In other news…
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6950307/4/Indy

Hm. It’s nice to see some of the mundane background of the running of a pokecenter, but still rather slow paced. I’m still curious how she’ll handle wild pokemon – she seems to be able to avoid them well enough on the route and then she decides to bypass the Mt. Moon, which may be a reasonable decision but isn’t as interesting. Anyone can fall off a ledge, after all.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6950307/5/Indy

And hmmmmm. I quite like the idea of knowing how to do things on your own even when there’s easier ways of going about it, and that this kind of journey really is possible is good to know and helps give an idea of the general power/aggressiveness of pokemon in this story, but still, I wish there was more of that pokemon component. It’s kind of shaping up to be camping with newer vs older equipment, and I’m more interested in seeing how someone deals with superpowered magic animals when they don’t have their own for help.

I’m curious what her plan is. The only thing that occurs to me is getting him to help her, and that doesn’t seem to make sense given the rest of everything.

Also, let’s check in with the fallout from my review month! 

forkicksan’giggles | re: Your review to The Saga of Corin

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8966653/Thank you very much for your detailed review! I hadn’t realized that I needed to write in a different format for the web, (I was writing in book format). I fixed as much as I could see and added a new introduction. To me, the chapter as a whole still seems a little unpolished, but I hope I can only get better as I write more. Thanks again for your insight!

thinking is hard | …

thanks for the review i edited it and posted new chapter please review it

Osprey441 | re: Your review to Pokemon: Fusion Core

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8959777/It’ just my writing style. I know I don’t have to capitalize pokemon names, I just do.

AmieAmiss | re: Your review to Dark Carnival Brothers

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8595387/Thanks, I will be sure to proof read!

yukiro-fayt1 | re: Your review to A Pokemon Quest

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8953440/Hi! Thanks for the review. I’ll keep those things in mind when writing, as mentioned on my profile I’m not the best at grammar or spelling due to being dyslexic (though I tend to see most spelling mistakes after reading through a few times), so pointing out those mistakes I’ve missed can help a lot. ^w^ The part about Oak is actually an error on my part, I changed the plot idea and forgot to go back and edit that part when I was writing it last year. If I ever get back to this story I’ll edit it so the plot makes more sense. Oak was left the egg/vulpix to look after, so he can’t give the pokemon to anyone, but as I said, I forgot to edit that bit so thanks for catching it.

Traveling Trainer | re: Your review to Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Beyond the Sky

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8965814/What exactly did you find entertaining about how it was written? If the only negative you had to find was me not using a period with a non-speaking verb, I’d much rather hear about what you did like about it.

Name: Glaceon1362

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Fanboy111 | re: Your review to Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Sun and Moon- Tommy Arc

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8949340/

Thx! This is my first time writing my ideas publicly. I will try harder next time.

I Am The Hyacinth Girl | Your Review For My Story [Song of the Swanna]

Hello. So apparently while I was spending the week in California, my story decided to be nice and go off and delete itself. (Okay, that’s a lie; I’m pretty sure that I left myself logged in on my home computer and my sister piddled around with my account or something) However, I noticed from my email that before my story went all suicidal, you posted a review for it. It was the story with the oh-so-original title “Song of the Swanna,” in case you’ve forgotten already.

Anyways. Thank you for your review! I ended up piddling around and doing some research, and it appears that I was part of a large, fandom-wide reviewing project that you did for the month of January or something absurd like that, but I salute you. Apparently you did half a bajillion reviews in the month of January, so even if I disliked your review, I’d honestly have nothing to fault you for.

However, I thought your review was actually quite nice for the mildly pretentious, melodramatic mess that was my story, haha. Thanks. I’m pretty sure that my computer is secretly telling me not to try my hand at fanfiction again for a while (it took my about a day to get it to upload the story in the first place), so I probably won’t be revisiting that story soon, but critiques are always helpful. I wanted to clear some things up, though, in case you still cared (and somehow possessed a photographic memory and are able to recall every sentence of my story, haha).

{[“Vesta?” I asked quizzically. “Roman goddess of the hearth?” It wasn’t the worst nickname for a pet I’d seen… I guess. Even for a larvesta.]

…which already has the word in its official name. It’d probably have been cleverer to use the Greek one with the slightly different name.}

I meant this to come across as a sarcastic comment from our rather dry and unamused narrator. The “…I guess” was supposed to be more of a “Oh, you got me poop for my birthday? That’s so thoughtful of you… I guess .” than anything else. I thought that Nick’s naming his larvesta “Vesta” would be about as acceptable as naming your dog “Og” or “Brodor Retriever”. Originally, I had intended to juxtapose the narrator’s original perception of Nick with her later feelings towards him, but it appears that I was too subtle. Whoops.

