All hospital emergency rooms have the same feel to them. They’re all decorated in the same dull, muted tones and softened edges, which are meant to be comforting and aren’t. They all have the same smell too: one part tangy antiseptics, one part cool dispassion, one part anxiety, and one part naked fear.
This feels like one of those situations where the author’s flunking out on the whole “write what you know” thing and resorting to cliche. (more…)
The dyslexic author from before informs me I’m terrible and tells me to do the exact same things people have told us a hundred times before that don’t work. They helpfully demonstrate why they don’t work by simultaneously complaining that I nitpick too much and also that I only nitpicked one thing on their story. I’m tempted to make some sort of resource post I can point these people to, but FFN’s link stripper probably means it won’t be worth the effort.
A weird story where pokemon lose their powers and are despised by the human populace for no conceivable reason; a well-written story from a pokemon’s perspective about how poaching is very wrong and totally different from training; and a decently-written Giratina character study that, unfortunately, tries to explain a particularly nonsensical game mechanic. It does not succeed.
The anime fic has not ended. The anime fic shall never end. If FFN wasn’t run by ghosts, I would seriously consider starting a letter-writing campaign.
Is like ten lines of “SQUEEEEEEEE” not an appropriate conclusion post? No? Damn.
I think at this point it’s probably useful to think of Umineko relative to Higurashi, considering we’re at the beginning and I thought it was pretty clear R07 wrote this with a reader who’d just come from Higurashi in mind.
A lot of unremarkable OT fic. There is one real-world fic about Japan using pokemon to take over the world, but the first chapter ends before that happens because the author decided to spend all their time on genealogy instead; and a “realistic” fic set in a pokemon world without pokemon, because that makes sense.
“In the future, however, I would ask that you please refrain from leaving reviews that barely touch on the content, whether for my stories or for others. Your review here was 9:1 critique to content, with only that little bit at the end, which itself was even half about the writing itself rather than content. I’m open to critique (and it’s helpful when readers point out typos, plot inconsistencies, thematic problems, or whatever else since I’m only human and I make mistakes), though I may not agree with the concrit the way I respectfully disagree with almost all of yours. But I also think there’s an unspoken etiquette we should all try our best to follow on these sites regardless of whether concrit is sound or not. Reviews are great to receive and so is concrit, but when authors put in the work to produce stories, whether excellent or clearly novice and in need of improvement, it’s kind of nice to hear feedback about the actual content of the story. Everyone from professional writers to amateurs wants this when they share their work with the world. Even though this is just the first chapter and not much yet has happened, as you correctly pointed out, it’s still polite to try to follow that unspoken guideline as much as possible. As it stands, I have only the faintest idea of whether or not you even liked the chapter, if you are interested in where it could be going, thoughts on characterization, or any other number of content-related issues that are important for me to hear about as a writer. Whether or not you accept my suggestion is entirely up to you, of course. But just to be clear, if I get more reviews or PMs from you that are similar to this one, I probably won’t reply. To do so would waste even more time than I already have on this response.” Another author makes a similar argument in this very batch. Were authors always this entitled, or is this a new thing? We do get an author who’s genuinely interested in portraying pokemon as people, though, so that’s a plus.
“Capital letters are only at the start of names of people/pets, or names of places like ‘Paris’ or ‘London’, or even words to describe something. A title that could contain 7 words wouldn’t have capitalized letters at the start of every word if they weren’t names of people, pets, of places. For example, ‘Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows’. Harry and Potter have capitalized letters at the start because they are names. ‘Deathly’ and ‘Hallows’ have capitalized letters because they are important items so they’re in the title and their name has a capital D because it is part of the name and it describes something.”