https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12001637/1/DESTINED-Nightstrike-The-Sylveon
Not capitalizing “I” makes me not want to read your story.
This needs a real summary.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part iis/i considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
You seem to be using commas when you mean to use periods. There’s a lot of punctuation wonkiness in this in general, and I can’t tell if you’re trying for present or past tense. You need a beta reader.
For some reason this author flipped out and deleted the content without deleting the actual story.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12002840/1/On-The-Isle-Of-Silora
Not using paragraphs makes me not want to read your story.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12002968/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-XYZ-An-Advanceshipping-Story
[*Ash walks into the room* What gives Ranger?, that line belongs to our anime you don’t own it. *Ash gives Ranger an angry stare*
But I posted a disclaimer saying that I didn’t own it.
*Ash stares at Rangers not believing him* (In sarcastic tone) Yeah whatever just get on with the fic already I’m getting tired. *Ash lets out a small yawn for emphasis*
Got it Ash one awesome fic coming right up, but quick question do you want it to be long or short?
*Ash thinks for a second* I want it to be kinda long.
*Ranger lets out a sad sigh and smashes his head against his desk* Oh I’ll be writing until I’m 130 years old.
*Ash gives Ranger a “I don’t care” look* Either you write the fic or I’ll have Pikachu hit you with a Thunderbolt.
*Pikachu jumps off of Ash’s shoulder and begins charging up a Thunderbolt*
Piiiiiiiiikkkkaaaa!
*Ranger looks like he’s on the verge of peeing his pants* Alright I’ll do it just please call him off and I’ll do it I promise.
Okay Pikachu let Ranger write the fic *staring at Ranger* I want that fic done sometime today.]
This is not nearly as clever or amusing as you think it is. Just get to the story. You should also do a better job of separating your author’s notes from your story, such as with horizontal lines.
[Root beer]
Is not a proper noun and thus should not be capitalized.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part iis/i considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12003033/1/The-Emperor-s-Wish
[Good story? Yes. Bad summary? Yes.]
No. Take one minute to tell readers what your story is about. Forcing them to click through just to see if the story is something they want to read in the first place is frustrating and manipulative.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12003216/1/Preston-s-Challenge-A-Randomized-Nuzlocke-Story
[When your first conscious feeling of the day is discomfort, then some believe the rest of your day will be bad as if the morning headache was some kind of curse.]
This sounds a bit stilted and overwrought; you have a lot of thoughts competing for attention here. Who are these “some”?
[It had a bright green digital interface with words on it that I could have read if my vision wasn’t so blurred from having just woken up.]
This kind of clinical detailed analysis is incongruous with the tone you’ve set. How is he thinking this rationally with a splitting headache? People aren’t always able to describe things perfectly, and that should factor in to the narration.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[it’s type]
You want “its”. “It’s” always means “it is”.
[“Alright, nerd. Why don’t you do me a favor real quick and touch one of the plates on that Armaldo?”
Reluctantly, I slowly started to move my hand closer]
Why is he so quick to trust her? She’s given no indication she’s telling the truth about anything. For all he knows they’re in the real world and this is a trap to make the armaldo eat him.
[I loved the challenge, but I had a home to go back to.]
…Yes? Why is he treating the latter like an afterthought? It doesn’t make sense for in-universe characters to act like the players.
[I couldn’t see it]
Why not? He just grabbed her hood, that means he should have pulled it down. He should be able to see at least the hint of a grin.
[“Take me back home or else Amos here will wipe the smile right off your face.”]
If Amos is hers, why would it be so quick to turn on her?
[“Amos! Minimize!”]
Why didn’t he do this earlier, if his strategy revolves around dodging?
This is a lot better written than most of the stories I’ve seen, and I’m glad your battles are more detailed than a mechanical exchange of attacks.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12003379/1/Path-to-be-a-Pokemon-champion
Why is this all in bold? Bold is very distracting.
You need to separate your author notes from the story more clearly.
