We begin!

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11705681/1/New-years

Capitalize your title properly.

Names need to be capitalized all of the time, not just some, and the same applies to how your sentences need to always end in some form of punctuation.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.

Generally, try harder.

Zero reviews.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11705695/1/Clash-of-the-Planet-Gods

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.

[said the tallest and oldest of the three]
[ the second male of the group  ]
[The third and only female of the trio  ]

Just use their names.

Write out numbers with letters.

[a small, light yellow Pokémon ]

You’re mostly not capitalizing this, which is correct, but here and there you do. Also, just like everyone already knows who Brock is or else doesn’t care about reading your fic in the first place, people already know what various pokemon look like. Don’t pause your story for a full description. Mention what’s relevant – if Togepi gets splashed with mud, you could say that the pokemon was brown with only a few patches left showing its original yellow color.

[professor Elm  ]

And when something is being used as a name or part of one, it’s capitalized, so “Professor Elm”.

Battles with no real stake or purpose aren’t very interesting.

Two.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11705726/1/A-Wild-Magikarp-Appeared

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Write out numbers with letters.

Repeating the plot of Yellow but with more shouting isn’t humor. It’s still just as boring, just louder about it.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11705772/1/Never-Again

[A beautiful Delcatty ]

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.

[“Y-you could’ve sent a message first…” I said uncomfortably.
“That’s beside the point!” She stomped her foot. “You didn’t contact me!”
“But you didn’t contact me ei-”
“Don’t try and make this about you!” She threatened, flames sparking from her glare.
“Y-yes ma’am.” I managed weakly.
“Don’t call me that!”
“O-okay.”
“Well?!” She demanded, staring me down.
“…Well what?”
“Aren’t you going to apologize?!” She screamed angrily, “Grr, men! They’re so clueless!”
“U-uh, I’m sorry.”
“For what?!”
“F-for never messaging you.”
“Hm.” She pursed her lips. “I shall consider your apology.”
I sighed. Females were scary…]

Now that it’s 2016, maybe consider humor a little more recent and a little less sexist than the 1950s.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11705877/1/Idea-for-firstfanfiction

[The reason why I am doing this is because I want to improve my writing ]

Try actually writing next time instead of demanding people pay attention to you over nothing.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11705906/1/May-the-Adventure-Bring-Us-Closer

Starting a story with your character waking up is terribly overdone and was boring the first time.

[don’t go counting your Pidgey’s before they hatch ]

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Don’t use an apostrophe for plurals.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11706035/1/Sleepless-Nights

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

One.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11706084/1/Hall-of-Fame

[This is the anthology for my ‘Hall of Fame’ series, where all the shorter stories/miscellanious tidbits will be collected. And yes, the prologue was written so I could have a table of contents without breaking the rules. ]

Well, glad at least one person’s figured that one out. Might want to consider that your prologue is just portentous word salad and makes me want to avoid reading anything else by you, though. Also, spellcheck.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11706088/1/Lucid

[his Mom  ]
[about Pokémon battles ]

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

I like the concept of this, and mostly the execution but I think it’s a little too forceful about the shippiness of it rather than playing out more natural – [At that point Ash wished he could replace his dream version. Watching it from a third person’s point of view, even his naïve self could understand what Misty had been hinting at. Brock and his mom had teased him about it a few times but Ash had been totally clueless at that time and he probably would’ve continued to be so if he hadn’t had this weird dream tonight.  ] for example. It’s pretty common for shippers to say that stuff is so obvious, but if he’s oblivious he’s oblivious, and it’s really hard to believe he’d be convinced by a scene his brain invented. If he’d figured it out already that she was interested in him but hadn’t accepted that he felt the same, then I could see this convincing him he misses her enough to try to reconnect, or if instead of this focusing on how Kalos could’ve gone the attention was on how she was saying this the same way she’d said things a dozen other times and seeing that again made it finally click.

One.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11706089/1/Curses

[the normally sweet Gratitude Pokemon ]

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11706097/1/The-story-of-Spirit-Fiona

Capitalize your title properly.

This is generally terrible. Try harder and get a beta reader.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11706191/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-Mystery-Dungeon-My-Guardian-Angel

[normal Pokémon ]

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

[Even so… despite their special prowess and high status and divinity, they are all still Pokémon. The only thing that distinguishes them would be a Pokédeity’s special abilities and powers. Even so, Pokédeities are not known to interact with Pokémon. In fact, it is quite the opposite. They may be tasked with protecting them from any unknown forces at all costs, but over the years, it has made them grow arrogant and overconfident in themselves. While they all still exist peacefully with their own kind and worship Cresselia, their leader, and even though they still work hard to maintain the peace for Pokémon, they hold strong feelings of resentment towards them. And that rumor has set them for life. Pokémon and Pokédeities were not meant to be friends. ]

This is worded really badly. You’re repeating phrases like “even so”, saying the problem is that they’re arrogant which is somehow the same thing as resenting, then finishing up stating “that rumor” when the preceding sentences don’t have any rumors in them. Try to think more about if you’re saying what you actually mean or just parts of it.

