Bunch of more unusual fics today.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10978161/1/I-Know-Places
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[ He couldn’t open his eyes, the sun was too empowering. ]
That’s not what empowering means.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[“S-so… you’re telling me to go earn… five contest ribbons? In… seven months? Are you kidding me? You know I can’t do that! I-I mean… Plus wouldn’t she recognize the difference between them anyway!? I mean the last time we managed to replace them was through pure luck!” He tried to reason with his brother, they quite legitimate reasons too but they seemed to go unnoticed when he saw Chrys rolling his brown eyes.
“Don’t give me that crap. Look, I told Sis about it and she said she didn’t mind if you could replace them with five more ribbons before she could come back. Look I get that it seems like a hard task to do but if I could do it than you can too.]
See the thing is, being a top coordinator can’t be worth much if your siblings can manage the same wins just to keep you from yelling at them. And if they can do it this easily, then she should have no problem replacing the ribbons either since she’s apparently actually talented at this.
This is definitely a different setup than usual, but it’s not one that makes much sense at all.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10978177/1/Come-Back-for-Me
[“She’s gone…” said Sonia, looking at the picture of her BFF, Kristina. “They are, too…” she said, at the picture of her other BFFs, Jessy and Terry. She burst into tears. “I’ll never see them again!”
“You will…” said an enchanted voice.
Flashback:
“Hi! I’m Sonia!” said Sonia on her first day.
Recess time!:
“I’m Jessy! This is Kristina, and this is Terry!” said a girl.
“You can call me Bubble Gum, or BG for short!” said Terry.
End flashback.]
Don’t label flashbacks, and don’t include them at all when they’re as incredibly inane as this.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10978187/1/Pokemon-University
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Write out numbers with letters.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10978190/1/Umbra-Lution
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Write out numbers with letters.
[Meanwhile, some noises had woken Amantha up. She sat up and rubbed the sleep out of her sapphire blue eyes. Then, she realized something was wrong. Ribbon was gone. Fearing the worst, Amantha checked outside and saw an Umbreon. She knew that Ribbon was always careful not to evolve, and that the Poke’mon she was staring at couldn’t be hers. So, not knowing much about Umbreons, Amantha made up a hypothesis.
That Umbreon had eaten her little Ribbon. She gasped, her eyes beginning to water.]
Amantha seems like an absolute idiot. There are how many wild umbreon around?
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10978290/1/Sparks-and-Steam
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Write out numbers with letters.
[“That’s why I stick to my, what did you call them?” Izumi turned to eye Ushio, her expression smug. “‘Fancy-Pansy-Fruity-Ass drinks’? I can drink as much as I want and take my dear sweet time getting wasted.” ]
…what? The fruity drinks are a lot higher in alcohol content, all the flavoring is to mask the taste.
You write the whole dicking around drinking bit pretty well, but it still goes on for half of forever and it’s pretty repetitive. Things really only pick up once they’re bouncing off Magma rather than each other.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10978330/1/Lost-and-Surviving
[All of this happened almost two years ago, then the pokémon started to disappear. They disappeared without warning, either they were tamed pokémon, captured pokémon or wild pokémon. Whole populations of pokémon heards, gone in one day. At this rate, pokémon might go extinct. I sure hope they don’t. I’m stressed out because of the disappearences, since I’m one of the few investigating the case because the authorities don’t care. Not being able to pay the bills and barely being able to put food on the table doesn’t help. ]
I really don’t think people would ignore the loss of the thing their society revolves around. If it were just wild pokemon, it’d be a stretch but maybe workable. But captured pokemon are vanishing into thin air (or “stolen” as everyone would call it) should produce the same outcry it does every other time an enemy team is stealing pokemon.
[ my Espurr friend, Mimi ]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[physic type ]
Psychic.
Two.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10978431/1/Pokemon-Firered-and-Leafgreen
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[So ends my first chapter attempt at a Pokémon story. Hope you like it:)]
Afraid not. This isn’t a chapter, it’s you copying the game opening, then having your character list the starters and recite their types. If you have any sort of plot to this, start where that starts. If you don’t, you don’t actually have a story and need to work that part out before you post.
