We start off with something that was actually impressively dumb, and some other fics were readable. A good day!
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10953906/1/The-Gauntlet-Book-One-Kanto
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[The Gauntlet, few attempt it and even fewer succeed on what most everyone agrees is a self-inflected death sentence. Another reason so few attempt The Gauntlet is that most trainers don’t want to wait past the minimum age to get their trainers license and starter Pokémon to begin their Pokémon journey. Every so often however a trainer is willing to wait until they’re an adult and register to run The Gauntlet. I was one such trainer. ]
No, okay?
You can’t decide that you want an overage newbie trainer to do something impressive, then assume the world just provides that regardless of the fact they have no reason to.
What happens if a kid gets a pokemon, then wants to try this when they’re older? What, you ban them from trying because sorry kid, you weren’t an idiot who wasted ten years not raising pokemon to prove your poke-worthiness?
[The Professor interrupted me at this point to inform me that after completing Johto if I even made it that far I’d need to re-challenge all of the Kanto Leaders and Indigo League using their championship teams as well as taking on Red the Official Champion of both regions before being allowed to continue onto Hoenn, Sinnoh, Unova and Kalos. ]
Also, this is kind of that thing that trainers are already aiming to do, plus the whole “championship teams” is gamey as hell. The fact that in the game you can train up a team in a few hours and that hitting certain flags makes gym leaders suddenly have stronger pokemon doesn’t mean it’s any good as a story.
[I informed Professor Oak that I knew all of this and I was also aware of the added rules for Gauntlet Challengers including the ones stating that a change would be made to my trainer card to disallow fainting instead causing my team member to die and that in each Region I would need to re-build my team from scratch with a starter indigenous to each of the regions. “Knowing that your whole team could die you’re still willing to take on this challenge?” Demanded the Professor glaring at me. I calmly informed the Professor that I could do no less as completing The Gauntlet was the only way to ensure you became a fully League Certified Professor ]
And going nuzlocke as well. Turducken of bad ideas.
So, first off, let’s consider that this is really not much of a sacrifice for the person but for the pokemon that are going to die in droves over this, so the whole “omg are you a badass trainer enough to risk DEATH (of other people)” is hilariously off.
Second, you can’t disallow fainting. Do you know what fainting is? It’s that thing where your consciousness switches off involuntarily. That’s what’s going on in the game, pokemon fight until one is unconscious. At least most nuzlockes just go with the idea the actual pokemon function differently. This just means that if her pokemon faint, for absolutely no reason the other pokemon then guts them to prove how SUPER BADASS the GAUNTLET OF COOL is.
Third, new team each time, really? Really? Just play the games in sequence, don’t pretend it’s any good as a fanfic.
Fourth, there would be no pokemon professors under your system, because you’re now selecting only for idiots who are super trainers but want to be scientists and feel like waiting an extra decade to even make the attempt, so even assuming anyone ever did this, that doesn’t mean they’d have any skills as actual scientists.
Fifth, assuming all this somehow worked at all, any proper character would be fighting to overthrow such a corrupt, idiotic, bloodthirsty system apparently designed solely around preventing anyone from studying pokemon, not jumping into the thick of it with a grin.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10953936/1/A-Journey-of-a-Thousand-Miles
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[My dad had also been a powerful trainer, but he was very much for me getting a Pokémon. He and I had argued with Mom probably hundreds of times, but she always told both of us that she “didn’t want me to get hurt” or some other such crap. ]
Except that in the pokemon world, not having a pokemon for protection is a great way to get hurt.
Also he’s had about eight years to get a pokemon on his own if he actually wanted one that badly. It’s clear across canons that parents can’t actually stop kids from being trainers if they want to be.
[Mom almost seemed to wilt with relief. “Well, at least it’s just a Flying-type. I would have been worried if it was a Fire-type. Besides, it’s way too cute to be a good battler!”
“Torch?” it said, quizzically.]
So this is just an idiot plot all the way through.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954003/1/Liebe-Love-Amour
[“Oh …,” reacted the girl]
Just fix the problems instead of reposting the same thing over and over again.
Zero.
I don’t know why she doesn’t just block me, but then, I don’t know why people can insist they don’t give a fuck about grammar errors but that it’s the end of the world I mentioned there’s grammar errors.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954004/1/Mega-Lucario
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Three.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954034/1/Laundry-Day
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
I wonder when college AUs first became a thing?
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954037/1/Warmth
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954038/1/Pok%C3%A9mon-Ranger-Secret-of-Oblivia
Hm.
[From nearly any location in the archipelago known as the Oblivia region, barring internal structures, one could see a large pillar of what could only be considered light energy rapidly ascend skyward from a seemingly random location in the ocean. ]
Your writing seems like it’s trying so hard to be precise and clear that it’s looping back around to confusing. “From anywhere in Oblivia, one could see a pillar of light…” would’ve been fine, if you really needed to qualify it, “From nearly any location…” would include being inside a building. (Also, as it is it seems you can’t see it through a window.) You’ll almost never need qualifiers like “seemingly” in actual narration.
