One of the stories today is by someone planning to major in Creative Writing!
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10999535/1/Fever
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Or “black” seriously why would you even do that.
Write out numbers with letters.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10999886/1/The-Interview
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Don’t call eyes orbs.
[a Tauros ]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
This seems like it’s three issues in one. You’ve got Red being angry that he keeps getting chased by the media, but you also have him ranting about how no one knows the truth when apparently he never bothered to use any of the million interviews to mention it before and how it’s always kids saving the day which doesn’t even have anything to do with the media but is just some weird society thing.
[“Unstoppable. The Best. The Champion’s Champion.” A derisive snort.
“You should keep all those titles in mind because they are all still very much true, no matter how vacuous and silly they might be. I am always watching. I am always listening. Pray that I don’t turn my eyes towards you. Pray that I don’t come down from my mountain, because if I’m ever given another reason to descend that doesn’t involve my personal life or some petty amusement at events like these, you will not believe what happens next.”
She was frozen in place. He made no move towards her, but all she wanted to do was curl up into a ball and shield herself from his gaze.
“There won’t even be pieces to pick up afterward.]
And this just makes him come off as a vicious bully. Her boss told her to come here (and he appears to have agreed to the interview), but she says “shun” and he starts snarling insults at her and then ends threatening to murder her if she breathes wrong because how dare she refer to someone literally hiding in the middle of nowhere as shunning anything.
Two.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10999942/1/What-if-I-didn-t
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10999997/1/Fall-from-grace
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
It’s okay, four letters.
Use punctuation.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10999717/1/The-Home-We-Made
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
[When he came back, Leah was sitting on the couch, trembling. She snapped her gaze straight to Luke when he came back in the room. He approached her, and she flinched away when he stopped and sat down next to her. She was on the verge of tears. “W-w-what’re you g-going to do with m-me, Luke?” she whispered, as if afraid of what the answer was going to be.
All of his emotions from the previous conversation disappeared when Derek left. He was left with the same acute emptiness within from before. Luke sighed again, pausing, collecting his thoughts before he answered her. “Don’t say it like that, baby. You’re not my property. We are equals; we outlined that day one. That’s a respect we need to recognize if this is going to work.”]
Well, it’s nice your character at least says he’s not in favor of owning people. Shame that doesn’t actually address the problem, which is that she clearly still views herself as his property if she was sitting there thinking he was going to assault or kill her and staying anyway.
This exchange turns the fic into an argument against pokemon/human relationships. It shows that she can’t meaningfully consent to anything because she’s scared of him and won’t say no. It doesn’t matter if he’s willing to treat her as an equal if she can’t manage to assert herself around him.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10999812/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-Love-by-Moonlight-Chapter-1
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Two.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11000339/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-Ultimate-Infinate-Crisis-Movie
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Write out numbers with letters.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[And our story begins 5 years ago…
5 years ago:]
No, your story is beginning right now. It can’t be five years in the past if there’s no present yet. The sane way of doing this is to say “five years later” once that happens.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11000384/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-Sunset-Beyond-the-Horizon
Write out numbers with letters.
“Its” is possessive, “it’s” means “it is.”
[Prologues are always the most boring part to be honest, ]
Listen, no one designated a part of a story to be the boring part that no one wants to read. If your prologue is boring, delete it. If what you write next is boring, delete that. Keep going until it’s not boring. As far as I can tell this is just a pile of whining until suddenly pokemon and then you stop because god forbid anything interesting happen in your chapter. All you had to do was start at suddenly pokemon appear and then write an actual chapter.
Two, concrit and author reply.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11000426/1/Row-Of-The-Month
If the closest you can get to a “joke” is “lol periods make women crazy bitches”, just don’t.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11000440/1/The-Abandoned-Region
[Amber breathed a sigh of relief. There was a chance. All she had to do was do whatever this person wanted. Sticking to the rules was admittedly not one of her strong suits, but she was confident she could play along if it meant seeing her family again. ]
That seems kind of doormaty, especially for someone saying that she’s not naturally a rule-follower.
Well, this is very nicely written with a delicate edge of disturbing. I’m very curious how it’ll develop.
[“Now, I guess all of you want to know how to get home ]
Especially this. Why is it talking like it’s directed at a crowd when she’s all alone? Either there’s been a lot of people grabbed and some of them will be in groups when hearing this message, or something’s gone even more wrong.
Zero. Of course.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11000463/1/Waking-Wishes
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[Some say that the Pokémon race should have been ended hundreds of years ago. Though really, what would the world be like without them? There would be no time. There would be no light. The world would be an endless void of darkness. The plants, grasses, rivers, and streams would die. Life would not exist. ]
Which is why it’s curious where you’re even getting the idea there’s any major faction who thinks pokemon shouldn’t exist.
[“Science doesn’t have anything to do with this. It’s wrong to mess with the hands of fate. Besides what does science have to do with anything. I don’t see a point in it at all.” Lance frowns.
“Science is what keeps a roof on this house and food in your stomachs. You understand child?” The father gets to his feet giving his son a sharp glare.