[Ten years ago]
Don’t do this, it’s incredibly clunky and artificial. Use proper scene transitions.
Use commas.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part iis/i considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
This is borderline incoherent. I can barely understand what’s going on. You need a beta reader.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12003749/1/Just-Keep-On-Laughing
A drabble is a story consisting of exactly 100 words. It’s a writing exercise, not a word for any short story.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[“My fangirls are the reason I’m here, May,” he says in annoyance, “They]
You’re generally writing dialogue correctly; however, when separating two completely sentences with narration, the narration ends with a period (since it ends the first sentence).
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12004562/1/Missing-Jewel-Fragments-AU
[Universal: this fanfic means a lot to me and I’ve been working on this for three years now (already published on Wattpad.). Please do enjoy and feedback.]
You need to separate this author note with a horizontal line, otherwise it looks like part of the story.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part iis/i considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
[I don’t want papa]
When a title (such as “mom” or “dad”) is used in place of a name, it’s capitalized like one.
What does this have to do with Pokemon? If your characters bear no resemblance to the canon ones, and your setting has nothing to do with the canon one, then I don’t understand why you’re labeling this as fanfiction instead of original fiction. You’d be better off unfettering this story from an irrelevant canon by publishing it as original fiction with an “inspired by” label on the top.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12004621/1/New-Boundaries-No-Limits
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part iis/i considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
Opening your story with a character waking up for the day is generic and horribly, horribly overdone, and to be honest, it’s so incredibly dull and boring a start that even if I hadn’t seen it, very literally here, hundreds upon hundreds of times before, I would still tell you you should have started at some other, interesting point. You aren’t obligated to go over every single mundane detail leading up to the inciting event; start where your plot starts. This will help you differentiate your story fro the literally thousands of others with the exact same opening.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12004759/1/Pokemon-Sinnoh-Adventure
[In a little town call TwinLeaf Town, a certain house the mom was cooking breakfast]
This sentence is missing pieces. A clearer construction might be [In certain house in a little town called TwinLeaf Town…]
[In the Sarah’s Room]
“The” isn’t necessary before this, as Sarah’s room is a unique object. Also, “room” shouldn’t be capitalized, as it’s not a proper noun.
Speaking of which, you wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[“Thanks, Prof.,”]
When writing dialogue, you’re literally writing exactly what people are saying, so this can only be read as her literally saying the word “proff”. You need to write out titles and such in these cases.
I can’t tell if you’re going for past or present tense. You might want a beta reader to help you.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12005296/1/Unquenchable-thirst-for-pride-A-Hoenn-journey
This one originally had a coding error that made it unreadable; the author apparently wasn’t checking their inbox, because it took them like a week to notice, but they thanked me profusely anyway. The story itself was not much better.
You need to separate your author’s notes with horizontal lines; otherwise, they look like part of the story.
[(A/N: I suck when it comes to details)]
Never ever put author notes in the middle of your story. There is nothing more jarring and unprofessional. Your job is to immerse your readers in a narrative, and reminding them of the artificiality of the medium does the opposite.
Your spacing is wonky; you have extra spaces before and after punctuation. This might be another formatting error.
[it’ll
be a long way to reach Hoenn]
You have an extra page break here.
[they teen asked]
Typo.
I can’t tell if you’re trying for present or past tense, which makes the story very hard to follow.
A new speaker means a new paragraph.
The story is really messy, overall. I’d recommend you get a beta reader.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12005303/1/100-Ways-to-Really-Ship
[100 word snippets]
If you want a more succinct term, these are called drabbles – but only if they’re exactly 100 words (which this is not).
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[Ash and Shauna were the true power couple of Kalos]
This lacks punctuation.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12005076/1/Color-of-passion
Your title isn’t fully capitalized.
[“I’m ready” he thought.]