{It’s interesting to have such an unrepentantly vicious character}
Oh, damn, I was actually trying to make my narrator into a nervous, regretful wreck by the end of everything. I guess I screwed up hard there. Definitely will revise.

Otherwise, thank you. This story originally wasn’t intended to be in the Pokemon fandom at all, but I was looking for feedback for a new narrative style and couldn’t be bothered to set up my fictionpress account. Speaking of writing style:

{I like the writing style}
Mission accomplished; awwww, yeah.

Thank you muchly for the review, good [s]sir[/s] madame, and have a pleasant day!

-The Hyacinth Girl

xx illusive man xx | are you a girl ?

r u? 2/04   I assume its likely due to the fact guys make physical threats. you however, threaten to humilliate by reposting a pm which its relevence matches that of an insignificant gnat which is always swatted away . i understad you dislike disrespect but this is to a childish level. I would expect better from an individual as creative and intelligent as yourself. I will however, commend your spelling guide link its accurate and worthy of respect. 2/04   tell you what bad start my mother always taught me to respect my elders but why would you dwell here in the first place.. me? im bored 2/04   They are entirely able of not making fools of themselves, and indeed, many conduct themselves admirably. 2/04 how long have you done this ? your grammar is near perfect 2/04

Supahlolman9 | Hi

Hello! Yeah, let me just say, WOW. That was intimidating as hell! I mean, i understand its for the better writing but, that was just scary! I tried to look at it and be a man about it but that review was scarier than a grandma’s anus! Just saying thanks is all, but i am afraid of getting more of your reviews…

UnovaChampion | Pokemon Universe Story

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8917455/I’m always open to what people think should be improved in my stories but I didn’t come here for an English literature lesson. It is not hurting anyone how I’m writing and it isn’t like this is an English exam or anything like that. Another thing, in most writing I usually always see the name of a Pokemon written with a capital at the beginning if its name. Plus in the games the name of a Pokemon always has a capital at the beginning of its name too. One last thing I could be writing worse like ”teh” instead of ”the” or the word ”ain’t” so I suggest you find something better to do unless you are going to write a decent letter to me or anyone else suggesting an improvement that isn’t a moan about a persons writing unless it really is bad and unreadable.

AceTrainer Aki | Thanks

I thank you for the review. I thought Pokemon had to be capitalized though because it is a brand name. But thank you for the criticism, I hope it will help me in later chapters. Also, that was more of a prologue, so that’s why nothing was really clear. It is kind of like a scene set up in a play. I am very glad there are harsh people out there, like you, because it truly makes better writers!

Pikachu9112 | No Subject

Man your reviews are mean! 1/30 OH CRAP SORRY MENT FOR SOME ON ELSE! 2/06

MagicGirl41 | Hey

Look, not trying to make a huge deal, but could you please be a bit nicer in your reviews? You just posted a bunch of criticism on my cousin’s story (the pokemon one) and she’s brand new to fanfiction. She’s already written books, but she’s never had an audience before, and it’s for some of her first reviews on one of her first FFs to be just criticism-that’s a little rough. I’ve been on for years,and neither me nor my cousin minds constructive criticism, but it would be a good idea to throw in at least a few compliments here and there. People tend to listen more if you add a few nice things along with the advice.Thanks! -MG41

FantasyLover91 | re: Your review to The Powers of A Pokemon

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8918801/Hang on how come in the anime some trainers don’t have battles and complain over everything then? I’m allowed to do whatever I want in my stories.

Zgamer S K | re: Your review to Vengeance and Repreimends

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8962109/Fuck you! Did I spell that right? Now get the fuck out of here you grammar Nazi.

Mr. Chikorita | re: Your review to Truth and Ideals

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8920384/Thanks for your constructive criticism. I’ll take what you said into consideration. But still, the intro doesn’t play a huge part in the story. Also, you were a bit harsh, just saying. I don’t want a reader to pop by, check a review, and say, “Oh, this story sucks!” Because like I said, the main story will be different from this intro. I’ll probably take down the intro for now, so it’ll be “Under maintenance.” I’ll get some chapters of the main story posted first, then fix up the intro. Thanks again for your helpful advice.