And no, asking other people to decide how your story goes isn’t a valid substitute for that.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10978504/1/Life-Is-A-Obsticle
Spellcheck.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10978788/1/Bozel-Pokedex
This isn’t a story. Also, spellcheck isn’t optional.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10978789/1/Pay-Your-Fines
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[black-and-white Swinub sweater. ]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[readying some amo. ]
Spellcheck. It’s “ammo”.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10978807/1/Practice-makes-Perfect
Write out numbers with letters.
This is full of sentence fragments.
[his beloved Umbreon hostage. ]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10978916/1/Dawns-quicksand-story
So fun fact, quicksand is a kink! And that appears to be what this is, abet very very badly done. And yet it’s rated K+. Stop doing that, people.
Zero, reviewed the author already so it stays zero even now.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10978950/1/Alamos-High-School-High-School-for-Pokemon
Don’t ask for OCs, make your own to fit your actual story, and never post something that isn’t a story as a story.
Three. The first one:
Ckbrothers chapter 1 . Jan 17
Here’s my oc’s for this cool idea. And update team speedy soon, with a real chapter! Anyway, here they are all..4. Yeah!
Name: Ck
Species: (I allow legendaries, but one per person, unless their crush is a legendary.) lucario
Age: (13-18) -7
Level: (20) 50
Grade: (7-12) 11
Crush?: yes
If so, who?: Eve (look below)
Talent(s): very smart, can build anything, master of computers
Family: Chuck the Hitmochan (Father/gym teacher) Mary the Luario (mother), Vic the Lucario (Off doing…something…)
Enemies: Drake the Zoroark, Doomsday the Zekrom.
Friends: Eve the Gardevoir, Cave the golem (not a listed oc) Sky the Staraptor (not a listed oc either.).
Fears: complete darkness, utter chaos, becoming dumb
Accessories: has a blue headband, brown square glasses, and a silver watch.
Least Favorite Class: Gym! Ahh!
Other: wants to work for..whatever the poke on version of NASA is called. Wants to continue his relationship with Eve. Ck loves every class. Part of the schools gamer club.
Name: Eve
Species: (I allow legendaries, but one per person, unless their crush is a legendary.) Gardevoir
Age: (13-18) 17
Level: (20) 49
Grade: (7-12) 11
Crush?: Yes
If so, who?: Ck
Talent(s): master of art and playing the trombone. Can recite any poetry by heart.
Family: Bob the Mew (Adopted Father. Who knew that one of the strongest pokemon was named Bob?)
Enemies: Drake the Zoroark, Doomsday the Zekrom, Renoldo the Genger (not listed)
Friends: Ck the lucario, Sky the Staraptor, Cave the Golem, Minty the Espeon (not listed), Star the Latias (Not listed.)
Fears: getting raped.
Accessories: a white silk scarf.
Least Favoite Class: Math.
Other: was once raped by Renaldo. Knows some karate. Loves Books..but not as much as Ck.
Name: Drake
Species: (I allow legendaries, but one per person, unless their crush is a legendary.) Zoroark
Age: (13-18) 18
Level: (20) 60
Grade: (7-12) 11 (he flunked at grade 11 and has to do it again! Lol!)
Crush?: no
If so, who?
Talent(s): knows some mean pranks, he can dance. Plays…the Banjo?
Family: Mandy the Zoroark (Mother) Stefonzo the ditto (father, but not with Drake.) was born when Mandy paid Stefonzo to..do her in high school.
Enemies: Ck, Eve, everyone but Dark types.
Friends: Doomsday the Zekrom (only non dark type friend), all mean dark types.
Fears: everyone finding out that he was ditto born
Accessories: has a red scarf and black sunglasses.
Least Favorite Class: All of them.
Other: a bully, skips class. Follows Doomsday.
Name: Doomsday
Species: (I allow legendaries, but one per person, unless their crush is a legendary.) Zekrom
Age: (13-18) 18
Level: (20) 75
Grade: (7-12) 12
Crush?: Yes
If so, who?: Star the Latios (one sided and not a listed oc)
Talent(s): rather clever, can Hotwire a car. Can hack.