“Who cares if it puts food in our stomachs and a roof over our heads. I’d rather be homeless than be involved in something that manipulates the hands of fate. This is sick and twisted. If you had any idea what you were really doing for this family you’d understand, but you don’t. All you think about is the money isn’t it? What kind of a father are you? You’re no father of mine.” Lance growls.]
I really don’t believe any kid raised in a household with even a passing understanding of science would be saying something so stupid. Even really hardcore anti-science religious people usually sound saner than this.
I mean, science is literally why they have food and shelter. Not the dad having the job, botany and engineering.
Then the father rants about how people who have money drink all day while neglecting their kids for some reason. This is incoherent.
[“Even if you can create a living, breathing Pokémorph, who will you use as your test dummy?” Lance asks curiously, brow furrowing.
“Well I’ve been thinking of Heather. She loves Pokémon and already has a close connection to them. ]
What.
[This Pokémorph will be capable of transforming into any and all Pokémon. The Pokémorph will never become a hybrid. ]
So he’s managed to make something by making something totally different, but it’s the same thing because you say so.
[Besides, Heather agreed to it. ]
I assume you mean for him to be kind of evil, but it doesn’t really matter, even if he doesn’t care that six year olds can’t give meaningful consent he should be well aware everyone else knows that too. Either his family accepts using the daughter or they don’t, her giving meaningless agreement isn’t a valid excuse.
[“Oh yes she can communicate with us telepathically in a sense. She can block out communicating with people by using mind speak to those she trusts. ]
Wow you’ve just given up on even pretending this makes sense.
So look, if you want pokemon-flavored Animoprhs, just do pokemon-flavored Animorphs. Magic box makes girl transform. Everything you do to try to “explain” what’s going on further is just adding something stupid, absurd, or both.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11000470/1/Corruption
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
And don’t use stated.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11000527/1/Pokemon-master-or-not
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11000546/1/From-Johto-With-Love
[ Your three were chosen as our new recruits. ]
Proofread.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Write out numbers with letters.
Use apostrophes for possessives and contractions.
If you aren’t sure how to spell a pokemon species, look it up.
[Megan had lunged out to protect the downed cyndaquil and put herself in the way of the attack. I didn’t know I could do what I did next, I knew I had to. I reached out and held the stones with my own power before they could hit her. It worked, they stopped and fell harmlessly in front of her. ]
When you write pokemon as being thinking, talking people just like humans, it then looks very awkward when your character finds himself saying “No, human, don’t risk your life to save the life of a pokemon!” and unlocking super abilities to save the human because that’s so much more horrifying than the same thing happening to a pokemon. If the idea is that this is a stupid newbie mistake because pokemon are way more durable so the pokemon would just get a bruise while the human will definitely die, that needs to be very explicit – and also, it kind of kills a lot of the tension if pokemon are basically unkillable and the only time there’s any danger is if a human jumps in the way of an attack when there’s never any good reason to do so.
Right now, it seems like you’re doing the usual thing of pokemon talking but still being treated like animals.
I do like the storyline of this fic – a character who’s already been a trainer and has pokemon makes for a very welcome change of pace, and his goal is original. But you’ve really got to work on your grammar.
Two.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11000649/1/Broken-Bones
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[I could hear Emolga and Swanna crying out for their trainers to stop beating me to a pulp, but they still didn’t listen.]
So the pokemon are fine murdering other pokemon but hurting a human is totally wrong?
[The skeletal remains of a Swanna lay on the gravel, alongside the dissected body of my Mightyena.
“Now you know it feels..” I gasped for air. “To have… Your Pokémon be… killed in… battle…”]
Yes because obviously if it’s wrong for their friend to kill an innocent pokemon, you should punish them by killing another innocent pokemon.
What.
Two.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11000656/1/Further
A drabble is the term for a writing exercise of 100 words exactly.
Why would anyone need multiple copies of the same shiny pokemon?
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11000805/1/Pokemon-The-Adventure-of-a-Lifetime
Opening your story with a character waking up for the day is generic and horribly, horribly overdone, and to be honest, it’s so incredibly dull and boring a start that even if I hadn’t seen it, very literally here, hundreds upon hundreds of times before, I would still tell you you should have started at some other, interesting point. Also, no one will ever care what your character is eating for breakfast.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
It’s okay, four letters.
Characters wandering around being trainers is not inherently interesting. If you have an actual plot, skip there.
[Kei will more or else have a small Harem only three girls ]
Jesus christ, how can this seem like a good idea?
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11000874/1/It-all-points-back-to-the-dolls
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Don’t put notes in your story.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11000896/1/Pokemon-Mystery-Dungeon-Warriors-of-Destiny
[ we see 7 Pokémon ]
Write out numbers with letters.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Four.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001058/1/Pokemon-Adventures-in-Hoenn
Write out numbers with letters.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[This Pokeball was given to me by your father. The Pokemon inside was caught by him ]
[ “Eevee?” the Pokemon squeaked ]
ARG.
Look, if someone is catching a pokemon for their kid, have it be a pokemon people can actually catch and not yet another eevee. If you want her to have a horribly overused pokemon, go with basic logic and say her parents bought her one.