DarkLordMephiles | re: Your review to Illusions, Ancients and Legends

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8952734/On the subject of the capitalization, I see your point. I’ve always seen the specific species names capitalized, though, so that’s where that came from. I don’t see it as a big issue. For the understanding human speech, again – I’ve never really seen evidence that pokemon couldn’t understand humans, although now I realize that could be due to most pokemon I’ve actually seen being trainers’ pokemon. The paragraphing, yeah – I admit that I used that badly. I’m not sure what I was doing with that, now that I think back. To combine the next two things you mentioned, I never really cleared up what was going on there – he was killing anyone who tried to stop him, but left everyone else alone. That sort of thing does get left out when I don’t actually go over it. I’ll try to avoid that in the future, and see to fixing it in this case. And considering what was happening before he woke up, there is some reason why he would think he was captured. And to answer your final point, I could have worded that better/differently, yes. Thanks, by the way, for the review, and I’ll try to fix what you’ve mentioned in the future.

me trollsta | Review

And, uh, to Farla… For the hello thing, no offense but I didn’t understand anything you said. For the weird writing style, I just saw someone doing that and I thought it was cool. I know it’s not paragraphs and I appreciate you helping me and all, but come on man, it’s my first story and your kinda sucking my confidence away… … …waaaahh!!! Nice avatar though…

shadowkiller168 | re: Your review to Ghosts

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8888640/You know, I really liked this story idea. Perhaps it needs to be interpreted to you on what he’s probably getting at. This is his first fanfic, and normally I wouldn’t care but it probably has something to do with what I have to say. I don’t think he was really truly trying to make a deep, thorough, and dark as all hell plot. This is probably just some kind of prologue. I think what he’s trying to do is just make somewhat of an alternate reality if humans just completely though Pokemon were dangerous and needed to be gone. Granted, I think he just added the whole humans and Pokemon in harmony thing as a desperate and failed attempt to make it somewhat tie in with the actual series, as humans and Pokemon live alongside each other. What I’m pretty sure his theme is for the story is more like a survival kind of theme, not a plot about vengeance, so a lot of this background information is somewhat unneeded, and he probably should’ve gotten rid of a portion of it. I say that he might improve in time. I think you should at least read the 2nd chapter, whenever that is going to be published.

BerriosC | re: Your review to Pokemon – The Christopher Wolfe Chronicles

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8897113/I took a hiatus. It happens. And I know what I’m doing, its called style.

gallantmon7196 | re: Your review to The Nightmare Keeper

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/8941013/Quick question for you, why do you go around and point out almost everything wrong with a person’s chapter or story, it actually gets pretty annoying for everyone.

Shamekeeper12 | How have I improved?

Hello Farla,Abour a month or so ago, you reviewed my story “New Providence”. At the time, it was called “Calvin’s Boatman”. Now, with quite a few more chapters posted, I was wondering if I have lived up to your suggestions for improvement. That is, what your review specified I should change and/or improve upon. I know you specified everything in the review, but sometimes, instructions are incomplete. I just want to be sure. Don’t bother reading the first chapter. I do not edit my chapters after they are posted so I can see how I am improving. If you aren’t interested, I understand, but if you are, please feel free to be the Grammar Nazi you are, and feel free to ridicule me at every stroke of the pen! (Or, in this case, the click of a keyboard.) If you have any comments, questons, suggestions, or even sarcasm, I’m all ears. Thank you very much for your time. Your review was greatly appreciated.

Sammywolfstar | re: Your review to The Forbidden Love

A response to your review at http://www.fanfiction.net/r/6659370/I don’t have a spelling fixer, I like to see you try making a better one

KnightOfTheWind15 | No Subject

I am a friend if TheSilverDragoon, and felt the need to, address your review of his stories first chapter. First, we are all aspiring writers, and thus we will always have room for improvement. I have no problem with a little constructive critisim. HOWEVER, your review was scathing, thoughtless and uncalled for. I am certain that YOUR first works were not literary masterpieces, and no one SHOULD expect that. Also, the names of Pokemon are proper nouns, as their species is also the name they are given, making it a proper noun. Additionally, a few hours of training are easily made up with determination and hard work, and I highly doubt that Gary will be doing this all the time with his haughty nature. Furthermore until you become a perfect writer in all respects, you have no right to say anything along these lines. Note that these are my words, not my friends. I am in no way speaking for him.

Shinnypichu88 | Hello, i have a few thinks to ask/say

your a great writer, so i was wondering if you could offer me some advice.i’m planning on writing a Pokemon fanfiction, but also want to make it a little emotional (at least latter on) but i don’t know how to go about that. do you have any suggestions on what i can do to help change that?   In conclusion: ADVPhoenix | pokemon Hey!Pokemon are actually capitalised, they are names of fictional characters, not real animals, just thought I would point that out. Thanks.   And dragons aren’t real either. You capitalize based on if it’s the unique name of an individual, not if something’s fictional. This isnt anything to do with, but komodo dragons are real.