Family: none? I don’t know, legendaries done really breed, now do they?
Enemies: all but his minions. Mostly Ck
Friends: Drake the Zoroark, Renoldo the Henger, all bullies (he’s the boss)
Fears: nothing…except not being able to have some “alone time” with Star. And tacos.
Accessories: large black trenchcoat and fedora, has yellow goggles.
Least Favorite Class: Science and Global.
Other: pure evil, a bully, and very much a perv.
Welp I’m out, hope you use them! Byez!
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10979051/1/Problem
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[He could have been the Champion. He could have been living in a life of luxury right now. Instead, he thought that it would be a better idea to not be tied down and instead continue traveling. Little did he know, he would someday be crushed by Red on top of Mount Silver and decide to stop his journey altogether. He’d return home, get sick of his parents, and move to Goldenrod. He’d live in a shitty studio apartment with no bed and work in a shitty coffee shop that hardly paid enough to cover his rent, let alone his utility bills and food. All because he thought he was too good to be Champion. ]
Okay, the bigger issue is why “decided to quit after losing to Red” somehow turned into “somehow bound to never be a trainer ever again”. It doesn’t seem to have anything at all to do with refusing, just the fact that for some reason he’s gone insane and doesn’t just take his pokemon and head to the nearest pokecenter for the free food and free bed they provide.
[He wished that he was financially stable enough to travel again. ]
Again, he can literally just walk down the street and stop having to pay for food and shelter, plus he’s supposedly actually good at this and so even if that wasn’t true, he should be able to become financially stable with a couple pokemon battles.
Really, if a plotline only makes sense if we completely ignore everything about Gold, you’d have really been better off making your own OC who did fit the circumstances rather than plot holes and idiot balls everywhere.
Silver’s done pretty well, though.
[Gold had the solution to this problem. He threw the Pokeball he still had clutched in his fist. “Go, Espeon!” he cried, and the other boy, his Pokemon, and the two Houndooms all looked at him in alarm. “Use Confusion on the Houndooms!”
The psychic Pokemon obeyed immediately, its eyes glowing and its tail straightening as it attacked. The Houndooms whined like puppies and started running around in circles.]
They’re dark types. You can either have scary dark type guard dogs OR have espeon able to hit them with confusion, pick one.
Really, if you’re insisting the guy is Gold because Silver/Gold is an established pairing and Silver/Your OC isn’t, at least have him be something like “Gold who didn’t go on a proper pokemon journey in the first place at all for some reason and now regrets it” rather than “still pretty super awesome of a trainer but somehow can’t just go back to being a trainer and has to work at a coffee shop because”. That’d even work better with them needing to flee angry guard dogs when Mr. Champion should be able to steamroller over them, if he didn’t spend years of his life doing nothing with his pokemon but fighting other pokemon, the idea they’re in actual danger and the way he mostly uses his espeon for non-attacking purposes would fit.
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
[Oh.
Oh. Shit.
Gold had had problems before, but he hadn’t expected falling for Silver to be one of them.]
This is a really weird ending because he acts like he has a crush immediately and never stops, doesn’t seem to really have any other fig leaf for his obsession with hanging out with Silver or any sign he previously thought puppydogging after Silver the whole fic wasn’t gay as hell, plus he thinks Silver is the bestest thing to ever be the whole time so not clear why he’d be bothered by the idea, and also you just wrote him bringing a cake celebrating the anniversary of their first meeting and then being sad Silver didn’t remember. Really hard to buy that he only just starting finding Silver attractive and now suddenly worked it out.
Arg there is so much about this fic that is done well and yet.
Cautiously sticking it in the C2 on the basis that if you ignore the plot hole setup (and all the plot holes it spans like damsel in distress Gold needing Silver to rescue him) and also the idea Gold only started being attracted to Silver in the last few minutes ending, the between part with Silver is good.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10979134/1/Pokemon-Tales-of-Fon-Love-above-the-Sky
[“GIVE IT BACK!” The Vulpix yelled ]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Relatedly, all sentences end in some form of punctuation, not just some.
