. This is one of the few effective search methods on the site, so it’s a good idea to uphold it.
9h agook
2h agoIs that all you’re going to edit?
2h agoor comment?
secs agoYes.
What you said
Jul 27AshXSerenaLover69
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12587969/

Don’t worry, I’m not here to shout at you. I just want to say thanks! You noticed a few things that I didn’t. I hope you’ve noticed that I’ve changed the summery of the story. It may not be exactly what you were hoping, but I’m trying to keep the plot secret for now before the story explains it itself. Also, when I made the settings for the story, I put it on anime as what it was based on. So I guess it changed it back or something. I glitch maybe. Anyway, the other things that you said, I’ll try to do them, but I’ll probably forget at some point. Thanks again!

re: Your review to fire red the fanfiction
Jul 27owen-darkheart
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12581493/

yeah, the story is a mess i know, and i am not really trying all too hard. this is just something i started so i could have a little bit of fun, and use up some time. thanks for the constructive criticism though! i will do my best to take your advice.

re: Your review to The Kanto Champion Returns!
Jul 27Stormshard
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12587659/

I want to take a moment to personally thank you before I even read your review. I distinctly remember your username and it’s honestly and honor to see it pop up here.

I use to have a different account on here a number of years ago. I think I was 13? Either way, I had just started to write stories but I had no idea how the hell to write. At all. This is the part where you came in.

I doubt it’s memorable, but I wrote what ended up being a soulsilvershipping trilogy with the first part being named “Glued Magnets”. It was essentially a romantic/comical storytelling of the HG/SS games. I remember writing whatever I wanted to without paying any regard to structure, punctuation, and grammar. I didn’t even know the difference between “there”, “they’re”, and “their”.

You left me my first review of what I consider to be actual good criticism. It hit me hard since I was sensitive, but I can’t stress how much it attributed to me growing as a writer. I am genuinely convinced it was the push that I needed and I don’t think I would be able to get anything like it in the type of education that I grew up with before college (but believe me – I’m still nowhere near the best in the world and I don’t take it too seriously since it’s an activity of leisure for me). Please don’t feel bad for any of it; I’m chuckling just reminiscing about it and I really do find myself lucky to have detail-oriented people like you who don’t shy away from honesty or sugarcoat things. :)

Now that I said my two-cents, I’m going to respond to this like any other review I usually get.

I actually had no idea that threads like the ones you’ve linked exist. The argument about the capitalization of pokemon/occupations is definitely valid but I’m still reluctant to adopt that into my writing. This may honestly only be because I grew up exposed to the games – the formatting capitalized these things. I also find words like “Professor” and “Trainer” to be honorific titles so seeing them without capitalization doesn’t sit well for me. xD I still greatly appreciate you going out of your way to bring these points to my attention, though.

“Using Arceus in place of God sounds ridiculous”

I actually laughed really hard at this because I completely agree with you. This is the third version of this story that I’m publishing and I remember feeling really proud of myself when I first wrote that line in 2012. I *really* contemplated taking the dumb-liner out but ultimately left it in to pay tribute to my initial intention with it. Although 100% ridiculous, I still like it and people can pick their fun at it but I’m just gonna stay in my lane. Lmfao. xD

Other than that, thank you for pointing out a number of structural mistakes. I’ll go back and fix them. I’m also really grateful that you called this promising. I’ll try to deliver strong with the next chapter! ;)

Your review of Pokemon fic Like No One Ever Was.
Jul 27LizRaph
Hello!

Thank you very much for your feed back. I’m always glad to know where I can improve.

I have one question. You mentioned the story was hard to follow. I’m just curious what it was that you had trouble following.

I agree I need to be better at catching grammar errors, but the part I always want to make sure I nail is the story. So I’d love more of your thoughts on that.

And this is just my opinion, but I disagree that pokemon need nicknames.

Anyway, thanks again for posting. I’m heading back in to correct some things you pointed out.

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  1. CrazyEd says:
    The censored word is “horny”. I don’t think they know what that word means.

    Maybe he just assumes you get a boner from correcting people’s capitalization mistakes?

    this is just something i started so i could have a little bit of fun

    I wouldn’t mind if you used the part of the post you took the “perfect practice makes perfect” copypasta for using fiction as ESL practice to respond to this, either. Poor technical writing in projects for fun leads to poor technical writing in general.

    It hit me hard since I was sensitive, but I can’t stress how much it attributed to me growing as a writer.

    Wow, this is… this is something. Who would’ve thought this could happen? I can’t believe he actually remembered your name and everything. I’d be getting the warm fuzzies right now if I was you.




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  2. GoldenFalls says:

    I haven’t published any stories that you would have reviewed, but Farla’s reviews were the first critical readings of stories I had seen, way back…eight years ago? It was when this blog was still a livejournal. I had a similar revelation and gained the ability to be critical of what I consumed. So thanks!




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    1. CrazyEd says:
      On the other hand, I think this site has broken me, by making me way too unreasonably critical of my own work (usually by asking “is this way too uncomfortably close to how Jim Butcher would’ve written the scene?”). Whoops!