Similarly, you really don’t need to explain about the pichu’s ukulele right now, since it’s not an issue at the moment, nor what pokemon rangers are, since you can assume anyone reading already knows.
[These rangers wore a significantly different uniform compared to that of most rangers, boasting a yellow scarf and blue goggles for starters. ]
Also, how is this significant?
Having detail is good, but it really needs to be tied in to what’s happening.
[ She walked near the edge of the island and looked towards a distant island that looked to be the main focus of their mission. ]
See, here she’s doing something, which makes it automatically more interesting so it’d be a much better time to describe what the island looks like, and maybe you could bring up her yellow scarf here, whether or not it’s getting blown by wind at the moment and that sort of thing.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954045/1/The-Poem
Paragraphing has rules. You start a new paragraph with a new subject. The goal is not to divide your story up into even blocks. Also, a new speaker means you start a new paragraph.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Two.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954061/1/l-heure-du-printemps
Drabble is the term for a writing exercise of precisely 100 words. Flash fiction is the term for something written very quickly.
[a Pokémon war. ]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[excuse the typos I wrote this in 15 min and didn’t edit. ]
Then proofread afterward, no one was holding a gun to your head and telling you to post immediately or die.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954176/1/What-You-Can-Find-In-The-Forest
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
It’s okay, four letters.
Write out numbers with letters.
[“Really? Who?” Said one. ]
You seem to have dialogue right for the most part, but there’s this bit.
Well, it’s quite nice to see something with an established trainer for once, even if it’s probably just because this is a part of some other story, and to have something plotty show up before the end of the first chapter.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954176/2/What-You-Can-Find-In-The-Forest
[“MELOETTA: THE MELODY POKEMON.
Meloetta is a dual Normal and Psychic type Legendary Pokemon. About a dozen Meloettas have been sighted; only one is known to have a trainer. Though a rather powerful Pokemon, Meloettas are best known for their singing ability. It is said, and evidence exists, that the beautiful song of a Meloetta can put an end to or postpone most arguments and calm crying animals or infants. Meloettas also have two forms, known as Aria and Pirouette. Pirouette form is a Normal/Fighting type. These Pokemon, unless willing, are extremely resistant to Pokeballs. Because of their rarity, the majority of this data was collected from only one example, the only one owned by a trainer.”
Scroll down to the subcategories list, click “NATURE.”
“Meloettas are generally kind but timid Pokemon. If you earn their trust, they can be helpful, friendly, and pleasant. The hard part is earning their trust. If you locate one, simply getting a Meloetta to approach you willingly can be hard. Since they can turn invisible as they wish, anything that scares or surprises them is often not met with retaliation, but disappearance. Attempts to capture them are as of yet always fruitless, as the Pokemon will both disappear and if necessary confuse the attacking Pokemon; it’s Psychic and Confusion attacks being especially strong. In Pirouette form, its Fighting-type moves will usually fend off the Pokemon. Pokeballs, even the Master Ball, can be resisted by this Legendary.
Our best guess to capture it would be to not capture it, but befriend it. Patience will undeniably be needed.”]
This really seems to be missing the idea of “legendary”. If there’s been only a dozen sightings, how many actually had pokeballs chucked at them enough to verify they’re unusually resistant to them? If there’s only been a single one closely observed, why does the pokedex say what their usual personality is? If you observe one kind and timid pokemon, that doesn’t mean all pokemon are kind and timid.
It’d have made much more sense to have listed the few facts they can verify as true across the species, then said that only one’s been closely observed and here are the traits it has, which may or may not be true. If you want the pokeball bit, say that X number of the dozen were engaged by experienced trainers who reported that the meloetta couldn’t be caught, and unless masterballs are common enough for them to have been tried, that should just be speculation. (And weird speculation given what a masterball can catch.)
If you’re writing information about something people shouldn’t know much about, don’t be exact. Say that there was a report of or evidence suggests, and have more nonsense mixed in there.
One.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954318/1/At-the-Trading-Post
[Word Count: 100 words. ]
:D
This is a nice snippet of life. I wonder what fake gems taste like (tofu? Sawdust?) and what their nutritional value is in comparison.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954445/1/Thinking-Out-Loud
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
This is cute, but really doesn’t fit Gary and Ash’s dynamic at all, unless the moral is they’d have gotten along great in a universe where no pokemon exist.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954562/1/What-happens-at-Day-Care
Semicolons do not indicate sophisticated or intelligent writing, even when grammatically correct. Use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly, judiciously, and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable. If you have a semicolon sitting between a pair of sentences because the sentences are kind of, sort of related, it just makes you look pretentious.
[lips curled back fangs beared, ]
Bared. Bare = naked and exposed. Bear = held or a bear the animal.
Really the fact spellcheck informs you “beared” isn’t a word should’ve been a clue.
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
And now there’s some rape/no homo stuff that you apparently think is hilarious. Ugh.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954646/1/Calling-of-Enigma
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[Ash gripped his pocket, ready to mega-evolve Pidgeot to turn the tides of battle… However, at that moment he noticed, the girl before him in a passionate and even fearful stance… She was desperate… This victory meant everything to her for some reason.
