The Other Pokeauthors, Part 95

“As I am not a professional I will ask you to keep in mind that I am learning by doing this. So although your feedback made some points which I could learn about.. the way in which you said it wasn’t nice or encouraging.

Pokémon
1 Marconmanay
Thank you for the constructive criticism, I will work on editing it
re: Your review to A New Life (AdvanceShipping)
2 Marsaptarshiban2003
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12853801/

Thank you for telling that. I am still a new author here, as you can see.
What I meant was that Ash has a strong bond with his Pokemon, so he can understand them and converse with them normally. The others cannot.

OK, So I am guessing that I have to put in the time and place as well, like

Flashback (Kalos League final, 1 week ago)

Thank you for your review. Please keep on pointing out mistakes like this (if you find them)

secs ago[What I meant was that Ash has a strong bond with his Pokemon, so he can understand them and converse with them normally. The others cannot.]

…So? All the more reason to do something about it. He knows that pokemon are sentient beings. Why is he okay with everyone else entrapping sentient beings for their own gain, even if they don’t know what they’re doing?

[OK, So I am guessing that I have to put in the time and place as well, like]

No, I mean don’t say “flashback” at all. Use context clues to let us infer that this was one week ago, or don’t because the exact date is really not important. Read some published books to see how authors do this.

35m agoOkay, thanks.
St Elmo’s Fire,

A new review has been posted to your story.

Story: Do No Harm
Chapter: 5. Dreams and Hopes

From: MeganSH049 ( https://www.fanfiction.net/u/7767227/ )
Reply URL: https://www.fanfiction.net/pm2/post.php?rwid=258907644
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F*** you a***! Stop telling all of these people what to do on here! Nobody wants to hear your stupid a** complaints. You bullied me right after I had put up my very first Pokemon story ever!

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Dang, couldn’t even press one page-down to get to the Pokemon fic?

 

re: Your review to Beauty and the Zoroark
2 Marroyalfortressmeadow
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12855225/

Hi St Elmo’s, I appreciate the feedback, but the “Prologue” chapter was actually written by someone else (Tia). I’ll definitely send her the feedback. I (royalfortressmeadow) wrote the next chapter. This is actually a on-going roleplaying writing and Tia controls N and the characters surrounding “N”. I play/write Nova’s parts. :)

re: Your review to Pokemon: The New Adventure
2 MarNelsonTheTrainer
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12853309/

thank you for that, I will continue. please continue supporting me.

Thanks for sharing..
2 MarEmpv
A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12854591/

I know what I am doing.
I understand that you have a lot to point out. I will ask you to remember that this is not a professional website and the story comes from imagination.
As I am not a professional I will ask you to keep in mind that I am learning by doing this. So although your feedback made some points which I could learn about.. the way in which you said it wasn’t nice or encouraging.
We are all human and nobody should speak to anyone like they are better than you.
If you think it’s that bad, don’t read it.

secs ago[As I am not a professional I will ask you to keep in mind that I am learning by doing this.]

Yes, and the best way to learn is through feedback. You now have one more useful comment than you started with!

I’ll remembver your critique for chapoter two.
3 MarRockJackal
However… the consensus with capitalization and what I’ve noticed is that the word pokemon and the names of all pokemon are always capitalized in media. Maybe i’ll fix up chapter 1 after 2.

secs agohttps://www.fanfiction.net/topic/11834/55376155/1/Capitalization-Thread

Brand names are capitalized as any other name. In our world, there’s a person who made up a bunch of letters for imaginary magic animals and then trademarked them so other people can’t use it. That gets capitalized. In their world, pokemon are real and no one owns a copyright on any of it, while any imaginary brand names you make up do get capitalized despite not being actual brand names with actual real world legal protections.

For another example of this, the first line of the book The Hobbit, which contains a Hobbit ™ owned by Tolkien estate with dire legal consequences on anyone else using, is In a hole in the ground there lived a hobbit.

10h agoIn their fantasy world it is always capitalized. If you’re going to patronize me i’m done talking.
secs agoHow exactly am I patronizing you?
6m agoI might be looking too deep, but you stating the obvious about pokemon being imaginary animals made by a corporation is obvious to me as well. I’m trying to keep the story consistent to the fictitious world.

secs ago[pokemon being imaginary animals made by a corporation is obvious to me as well]

But the grammatical implications of that clearly were not obvious to you, so it’s fair to point that out. You said you want to be consistent with the source material, I explained why the source material is like that.

If you have further points you’d like to make, please take them to the capitalization thread: https://www.fanfiction.net/topic/11834/55376155/1/Capitalization-Thread

2 Comments

  1. Talarc says:

    You’ve got a white space in the middle of the post.

     

    NelsonTheTrainer A response to your review at https://www.fanfiction.net/r/12853309/

    thank you for that, I will continue. please continue supporting me.

    Oh! It looks like this person deleted their story and re-uploaded it, only for me to review the new version! That was silly of them – if I’d seen the old version with a review from you, then I would have left them be.

    1. Agh, I don’t know what causes that. Should be fixed now.

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