      Latest example: I spent way too long rewriting one of my drabbles trying to make sure it wasn’t problematic even though there really wasn’t anything wrong with the original version in the first place. That one was by far the hardest to write so far, and I’ve still got two more to go (I’ve got ideas for both, but not how to approach writing those ideas in only 100 words yet). When(/If) I post them, try to guess which one it was!

      And now that I think about the current version, I wonder if I didn’t acidentally make it worse while trying to make it better. Damn it.




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      1. On the other hand, I think this site has broken me, by making me way too unreasonably critical of my own work

        Join the club, buddy! This is a real thing, though: critical analysis and creativity are separate skills, and while most artists hone them concurrently, weird things happen when you only focus on one. If you spend too long on just analysis, you can feel your creative skills are hoplessly subpar and won’t realize that you need to practice despite that so they can get better.




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        1. Act says:

          I will also join this train I hate everything I do.




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          1. CrazyEd says:
            Well, no, I mean I’ve always had that sort of unreasonable critical analysis. I made it, so it sucks. Obviously. All content creators have that all the time. It’s a rule.

            But I mean, very specifically, going from that kind of unreasonable level of self-analysis to the kind where a little voice in my head goes “would Act bonk me on the head for writing this?”

            It’s like, instead of a shoulder angel and shoulder devil, I have a Shoulder Mini-Farla tugging on my earlobe telling me to make sure the entire drabble is in the past tense and to check the word count a million times because it better be 100 and a Shoulder Farla tugging the other one every time a sexy lady shows up.

            I haven’t read your Higurashi LP, and my writing doesn’t include rape or hot Green on Green action, so there isn’t anything I associate with you specifically. Also, and most importantly, I only have two shoulders to place fictional anthropomorphic representations of social conciousness upon.

            But I mean, that’s a good thing, right? It means that my writing doesn’t have enough rape or hot Green on Green action to merit a Shoulder Act in the first place.

            (I actually went back to your FioS review to see precisely what was labelled HOT GREEN ON GREEN ACTION, and I found this: “Still, though, the writing here is infinitely better than what we’ve seen in other popular YA. Green can string a coherent sentence together.”)

            Though, while writing this, I did realize that my work has zero rape… despite having a character who my friend (whose favourite servant is Caster) keeps on pointing out is really unintentionally similar to Caster. And Caster in Heaven’s Feel is… well. Well. So thanks for making me realize that, Act!

            I may have trouble keeping all my verb tense ducks in a row, and love describing overly elarabote clothes for cute girls, but at least I’m not Takeuchi. That’s… somthing, I gue- okay no it’s not it’s a hurdle every human being should be able to effortlessly leap over but you get what I mean.




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            1. CrazyEd says:

              Thoughts like these are why I don’t need a Shoulder Act.

              (In fact, after reading this, I included a lot of precisely that kind of cuddling in the thing I was writing at the time because it’s that terrible and I’m that spiteful. Because good God, John Green, are you joking? How many books about insufferably boring people in love with insufferably “fascinating” people because of how insufferable they are can a single person write?)




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            2. Hinebras says:
              If it helps at all, you can imagine Farla’s voice coming from a baby seal. That’s what I do with mine.



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            3. CrazyEd says:
              That would just make it worse! How could I possibly take the criticism of a baby seal seriously when its asking me if a character really needs the strength and size of Power Girl?



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            4. CrazyEd says:
              I started rereading Act’s review of Fault in our Stars because of this, and I gotta say, I think that’s the antidote to the insecurity that Farla’s review of The Dresden Files instills in me.

              I’m not sure which one has a worse message, but Green’s definitely seems worse than Butcher’s because it’s put in the mouth of a teenage girl and not a dude in his late twenties.

              So of course I tensed up when he touched me. To be with him was to hurt him—inevitably. And that’s what I’d felt as he reached for me: I’d felt as though I were committing an act of violence against him, because I was.  

              Jesus Christ. I might worry about a lot of the stuff I write, but even if all my fears about my own work were 100% true, they would not be as terrible as this. Hell, even if they were 1000% true, they wouldn’t be as bad as that.




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        2. Just a random says:
          You’re the prime example of that. Too critical for your own good.



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          1. CrazyEd says:
            I know, but it’s like… just because the rational and logical half of me can tell the other half, doesn’t mean it’ll listen, ya know? I know that I’m being too unreasonably critical of myself, but I don’t care.

            But hey, it’s not all bad. At least being unreasonably critical about these things means I’m mindful about them in the first place. That, in itself, isn’t a bad thing. I’m just overthinking it and taking that mindfulness way too far.




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      2. Hinebras says:
        Yeah, that’s a real risk of getting a serious analytic perspective to writing.

        I have noted that I made a little harsher reviews because my tolerance have been going down lately seeing how there are so many recurring mistakes in the community.

