“This title is in Latin. The grammar rules for Latin are different from the ones for English. I should know, because I took online Latin classes in high school”
Northstar PokeshipperA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12763767/
I do not know how to make a line in fanfic, so I just separate A/N’s with my penname. And don’t always go grammando.
The line is a feature of the in-site editor; if you open your story in “Manage Stories”, you can insert one through a button at the top.Okay, but I will just stick with my penname to separate the A/Ns from the story.DinoKeaA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12763468/
I would like to thank you on correcting my grammatical errors which I have now fixed. There I just three things I would like to point out:
A) I prefer the overly optimistic approach too. I always look for stories that are if I can because I don’t want to have to worry so much about people’s lives. This is mainly just an, ‘I’m bored, what’s something quick I can do that could be interesting for other people’s story.
B) As for your quote, this is neither suppose to be horror nor OTT. The death was always expected and was quick because that’s what it would be. As for the OTT part, a black hole the size of a coin is enough to destroy Earth, and if two black holes were to collide they would merge together to form a bigger black hole. The only over the top bit would be the speed. Please use google (or another search engine before you hate)
C) I know how to use commas. I’ve just always learnt a different approach to speech. That’s just how I write. If anything your statement should’ve been ‘You need to learn how to write speech’ (Also I try to avoid thinking anyway as it can get confusing).
One final request:
Please PM any complaints rather than review. It’s just a bit more respectful. However if you must put it in review it’s always nice to add a compliment in their. Just something for you to work on.
Finally, thank you for reading my story and I’m glad to see you enjoyed it enough to review on how to fix my story and read all the way through.
secs ago[As for the OTT part, a black hole the size of a coin is enough to destroy Earth, and if two black holes were to collide they would merge together to form a bigger black hole.]
Oh, I know a black hole would destroy Earth. I meant that destroying Earth is an over-the-top ending in and of itself.
[I know how to use commas. I’ve just always learnt a different approach to speech.]
Oh, no, it’s not just the speech, sorry if you were confused on that. The narration itself is full of breathless sentences in need of commas, such as [Don commanded covering his eyes to protect himself from the bright light coming in.] — that needs a comma after “commanded”. You can search for detailed grammar guides for this on the internet.
[Please PM any complaints rather than review. It’s just a bit more respectful.]
I’m afraid I must decline. This is by a different reviewer, but it explains the general principle: https://www.fanfiction.net/topic/11834/24493256/1/NaRe-Review-FAQ
43m agoOkay, the commanded bit was unmentioned so I never noticed it, mistakes happen.
For the black hole, I realised this (as for the reason he woke up). It’s stated in the now separated authors note (that was meant to be anyway, I missed it because I have to go back in to put in the lines)
And the last one, okay then. I just like the idea that if you spot an error you point it out in PM, also means your comment is right there when you look.
Finally, I’ll try to get the next chapter out soon so I don’t keep you waiting too long.
ZePrlpleScraggeezDear St Elmo’s Fire
Thank you for the much needed suggestions, I royally messed the dialogue up and am glad that you pointed it out in a manner that was helpful, kind, and yet still honest. I am working with another person and will fix it as soon as I can.
Thank you for taking the time to help us.
ZePrlpleScracggeez
myloyaltiesliewithHPA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12765138/
Huh. Well, okay. I’ll try to keep all this in mind next time. Do you always go around leaving constrictive criticism? Ah, well, thanks anyway! That was nice of you.
Korrasami 88A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12765138/
This title is in Latin. The grammar rules for Latin are different from the ones for English. I should know, because I took online Latin classes in high school
In Latin, ONLY the first word in a phrase or sentence, along with all proper nouns, are capitalized. Sic semper tyrannus and Gloria in excelsius Deo, for exampleAmazingly, they actually did copy this over to the capitalization thread this time.
Lexaeus AeleusA response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12765377/
Hi,
Thanks for your review. I’ll probably go back over it a second time before continuing.
Your comment that stuff was “Amateurish”, well there is a reason for that :P, still, its nice to know what exactly I’m doing wrong, and having quickly scanned over one of the linked threads was very insightful.
Thank you for actually being constructive and not just writing “this is bad, you suck”, which honestly is what I was expecting (to be fair, they wouldn’t have been wrong).
lucienhalf58I don’t know why you’d leave reviews about story management and all that jazz but others are starting to become displeased by it so I’m not gonna bother arguing with someone as it’s obviously pointless.
Do I know you?No .. you do notThen what prompted this?Well it’s the reviews you leave in the Author’s stories review section you know the how to manage or make changes to one’s story … now don’t get me wrong nor take it the wrong way as it’s helpful in all but I’m postive that the fanfic author(s) do know how to manage their own stories .. well most of the time with new one’s while the veterans I’m sure they can handle themselves but the thing is I’m sure everyone is grateful for your help and all but maybe if you can just ease up on it just a teeny tiny bit, but like I’d said don’t take the wrong way or anything rude like that.secs agoIf they need to be told, they obviously don’t know how to manage their stories. I have had many, many people, including veteran authors, tell me they have never heard of the things I mention before.
I’m really not sure why you felt the need to tell me this, or what you’re trying to accomplish here. If you have a specific, substantial request about reviewing style, take it to https://www.fanfiction.net/topic/11834/24493256/1/NaRe-Review-FAQ AFTER reading the FAQ.
Um .. perhaps I will look into your suggestion and no I’m not really trying to accomplish anything because I fully understood but please don’t try to take anything the wrong way .. well at least I hope so, but for what it’s worth I’ll gladly look into your suggestion on the FAQ!St Elmo’s Fire,
A new review has been posted to your story.
Story: Do No Harm
Chapter: 1. Home and Hearth
From: Guest
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:You’re such a retarded b***. Why don’t you go find a real job instead of wasting time reviewing fanfiction 24/7?
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I remember seeing this person’s post in the capitalization thread. I couldn’t work out if they were agreeing or disagreeing with it.
I guess the hostile tone here gives me my answer…