“Its” is possessive, “it’s” means “it is.”
Write out numbers with letters.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10979141/1/Lavendar
Your title is misspelled.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10979168/1/Good-Intentions
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Five, four of which are just because the character list says May and it’s Dawn getting shipped with Ash instead.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10979175/1/Waves-Upon-The-Sand
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
The plot of this is pretty shaky – considering the gym’s required to get eight badges, worrying it’s not easy enough for trainers to just wander in so it needs to be moved to a higher traffic area doesn’t make much sense, as does the idea that a rematch with Brendan would matter one way or another. Then it suddenly lurches into a surfing lesson. They don’t really have much chemistry beyond mutual politeness (which comes off as rather weird on Brawly’s side).
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10979330/1/Ideals
[The female internally groaned. ]
Don’t refer to someone as “the female”.
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
[ the Pikachu whispered to the Pichu ]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[“So, cutiepie-” she didn’t get to finish.
“I know what you want, and no,” he said, stopping himself from growling.
He felt her tail touch his back. “Nonsense. No one says no to me,” she whispered in his ear.
“No means no. Now get away,” he said, his voice in a ordering tone.]
Well it’s nice to see a fic that has a grasp of consent, but this also doesn’t seem to connect up to anything else, and just looks weird when he just finished punching all the things and making it clear he’s not someone you mess with.
The idea something’s gone wrong with this iteration of “girl from the real world goes into the game” is intriguing, but you haven’t given any more than that something’s wrong, so hard to tell if it’s actually going to be a lasting, major problem or if it’s a momentary worry.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10979356/1/A-New-Advnture-Awaits
Your title is misspelled.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[“Here I want you to bring him with you.”
It was out pet Eevee looked up at me with big brown eyes.
“Really?” I asked.
“Yes he is yours now. Tomorrow Professor Oak says to come visit his lab once again. He has a gift to give you before you leave.]
[“Ah! Ash good you’re here. I have something to give you.”
I followed him back into a big room. He pressed some buttons on a machine. Finally a case opened and a handful of stones.
“No way. Really?”
“Yes. Choose any of these stones and it will evolve your Eevee into that type of pokemon. Take your time and choose carefully.”]
Right, this is a sue.
Your story is tripping over itself trying to pile more stuff on the character. Why did her mom just now suddenly decide she could have the eevee, and would it make the slightest sense for her to now sit around the whole day and then go back to Oak again tomorrow? Why would he care so much about giving her yet another thing?
And of course it’s a jolteon because it’s not enough Oak talks her rival out of taking her favorite, god forbid her rival have the upper hand typewise for a single battle. And of course the very instant people have finished handing out goodies to her and not a second before, it’s leveled for drama-angst.
Also [It was out pet Eevee looked up at me with big brown eyes.] is nonsense, proofread properly.
Zero.
End of Jan 17th!
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10979740/1/Foundations
Someone who blocked me before!
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10979773/1/Two-Year-Apology
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[right down to professor Birch. ]
Like here, for example. Part of the names so capitalized like a name.
[All of Hoenns elite ]
Hoenn’s. Apostrophes for possessives.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10979782/1/Looking-for-You
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[He had given extreme thought to who he would leave behind to protect his family. He couldn’t leave behind just anyone, he needed someone who could stay out of sight and protect from afar and the woods surrounding his home would be perfect coverage for the bird Pokemon. This would be lonely, but he knew his strong-willed Pidgeot could handle it ]
Why is it so important no one knows? Given they’ve been stalking him for some time now, they already know where he lives and that this is his family, so it’s not like his pidgeot has to hide to avoid tipping anyone off. (Plus people so dangerous his only option is just running for it seem like people competent enough to notice a pokemon even if it does keep its distance.) And making a pokemon spend years/the rest of its life lurking in the woods staring at his family isn’t just lonely, it’s also going to be pretty hungry and pretty cold what with his pokemon now being effectively wild and fending for itself but having to spend all its time watching out for other people.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10979782/2/Looking-for-You
Opening your story with a character waking up for the day is generic and horribly, horribly overdone, and to be honest, it’s so incredibly dull and boring a start that even if I hadn’t seen it, very literally here, hundreds upon hundreds of times before, I would still tell you you should have started at some other, interesting point. Also, no one will ever care what your character is eating for breakfast.