        I can say my perspective changing definitely affect my writing, but not quite being unreasonable, more like I take a lot longer considering if everything is right, if I’m not re-inventing the wheel or making exactly the same mistakes everyone makes, or more importantly if what I’m writing is really worth reading.




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        1. CrazyEd says:
          For me, it’s like…

          “But what if I’m doing this terrible thing?”

          “You’re not, so chill.”

          “But what if I am?”

          “You’re still not, so chill.”




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        2. CrazyEd says:
          Slightly more seriously, I think my major problem is that I know just enough to know I don’t know enough. I’ll write something, look at it, and then think “hm, is this problematic?” and my internal monologue will respond “I dunno, maybe? Farla once said something about something like this, and she’s pretty smart about this stuff.”

          “Yeah, but that was Harry Dresden noticing how large the breasts of a woman were when he saw her naked corpse. This is a teenaged boy noticing how attractive the girl who has a crush on him is when she wears a cute swimsuit. Those are two totally situations, aren’t they?”

          “I dunno, man, it’s a dude looking at a gal’s boobies. That’s pretty much the same situation.”

          “Yeeeeeeeeeeah, see, I still think the circumstances make it way more acceptable.”

          “Eeeeeeeh, I’m still not sure.”

          And that’s why I’ve made posts like in the Dresden Files Chatter (about Harry noticing attractiveness) and Storm Front Chapters 2 and 5. (I’d link to them but the site doesn’t seem to like so many links in one comment.)

          Like I’ve said before, the Dresden Files has broken me. That last one especially. I love me some chivalry-as-banter. Sometimes I feel like it gets into “jokingly overexagerating the gender binary to the point of parody as flirting” territory…

          There’s also some stuff in her Hunger Games reviews about comparing girls to various animals (mostly the foxed-faced girl and Wiress) that have pinged some lights for me, but again, I’m not entirely sure. In THG, Katniss seems to treat and talk about the foxed-faced girl as literally just a fox shaped like a teenaged girl and not an actual human being. Okay, that’s one thing, and not a good thing. I’m not gonna do that.

          But when I write a character who is basically a modern day wolf-totem Full Moon caste Lunar Exalt, how far can I go with comparisons and have it still be acceptable?

          … Though… I’m starting to think that’s only a small part of a greater problem of about half my female characters having some sort of animal they’re associated with. None of the male characters really have them… but I’m not sure that’s not saying as much. Of my main cast of twelve, only four are men, and two of them are supporting characters whose primary role in the story is to be dads to primary characters (four of the female characters and one of the male), and one of the two remaining guys (the only two in the primary cast) shares his mother’s association with bears. There really aren’t enough male characters important enough to the story to form a generalization in the first place. One of the four spends most of his time in his garage doing woodworking because his son gets all his magic from Mom’s side of the family.

          Although… besides the wolf girl (who has wolf magic), a lot of them were intentionally adopted by the characters. Both the bear-woman and fox-girl intentionally adopted those animals based on pride in a family heritage that is associated with those animals (the fox-girl’s is based on real world associations with a historical family and the bear-woman’s on real world mythology), and the cheetah girl just likes cheetah print clothing and accessories because she likes dressing flashy (and thinks leopard print is a bit tacky).

          They’re more like heraldic beasts than “the fox-girl is tricky and has a narrow face”. She doesn’t. She’s not at all tricky and has somewhat round cheeks. Her magic is very directly offensive. The team’s tricky fighter is the cheetah motif (which I now realize is pretty ironic, considering how direct a cheetah’s method of attack is). She treats her fox motif about as meaningfully as she treats her flower motif (because the historical family’s crest is a flower).

          And I don’t have a clue what the fuck to make about all that. Is that going too far, or still within the realms of acceptability? Who the fuck knows. I sure as hell don’t. I just know that it might not be something good. Or maybe I’m making a mountain out of a moleill and it’s totally within reason. I don’t know!




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          1. Everything and everyone is Problematic™ in some way or another. Don’t beat yourself up too much. It’s good to be self-conscious, but don’t let it paralyze you.

            Having beta readers from diverse perspectives can help here, though of course no single woman speaks for all women etc. At the end of the day you just need to be receptive to how people react, and use your own judgment for if it’s something you think you need to change. We all need room to learn from mistakes.




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            1. CrazyEd says:
              Yeah… I’d need to find a new person to do that, though. All the women who I could ask about this are… when filtered through the lens of a male author, what they would tell me is okay would seem awfully like wish fulfullment male fantasy pandering. They’d probably just make it worse…

              That “everything and everyone is problematic” thing is probably what keeps me from just freezing up entirely, though. There have been points where I realized something terrible (but not too terrible to keep), and my primary response was “wow, how did it take me this long to notice it” rather than “oh wow this has to be removed immediately”.

              Like the animal theming thing. I don’t think it’s that bad that each girl has a heraldic animal motif, it’s just… it took me way too long to realize that, independently, I gave each girl a heraldic beast. I’m slightly worried that’s a sign of something actually bad with myself, but as far as the narrative is concerned, I can let it slide.




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