‘Who are you? Why does this match mean so much to you?’ He thought to himself.
He let go of the item in his pocket and didn’t issue the tide-turner of battle.
Talonflame followed up its attack. It took out Pidgeot with a violently incinerating collision. The glory of Talonflame’s wings flashed bright under the heat of flames, while Pidgeot fell slowly as a badly burned victim.
“Pidgeot return.” Ash called with authority, judging the fight over.
‘I’m sorry old friend… She needed this victory. Thank you for this.’
The girl’s was couldn’t hide her excitement now. “I did it! I beat you, finally!” She exclaimed in excitement.]
Which is why it’s not particularly kind of him to hand her the win.
She wanted to prove herself. She’s worked hard to become as good as she is. And it’s all irrelevant because he feels it’s better to humor her and make the silly girl think she’s a good trainer than respect her actual ability.
Three.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954743/1/PmL-s-Randomised-Ruby-Nuzlocke
Random death continues to not be a substitute for actual plot. Similarly, writing terribly and calling it humor isn’t actually funny.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954759/1/Meowth-Thoughts-2
[to much ]
Too.
[a Malamar. ]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
This really seems like 90% summarizing to 10% actual story.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954824/1/The-Oligarchy
Hm. Well, it’s a different opening than a kid getting their first pokemon, but it also gives me little idea where this is actually going, which is what a first chapter should do. This is just generic dystopia so far.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954824/2/The-Oligarchy
[ the last Ampharos ]
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[ I never payed much attention in school because I did not like neither science nor history and those were the two most important subjects as deemed by the oligarchy when I was a kid. ]
Uh, that’s kind of an odd choice to pin on an evil government, especially the history. Science and history are both pretty legitimately important. Evil governments usually gut them to spend the time on propaganda about how the new history of the country is that they’re awesome and those other people are terrible.
[They drilled it into our heads that these pokémon were unstoppable forces, very dangerous and violent. This knowledge was essential. It is the duty of a Kalosian citizen to report any pokémon with the potential for mega evolution so it can be captured or euthanized. Similarly, it is the duty of a Kalosian citizen to report any person or persons unlawfully owning or harboring a pokémon with the potential for mega evolution. ]
This doesn’t make much sense given how easy it would be to just regulate the extremely rare stones used and the fact mega evolutions aren’t exactly gamebreaking.
[and tell the local stasis officer where and how exactly I stumbled upon this very virile and aggressive man-eating monster. ]
Virile is a poor choice unless you mean to imply she’s finding it sexy enough for that to be leaking into her word choice.
Three.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954976/1/Deep-Obsidian
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
[Brendan hopped off of Latias’ back and stepped into the secret base that May had found before. He sighed and returned the Mightyena sleeping inside and packed everything. “I guess I’ll set up camp someplace else, huh?” he asked himself. After settling into a base on route 123, with stairs leading to an upper-level where a bed was found, Brendan sat on the bed and thought to a long while. He reached into his pocket and retrieved a small hand-held device. After flipping it on, he laid back and scrolled through the list on the device, hearing several Pokémon cries emit from the tiny speaker on the right side. Treeko, Grovyle, Sceptile, Torchic… and so on. He’d realized something. Save for eleven Pokémon, he had every Pokémon that belonged in the Hoenn region. Five of them he’d seen. He stared at the screen sleepily for a while, his eyes drooping sleepily before he dropped the Pokédex on his chest and snored silently. Mightyena approached him carefully and nudged a Pokéball that was attached to his belt, allowing Glinda, his Gardevoir to stand before them. She shook her head before looking at Brendan. Smiling sweetly and raising an eyebrow. She took the Pokédex and switched it off, setting it onto the brick that sat beside Brendan’s bed. She then waved her arms, lifting Brendan’s body while Mightyena moved the blanket aside. Glinda then laid Brendan in the bed properly and pulled off his shoes and took off his hat, setting his shoes beside the bed and the hat on top of the Cyndaquil doll’s head. She then removed his belt containing his Pokémon, setting it on the brick along with the Pokédex. She finally pulled the blanket over Brendan and tucked him in. she managed a small smile to Mightyena. Mightyena looked up at her and wagged her tail. Glinda sat down beside Brendan and thought a while, sensing something off. She looked around for a while and sighed, placing a hand on her Pokéball and returning herself. ]
This should not be one giant lump. New topic = new paragraph.
Zero.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10954989/1/A-New-Region
Dialogue is written as “Hello,” she said or “Hello!” she said, never “Hello.” She said or “Hello.” she said or “Hello,” She said or “Hello” she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn’t contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it’s written as “Hello.” She grinned, never “Hello,” she grinned or “Hello,” She grinned or “Hello.” she grinned. Note that something isn’t a speech verb just because it’s a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you’re breaking up two complete sentences it’s “Hi,” she said. “This is it.” not “Hi,” she said, “this is it.” or “Hi,” she said “this is it.” And if you’re breaking up a sentence in the middle, it’s “Hi. This,” she said, “is it.” The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don’t use quotation marks with thoughts.
Write out numbers with letters.
You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.
Zero.
Blarg sleep time nao.