Write out numbers with letters.
[Ever since they bumped the age of receiving your trainers license to 14, they had to find a way to pacify young hopeful trainers. So they promised that when a young trainer to-be turned 10, they could get their starter Pokemon. ]
Well, at least getting a pokemon is better than usual, but still a bad change that doesn’t make sense, especially given kids can already have pokemon whenever, they’re pets.
[And hello Lottie, how are you?” She said. ]
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[ “See, your father left this here as an egg. But I didn’t want you to have it too early, it would be dangerous to give you an untrained starter at such a young age. When they created the rules about getting your Pokemon at 10, I decided then would be the perfect time to give it to you. ]
Again, they’re pets. Rather than keeping an infant locked in a ball for almost a decade, she could’ve just let it grow up as a pet and only given it to Marlene now. And then Marlene would have a starter that wasn’t a helpless infant too. It’s also completely the opposite of what she says the dad wanted – [ he knew you growing up with just the right starter would help you in the future. ] therefore she made sure Marlene never grew up with it?
[ we will do a time jump to when the girls start their journey. ]
Watching fourteen year olds struggle their way through things we know ten year olds can handle really isn’t epic writing.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10980128/1/None-Of-Your-Con-Xerneas
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Repeating part of the game isn’t the same thing as writing an interesting story.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10980371/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-Light-and-Darkness
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10980395/1/Nursery-Rhymes-for-the-Uninitiated
Eh, poetry.
Three.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10980601/1/Pok%C3%A9Cademy
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
You need more to a story than people discussing the fact they’re at SETTING and there are THESE CHARACTERs who have LIST OF POKEMON who are used in CRAPPY BATTLE STYLED LIKE THE GAME.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10980737/1/Pokemon-The-Rage-of-Legends
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[Flashback 5 years ago…
“Finally!” Red said ” I’ve graduated and it’s time to get my Firt Pokémon”
prof. Oak blurb
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” No need to tell me the choices Prof. I chose Cyndaquil!”
Red grabed his PokeDex and Pokeballs and shot out the door]
Wow this is terrible.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10980922/1/The-Secrets-of-Pokemon
[This is some crap I wrote in like 20 minutes. I was bored. Don’t judge me.]
Nope, it’s crap and full of mistakes, next time edit your work.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10980959/1/A-Long-Journey
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
Punctuation goes at the end of all sentences, not just some.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10981332/1/Yes-I-can
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10981490/1/Symptoms-of-Love
Got this author already.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10981498/1/Pokemon-Diamond-Nuzlocke-Adventures
Write out numbers with letters.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Generally awful, proofread and try harder.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10981582/1/O-Mega-Adventures
Write out numbers with letters.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[But Trainers have to be at least 15. ]
Nope, ten.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[Hello there! My name is Professor Birch, and this -” here an Azurill appeared next to him – “is what we call a Pokémon.”
“Duh.” I said. My dad’s a Pokémon Gym Master. Of course I know a Pokémon.]
When you find your very characters complaining about how incredibly dumb it is to try to shoehorn the game’s opening talk to the player into your fanfic, you should probably listen and just delete the horrible idea instead.
Speaking of the game, repeating the setup of the game is not interesting. Even people who’ve never played a single game are familiar with this because it’s been done literally thousands of times already.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10981636/1/Repeat
[ a Treecko ]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
The loop mechanic of this is nice.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10981678/1/Business-Casual
Already got the author and god I am so bored of Steven/May. It’s like the game version of Ash/Whichever.
Four.
I laughed so hard at the “non-violent” Nuzlocke last night. And then because it was late I suddenly became full of feelings about how amazing fandom is that the same seed of an idea can turn into THAT or into IBAW, and then just general IBAW feelings, which made me stay up later, which made me get sappier, and long story short I really need coffee right now.