You shouldn’t use quotes for thoughts, as that makes it look like characters are talking out loud.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part iis/i considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
[*** insert cool looking line separating text parts here ***]
FFN lets you input horizontal lines, which seems like what you want here.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12005558/1/Pokemon-The-Plate-Holders
You definitely need a beta reader. This is basically comprehensible, but you’re making a lot of errors. I also can’t tell if you’re going for past or present tense; you need to be consistent with that.
[~Mental~]
You shouldn’t have to do things like this; locations and time skip should be obvious from context.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12005600/1/Pokemon-Adventure
Your summary is incoherent.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part iis/i considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12005694/1/The-Journey-of-Tess-Typero
[An aspiring trainer, though quite afraid, she takes her first steps into the pokemon world with a goal in mind that she will battle her fears and fulfill her greatest dream.]
This is a comma splice. You need to split this sentence in two or use a different transition.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part iis/i considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
Opening your story with a character waking up for the day is generic and horribly, horribly overdone, and to be honest, it’s so incredibly dull and boring a start that even if I hadn’t seen it, very literally here, hundreds upon hundreds of times before, I would still tell you you should have started at some other, interesting point. If you have a plot that distinguishes your story from the literally thousands of others with the same premise, you should start there; you’re not obligated to cover every mundane detail before the inciting event.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12005710/1/Intertwining-Fates
[“Pokemon speak”]
So what are you going to do if you need to have a human’s speech be fully italicized, like if they’re shouting? It’s a better idea to demarkate special speech with symbols rather than text formatting. I’ve seen other fics use {} in place of “, which works well.
[“Froakie use Bubble!”]
You need a comma after “Froakie”.
Opening your story with a character waking up for the day is generic and horribly, horribly overdone, and to be honest, it’s so incredibly dull and boring a start that even if I hadn’t seen it, very literally here, hundreds upon hundreds of times before, I would still tell you you should have started at some other, interesting point. If you have a plot that distinguishes this story from the literally thousands of others with the exact same premise, you should start there; you’re not obligated to cover every mundane detail leading up to the inciting event.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part iis/i considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
[Coumarine city]
“City” should be capitalized, as it’s part of the name.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12005751/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-BW2-Adventures-Manga-My-Interpretation
[(Brackets)]
This looks really weird, especially since you also pair it with quotation marks. Italics or no demarcation at all is standard for thoughts.
[one of 3 students]
In prose, numbers less than 13 or so are written out with letters.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part iis/i considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12006252/1/Blue-Notes
You should separate your author notes from the story with horizontal lines.
A new speaker means a new paragraph.
Using quotes for thoughts is confusing, as it makes it look like the character is talking out loud. (Also note that thoughts follow the same punctuation rules as dialogue.)
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12006472/1/The-Path-of-Memory
You’ve got coding errors. Preview your story before posting it, and use horizontal lines to separate your author notes.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12006687/1/Pokemon-Journeys-Through-Talomett-Region
Not using paragraphs makes me not want to read your story.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12007523/1/Forgetting-Leo-Starlight
A drabble is a story consisting of exactly 100 words. It’s a writing exercise, not a word for any short story.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12007538/1/A-Knight-s-Duty
[high moral]
“Morale”. A moral is a lesson.
[some his own and some of his comrades]
You need a possessive apostrophe for “comrades”.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor. Or knight.
You’re formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as [“Hello,” she said] or [“Hello!” she said], never [“Hello.” She said] or [“Hello”, she said] or [“Hello” she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part iis/i considered a separate sentence, so it’s written as [“Hello.” She grinned], never [“Hello,” she grinned]. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like “laughed” or “giggled” is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s [“Hi,” she said. “This is it.”] not [“Hi,” she said, “this is it.”] or [“Hi,” she said “this is it.”] And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s [“Hi. This,” she said, “is it.”] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12007677/1/Sparks-and-Psionics
[Sorry, I can’t think of a good summary on this one.]
Well, try harder. Forcing readers to click through your story just to see if it’s something they actually want to read is irresponsible at best and manipulative at worst. Writing summaries is really not that hard.