Dragon Quill

9m agoI should be allowed to respond to you, publicly, as you have to me. That is why I put it there. It should be fair to a new reader to read both what you have to say and what I have to say. And Awkward is subjective.

I actually didn’t know I can’t remove your post. Glad I now know it. And what do you mean by “signed review”?

I do try to be as “correct” as I can when it comes to grammar and structure. But when I publish something I want the reader to care about the story. The character. The enemy. The lands. Yet I do strive to be better. And I don’t feel that your formula “review” helps with that. You’re telling me what to do. You should show me what to do. By doing so I believe the Pokemon fanfiction community will benefit.

[That’s because I don’t watch the anime. If you want people to comment on the story, tag it for the people who can understand the story.]

If you want to experience the anime Pokemon story you watch the show. But my story is not a copy paste story from the anime show. I selected “Game” because in the games you choose what Pokemon to train and catch. You choose their moveset and so on. It is a Fanfic. Yes. But it can be your own plot. And scheme. And stratagem. And quarrel.

To me this is fair game.

The Sun Soul wasn’t without its faults. Still great story and a great read.

40m ago[Then you should make sure you have proper grammar. Bad grammar jars the reader out of the story; it is a foundation necessary before everything else. You can make the most lovingly designed architecture, but if you choose to build it on a sinkhole and the whole thing collapses, no one is going to notice.]

I get what you mean by this, but shit analogy. If I built, and designed, a beautiful mansion and it collapses down a sinkhole the whole world will know.

I am not argueing that grammer isn’t important. I’m saying that good stories outweigh bad grammer. I truely believe my story is good. Which means that the reader won’t be jarred, or jolted, or shaken, or wriggled out of the story. As I said before: The sun soul is a magnificent tale. Yet it has its flaws. Great story Trump ( I had to cause it’s funny ) grammatical mistakes.

And I should be allowed to whrite (did that on purpose) a word wrong, revise my writing, and not catch it before I publish. I do not, nor does most others, need a long ass formula to dictate where, and what, and how I made a mistake. However, there are those whom have written really bad and do need help to improve. I truely believe that I, and many others, does not. What we need is heartfelt encouragement, which will motivate us to carry on. Blankly stating which is what and who is right, and that way and this, in all the reviews you copy paste onto others is not how you improve the majority of this community. Raising it to a new level might be your intent, but right now you’re stepping on people. Have you not seen the comments in your own tales? Does it pride you to know that others have felt bullied by you? Will you not see reason within your humanity? Or is the machine (the formula) all which you can… It sadden me that our younglings will come here to enjoy and explore, then receive a review that is known as “you’re bad, leave and come back once you have improved to mainstream publishing levels”. Because that is what the formula does. And by doing so, as it is impossible to remove, you have no care for what it will do to those who receive it.

I think your intent is good, but the method is bad. You can’t have read, from start to finish, all of the stories to which you have posted your formula to. You’re systematically going through them like a robot.

Want an answer? Well you’ll get one anyways. Go through, read, all of the stories and write individual reviews where you write what was good and what to improve on. Not what was good and what was bad. Using the former, you’ll build them up. Education is not only to learn the formula the grammer and so on. It is also to learn how to learn. Learn how to teach. And teach how you learn (the last one is difficult because people learn in various ways)

A little heartfelt maybe, but I think it’s important that we don’t teach our youth the “standardise-testing” way.

10m ago[If you’re so certain this will get better results, do it yourself. Show me how it’s done.]