Also I saw a post browsing the tags last night that literally just said “Why would you ship May with Steven when Lisia exists?” and it took so much willpower to only like and not reblog.
I just don’t get why Steven is shipped at all. As far as I can tell, he has two personality options.
1) Stand looking pretty.
2) Stand looking pretty while talking about rocks.
Isn’t Steven like at least twice May’s age or something? Or did they physically deage him for ORAS or something?
Pokemon fandom has never, ever cared about that. We’ve had ten year olds having sex with baby pokemon.
I’ve always blamed the ridiculously sexualized way the female protags are drawn. They look 19, so people treat them that way.
There’s also recently Brendan/Courtney shipping for some reason.
Nah, that’s the nature of every fandom, even when female characters aren’t sexualized.
I mean, have you seen Rhyme/Joshua section of TWEWY fandom?
I agree with Illhousen. You’ll get this kind of thing in literally any fandom where the protags are underage. Remember Strikethrough? That happened largely because so many people were shipping teacher/student in Harry Potter fandom.
My not-pokemon fandom experience is pretty limited, so you would def know better than I would. Also fandom is really weird.
I think it’s half and half. There was porn from the very beginning, but the fact they’re wearing skirts has definitely pulled in a new and horrible subset.
[I just don’t get why Steven is shipped at all.]
[Stand looking pretty]
I’m guessing human nature. It’s pretty much the same as N back in the day, but N has to added bonus of having a personality and character development.
You pretty much explained it yourself. He’s pretty and also a nerd so all the straight fangirls want their avatar to date him. Or for him to date Wallace for double pretty and that one admittedly pretty gay time they’re shown talking to each other
I can get why they want him to stand next to her or have sex with her, but why are they writing actual shipfics about their interactions beyond that? He’s a perfectly good trophy boyfriend and porn accessory, but they’re not writing “And by the way May has this hot boyfriend” they’re writing the two of them talking when you could replace one of them with a halfway decent marble statue.
Because a lot of fanficcers have complicated issues with the differences between visual and non-visual media.
I suppose it makes sense when nine out of ten of the fics are really about how rough it is for the trainer to lose their work all the time. (And all fics across the category are always humans > pokemon, and BW’s “people and pokemon! people and pokemon!” sure didn’t help.)
Wait, what? “Non-violent Nuzlocke”? What fic was that?
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10981498/1/Pokemon-Diamond-Nuzlocke-Adventures
The summary states “Rated K for NON violent pokemon battles”
By which it means the battles look like this:
“This is how the battle went…
Chimchar- scratch
Starly- tackle
Chimchar- scratch
Starly- failed tackle
Chimchar- scratch critical hit
Starly has now died”
Fears: getting raped.
[…]
Other: was once raped by Renaldo.
…Does this actually lead anywhere? Is there any actual point to including either of those things as a character trait?
Rape is the new dead parents. Including it in the backstory indicates that the character is angsty. That’s really all there is to it.
That the character is angsty, and a female woman girl lady, don’t forget.
I actually think the prevalence of this trope went hand in hand with people realising that they should at least try to have female characters while simultaneously having no clue how to write a female character.
Hurm, how to write about a lady woman girl person who is female? Oh, I just had the most brilliant idea! Rape! Rape is a lady thing and makes the lady angry and strong yet damaged and sad i are write good lady-female character with nuance and tragedy and much reality all shall love me and despair.
To be fair, I’ve seen a number of male characters with rape as a part of the backstory (though rarely as the focus), but you are right, it’s much more prevalent among female characters.
Huh, I’ve never seen that done with enough regularity to be a trend anywhere outside of slash fanfic, which tends to be its own isolated kettle of weird gender stuff. Where have you been seeing it?
It was pretty popular in the abused!Harry Potter genre last time I checked.
Thinking about it more, it occurs to me that with male characters rape is usually the result of authors throwing every horrible thing they can think of into character’s backstory, which sometimes includes rape, while with female characters rape is typically a centerpiece of backstory, so phenomena are not exactly the same, though both have origins in lazy writing and the desire to be edgy.