[Cresselia nodded solemnly. “No one has seen her, though… And that is why I have decided to take drastic measures… by summoning a human as a pokémon.”
If Phosphora had shown any class before, any trace of it was gone at the mention of those words. “What!? You wanna send a HUMAN here!? And as a damn Pokémon?
“Yes,” Cresselia said.
“No! Why a Pokémon!? You know we’re better!” Phosphora complained, which did nothing but earn a sigh from Cresselia.
“Phosphora, I understand your, um… history with Pokémon, but it is still our duty to help them,” Cresselia told her with a forlorn look on her face. “We all used to live in harmony, you know…”
“But we’re not anymore, because Pokémon are dirty, filthy liars!” Phosphora yelled.]

And this is even worse. You referred earlier to everyone involved in the conversation as pokemon, but also Phosphora the pokemon yells at Cresselia the pokemon that she’s offended by the idea of having a pokemon involved because the both of them are better, at which point Cresselia the pokemon says to Phosphora the pokemon that she knows Phosphora has reason to think pokemon are lesser creatures.

If you want there to be a distinction in the story between the deity class and ordinary pokemon, you can’t slip into using the same words for both. The conversation needs to be unambiguously referring to non-Phosphora-and-Cresselia-pokemon for it to make any sense. Even just making sure to say “ordinary/common pokemon” when you’re talking about the non-deity ones would probably be enough, if clunky.

Four.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11706338/1/A-Different-Kind-of-Trainer

Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.

[ my Gardevoir  ]

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

[His voice was a deep, rich baritone, smooth like melted butter, rolling over them. ]

It’s often a bad idea to pile on several descriptions of the same thing. In the event it’s really important you say several, make absolutely sure they connect. “His rich baritone voice rolled over them as smoothly as melted butter.” works much better than giving each standard phrase individually.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

Plotwise, “canon cast meet this guy who is so cool and it’s possible that in a later chapter something might actually happen” isn’t very interesting.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11706340/1/New-Experiences

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

I like the trainer being considerate and warming up Swadloon, but that just makes the ending weirder – after finding a distressed pokemon buried in snow far from its normal habitat, he knows to have his pokemon melt the snow away, but then instead of bringing it at least to somewhere warmer, he explains snow is totally fun to the pokemon weak to ice moves and that it should just run off and play and, presumably, then die of exposure.

One.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11706351/1/The-Next-Battle

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

It’s “okay”, four letters.

Write out numbers with letters.

“It’s” means “it is”. “Its” is the possessive form.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

So, I’m guessing the reason there’s the various pre-trainer scenes is to set up the character and backstory, but the problem is there’s a lot of people chattering away about very, very little. The bit where she’s struggling as a trainer because her riolu is a wuss? You didn’t need to show newborn riolu get scared of a camera flash first – that doesn’t even tell us her pokemon is actually super timid because it’s a newborn then. And telling me that she’s got some super special backstory before you even establish her just makes me not care about it, while if you started off with her and then went into the backstory later it’d be a lot more engaging.

Your writing is also extremely bare-bones, with your repeated use of “sweatdropped” instead of any sort of actual description that would make sense in a written medium being a particular low point. Also, the second half is just ripping off chunks of the anime’s beginning. Not only have lots of people already watched that, but you’re not the first one to rip it off, so there’s another few hundred stories to do this very thing already around. (And you did an unusually crappy job of it.)

I’d strongly suggest your story should start no sooner than with her out to get her first pokemon – you can establish her character and her pokemon’s then, but instead of the scene you have which, again, is just lazy bullshit ripping off the anime like everyone else did already, you actually think up something that could happen and proceed from there. Maybe her riolu has a crisis of faith about how worthless he’s being as her starter and runs off, for example.

One.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11706359/1/The-Amazing-Race-Pokemon-3

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

This reads like you really, really wanted to do it in script format. It’s repetitive and dull, with little to no narration balancing out the dialogue.

[b****  ]

If you’re young enough you’re censoring swears, you’re too young to be writing characters saying them at all.

Zero.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11706502/1/Of-Butterfrees-Stormy-Nights

Semicolons should only ever be used when connecting two complete sentences and even then almost never. Absolutely not about once every two hundred words like you’ve done here.

[And worse yet the poor pokemon would be so scared. ]

Unless she’s concerned the pokeball will get bumped open, there’s really no sign it’d even be aware something had happened. Bigger issue is probably that it could be lost for good and trapped in there.

Write out numbers with letters.

[Plus the ducklett’s need my help. ]

Never use an apostrophe for a plural.

Zero, also the worst semicolon abuse I’ve seen in a while.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11706669/1/Hoping-for-a-Miracle

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

It’s “himself”, all one word.

Don’t label flashbacks.

It’s “okay”, four letters.

“It’s” means “it is”. “Its” is the possessive form.

Four.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11706714/1/The-Secret-of-the-Idol

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Speaking of pokemon, really baffled by what this has to do with them. Your umbreon main character has a totally unrelated magic power he gets from a magic item instead, other characters use their own totally unrelated item magic powers too, and otherwise everything goes down like they’re regular humans. (You even say magic ignores any type issues, just to hammer in how completely irrelevant what species you claim the bipedal clothed tool-using people are.) The tomb raiding stuff is similarly standard movie cliches rather than thinking about how maybe poison darts would be considered less of a sure thing in a world where a chunk of the population is made of poison.

One.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11706832/1/You-re-The-Cap-to-My-Bottle

Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks or any other ones with thoughts.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

Spellcheck.

One.

Incidentally, something weird’s happening with the reviews, they’re taking forever to show up. Earliest I could find visible was one posted on the 30th.