And of course it’s the dad that’s the trainer, as always.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001084/1/The-Wallace-Cup
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001209/1/Sore-Loser
Write out numbers with letters.
[“Green,” He sighs. ]
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
A brief battle and people saying nothing much to each other isn’t really enough for an actual story.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001267/1/Darkness-is-Coming
A character bio isn’t a story, it’s just a waste of the reader’s time.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001294/1/Content
Just got them.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001297/1/Full-Night-s-Sleep
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001298/1/Cresselia-My-Love
Look at what you upload before posting.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001310/1/Dream-Casters
Same person.
Two.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001345/1/Best-Two-Out-of-Three
Got them.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001366/1/Ephemeral
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Someone else should look at this and tell me if it makes any sense.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001418/1/PokeWalker
Write out numbers with letters.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
It’s okay, four letters.
So I assume pokemon don’t exist in this and it’s just generic zombie apocalypse.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001487/1/Junk-of-the-Heart
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Stop dancing around said. Also, stories about people doing boring stuff because they’ve got nothing better to do are really, really hard to make interesting, and you don’t manage it.
Three.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001531/1/Pokemon-Mystery-Dungeon-Light-in-the-Darkness
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Three.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001553/1/Under-The-Mistletoe
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001633/1/Pokemon-Storm-Front
Write out numbers with letters.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Don’t switch between third and first person.
[Which leads us to me, at three in the morning, packing the few things I have into my duffel bag that I stole from one of the other kids here. He didn’t need it anyways.
I quietly zipped the bag up, and opened the tiny window that my small abode boasts. Unfortunately, I had the misfortune to be a “rebellious misbehaved child”(as Shitwell puts it), so I got stuffed into the tiny, freezing attic room.]
I think it’s pretty reasonable to want to keep the kid who steals from other kids apart from them.
I have no idea why she’s sneaking out instead of just leaving to be a trainer through the front door. It certainly makes her look like a melodramatic loon rather than someone whose complaints I should take seriously.
[Suddenly, I tripped. I looked to see what had caused the fall, and my eyes nearly bulged out of their sockets. It was an Ultra Ball. ]
So she ran off to be a trainer without bothering to even get a pokeball, because she’s very stupid? But luckily reality warps around her to give her one anyway, making it clear she’ll get whatever she needs whenever you feel like it.
[There were three deep gashes on its flank, each one oozing the scarlet liquid of life that’s supposed to stay in your body ]
Listen, if you’re calling it “scarlet liquid of life” it’s really hard to have the slightest concern over the blood.
[“Hey, I’m gonna get you to a Pokemon Center to get you healed, alright? But to do so, I’m gonna need to capture you so that I can run faster. After, I’ll release you if you’d like. Is that okay with you?” ]
The first thing she’s done that hasn’t been pure angsty-asshole sue! But it’s totally going to agree to stay with her, so it’s not worth much.
[ I then thought about the flaws. My arms, legs, back, everywhere that wasn’t my face was littered with scars and bruises that looked even worse due to my pale skin (All of them were received in fights over food. Yeah, that’s how hungry we were). I felt depressed, knowing that these injuries wouldn’t be here if my parents were still alive. It’s what I always thought whenever I see my scars. ]
Ah, where to begin.
Okay, so first off, scars turn white. Lighter skin makes them less noticeable and on pale skin they’re basically invisible.
Second, you’ve now said repeatedly she’s an asshole who steals from the other kids while thinking how much they deserve it, so I find it really hard to believe that not one single fight had anything to do with that.
Third and most damning, there is no way in hell her horrible scars and bruises magically avoid her face just because you want her to look pretty.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001650/1/Date-Night
Got them
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001691/1/The-Little-Lights-of-Coumarine-City
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Two.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001733/1/Late-to-the-Party
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
“Its” is possessive, “it’s” means “it is.”
[The facts were shoved down everyone’s throats like a famished Snorlax at a buffet. ]
Bad metaphor, unless you assume famished snorlaxes at buffets have to be forcefed.
Also, while you’re generally writing it correctly here and a few other places have capital letters when they shouldn’t.
Well, this is a clever idea. I like that you write the first half of it quite seriously rather than tipping your hand early.
Six.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11001820/1/Mind-of-a-Champion
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Write out numbers with letters.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Zero.
The end of Jan 26th.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11002072/1/Freedom
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
[ I’m not some sort of test experiment! ]
Test subject. Really, your grammar is generally terrible.
In the note at the end of the fic, the author writes, I’ll defiantly have more of a reason now to write since I have change my major from Linguistics to Creative Writing.
So. Yeah.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11002082/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-Love-by-Moonlight-Chapter-2
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11002154/1/Wish
If you want to do something about suicide, go do something about suicide instead of cluttering up the category with the fact.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11002233/1/The-Golden-Rose
“Its” is possessive, “it’s” means “it is.”
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Kind of a slow opening, but the second half is nicely creepy and fitting for Lysandre.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11002251/1/The-House-Down-Kindle-Road
Just got them.
Zero.