I’ve often seen it justified as realism, when it comes to female characters. Like, oh, if it’s a boy, then yeah, the bad guys killed his family and burnt down his village. But if it’s a girl, then the bad guys killed her family, they burnt down her village, and they raped her, because that’s exactly how it works in real life always duh.
I think that’s why I feel like it’s strongly a gendered thing, is because people keep giving female characters backstories that are exactly the same thing as male ones, only with rape added because that’s what happens to ladies when bad people get near them.
I do agree that it hits female characters much more often. For male ones it’s more specific authors doing a specific thing (which happened to be handled badly as well on average), not an actual trend.
I think fanfic warps this because once girls have internalized it as inevitably part of all female backstories, they end up including it for any male character they identify with.
And in the corners that gets normalized enough that even the male writers do it. This mess looks like it’s RP-based, which is pretty much nonstop tragic rape drama.
Heh, now I wanna see a “Batman” comic where Batman angsts about being raped just like he does about his parents. Or did he do it when they retconned his love affair with Talia into rape?
Specifically, Miller’s “Goddamn” Batman.
And then he’s made a hero out of Robin.
“What are you, dense? Are you retarded? I’m the goddamned Batman, and I’ve been goddamned raped!”
Yep, that fits pretty well.
See you think you’re kidding but actually Nightwing was canonically raped on panel, complete with saying no and being a traumatized mess afterward.
(Guess the writer’s gender and previous writing experience before being hired to do official work!)
I don’t know what she wrote before her “Nightwing” run, but that was Devin Grayson, right? Who tried to justify it by saying it wasn’t rape, it was only “non-consensual sex”?
In fairness I think she was trying to get across a fanfic distinction that doesn’t work well when you’re talking about what legally happened.
In fanfic, we’re often in everyone’s heads, so specifying “in this rape scene, this character doesn’t realize they’re raping that character and that character isn’t going to be calling it rape later but will use it for further self-hatred” as opposed to “this character has chosen to rape that character, and that character will respond by calling it a rape and view the first as a rapist”.
Unfortunately, fanfic chose to communicate such concepts in such clear and non-misleading ways as “oh no that’s not a rape scene it’s noncon”.
I can see that. From what I recall, it would be perfectly in-character for Tarantula to not think of it as rape. But even in the most charitable interpretation of events, she expressed herself very badly.
Anyway, I wouldn’t say Nightwing was badly traumatized by the rape. I mean, I’m going off my memory here, so please correct me if I’m wrong, but he was already at an emotional low-point (he had been forced through the grinder by the Kingpin – sorry, Blockbuster :-P) when the rape took place, and after Grayson’s run ended, I don’t think any other author picked up on that plotline.
Actually, now that I think about it… Didn’t Tarantula sort of become his girlfriend during that run?
When rape isn’t here to add angst and self-loathing (and/or desire for revenge) to the character, it’s here because it’s author’s fetish.
In such a case, rape often doesn’t affect the characters very much if at all, they could remain on good terms and even enter a long-lasting relationship.
Which… actually happens in real life – not every rape is violent, not everyone quite knows what rape is, exactly, not everyone has the same reaction and there are people willing to gloss over it for one reason or another to maintain the relationship – and I guess exploring those themes can be worthwhile.
The problem here is that authors don’t use that plot to explore the subject. They write such scenes because they appeal to them, nothing more.
Given he says that he’s not even including Renaldo as one of the submitted characters, no. No there is not.
So it really is just for adding some angst.
And here I thought only comic book writers still did that!
I take it you don’t read fanfic much.
Fanfiction has a lot of curious and varied issues. While they are not quite the same as ones found in comics, there is a significant overlap.
Especially of the “new author, new rules” variety.
I used to read “Rurouni Kenshin” and “Tenchi Muyo” fanfics, but that was a long time ago – as in, over 15 years ago.
Edited for additional explanation: So I might have seen those issues, but I can’t remember if I did. :-)