No, because I do not have the need to correct others. I am not their teacher. I believe fanfiction sites should be a place away from micro-managing and grammar-targeting.
Read the story or leave the story. Don’t review all that grammar mistake in the story. If you, St elmo, enjoyed the story, keep on reading it. If you didn’t, then stop. It can end there. And should end there.
(Right now you’re probably feeling a bit angry. You did challange me to do as I preach. That is why I will try to explain why it’s not my problem, but yours)
You, st elmo, who does care and does take the time finding grammar mistakes and – now correcting and in the future guiding -, shouldn’t half-ass it. Which is what the formula is doing. A half-ass’d attempt to clean up the streets. Which also devide the community into “your story is super duper great as it is” people, and “formula people”. You being the latter. (I’ve explained how the formula is perceived by many in the community: it is usually those who jump on the “watch out for … and … they are toxic and your story is fine on its own”).
Seeing as the formula is half-ass’d and spammed. You’re responsible and should have done a better job from the get-go. Doubt you’ll see it my way, yet I do hope :)

Side not: I was really glad when two people wrote “damn good story” and “something positiv” (I forgot what is was). Then, as I prowled through the pages, I saw that those two where writing a lot of positivt stuff on all, and more, of the stories which you guys wrote the formula on. And that sucks, because I honestly thought I was doing good. And there I blame you guys, becaue it hadn’t been necessary for them to praise everyone if you didn’t condemn (Okay fine, condemn is a harsh word to use)

We all want to be a part of a community, half-assing it parts that community.

Constructive critism on individual stories is how it’s supposed to be done. If the grammar is bad, then guide how it should be improved (this part of the formula I don’t actually like, but it’s still a math concept in a writing class). To me it’s fine that you do this: [“Hi,” said Laura. “How are you?”] Not [“hi” said laura “how are you”] it’s simple and effective. But I have read tons of stories, from fanfiction to J.K Rowling’s billion making best sellers. And she uses (this is just my random example) [“Hi,” said the leader of the stormclan, “who are you?”] So don’t go on about the fact that it HAS to be that way and not this way. Still, I get what your doing. I’m not bickering for the sake of bickering, it’s just annoying that all you ‘cared’ about my grammar mistakes, but not even a teeny-tiny bit about the content.

I would love it if you actually went back, read it, and messaged me. “Hoy, that shit sucked!” (if that’s your honest opinion) – (I should say that I mean write “hoy , that sucked” to me, not as a general review to all the stories you don’t fancy.) Although you seem smart enough to get that, and I don’t deny it. I believe you’re a smart man / woman / other. What I’ve tried to say, maybe not well, is not to NOT help them with grammar. It’s to not use the formula, which has an oppressive and destructive reputation.

And to the people you write something like: (and I have seen this in reviews before from you and the others) “Maybe you should stick to writing in your native language” that is, to me, dumbfounding and moronic. How will they learn? I mean dear God I’ve spent time reading English books, studied the structure (although I haven’t grasped it proper yet) and put my time into this. Most of us don’t go around farting stuff out. We mould it for lengths and lengths of time, and all we get is a “hoy I haven’t read the story, but I’m here to tell you how to do the grammar and structure right and what level you’re currently on.” (You said I grasped the basics, which might be true, yet I find the words I use to be accurate. And, consecutively, the ‘architecture’ I build to be erect and sturdy and magnificent.
Disagree with me on this, if you will, but at least read my 7000 words. It’s not that hard. And it is the only fair thing to do when judging someone. (You can deny that you’re not judging, but the majority of the people I’ve seen are feeling judged)

To summarise: I didn’t know the community was so devided and believe the formula is the root of the problem. Can you review as many stories by doing individual constructive critism? No, but at least you’ve done the writer a fair job by reading it too.

Fast and lose questions:

Am I butthurt? A little.

Am I defending myself or others? I want to defend other, because I believe they need it more then I do. The foreign youth the most.

Should I bother you with this? Yes and No. Mostly No, so I am truely sorry. I like to debate, it’s a sickness really. (it is not)

Am I learning? Yes. But I’ve spent so much time on:
“Hi,” said Brock. “How are you?”
“Fine,” answered Ash. “You?”
That if I made a mistake it’s not a mistake I make often, and shouldn’t be given the generalising formula.

Any last words? Yes. Please stop using the last sentence where you tell the writer where he / she / other is on the acceptable level scale (Basic, advanced, or the worst “write in your own native language”

7h ago” If you think that’s “over the top”, you’re really not familiar with my reviews. :p “

You’re kind of being a buzzkill.