Dragon Quill

Okay, thanks for the feedback. I was thinking of revising the chapter on the substance point already. I’m also usually a stickler on its and it’s and so on, I’m a bit surprised that I missed it. I’ll definitely look into your other advice. Thank you.

‘And’ never starts with a capital ‘A’, speak for yourself man.

Black-Phinoex:)

I’ll try to remember next time to capitalize titles that I use as names.
There is only one thing I want to comment about. You don’t have to put “Not doing this makes me not want to read your story.”.
Some people might understand this as something rude, and they can get discouraged. It doesn’t bother me, but it might bother others.
You could maybe put something nicer instead.

I have many grammar mistakes in my stories, I know that. It’s probably because English isn’t my first language. Thank you for telling me my mistakes.

Sophiechan~

Honestly I thank you for what you said, help like that is great, but please if you have something as long and detailed as that, send it to me in a private message, not all in a review like that.

Now, there’s one thing I just want to mention to you. The main creator of this story is someone I met not too long ago, and I have to say, they are the most polite person I have met in… a long time. You don’t find polite people when at debate tournaments… But anyway, along with this, they are also very anxious when it comes to how this story will be received, so they sort of overreact to feedback such as yours, which isn’t bad, but just very blunt and conclusive. I’m not going to ask you to stop sending feedback, but, instead of leaving it as a review, would you consider sending it to me in a PM instead? My partner here is decently new to putting their ideas online, (As am I, really.) and they really did overthink reviews like the one you gave, and I don’t want them to feel like that, so please consider my proposition if you will!

Thank you once more for the review!

Thanks for your feedback! I will try to put this into consideration. Merry Christmas!

Well, Pokemon is the name of the game. So, as it is a name. You’re meant to capitalize the “P”. I hope you enjoyed the fanfiction, anyway. It’s my first one.

Thx for the review and by the way that was just to start

Thanks for the positive criticism.

First of all, yes the title is pretty cliché, i’ll give you that. I didn’t really think it through at that moment. I was kind of salty i deleted everything i typed out for the first part on accident instead of saving it to my PC… But yeah, i’ll try to find another title.

Secondly, the summary; yes, it’s boring, but it was the most logically sounding in my head at that time. I’ll look into that too.

Also, yes. I do not have a plot for the moment, altough i will be going out of Kanto as soon as possible, maybe wait until she has like 4 badges? Maybe to another Region not in the main-games (Like Ferrum from Pokkén Tournament(DX) for example) And i have the idea of giving a special Pokémon to Robin, it really goes right against my principles as i plan to give her an alternate form of Riolu, based on a Shiny Riolu a friend of me gave 4 years ago.

The fact that i write in English is because my native language (Dutch) is just.. no. Yes, i may not be the best at it. But hey, no one is perfect right? I try to write as much in perfect English as possible, but i make grammar errors far too often in my opinion. I should probably delete that section of the author note…

Also. Just wondering if you are interested to help me refine my story, to put it simply.

Hope you will be here for a while. I like honesty and positive criticism.

If you want to ask anything, just ask. I’m no biting dog.